Comments received on poems by Quemis
The Deck of Fog
jarcher54 said:
What a fortunate friend he or she is to receive this gift-in-progress! I was just thinking of you a few days ago... missed one of the dependably adept makers on this site. \"The thicket plucked her prize\" indeed... reminds me of some sort of siren or goddess that traps or drowns the unfortunate passer-by. Quite a vivid and haunting piece... is that a happy ending?
October 6th, 2024 02:24
jarcher54 said:
What a fortunate friend he or she is to receive this gift-in-progress! I was just thinking of you a few days ago... missed one of the dependably adept makers on this site. \"The thicket plucked her prize\" indeed... reminds me of some sort of siren or goddess that traps or drowns the unfortunate passer-by. Quite a vivid and haunting piece... is that a happy ending?
October 6th, 2024 02:24
Very much like the brazen giant of Greek fame, conquering limbs and all.
2781 said:
Spot on.
June 29th, 2024 06:58
2781 said:
Spot on.
June 29th, 2024 06:58
Sleepless Prayer
jarcher54 said:
... color ugly years indeed! Thanks for dropping by and sharing your sleepless prayer with us. I cannot express how elegant and sincere your hymns are...
May 18th, 2024 21:51
jarcher54 said:
... color ugly years indeed! Thanks for dropping by and sharing your sleepless prayer with us. I cannot express how elegant and sincere your hymns are...
May 18th, 2024 21:51
Administrative Malfunction
Kieron said:
Ah, I understand your poem better now, having read your reply above. I now read \"profitless\", for example, as critical of a narrow, economically focused valuation of a person\'s worth. Yes, as you say, perhaps it is not broken at all.
February 10th, 2024 05:27
Kieron said:
Ah, I understand your poem better now, having read your reply above. I now read \"profitless\", for example, as critical of a narrow, economically focused valuation of a person\'s worth. Yes, as you say, perhaps it is not broken at all.
February 10th, 2024 05:27
Worse Around my Kin
Kieron said:
I love the image of the flowers and the roots. Thank you for sharing.
February 10th, 2024 05:17
Kieron said:
I love the image of the flowers and the roots. Thank you for sharing.
February 10th, 2024 05:17
Administrative Malfunction
Kieron said:
...or fix it! After all, we are supposed to be about repairing and reusing these days, aren\'t we? :D
February 10th, 2024 05:07
Kieron said:
...or fix it! After all, we are supposed to be about repairing and reusing these days, aren\'t we? :D
February 10th, 2024 05:07
Administrative Malfunction
Doggerel Dave said:
A breakdown? You broke it down skilfully. Technology gone rong..rong..rong..
January 28th, 2024 17:59
Doggerel Dave said:
A breakdown? You broke it down skilfully. Technology gone rong..rong..rong..
January 28th, 2024 17:59
It\'s Gonna be a Cold Winter
Parisab said:
Another brilliant example of how you paint a vivid picture about the changes in your surroundings and draw them into your own unique story-stay grounded and keep sharing your poetry please-
November 26th, 2023 18:06
Parisab said:
Another brilliant example of how you paint a vivid picture about the changes in your surroundings and draw them into your own unique story-stay grounded and keep sharing your poetry please-
November 26th, 2023 18:06
One Thousand Poems are Caught in my Maw
2781 said:
I don\'t want to assume anything here, your poetry seems gifted.
November 8th, 2023 07:44
2781 said:
I don\'t want to assume anything here, your poetry seems gifted.
November 8th, 2023 07:44
Odes to Fog
Parisab said:
Something profound about the symbolism here! I was amused by how you described the “fog” as the:
It is a chorus of ghosts;
Song quiet, forlorn.
The ambiguity behind poetry is a gift,
Cursed or blessed, the poet has no other fate…
October 20th, 2023 00:34
Parisab said:
Something profound about the symbolism here! I was amused by how you described the “fog” as the:
It is a chorus of ghosts;
Song quiet, forlorn.
The ambiguity behind poetry is a gift,
Cursed or blessed, the poet has no other fate…
October 20th, 2023 00:34
The Boys
jarcher54 said:
Made my evening to see you post something... this is so true... it is so hard to understand my old male buddies (the ones that are left). I love them but sometimes I don\'t think I like any of them!
October 19th, 2023 19:51
jarcher54 said:
Made my evening to see you post something... this is so true... it is so hard to understand my old male buddies (the ones that are left). I love them but sometimes I don\'t think I like any of them!
October 19th, 2023 19:51
Dancers in the Press
Parisab said:
Great wordplay worthy of a cool video game…
October 19th, 2023 12:06
Parisab said:
Great wordplay worthy of a cool video game…
October 19th, 2023 12:06
The Boys
Parisab said:
Nothing more natural than the undying kinship between the ‘boys’….Yet you shared in such a sensitive manner about this brotherhood!
October 19th, 2023 12:04
Parisab said:
Nothing more natural than the undying kinship between the ‘boys’….Yet you shared in such a sensitive manner about this brotherhood!
October 19th, 2023 12:04
Odes to Fog
jarcher54 said:
Thanks for this contribution. Writing about writing is a fine old tradition! Sometimes not seeing clearly is a blessing, a respite, and chance to imagine instead of look. Those Monet paintings of the Rouen Cathedral shrouded in fog guide us to the outlines, silhouette, not the details. And as you suggest, being \"lost\" in your own community or in the middle of nowhere can be as liberating as it is confounding.
March 14th, 2023 10:36
jarcher54 said:
Thanks for this contribution. Writing about writing is a fine old tradition! Sometimes not seeing clearly is a blessing, a respite, and chance to imagine instead of look. Those Monet paintings of the Rouen Cathedral shrouded in fog guide us to the outlines, silhouette, not the details. And as you suggest, being \"lost\" in your own community or in the middle of nowhere can be as liberating as it is confounding.
March 14th, 2023 10:36
Odes to Fog
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'But I think there is something more
Hidden within that veil,\'
\'A stand-in for uncertainty;
A thing without a voice.\'
\'Precipitate is water;
Conductor; Catalyst.
Balances the temperatures,
On its power insist.
When we are completely lost,
Enveloped in it\'s shroud,
There is a conversation;
Things get turned around.\'
\'Fog is a world in itself,
Where plurality hides\'
\'Should we find our way through.\'
February 24th, 2023 05:55
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
\'But I think there is something more
Hidden within that veil,\'
\'A stand-in for uncertainty;
A thing without a voice.\'
\'Precipitate is water;
Conductor; Catalyst.
Balances the temperatures,
On its power insist.
When we are completely lost,
Enveloped in it\'s shroud,
There is a conversation;
Things get turned around.\'
\'Fog is a world in itself,
Where plurality hides\'
\'Should we find our way through.\'
February 24th, 2023 05:55
Tomorrow
jarcher54 said:
I second LB\'s statement... your poems are indispensable and have been greatly missed. I have always looked forward to them. As I have said many times, your allusiveness, the freshness of your dense imagery, the vivid emotion expressed with steel-eyed control, and the natural flow of your verse are impressive and addictive. This is one of my favorites for all those reasons.
PS Let us know if we can help!
February 12th, 2023 21:19
jarcher54 said:
I second LB\'s statement... your poems are indispensable and have been greatly missed. I have always looked forward to them. As I have said many times, your allusiveness, the freshness of your dense imagery, the vivid emotion expressed with steel-eyed control, and the natural flow of your verse are impressive and addictive. This is one of my favorites for all those reasons.
PS Let us know if we can help!
February 12th, 2023 21:19
Tomorrow
Parisab said:
‘And god blesses the knife’ and the rhythmic and the gentle flow of your poem captured my whole attention. The greats are everywhere with the roof as big as the sky. Keep writing dear kin and poet. May you harvest all that you desire.
February 11th, 2023 11:38
Parisab said:
‘And god blesses the knife’ and the rhythmic and the gentle flow of your poem captured my whole attention. The greats are everywhere with the roof as big as the sky. Keep writing dear kin and poet. May you harvest all that you desire.
February 11th, 2023 11:38
Tomorrow
L. B. Mek said:
\'Don\'t swim too close to the doomed,
Might have to share your vest.\'
Brilliant!
love the empathetic humanity
in your purposed wrath..
(in eyes murky with surrender
we seldom find the clarity
to accept the horrors in our
cyclically warped, reality...)
I\'ve missed your poetry my friend
hope you\'re having a good start to the year
stay safe! stay strong
February 10th, 2023 06:06
L. B. Mek said:
\'Don\'t swim too close to the doomed,
Might have to share your vest.\'
Brilliant!
love the empathetic humanity
in your purposed wrath..
(in eyes murky with surrender
we seldom find the clarity
to accept the horrors in our
cyclically warped, reality...)
I\'ve missed your poetry my friend
hope you\'re having a good start to the year
stay safe! stay strong
February 10th, 2023 06:06
Tomorrow
Ok Waleed said:
Sorry about your situation. If you look at the world as your home then you can live anywhere atleast…
February 10th, 2023 01:10
Ok Waleed said:
Sorry about your situation. If you look at the world as your home then you can live anywhere atleast…
February 10th, 2023 01:10
Tomorrow
Doggerel Dave said:
I had no idea your piece, which had great rhyme and rhythm, was about homelessness until I caught the oblique hint in your comments......Would you like to do a more explicit piece on this subject, which is a curse, please?
February 9th, 2023 23:32
Doggerel Dave said:
I had no idea your piece, which had great rhyme and rhythm, was about homelessness until I caught the oblique hint in your comments......Would you like to do a more explicit piece on this subject, which is a curse, please?
February 9th, 2023 23:32
Tomorrow
2781 said:
No one has power over the spirit, to retain the spirit, and no one has power in the day of death. There is no release from that war, and wickedness will not deliver those who are given to it.
February 9th, 2023 21:54
2781 said:
No one has power over the spirit, to retain the spirit, and no one has power in the day of death. There is no release from that war, and wickedness will not deliver those who are given to it.
February 9th, 2023 21:54
Heavy Hangs the Helmeted
L. B. Mek said:
\'Safety, sure and sabeline,
Seems sold on slight of hand.\'
Brilliant!
(how to question accountability
when we inherit a world
with its accounts, touched-up
since the dawn of thought...)
December 23rd, 2022 07:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'Safety, sure and sabeline,
Seems sold on slight of hand.\'
Brilliant!
(how to question accountability
when we inherit a world
with its accounts, touched-up
since the dawn of thought...)
December 23rd, 2022 07:50
Teeth
Doggerel Dave said:
After the temptation to give amateur (drawn from experience) periodontic advice was passed, the rest of your piece (unusually – I normally give up) drew me in.
However the question arises – drawn from your experience, or a creative imaginative rendition of a terrible topic? Background notes would have been welcome.
December 12th, 2022 17:48
Doggerel Dave said:
After the temptation to give amateur (drawn from experience) periodontic advice was passed, the rest of your piece (unusually – I normally give up) drew me in.
However the question arises – drawn from your experience, or a creative imaginative rendition of a terrible topic? Background notes would have been welcome.
December 12th, 2022 17:48
Dreams of a Droughtless Decade
L. B. Mek said:
(weather god\'s, temper
our resolve
for those true devastations
life
inevitably, yields...)
a poignant write
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
December 9th, 2022 05:26
L. B. Mek said:
(weather god\'s, temper
our resolve
for those true devastations
life
inevitably, yields...)
a poignant write
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
December 9th, 2022 05:26
Liminal Deliverance
Doggerel Dave said:
Oh cheer me up, why don\'t you?
I do see a truth there (I think) - all is dust (your word) eventually, at end point.
Neat write.
September 26th, 2022 19:10
Doggerel Dave said:
Oh cheer me up, why don\'t you?
I do see a truth there (I think) - all is dust (your word) eventually, at end point.
Neat write.
September 26th, 2022 19:10
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