Comments received on poems by Quemis
Odes to Fog
jarcher54 said:
Thanks for this contribution. Writing about writing is a fine old tradition! Sometimes not seeing clearly is a blessing, a respite, and chance to imagine instead of look. Those Monet paintings of the Rouen Cathedral shrouded in fog guide us to the outlines, silhouette, not the details. And as you suggest, being \"lost\" in your own community or in the middle of nowhere can be as liberating as it is confounding.
March 14th, 2023 10:36
jarcher54 said:
Thanks for this contribution. Writing about writing is a fine old tradition! Sometimes not seeing clearly is a blessing, a respite, and chance to imagine instead of look. Those Monet paintings of the Rouen Cathedral shrouded in fog guide us to the outlines, silhouette, not the details. And as you suggest, being \"lost\" in your own community or in the middle of nowhere can be as liberating as it is confounding.
March 14th, 2023 10:36
Odes to Fog
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'But I think there is something more
Hidden within that veil,\'
\'A stand-in for uncertainty;
A thing without a voice.\'
\'Precipitate is water;
Conductor; Catalyst.
Balances the temperatures,
On its power insist.
When we are completely lost,
Enveloped in it\'s shroud,
There is a conversation;
Things get turned around.\'
\'Fog is a world in itself,
Where plurality hides\'
\'Should we find our way through.\'
February 24th, 2023 05:55
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'But I think there is something more
Hidden within that veil,\'
\'A stand-in for uncertainty;
A thing without a voice.\'
\'Precipitate is water;
Conductor; Catalyst.
Balances the temperatures,
On its power insist.
When we are completely lost,
Enveloped in it\'s shroud,
There is a conversation;
Things get turned around.\'
\'Fog is a world in itself,
Where plurality hides\'
\'Should we find our way through.\'
February 24th, 2023 05:55
Tomorrow
jarcher54 said:
I second LB\'s statement... your poems are indispensable and have been greatly missed. I have always looked forward to them. As I have said many times, your allusiveness, the freshness of your dense imagery, the vivid emotion expressed with steel-eyed control, and the natural flow of your verse are impressive and addictive. This is one of my favorites for all those reasons.
PS Let us know if we can help!
February 12th, 2023 21:19
jarcher54 said:
I second LB\'s statement... your poems are indispensable and have been greatly missed. I have always looked forward to them. As I have said many times, your allusiveness, the freshness of your dense imagery, the vivid emotion expressed with steel-eyed control, and the natural flow of your verse are impressive and addictive. This is one of my favorites for all those reasons.
PS Let us know if we can help!
February 12th, 2023 21:19
Tomorrow
Parisab said:
‘And god blesses the knife’ and the rhythmic and the gentle flow of your poem captured my whole attention. The greats are everywhere with the roof as big as the sky. Keep writing dear kin and poet. May you harvest all that you desire.
February 11th, 2023 11:38
Parisab said:
‘And god blesses the knife’ and the rhythmic and the gentle flow of your poem captured my whole attention. The greats are everywhere with the roof as big as the sky. Keep writing dear kin and poet. May you harvest all that you desire.
February 11th, 2023 11:38
Tomorrow
L. B. Mek said:
\'Don\'t swim too close to the doomed,
Might have to share your vest.\'
Brilliant!
love the empathetic humanity
in your purposed wrath..
(in eyes murky with surrender
we seldom find the clarity
to accept the horrors in our
cyclically warped, reality...)
I\'ve missed your poetry my friend
hope you\'re having a good start to the year
stay safe! stay strong
February 10th, 2023 06:06
L. B. Mek said:
\'Don\'t swim too close to the doomed,
Might have to share your vest.\'
Brilliant!
love the empathetic humanity
in your purposed wrath..
(in eyes murky with surrender
we seldom find the clarity
to accept the horrors in our
cyclically warped, reality...)
I\'ve missed your poetry my friend
hope you\'re having a good start to the year
stay safe! stay strong
February 10th, 2023 06:06
Tomorrow
Ok Waleed said:
Sorry about your situation. If you look at the world as your home then you can live anywhere atleast…
February 10th, 2023 01:10
Ok Waleed said:
Sorry about your situation. If you look at the world as your home then you can live anywhere atleast…
February 10th, 2023 01:10
Tomorrow
Doggerel Dave said:
I had no idea your piece, which had great rhyme and rhythm, was about homelessness until I caught the oblique hint in your comments......Would you like to do a more explicit piece on this subject, which is a curse, please?
February 9th, 2023 23:32
Doggerel Dave said:
I had no idea your piece, which had great rhyme and rhythm, was about homelessness until I caught the oblique hint in your comments......Would you like to do a more explicit piece on this subject, which is a curse, please?
February 9th, 2023 23:32
Tomorrow
2781 said:
No one has power over the spirit, to retain the spirit, and no one has power in the day of death. There is no release from that war, and wickedness will not deliver those who are given to it.
February 9th, 2023 21:54
2781 said:
No one has power over the spirit, to retain the spirit, and no one has power in the day of death. There is no release from that war, and wickedness will not deliver those who are given to it.
February 9th, 2023 21:54
Heavy Hangs the Helmeted
L. B. Mek said:
\'Safety, sure and sabeline,
Seems sold on slight of hand.\'
Brilliant!
(how to question accountability
when we inherit a world
with its accounts, touched-up
since the dawn of thought...)
December 23rd, 2022 07:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'Safety, sure and sabeline,
Seems sold on slight of hand.\'
Brilliant!
(how to question accountability
when we inherit a world
with its accounts, touched-up
since the dawn of thought...)
December 23rd, 2022 07:50
Teeth
Doggerel Dave said:
After the temptation to give amateur (drawn from experience) periodontic advice was passed, the rest of your piece (unusually – I normally give up) drew me in.
However the question arises – drawn from your experience, or a creative imaginative rendition of a terrible topic? Background notes would have been welcome.
December 12th, 2022 17:48
Doggerel Dave said:
After the temptation to give amateur (drawn from experience) periodontic advice was passed, the rest of your piece (unusually – I normally give up) drew me in.
However the question arises – drawn from your experience, or a creative imaginative rendition of a terrible topic? Background notes would have been welcome.
December 12th, 2022 17:48
Dreams of a Droughtless Decade
L. B. Mek said:
(weather god\'s, temper
our resolve
for those true devastations
life
inevitably, yields...)
a poignant write
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
December 9th, 2022 05:26
L. B. Mek said:
(weather god\'s, temper
our resolve
for those true devastations
life
inevitably, yields...)
a poignant write
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
December 9th, 2022 05:26
Liminal Deliverance
Doggerel Dave said:
Oh cheer me up, why don\'t you?
I do see a truth there (I think) - all is dust (your word) eventually, at end point.
Neat write.
September 26th, 2022 19:10
Doggerel Dave said:
Oh cheer me up, why don\'t you?
I do see a truth there (I think) - all is dust (your word) eventually, at end point.
Neat write.
September 26th, 2022 19:10
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
Doggerel Dave said:
I was out of action when you posted this. now gratefully found by accident.....
Neat and clear....fun also.
August 23rd, 2022 17:59
Doggerel Dave said:
I was out of action when you posted this. now gratefully found by accident.....
Neat and clear....fun also.
August 23rd, 2022 17:59
Bereave
L. B. Mek said:
such a tightly woven work of poetic commentary
with such seamless flow and natural rhythm..
a quenching drink, in a read
thank you! dear Poet
August 5th, 2022 02:35
L. B. Mek said:
such a tightly woven work of poetic commentary
with such seamless flow and natural rhythm..
a quenching drink, in a read
thank you! dear Poet
August 5th, 2022 02:35
Doctors Note
L. B. Mek said:
\'Got the Kubrick stare going,\'
lol
\'For gaps found inside you. \'
deep...
a great read!
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 2nd, 2022 04:25
L. B. Mek said:
\'Got the Kubrick stare going,\'
lol
\'For gaps found inside you. \'
deep...
a great read!
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 2nd, 2022 04:25
Gradual
L. B. Mek said:
what to do, indeed?
a wonderfully poignant shorty
thanks for sharing, dear poet
(btw how did your French write go down?)
July 29th, 2022 03:01
L. B. Mek said:
what to do, indeed?
a wonderfully poignant shorty
thanks for sharing, dear poet
(btw how did your French write go down?)
July 29th, 2022 03:01
Nous parlons Tous Français
L. B. Mek said:
\'The evil done inside and by France
is worth a pause.\'
as-ever - your writing, at its core
is so innately sincere and humble..
(I just hope your audience
is as well read as you
so they can better appreciate the nuances
in your poetic wordplay)
viva la France! lol
humanity, is grateful
for the legacy of the Celtic, Gauls
great, abhorrent or absurd
July 14th, 2022 00:54
L. B. Mek said:
\'The evil done inside and by France
is worth a pause.\'
as-ever - your writing, at its core
is so innately sincere and humble..
(I just hope your audience
is as well read as you
so they can better appreciate the nuances
in your poetic wordplay)
viva la France! lol
humanity, is grateful
for the legacy of the Celtic, Gauls
great, abhorrent or absurd
July 14th, 2022 00:54
Hail Mary
L. B. Mek said:
still, while the sun shines
we have windows of relief
from all the stresses of life
should we but choose
to take a minute and commune
with that soothing
and abundant, gift of replenishing
Nature..
stay Strong, dear poet
\'don\'t let the bleak
be
all, that you choose
to see\'
July 12th, 2022 02:58
L. B. Mek said:
still, while the sun shines
we have windows of relief
from all the stresses of life
should we but choose
to take a minute and commune
with that soothing
and abundant, gift of replenishing
Nature..
stay Strong, dear poet
\'don\'t let the bleak
be
all, that you choose
to see\'
July 12th, 2022 02:58
Alex
L. B. Mek said:
yeah, I too have a graveyard
of cherished friendships
I mourn over, dear Poet..
(all we can do
is treasure the beautiful memories
they gifted us
fight away, the pain and hurt
that fuel our regrets
and blame, accounts
just
try to squeeze, what goodness
we can, out of life\'s shattered
dreams and connections
look up, and wish them a \'hey\'
for \'old times\' sake\', and hope
those winds of change, will
deliver
our well wishes and yearning
feelings..
as sincere, as those tears
we refuse to let drip)
another brilliantly relatable read, thank you!
June 28th, 2022 03:06
L. B. Mek said:
yeah, I too have a graveyard
of cherished friendships
I mourn over, dear Poet..
(all we can do
is treasure the beautiful memories
they gifted us
fight away, the pain and hurt
that fuel our regrets
and blame, accounts
just
try to squeeze, what goodness
we can, out of life\'s shattered
dreams and connections
look up, and wish them a \'hey\'
for \'old times\' sake\', and hope
those winds of change, will
deliver
our well wishes and yearning
feelings..
as sincere, as those tears
we refuse to let drip)
another brilliantly relatable read, thank you!
June 28th, 2022 03:06
Hypnos
L. B. Mek said:
memorable imagery and really like
the fit, of your title
thanks for sharing, dear poet(s)
June 21st, 2022 03:52
L. B. Mek said:
memorable imagery and really like
the fit, of your title
thanks for sharing, dear poet(s)
June 21st, 2022 03:52
Summers are the Coldest
L. B. Mek said:
\'Wasn\'t for lack of trying,
Knew the deck was stacked.
But every fight is different,
And its time I must stay in.
Keep saying I can\'t run as fast,
Odds weren\'t on me to win.
A thousand irons on the fire,
Never felt hope so damn close.\'
you\'re just so subtle
in tonality and flow, and yet
you impart such profound insight
I genuinely love! your poetic style
and feel privileged
that you choose to share your talent
dear cherished Poet..
(stay Strong, scribble Often
and be Proud! of the who
you\'re striving to become
cherish the long journeys
care less, about those
blink-n-miss
results and rewards)
June 14th, 2022 03:19
L. B. Mek said:
\'Wasn\'t for lack of trying,
Knew the deck was stacked.
But every fight is different,
And its time I must stay in.
Keep saying I can\'t run as fast,
Odds weren\'t on me to win.
A thousand irons on the fire,
Never felt hope so damn close.\'
you\'re just so subtle
in tonality and flow, and yet
you impart such profound insight
I genuinely love! your poetic style
and feel privileged
that you choose to share your talent
dear cherished Poet..
(stay Strong, scribble Often
and be Proud! of the who
you\'re striving to become
cherish the long journeys
care less, about those
blink-n-miss
results and rewards)
June 14th, 2022 03:19
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
orchidee said:
I was the gardener in the garden! Or was I the weed?! lol.
June 1st, 2022 02:14
orchidee said:
I was the gardener in the garden! Or was I the weed?! lol.
June 1st, 2022 02:14
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
jarcher54 said:
Your precise descriptions, almost technical language, and the short intense format of your lyrics remind me a bit of John Donne. A fine commentary on the weeds among us!
June 1st, 2022 00:38
jarcher54 said:
Your precise descriptions, almost technical language, and the short intense format of your lyrics remind me a bit of John Donne. A fine commentary on the weeds among us!
June 1st, 2022 00:38
Nasma
L. B. Mek said:
what choice wording, such a beautiful read
I\'m so happy
that you seem to have
such a strong anchor
for hope, in your life..
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
May 31st, 2022 05:04
L. B. Mek said:
what choice wording, such a beautiful read
I\'m so happy
that you seem to have
such a strong anchor
for hope, in your life..
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
May 31st, 2022 05:04
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
orchidee said:
Good write Q. I didn\'t know I was in your garden! lol.
May 1st, 2022 12:59
orchidee said:
Good write Q. I didn\'t know I was in your garden! lol.
May 1st, 2022 12:59
Beacon
L. B. Mek said:
such an impactful image
and an intriguing read
thanks for sharing, dear poet
April 15th, 2022 03:41
L. B. Mek said:
such an impactful image
and an intriguing read
thanks for sharing, dear poet
April 15th, 2022 03:41
Half-light Transport
Rocky Lagou said:
Great usage of imagery. Really well done!
March 28th, 2022 12:58
Rocky Lagou said:
Great usage of imagery. Really well done!
March 28th, 2022 12:58
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