Comments received on poems by Quemis
Heavy Hangs the Helmeted
L. B. Mek said:
\'Safety, sure and sabeline,
Seems sold on slight of hand.\'
Brilliant!
(how to question accountability
when we inherit a world
with its accounts, touched-up
since the dawn of thought...)
December 23rd, 2022 07:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'Safety, sure and sabeline,
Seems sold on slight of hand.\'
Brilliant!
(how to question accountability
when we inherit a world
with its accounts, touched-up
since the dawn of thought...)
December 23rd, 2022 07:50
Teeth
Doggerel Dave said:
After the temptation to give amateur (drawn from experience) periodontic advice was passed, the rest of your piece (unusually – I normally give up) drew me in.
However the question arises – drawn from your experience, or a creative imaginative rendition of a terrible topic? Background notes would have been welcome.
December 12th, 2022 17:48
Doggerel Dave said:
After the temptation to give amateur (drawn from experience) periodontic advice was passed, the rest of your piece (unusually – I normally give up) drew me in.
However the question arises – drawn from your experience, or a creative imaginative rendition of a terrible topic? Background notes would have been welcome.
December 12th, 2022 17:48
Dreams of a Droughtless Decade
L. B. Mek said:
(weather god\'s, temper
our resolve
for those true devastations
life
inevitably, yields...)
a poignant write
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
December 9th, 2022 05:26
L. B. Mek said:
(weather god\'s, temper
our resolve
for those true devastations
life
inevitably, yields...)
a poignant write
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
December 9th, 2022 05:26
Liminal Deliverance
Doggerel Dave said:
Oh cheer me up, why don\'t you?
I do see a truth there (I think) - all is dust (your word) eventually, at end point.
Neat write.
September 26th, 2022 19:10
Doggerel Dave said:
Oh cheer me up, why don\'t you?
I do see a truth there (I think) - all is dust (your word) eventually, at end point.
Neat write.
September 26th, 2022 19:10
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
Doggerel Dave said:
I was out of action when you posted this. now gratefully found by accident.....
Neat and clear....fun also.
August 23rd, 2022 17:59
Doggerel Dave said:
I was out of action when you posted this. now gratefully found by accident.....
Neat and clear....fun also.
August 23rd, 2022 17:59
Bereave
L. B. Mek said:
such a tightly woven work of poetic commentary
with such seamless flow and natural rhythm..
a quenching drink, in a read
thank you! dear Poet
August 5th, 2022 02:35
L. B. Mek said:
such a tightly woven work of poetic commentary
with such seamless flow and natural rhythm..
a quenching drink, in a read
thank you! dear Poet
August 5th, 2022 02:35
Doctors Note
L. B. Mek said:
\'Got the Kubrick stare going,\'
lol
\'For gaps found inside you. \'
deep...
a great read!
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 2nd, 2022 04:25
L. B. Mek said:
\'Got the Kubrick stare going,\'
lol
\'For gaps found inside you. \'
deep...
a great read!
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 2nd, 2022 04:25
Gradual
L. B. Mek said:
what to do, indeed?
a wonderfully poignant shorty
thanks for sharing, dear poet
(btw how did your French write go down?)
July 29th, 2022 03:01
L. B. Mek said:
what to do, indeed?
a wonderfully poignant shorty
thanks for sharing, dear poet
(btw how did your French write go down?)
July 29th, 2022 03:01
Nous parlons Tous Français
L. B. Mek said:
\'The evil done inside and by France
is worth a pause.\'
as-ever - your writing, at its core
is so innately sincere and humble..
(I just hope your audience
is as well read as you
so they can better appreciate the nuances
in your poetic wordplay)
viva la France! lol
humanity, is grateful
for the legacy of the Celtic, Gauls
great, abhorrent or absurd
July 14th, 2022 00:54
L. B. Mek said:
\'The evil done inside and by France
is worth a pause.\'
as-ever - your writing, at its core
is so innately sincere and humble..
(I just hope your audience
is as well read as you
so they can better appreciate the nuances
in your poetic wordplay)
viva la France! lol
humanity, is grateful
for the legacy of the Celtic, Gauls
great, abhorrent or absurd
July 14th, 2022 00:54
Hail Mary
L. B. Mek said:
still, while the sun shines
we have windows of relief
from all the stresses of life
should we but choose
to take a minute and commune
with that soothing
and abundant, gift of replenishing
Nature..
stay Strong, dear poet
\'don\'t let the bleak
be
all, that you choose
to see\'
July 12th, 2022 02:58
L. B. Mek said:
still, while the sun shines
we have windows of relief
from all the stresses of life
should we but choose
to take a minute and commune
with that soothing
and abundant, gift of replenishing
Nature..
stay Strong, dear poet
\'don\'t let the bleak
be
all, that you choose
to see\'
July 12th, 2022 02:58
Alex
L. B. Mek said:
yeah, I too have a graveyard
of cherished friendships
I mourn over, dear Poet..
(all we can do
is treasure the beautiful memories
they gifted us
fight away, the pain and hurt
that fuel our regrets
and blame, accounts
just
try to squeeze, what goodness
we can, out of life\'s shattered
dreams and connections
look up, and wish them a \'hey\'
for \'old times\' sake\', and hope
those winds of change, will
deliver
our well wishes and yearning
feelings..
as sincere, as those tears
we refuse to let drip)
another brilliantly relatable read, thank you!
June 28th, 2022 03:06
L. B. Mek said:
yeah, I too have a graveyard
of cherished friendships
I mourn over, dear Poet..
(all we can do
is treasure the beautiful memories
they gifted us
fight away, the pain and hurt
that fuel our regrets
and blame, accounts
just
try to squeeze, what goodness
we can, out of life\'s shattered
dreams and connections
look up, and wish them a \'hey\'
for \'old times\' sake\', and hope
those winds of change, will
deliver
our well wishes and yearning
feelings..
as sincere, as those tears
we refuse to let drip)
another brilliantly relatable read, thank you!
June 28th, 2022 03:06
Hypnos
L. B. Mek said:
memorable imagery and really like
the fit, of your title
thanks for sharing, dear poet(s)
June 21st, 2022 03:52
L. B. Mek said:
memorable imagery and really like
the fit, of your title
thanks for sharing, dear poet(s)
June 21st, 2022 03:52
Summers are the Coldest
L. B. Mek said:
\'Wasn\'t for lack of trying,
Knew the deck was stacked.
But every fight is different,
And its time I must stay in.
Keep saying I can\'t run as fast,
Odds weren\'t on me to win.
A thousand irons on the fire,
Never felt hope so damn close.\'
you\'re just so subtle
in tonality and flow, and yet
you impart such profound insight
I genuinely love! your poetic style
and feel privileged
that you choose to share your talent
dear cherished Poet..
(stay Strong, scribble Often
and be Proud! of the who
you\'re striving to become
cherish the long journeys
care less, about those
blink-n-miss
results and rewards)
June 14th, 2022 03:19
L. B. Mek said:
\'Wasn\'t for lack of trying,
Knew the deck was stacked.
But every fight is different,
And its time I must stay in.
Keep saying I can\'t run as fast,
Odds weren\'t on me to win.
A thousand irons on the fire,
Never felt hope so damn close.\'
you\'re just so subtle
in tonality and flow, and yet
you impart such profound insight
I genuinely love! your poetic style
and feel privileged
that you choose to share your talent
dear cherished Poet..
(stay Strong, scribble Often
and be Proud! of the who
you\'re striving to become
cherish the long journeys
care less, about those
blink-n-miss
results and rewards)
June 14th, 2022 03:19
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
orchidee said:
I was the gardener in the garden! Or was I the weed?! lol.
June 1st, 2022 02:14
orchidee said:
I was the gardener in the garden! Or was I the weed?! lol.
June 1st, 2022 02:14
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
jarcher54 said:
Your precise descriptions, almost technical language, and the short intense format of your lyrics remind me a bit of John Donne. A fine commentary on the weeds among us!
June 1st, 2022 00:38
jarcher54 said:
Your precise descriptions, almost technical language, and the short intense format of your lyrics remind me a bit of John Donne. A fine commentary on the weeds among us!
June 1st, 2022 00:38
Nasma
L. B. Mek said:
what choice wording, such a beautiful read
I\'m so happy
that you seem to have
such a strong anchor
for hope, in your life..
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
May 31st, 2022 05:04
L. B. Mek said:
what choice wording, such a beautiful read
I\'m so happy
that you seem to have
such a strong anchor
for hope, in your life..
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
May 31st, 2022 05:04
There Is an Old Weed in my Garden
orchidee said:
Good write Q. I didn\'t know I was in your garden! lol.
May 1st, 2022 12:59
orchidee said:
Good write Q. I didn\'t know I was in your garden! lol.
May 1st, 2022 12:59
Beacon
L. B. Mek said:
such an impactful image
and an intriguing read
thanks for sharing, dear poet
April 15th, 2022 03:41
L. B. Mek said:
such an impactful image
and an intriguing read
thanks for sharing, dear poet
April 15th, 2022 03:41
Half-light Transport
Rocky Lagou said:
Great usage of imagery. Really well done!
March 28th, 2022 12:58
Rocky Lagou said:
Great usage of imagery. Really well done!
March 28th, 2022 12:58
Tarnished
L. B. Mek said:
tarnished by residue dirt, we accrue
ducking, life\'s zeal for chaos
and lamenting our warped, fortunes
of good intentions by the majority
being poisoned
by the selfish few of society\'s, forsaken;
who climb to prominence
on wings of self intrust and ambitious self reliance..
this, be our cyclical duality
of humourless, absurdity
this, dear Poet
be, what your words of insightful
poetic damnation, showcase
a succinct poetic portrayal
of that pitifully, entangled states
humanity ends-up, trying to free itself from
disaster after disaster
generation after generation
\'fetid name\'
after, bleak
\'fetid namelessness\'
(a great write!
of poignantly Timely, commentary
thanks for sharing)
March 15th, 2022 06:19
L. B. Mek said:
tarnished by residue dirt, we accrue
ducking, life\'s zeal for chaos
and lamenting our warped, fortunes
of good intentions by the majority
being poisoned
by the selfish few of society\'s, forsaken;
who climb to prominence
on wings of self intrust and ambitious self reliance..
this, be our cyclical duality
of humourless, absurdity
this, dear Poet
be, what your words of insightful
poetic damnation, showcase
a succinct poetic portrayal
of that pitifully, entangled states
humanity ends-up, trying to free itself from
disaster after disaster
generation after generation
\'fetid name\'
after, bleak
\'fetid namelessness\'
(a great write!
of poignantly Timely, commentary
thanks for sharing)
March 15th, 2022 06:19
Raise a dog-sled team. Die in a cave. Talk to god. Cowards. It\'s poetry for fucks sake.
Alexander Pope III said:
Outstanding
February 4th, 2022 21:44
Alexander Pope III said:
Outstanding
February 4th, 2022 21:44
The Sigh of Half a Decade
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(and a much belated
Happy New Year!
dear Poet, thanks for sharing)
\'Discovery and tenderness,
Revelation and mime;
Long nights sharing guarded pain,
The craft of filling time.
The wrench of coming tragedy,
The loss of rhyme and way;
Confusion so encompassing -
On love there\'s naught to say.\'
January 20th, 2022 08:18
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(and a much belated
Happy New Year!
dear Poet, thanks for sharing)
\'Discovery and tenderness,
Revelation and mime;
Long nights sharing guarded pain,
The craft of filling time.
The wrench of coming tragedy,
The loss of rhyme and way;
Confusion so encompassing -
On love there\'s naught to say.\'
January 20th, 2022 08:18
Adomania
jarcher54 said:
You have such poignant, vivid images, always musical and inventive, traditional but new! Seasons stealing the colors, inkwells gone dry. Very sincere and sophisticated. You naturally use all the poet\'s tools, like you don\'t even know it it is so natural. Image, rhythm, anaphora, rhyme, simplicity, theme, vocabulary, you name it. This is a treasure.
January 19th, 2022 23:49
jarcher54 said:
You have such poignant, vivid images, always musical and inventive, traditional but new! Seasons stealing the colors, inkwells gone dry. Very sincere and sophisticated. You naturally use all the poet\'s tools, like you don\'t even know it it is so natural. Image, rhythm, anaphora, rhyme, simplicity, theme, vocabulary, you name it. This is a treasure.
January 19th, 2022 23:49
Adomania
L. B. Mek said:
\'Endlessness in memory,
A breath held for a thief;
Seasons are always stealing,
the color from our leaf.\'
love these lines
a great write!
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
(Adomania, in a blink
Kairosclerosis, in a heartbeat
we scrape, all we can
from that bottomless barrel
we call a life
and then, it gets tipped over
so get to start, all over again)
luckily, we just title it
a New Year
so we can get sht faced
and \'cheers\', all night long...
December 21st, 2021 05:36
L. B. Mek said:
\'Endlessness in memory,
A breath held for a thief;
Seasons are always stealing,
the color from our leaf.\'
love these lines
a great write!
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
(Adomania, in a blink
Kairosclerosis, in a heartbeat
we scrape, all we can
from that bottomless barrel
we call a life
and then, it gets tipped over
so get to start, all over again)
luckily, we just title it
a New Year
so we can get sht faced
and \'cheers\', all night long...
December 21st, 2021 05:36
Frostbite
L. B. Mek said:
\'Pallid hands and fingertips
Grey and bloody nose
Footprints fading circular
In ever rising snows\'
\'There are depths to being lost
And somewhere down below
Confusion is a comfort
And warmth is letting go\'..
Brilliant!
November 29th, 2021 06:05
L. B. Mek said:
\'Pallid hands and fingertips
Grey and bloody nose
Footprints fading circular
In ever rising snows\'
\'There are depths to being lost
And somewhere down below
Confusion is a comfort
And warmth is letting go\'..
Brilliant!
November 29th, 2021 06:05
Frostbite
Eugene S. said:
Beautiful flow. You\'ve given a \'thing\' - frostbite - depth and poignancy. Well done.
November 29th, 2021 02:05
Eugene S. said:
Beautiful flow. You\'ve given a \'thing\' - frostbite - depth and poignancy. Well done.
November 29th, 2021 02:05
Logan
L. B. Mek said:
I consider it my good fortune and humbling honour, to have been given the opportunity to read these masterful words of pure - distilled, unbreakable: sibling Love..
I wish your sister the very best,
on this new page of her life
she\'s boldly chosen, to embark upon;
and I congratulate you, for expressing yourself so transparent
in such an eloquent poem,
I hope the rest of the wedding, is imbued with as much class, as you\'ve painstakingly adorned your poem with!
thanks for choosing to share, dear Poet
hope y\'all have/had a great time 🍾🥂
October 19th, 2021 04:25
L. B. Mek said:
I consider it my good fortune and humbling honour, to have been given the opportunity to read these masterful words of pure - distilled, unbreakable: sibling Love..
I wish your sister the very best,
on this new page of her life
she\'s boldly chosen, to embark upon;
and I congratulate you, for expressing yourself so transparent
in such an eloquent poem,
I hope the rest of the wedding, is imbued with as much class, as you\'ve painstakingly adorned your poem with!
thanks for choosing to share, dear Poet
hope y\'all have/had a great time 🍾🥂
October 19th, 2021 04:25
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