Comments received on poems by Quemis
I don\'t know.
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully intertwined metaphors, I like its stubborn unwillingness to give-in to a melodic rhythm, instead choosing to prioritise stanza\'s shaped by the emotions of the words they contain,
good write
September 24th, 2020 04:03
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully intertwined metaphors, I like its stubborn unwillingness to give-in to a melodic rhythm, instead choosing to prioritise stanza\'s shaped by the emotions of the words they contain,
good write
September 24th, 2020 04:03
Dissolve Me
jarcher54 said:
Typically dense, I tease the meaning out, no, I wring it out, and though I find myself twisting pretty hard to get it started, the meaning begins to drip, and the more I wring the more it flows. I think I too experience defeat through implication... and it\'s a brave poet who admits not always finding the pitch.
June 30th, 2020 01:59
jarcher54 said:
Typically dense, I tease the meaning out, no, I wring it out, and though I find myself twisting pretty hard to get it started, the meaning begins to drip, and the more I wring the more it flows. I think I too experience defeat through implication... and it\'s a brave poet who admits not always finding the pitch.
June 30th, 2020 01:59
Mount Everest is a Grave
jarcher54 said:
I was fascinated by the title of this poem... can one climb a grave, a spectacular 5-mile high grave? Or is it a really deep hole upside down? Or do we think we are climbing when we are really descending? Then upon reaching the top (was it a climb to get there?)... are we at the bottom?
And the last line:
And you the one who\'s told
Methought... One day we are being, doing, writing, telling, singing... but one slip and we are the past, and if we are lucky we are written about, sung of, and remembered. And if we are too bold, climb too fast, fly too high on our fragile waxen wings, oops, we are preserved as an obituary, a ballad, or--if we fall especially spectacularly--as the subject of a great epic! Maybe that\'s not exactly what you meant, but it\'s what came rushing through my head upon encountering your Mount Everest. Nice images, twists and turns. Interesting sentences, slightly askew but elegantly dense.
June 13th, 2020 02:16
jarcher54 said:
I was fascinated by the title of this poem... can one climb a grave, a spectacular 5-mile high grave? Or is it a really deep hole upside down? Or do we think we are climbing when we are really descending? Then upon reaching the top (was it a climb to get there?)... are we at the bottom?
And the last line:
And you the one who\'s told
Methought... One day we are being, doing, writing, telling, singing... but one slip and we are the past, and if we are lucky we are written about, sung of, and remembered. And if we are too bold, climb too fast, fly too high on our fragile waxen wings, oops, we are preserved as an obituary, a ballad, or--if we fall especially spectacularly--as the subject of a great epic! Maybe that\'s not exactly what you meant, but it\'s what came rushing through my head upon encountering your Mount Everest. Nice images, twists and turns. Interesting sentences, slightly askew but elegantly dense.
June 13th, 2020 02:16
The Dark Dome
jarcher54 said:
This makes me look forward to reading more of your poems. I appreciate the density of your lines, the juxtaposed symbols, the relentless crashing of new elements creating a feeling more than an idea. But mostly I enjoy the sound. What you write works best for me read aloud. What you are saying is elusive, but it pleases and intrigues just to hear.
June 3rd, 2020 02:42
jarcher54 said:
This makes me look forward to reading more of your poems. I appreciate the density of your lines, the juxtaposed symbols, the relentless crashing of new elements creating a feeling more than an idea. But mostly I enjoy the sound. What you write works best for me read aloud. What you are saying is elusive, but it pleases and intrigues just to hear.
June 3rd, 2020 02:42
Star-light Surgery
Quemis said:
Thanks everyone!
Can\'t say too much about it myself...
Wrote it blind drunk last night.
March 12th, 2020 18:08
Quemis said:
Thanks everyone!
Can\'t say too much about it myself...
Wrote it blind drunk last night.
March 12th, 2020 18:08
Star-light Surgery
anonymousblue said:
Cryptic but fascinating. Lovely and intelligent use of imagery.
March 12th, 2020 05:57
anonymousblue said:
Cryptic but fascinating. Lovely and intelligent use of imagery.
March 12th, 2020 05:57
What we Know that we Don\'t Know
sylviasearcher said:
I loved this. It has a lot of layers. I need to reread
March 10th, 2020 02:58
sylviasearcher said:
I loved this. It has a lot of layers. I need to reread
March 10th, 2020 02:58
What we Know that we Don\'t Know
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write Quemis, may that trail lead us all to peace.
Andy
March 10th, 2020 01:59
Goldfinch60 said:
Good write Quemis, may that trail lead us all to peace.
Andy
March 10th, 2020 01:59
What we Know that we Don\'t Know
Saxon Crow said:
Awesome bit of poetry. Totally resonate with this.
March 9th, 2020 14:02
Saxon Crow said:
Awesome bit of poetry. Totally resonate with this.
March 9th, 2020 14:02
Flatlands
Clara said:
This has the basis of an epic story! Wow. Unpack this please. I\'m very intrigued.
March 4th, 2020 07:12
Clara said:
This has the basis of an epic story! Wow. Unpack this please. I\'m very intrigued.
March 4th, 2020 07:12
Causality
greytbritain said:
Love this so much ... thank you for your beautiful mind 🌻
November 20th, 2019 03:33
greytbritain said:
Love this so much ... thank you for your beautiful mind 🌻
November 20th, 2019 03:33
Forever in Fog
Tom Wood said:
I love this! Quemis, this is a fantastic poem, good job :D
August 27th, 2019 00:34
Tom Wood said:
I love this! Quemis, this is a fantastic poem, good job :D
August 27th, 2019 00:34
Transient
Neville said:
just passing through and stumbled upon these words... thoroughly enjoyed.... cheers, Neville
January 27th, 2019 01:53
Neville said:
just passing through and stumbled upon these words... thoroughly enjoyed.... cheers, Neville
January 27th, 2019 01:53
Gelida
Neville said:
these fine words deserve much praise indeed.. here.. accept mine... thoroughly enjoyed, cheers
December 22nd, 2018 08:07
Neville said:
these fine words deserve much praise indeed.. here.. accept mine... thoroughly enjoyed, cheers
December 22nd, 2018 08:07
Scale
dusk arising said:
Outstanding! I must find and read more of your work.
Took my mind to further places. Worthy of many re-reads and contemplation.
Most definitely going into my favourites.
October 4th, 2018 02:13
dusk arising said:
Outstanding! I must find and read more of your work.
Took my mind to further places. Worthy of many re-reads and contemplation.
Most definitely going into my favourites.
October 4th, 2018 02:13
Let Me Back Into the Sun.
Edthepoet said:
Holy effing s*** this is great poetry!
October 3rd, 2018 12:22
Edthepoet said:
Holy effing s*** this is great poetry!
October 3rd, 2018 12:22
Scale
Netashi said:
Intriguing way of writing a poem, keep up the fascinating work
September 28th, 2018 12:52
Netashi said:
Intriguing way of writing a poem, keep up the fascinating work
September 28th, 2018 12:52
Kill Me if You can
a__pott said:
Dark and beautiful. Your poem is easy to appreciate.
September 10th, 2018 21:26
a__pott said:
Dark and beautiful. Your poem is easy to appreciate.
September 10th, 2018 21:26
Kill Me if You can
The Gifted One said:
Very short and to the point. I loved it
The Gifted One
September 10th, 2018 13:30
The Gifted One said:
Very short and to the point. I loved it
The Gifted One
September 10th, 2018 13:30
Innerferno
Crystal Hope said:
Great description on this one. Good choice of words
August 11th, 2018 00:43
Crystal Hope said:
Great description on this one. Good choice of words
August 11th, 2018 00:43
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