Comments received on poems by Quemis
Sharp Stone Syllables
Accidental Poet said:
In one of your reply notes you said that you do care. Caring about people is where it all begins. Eventually the rest will fall into place over time. You do have a talent for writing.
August 3rd, 2017 17:52
Accidental Poet said:
In one of your reply notes you said that you do care. Caring about people is where it all begins. Eventually the rest will fall into place over time. You do have a talent for writing.
August 3rd, 2017 17:52
I can\'t wait to be an old man
orchidee said:
A couple of lines in your poem seem to maybe hint at the difficulties of old age:
Write it in large font - not seeing too well?
Rigid mind - not thinking so clearly?
A jig I cannot hear - not hearing too well?
Of course, not all these things happen to EVERY old person. Some may not even experience any of these things, nor similar things.
August 1st, 2017 12:50
orchidee said:
A couple of lines in your poem seem to maybe hint at the difficulties of old age:
Write it in large font - not seeing too well?
Rigid mind - not thinking so clearly?
A jig I cannot hear - not hearing too well?
Of course, not all these things happen to EVERY old person. Some may not even experience any of these things, nor similar things.
August 1st, 2017 12:50
I can\'t wait to be an old man
orchidee said:
A fine write - should be ticked as 18+, I think. Even though the frustration etc, may make the F-words permissible here.
Yet that\'s life, for all of us. None get any younger.
August 1st, 2017 08:39
orchidee said:
A fine write - should be ticked as 18+, I think. Even though the frustration etc, may make the F-words permissible here.
Yet that\'s life, for all of us. None get any younger.
August 1st, 2017 08:39
I can\'t wait to be an old man
WriteBeLight said:
Pretty deep Psentinel, but enjoy the ride in the meantime :)
August 1st, 2017 08:08
WriteBeLight said:
Pretty deep Psentinel, but enjoy the ride in the meantime :)
August 1st, 2017 08:08
Impending Bloom
kevin browne said:
a good strong message with \'more behind the scenes\' than we think. I love this verse, its compelling, it holds its own and you know nobody will ever knock this one over. good write.
June 21st, 2017 14:23
kevin browne said:
a good strong message with \'more behind the scenes\' than we think. I love this verse, its compelling, it holds its own and you know nobody will ever knock this one over. good write.
June 21st, 2017 14:23
Changeling
Augustus said:
About authenticity, often challenging to find in another. Enjoyed.
May 25th, 2017 12:00
Augustus said:
About authenticity, often challenging to find in another. Enjoyed.
May 25th, 2017 12:00
Changeling
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very Very Well Written..Your work always amazes me brutha....another brilliant masterpiece...
May 25th, 2017 04:21
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very Very Well Written..Your work always amazes me brutha....another brilliant masterpiece...
May 25th, 2017 04:21
Lore Lights
Alex Arnot said:
It\'s pretty rare to see a poem with so much alliteration. This is great!
April 9th, 2017 19:38
Alex Arnot said:
It\'s pretty rare to see a poem with so much alliteration. This is great!
April 9th, 2017 19:38
Lore Lights
WriteBeLight said:
Great job with the words. Just seem to roll and flow so well!
April 9th, 2017 07:10
WriteBeLight said:
Great job with the words. Just seem to roll and flow so well!
April 9th, 2017 07:10
Lore Lights
orchidee said:
Can I alliterate a lot in aspiring to appreciate this aration (oration)? Doh! Nope, I can\'t match your poem. Only if I have too many sherries, then every word ends in \'ish\'! heehee.
April 8th, 2017 14:47
orchidee said:
Can I alliterate a lot in aspiring to appreciate this aration (oration)? Doh! Nope, I can\'t match your poem. Only if I have too many sherries, then every word ends in \'ish\'! heehee.
April 8th, 2017 14:47
Formless
Aa Harvey said:
This is a really good poem. I like the \'drowning in the cloak of self\' line. I have been watching Harry Potter films recently and it reminds me of his invisibility cloak.
March 23rd, 2017 17:59
Aa Harvey said:
This is a really good poem. I like the \'drowning in the cloak of self\' line. I have been watching Harry Potter films recently and it reminds me of his invisibility cloak.
March 23rd, 2017 17:59
Drought
MendedFences27 said:
One minute it\'s soft and beautiful, and then it\'s gut wrenching- raw. Like a painted fresco at which someone threw a can of black paint. But, the beauty is worth the trudge through the darkness. Your metaphors work wonders and your phrases are imaginative. Great write. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2017 14:11
MendedFences27 said:
One minute it\'s soft and beautiful, and then it\'s gut wrenching- raw. Like a painted fresco at which someone threw a can of black paint. But, the beauty is worth the trudge through the darkness. Your metaphors work wonders and your phrases are imaginative. Great write. - Phil A.
March 2nd, 2017 14:11
Drought
WriteBeLight said:
Love in particular the second to last stanza. Excellent poetry Psentinel!
March 2nd, 2017 12:12
WriteBeLight said:
Love in particular the second to last stanza. Excellent poetry Psentinel!
March 2nd, 2017 12:12
Drought
Augustus said:
\"Spices far from whispered waters\" wow. Great imagery.
March 2nd, 2017 11:37
Augustus said:
\"Spices far from whispered waters\" wow. Great imagery.
March 2nd, 2017 11:37
Drought
willyweed said:
great rhyme and great Ode to the poet that is you, me and every one who every tried to be! nice work sir!
March 2nd, 2017 05:20
willyweed said:
great rhyme and great Ode to the poet that is you, me and every one who every tried to be! nice work sir!
March 2nd, 2017 05:20
Remand
Augustus said:
Curse the plans. It\'s all for naught. Love the photo art.
February 22nd, 2017 17:01
Augustus said:
Curse the plans. It\'s all for naught. Love the photo art.
February 22nd, 2017 17:01
Remand
MendedFences27 said:
Fertility and fallow land, ending in dust. We all end in dust, everything even mountains get worn down to dust. We cannot bring a living thing from out of fallow ground, and human fertility is a fickle thing, science tries to conquer both issues, but with limited success. I liked the lines, \"Fertility is just a brand, a contrast born from life\'s demand\" - Phil A.
February 22nd, 2017 15:14
MendedFences27 said:
Fertility and fallow land, ending in dust. We all end in dust, everything even mountains get worn down to dust. We cannot bring a living thing from out of fallow ground, and human fertility is a fickle thing, science tries to conquer both issues, but with limited success. I liked the lines, \"Fertility is just a brand, a contrast born from life\'s demand\" - Phil A.
February 22nd, 2017 15:14
Sharp Stone Syllables
Augustus said:
A tortured soul laments. It pains me that you are hurting so. Sending you positive thoughts. The poem was beautifully written.
February 18th, 2017 01:28
Augustus said:
A tortured soul laments. It pains me that you are hurting so. Sending you positive thoughts. The poem was beautifully written.
February 18th, 2017 01:28
Sharp Stone Syllables
MendedFences27 said:
One must love one\'s self before they can love another. Feelings of self doubt, or low self esteem are the barrier to inter-personal relationships. We are all people, no two the same, none above or below the other. You are who you are, accept it, relish in it, and stop worrying what others will think.
You write superbly. You create interesting images. Your words flow. Who else would have said, \"tessellate my soul\" ? - Phil A.
February 17th, 2017 12:40
MendedFences27 said:
One must love one\'s self before they can love another. Feelings of self doubt, or low self esteem are the barrier to inter-personal relationships. We are all people, no two the same, none above or below the other. You are who you are, accept it, relish in it, and stop worrying what others will think.
You write superbly. You create interesting images. Your words flow. Who else would have said, \"tessellate my soul\" ? - Phil A.
February 17th, 2017 12:40
Sharp Stone Syllables
WriteBeLight said:
Great work, and great insight, bringing up the subjects of self deprecating, self doubting, and expressing low self esteem, and so on. I can relate to the lines and I am sure many others can as well.
February 16th, 2017 06:45
WriteBeLight said:
Great work, and great insight, bringing up the subjects of self deprecating, self doubting, and expressing low self esteem, and so on. I can relate to the lines and I am sure many others can as well.
February 16th, 2017 06:45
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