Comments received on poems by Quemis

I Spend a Lot of Time with People that Don\'t Exist
Doggerel Dave said:

IF this is a piece of poetry, well crafted, which generalises a position many experience, then well said...
IF, however, this is an honest description of a state you are experiencing right now then take Clara\'s advice seriously - however difficult or impossible this might appear.
Take extremely good care of yourself, Dave

November 20th, 2020 18:12

I Spend a Lot of Time with People that Don\'t Exist
Clara said:

Your comment... Please don\'t. Reach out to someone. You\'re not as alone as you feel...

November 20th, 2020 17:11

No Pain No Gain
L. B. Mek said:

no \'P\' words were harmed in the formulation of this write, lol
good read

October 30th, 2020 04:15

No Pain No Gain
jarcher54 said:

A good old Anglo-Saxon alliterative rune, fit to be carved on a mossy sarsen half-buried in the back country to be discovered and pondered over some day by amateur archeologists from a local college or by a lot of lost girl scouts on a walkabout. I can\'t decide if the idea drives the words, or the words create ideas here, but you fit the words together like stones on a drystane wall.

October 30th, 2020 01:45

jarcher54 said:

Loss is the only promise made, well stated. Quite a litany of memorable, frightful images. The more I reread this one the more I like it. I might add that it has an almost playful silliness just below the surface, like that choir of specters chanting foggy songs... Happy All Souls\' Day I guess, or as we call it down here in South Texas, El Dia de los Muertos.

October 30th, 2020 01:39

Each Way Endlessly
Quemis said:

Thank you. Was pretty drunk and depressed last night when i wrote this. I feel stupid, but it came out ok.


October 1st, 2020 09:45

Each Way Endlessly
L. B. Mek said:

liked the poetic elements and flow but this got real dark - real quick, took me by surprise,
a quirky write with lots of character and although a little bleak - intriguingly insightful

October 1st, 2020 03:10

I don\'t know.
Trenz Pruca said:

I liked your poem very much.

September 25th, 2020 13:33

I, an Algorithm
jarcher54 said:

This piece is extremely moving from both an intellectual and an aesthetic perspective. Your first couplet is all too familiar to those like me who consider themselves rational and agnostic, yet are sensitive and whatever you call spiritual without belief in a divinity. So succinctly stated:

The stars above are godless
yet I\'ve a master still

The sound, the rhythm, the density of ideas, the clarity, the deceptively apparent simplicity of the words and phrases, remind me of the best of Emily Dickinson. Moving and well-done.

September 25th, 2020 00:00

I don\'t know.
L. B. Mek said:

wonderfully intertwined metaphors, I like its stubborn unwillingness to give-in to a melodic rhythm, instead choosing to prioritise stanza\'s shaped by the emotions of the words they contain,
good write

September 24th, 2020 04:03

Dissolve Me
jarcher54 said:

Typically dense, I tease the meaning out, no, I wring it out, and though I find myself twisting pretty hard to get it started, the meaning begins to drip, and the more I wring the more it flows. I think I too experience defeat through implication... and it\'s a brave poet who admits not always finding the pitch.

June 30th, 2020 01:59

Mount Everest is a Grave
jarcher54 said:

I was fascinated by the title of this poem... can one climb a grave, a spectacular 5-mile high grave? Or is it a really deep hole upside down? Or do we think we are climbing when we are really descending? Then upon reaching the top (was it a climb to get there?)... are we at the bottom?

And the last line:

And you the one who\'s told

Methought... One day we are being, doing, writing, telling, singing... but one slip and we are the past, and if we are lucky we are written about, sung of, and remembered. And if we are too bold, climb too fast, fly too high on our fragile waxen wings, oops, we are preserved as an obituary, a ballad, or--if we fall especially spectacularly--as the subject of a great epic! Maybe that\'s not exactly what you meant, but it\'s what came rushing through my head upon encountering your Mount Everest. Nice images, twists and turns. Interesting sentences, slightly askew but elegantly dense.

June 13th, 2020 02:16

The Dark Dome
jarcher54 said:

This makes me look forward to reading more of your poems. I appreciate the density of your lines, the juxtaposed symbols, the relentless crashing of new elements creating a feeling more than an idea. But mostly I enjoy the sound. What you write works best for me read aloud. What you are saying is elusive, but it pleases and intrigues just to hear.

June 3rd, 2020 02:42

Star-light Surgery
Quemis said:

Thanks everyone!

Can\'t say too much about it myself...

Wrote it blind drunk last night.

March 12th, 2020 18:08

Star-light Surgery
anonymousblue said:

Cryptic but fascinating. Lovely and intelligent use of imagery.

March 12th, 2020 05:57

Star-light Surgery
Saxon Crow said:

Cool poem Q. Love the title

March 12th, 2020 01:54

What we Know that we Don\'t Know
sylviasearcher said:

I loved this. It has a lot of layers. I need to reread

March 10th, 2020 02:58

What we Know that we Don\'t Know
Goldfinch60 said:

Good write Quemis, may that trail lead us all to peace.


March 10th, 2020 01:59

What we Know that we Don\'t Know
Saxon Crow said:

Awesome bit of poetry. Totally resonate with this.

March 9th, 2020 14:02

Clara said:

This has the basis of an epic story! Wow. Unpack this please. I\'m very intrigued.

March 4th, 2020 07:12

greytbritain said:

Love this so much ... thank you for your beautiful mind 🌻

November 20th, 2019 03:33

Forever in Fog
MaddieJ said:

This is so good! Thanks for sharing it!

August 27th, 2019 23:17

Forever in Fog
Tom Wood said:

I love this! Quemis, this is a fantastic poem, good job :D

August 27th, 2019 00:34

Laying Bricks
Heather Hoffman said:

Well done!

July 8th, 2019 18:30

Poetic Dan said:

Very thought-provoking. Thank you

April 3rd, 2019 02:01

Sour Symmetry
b-LAH-que said:

Good write!

March 23rd, 2019 00:45

Sour Symmetry
Nicholas Browning said:

This is pretty good.

March 22nd, 2019 23:54

Neville said:

just passing through and stumbled upon these words... thoroughly enjoyed.... cheers, Neville

January 27th, 2019 01:53

psychofemale said:

nicely done!

January 16th, 2019 19:12

Quemis said:

Thank you!

January 16th, 2019 01:36

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