Comments received on poems by Wackyheartache4
Defeat
MendedFences27 said:
Scary words. I hope you\'re not sincere. As a poem some clever images (judging every tree, swinging feet, breathless beat, rotting meat). Stick around and write more. - Phil A.
July 4th, 2023 15:41
MendedFences27 said:
Scary words. I hope you\'re not sincere. As a poem some clever images (judging every tree, swinging feet, breathless beat, rotting meat). Stick around and write more. - Phil A.
July 4th, 2023 15:41
Displaced
L. B. Mek said:
great form, powerful to read out loud
a rebellion song as poem
thanks for sharing
July 3rd, 2023 04:13
L. B. Mek said:
great form, powerful to read out loud
a rebellion song as poem
thanks for sharing
July 3rd, 2023 04:13
Samaritans
Eugene S. said:
I share your sentiments. Powerful wording that many are tempted to hold back. Appreciate your poem.
June 24th, 2023 19:55
Eugene S. said:
I share your sentiments. Powerful wording that many are tempted to hold back. Appreciate your poem.
June 24th, 2023 19:55
Samaritans
Kinsey Peterson said:
Have you by chance become a mind reader? And if so could you send this poem to my therapist? ;)
Either way- beautiful piece and best of luck on your next work
June 24th, 2023 16:36
Kinsey Peterson said:
Have you by chance become a mind reader? And if so could you send this poem to my therapist? ;)
Either way- beautiful piece and best of luck on your next work
June 24th, 2023 16:36
The Divine
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Good writing )) especially like the last few lines
June 17th, 2023 02:13
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Good writing )) especially like the last few lines
June 17th, 2023 02:13
Anxiety
MDStone said:
Very creative expression of emotion experienced both in my own body and once again as I read your poem. Thanks for penning and sharing.
June 16th, 2023 12:25
MDStone said:
Very creative expression of emotion experienced both in my own body and once again as I read your poem. Thanks for penning and sharing.
June 16th, 2023 12:25
Anxiety
Jeffrey Weese said:
The poem is suffused with a sense of relentless tension, dread, and a longing for relief. The persistent use of disquieting imagery – poison dart, shattering shards, voices far from divine – successfully embodies the intrusive and destructive nature of anxiety.
What I feel as I read this poem is a deep sense of empathy. It is saddening to visualize the struggle of a mind in such conflict, trying to escape from itself. The yearning expressed in the last two stanzas, a longing for a time of peace, resonates profoundly, further enhancing the poem\'s poignant effect.
Yet, there is a bitter beauty to be found in this raw articulation of emotional pain. The poem\'s strength lies in its ability to communicate such a deeply personal experience, allowing others to empathize and perhaps feel less alone in their own struggles. -jw
June 16th, 2023 10:42
Jeffrey Weese said:
The poem is suffused with a sense of relentless tension, dread, and a longing for relief. The persistent use of disquieting imagery – poison dart, shattering shards, voices far from divine – successfully embodies the intrusive and destructive nature of anxiety.
What I feel as I read this poem is a deep sense of empathy. It is saddening to visualize the struggle of a mind in such conflict, trying to escape from itself. The yearning expressed in the last two stanzas, a longing for a time of peace, resonates profoundly, further enhancing the poem\'s poignant effect.
Yet, there is a bitter beauty to be found in this raw articulation of emotional pain. The poem\'s strength lies in its ability to communicate such a deeply personal experience, allowing others to empathize and perhaps feel less alone in their own struggles. -jw
June 16th, 2023 10:42
I Am
L. B. Mek said:
I am:
\'Impassioned frustration, witnessing
so many waste - this gifted opportunity
by outsourcing their blame
and importing, comforting excuses
to the blatant fact:
that We each, have only ourselves to fault
when we Choose, to give-up and surrender
allowing ourselves, to be treated
as mere vote puppets
by the poisonous minority, we defer-to willingly
to feign ignorance, when they manipulate our lives
on the basis, of some strangers ticking boxes
in those cesspool ballot boxes...\'
(thanks for sharing, a much needed
wake-up call, of a write)
July 26th, 2021 05:23
L. B. Mek said:
I am:
\'Impassioned frustration, witnessing
so many waste - this gifted opportunity
by outsourcing their blame
and importing, comforting excuses
to the blatant fact:
that We each, have only ourselves to fault
when we Choose, to give-up and surrender
allowing ourselves, to be treated
as mere vote puppets
by the poisonous minority, we defer-to willingly
to feign ignorance, when they manipulate our lives
on the basis, of some strangers ticking boxes
in those cesspool ballot boxes...\'
(thanks for sharing, a much needed
wake-up call, of a write)
July 26th, 2021 05:23
Metaphoric bliss
Doggerel Dave said:
I like much of your stuff. having only recently tripped over you!
Keeping it real are the ones I like.
Let\'s see more of you.
July 18th, 2021 19:22
Doggerel Dave said:
I like much of your stuff. having only recently tripped over you!
Keeping it real are the ones I like.
Let\'s see more of you.
July 18th, 2021 19:22
Existence
L. B. Mek said:
\'Life, it seems
Likes hurting me
I don\'t know how to stop it.
Serenity is ever lost on me
It swirls tantalizingly around\'
\'Nary a missed opportunity to laugh
Squarely scribbled on my epitaph
This is the way she goes,
The fickle mistress we call existence\'
\'We all strive for knowledge
The cause for our endless blunder
We scratch and claw
Dispatched, foresaw
That we\'ll never sate our hunger.\'
(might have been easier to just highlight
your whole poem at this rate, lol
an unashamedly honest, yet measured write
showcasing that powerfully resolute voice
resonating fluently, through your eloquent poetry!
a great read, thanks for sharing dear poet)
June 22nd, 2021 03:30
L. B. Mek said:
\'Life, it seems
Likes hurting me
I don\'t know how to stop it.
Serenity is ever lost on me
It swirls tantalizingly around\'
\'Nary a missed opportunity to laugh
Squarely scribbled on my epitaph
This is the way she goes,
The fickle mistress we call existence\'
\'We all strive for knowledge
The cause for our endless blunder
We scratch and claw
Dispatched, foresaw
That we\'ll never sate our hunger.\'
(might have been easier to just highlight
your whole poem at this rate, lol
an unashamedly honest, yet measured write
showcasing that powerfully resolute voice
resonating fluently, through your eloquent poetry!
a great read, thanks for sharing dear poet)
June 22nd, 2021 03:30
Good Intentions
L. B. Mek said:
\'Bliss still not seen!\'
yup, that\'s the root cause of dysfunctionality
where there is no comprehension
of exactly how much consumption
is entailed in our strive
for all that fantastically unachievable greed!
we need to teach the valour
in acceptance and humility
at school level, comprehensively
to have any hope of countering
the poisonous certainty
of our capitalist ideology...!
a unique write, full of great insight
thanks for sharing, dear poet
(and thanks for inspiring
my little scribbled reply)
June 10th, 2021 02:56
L. B. Mek said:
\'Bliss still not seen!\'
yup, that\'s the root cause of dysfunctionality
where there is no comprehension
of exactly how much consumption
is entailed in our strive
for all that fantastically unachievable greed!
we need to teach the valour
in acceptance and humility
at school level, comprehensively
to have any hope of countering
the poisonous certainty
of our capitalist ideology...!
a unique write, full of great insight
thanks for sharing, dear poet
(and thanks for inspiring
my little scribbled reply)
June 10th, 2021 02:56
Good Intentions
Doggerel Dave said:
That is terribly hard to take, despite that there’s a large truth buried in your piece, though not so deep that it doesn’t spill out on the page.
A muscular heavy duty write. Thanks
June 9th, 2021 20:03
Doggerel Dave said:
That is terribly hard to take, despite that there’s a large truth buried in your piece, though not so deep that it doesn’t spill out on the page.
A muscular heavy duty write. Thanks
June 9th, 2021 20:03
Good Intentions
Goldfinch60 said:
That bliss can be seen, it is within each of us.
Andy
June 9th, 2021 04:14
Goldfinch60 said:
That bliss can be seen, it is within each of us.
Andy
June 9th, 2021 04:14
Ramblings
L. B. Mek said:
I laud your poetic imagination and ambition
keep striving to explore and push your talent
so you can bravely blaze a trail
empowering, scribblers like me: to dare..
thank you for sharing dear poet
June 7th, 2021 06:19
L. B. Mek said:
I laud your poetic imagination and ambition
keep striving to explore and push your talent
so you can bravely blaze a trail
empowering, scribblers like me: to dare..
thank you for sharing dear poet
June 7th, 2021 06:19
Fuel
L. B. Mek said:
\'Death\'s ever present persistence,
Never knowing stifle.
Most couldn\'t say
Which this tallage ekes to be.
Why does energy, so real
Require death\'s insistence?
Wherever lives, the end is vital
So quoth, to much dismay,\'..
thought provoking, with profound insight,
a labyrinth of a read, but very much
worth the investment, in time;
a hint - maybe...
thanks for sharing, dear poet
May 27th, 2021 04:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'Death\'s ever present persistence,
Never knowing stifle.
Most couldn\'t say
Which this tallage ekes to be.
Why does energy, so real
Require death\'s insistence?
Wherever lives, the end is vital
So quoth, to much dismay,\'..
thought provoking, with profound insight,
a labyrinth of a read, but very much
worth the investment, in time;
a hint - maybe...
thanks for sharing, dear poet
May 27th, 2021 04:50
Blessings
L. B. Mek said:
impactful and rejuvenating in wording, yet somehow
tender, broken and defiantly revealing, in tone..
what a wonderful portrait you\'ve penned, dear poet
thanks for sharing
May 24th, 2021 05:51
L. B. Mek said:
impactful and rejuvenating in wording, yet somehow
tender, broken and defiantly revealing, in tone..
what a wonderful portrait you\'ve penned, dear poet
thanks for sharing
May 24th, 2021 05:51
Blessings
Goldfinch60 said:
Accepting that your life is a blessing is leading you to the light from the dark place that you are in, that light will get stronger as you go towards it.
Andy
May 24th, 2021 00:10
Goldfinch60 said:
Accepting that your life is a blessing is leading you to the light from the dark place that you are in, that light will get stronger as you go towards it.
Andy
May 24th, 2021 00:10
Blessings
Trenz Pruca said:
I enjoyed it. The rhythm reminded me of rap. Thank you.
May 23rd, 2021 17:43
Trenz Pruca said:
I enjoyed it. The rhythm reminded me of rap. Thank you.
May 23rd, 2021 17:43
American Blood
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderfully expressed, that anger is there amongst many people but needs to be gathered into a system that can create a good world without spreading any blood over it.
Andy
May 22nd, 2021 00:31
Goldfinch60 said:
Wonderfully expressed, that anger is there amongst many people but needs to be gathered into a system that can create a good world without spreading any blood over it.
Andy
May 22nd, 2021 00:31
Once loved
rosiedm said:
age beings some wisdom hold on to that lol
and stay true to yourself not be easily influenced to not be who you know your are to be..
May 21st, 2021 06:44
rosiedm said:
age beings some wisdom hold on to that lol
and stay true to yourself not be easily influenced to not be who you know your are to be..
May 21st, 2021 06:44
American Blood
Doggerel Dave said:
Great to witness anger so articulately expressed.
I don’t think the situation you very clearly describe is exclusively an American phenomenon – and I’m not excluding the other anglophone countries here.
May 21st, 2021 05:30
Doggerel Dave said:
Great to witness anger so articulately expressed.
I don’t think the situation you very clearly describe is exclusively an American phenomenon – and I’m not excluding the other anglophone countries here.
May 21st, 2021 05:30
American Blood
L. B. Mek said:
\'Divide and conquer!
So Only the rich will prosper!
Herd the sheep, sort by color,
(so) they can never know they\'re brothers
(and sisters or others more marginalised by society).
(and try as they might, they always fail)
(to) Kill the lovers!\'
Amen!
what a great message, dear poet
we must always: \'fight, the good fight\'!
though, checking ourselves continuously
through our outlook of humility and empathy
so we can, ask:
\'grant us
the serenity to accept the things \'We\' cannot change
courage, to change the things \'We\' can
and (most importantly)
Wisdom to Know the Difference.\'
(there-in exists the pertinent, difference
between David Thoreau, Gandhi, Martin Luther\'s
defiance within: \'Civil Disobedience\'
and modernity\'s, ideology of totalitarian liberalism
futile nihilism fuelled: as all-out Anarchy
warping, ever-more divisive activism)
at least for me...
May 21st, 2021 04:22
L. B. Mek said:
\'Divide and conquer!
So Only the rich will prosper!
Herd the sheep, sort by color,
(so) they can never know they\'re brothers
(and sisters or others more marginalised by society).
(and try as they might, they always fail)
(to) Kill the lovers!\'
Amen!
what a great message, dear poet
we must always: \'fight, the good fight\'!
though, checking ourselves continuously
through our outlook of humility and empathy
so we can, ask:
\'grant us
the serenity to accept the things \'We\' cannot change
courage, to change the things \'We\' can
and (most importantly)
Wisdom to Know the Difference.\'
(there-in exists the pertinent, difference
between David Thoreau, Gandhi, Martin Luther\'s
defiance within: \'Civil Disobedience\'
and modernity\'s, ideology of totalitarian liberalism
futile nihilism fuelled: as all-out Anarchy
warping, ever-more divisive activism)
at least for me...
May 21st, 2021 04:22
Once loved
L. B. Mek said:
when those easily - fed, lies
fit too well
in that doomsday of virtue signalling
victimhood
I would first ask, just for the sake of it
am I
the only one to feel this way?
if not
then how do other\'s, go about their day
without
adding, to the collective orchestra
of society\'s
doom and all-things gloom: easy-fit
of a narrative...
(thanks for sharing dear poet, and inspiring my little scribbled reply
please accept my apologies if you find me commenting this way: rude
that was never my intention)
May 21st, 2021 03:50
L. B. Mek said:
when those easily - fed, lies
fit too well
in that doomsday of virtue signalling
victimhood
I would first ask, just for the sake of it
am I
the only one to feel this way?
if not
then how do other\'s, go about their day
without
adding, to the collective orchestra
of society\'s
doom and all-things gloom: easy-fit
of a narrative...
(thanks for sharing dear poet, and inspiring my little scribbled reply
please accept my apologies if you find me commenting this way: rude
that was never my intention)
May 21st, 2021 03:50
suicide
dusk arising said:
I picture your tombstone.
RIP Wackyheartache4 who took 5 mins to tell us he didnt care. No idea where he went cos there isn\'t a god - so he said. Oh...deja-vu.
September 3rd, 2017 08:35
dusk arising said:
I picture your tombstone.
RIP Wackyheartache4 who took 5 mins to tell us he didnt care. No idea where he went cos there isn\'t a god - so he said. Oh...deja-vu.
September 3rd, 2017 08:35
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