Comments received on poems by ElenaGrace
Am I Happy Now?
katherined said:
really well described, this feeling. not content but somewhat numb to your own discontentedness. well done.
November 24th, 2017 11:19
katherined said:
really well described, this feeling. not content but somewhat numb to your own discontentedness. well done.
November 24th, 2017 11:19
Iām Just An E c h o
Shadowbox15 said:
That was a wonderful poem. But, if you could use a bit more repetition to reflect your statement, I think that it could be made even more powerful.
November 15th, 2017 21:19
Shadowbox15 said:
That was a wonderful poem. But, if you could use a bit more repetition to reflect your statement, I think that it could be made even more powerful.
November 15th, 2017 21:19
Salt Tears
burning-embers said:
Grins and Giggles ..... what about the groans? I\'m kiddin you. You keep those tears running and the writing coming.. Nice one.
August 19th, 2017 21:47
burning-embers said:
Grins and Giggles ..... what about the groans? I\'m kiddin you. You keep those tears running and the writing coming.. Nice one.
August 19th, 2017 21:47
Salt Tears
kevin browne said:
great verse work. a little salty but captivating.
August 19th, 2017 20:29
kevin browne said:
great verse work. a little salty but captivating.
August 19th, 2017 20:29
Sigh *Crude Language*
FredPeyer said:
Elena, all the comments ahead of me express exactly the way I feel about your writing. It doesn\'t matter what you call it, poem, short story, writing, whatever, it is only a name. The important thing is how you write it. And this one is outstanding. Yes, you do use \'foul language\', but that is what makes it real. That is how we think and talk.
August 17th, 2017 20:32
FredPeyer said:
Elena, all the comments ahead of me express exactly the way I feel about your writing. It doesn\'t matter what you call it, poem, short story, writing, whatever, it is only a name. The important thing is how you write it. And this one is outstanding. Yes, you do use \'foul language\', but that is what makes it real. That is how we think and talk.
August 17th, 2017 20:32
Sigh *Crude Language*
lasergraph said:
Good poetry comes from inside and it\'s emotional, it describes what you feel. You have done just that. It may not fit everyone\'s idea of poetry but you will feel much more content if you don\'t worry about what anyone else thinks. It is raw, yes but it is also REAL. Good job.
August 17th, 2017 18:49
lasergraph said:
Good poetry comes from inside and it\'s emotional, it describes what you feel. You have done just that. It may not fit everyone\'s idea of poetry but you will feel much more content if you don\'t worry about what anyone else thinks. It is raw, yes but it is also REAL. Good job.
August 17th, 2017 18:49
Sigh *Crude Language*
Lizzy Renee said:
Nice Job!!! Remember, poems are just expressing how you feel. They don\'t NEED to rhyme or follow a specific pattern to make a poem. It is all about what you feel and how you express it. Good work!!!
August 17th, 2017 18:13
Lizzy Renee said:
Nice Job!!! Remember, poems are just expressing how you feel. They don\'t NEED to rhyme or follow a specific pattern to make a poem. It is all about what you feel and how you express it. Good work!!!
August 17th, 2017 18:13
Sigh *Crude Language*
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW ~ ELENA ~ This is quite a rant about how you feel and the hand life deals you ! But it is not a reflection of the true inner you. You are lovely ! Count your BLESSINGS and you will be surprised just how much you have to live for ! Thinking of you ~ praying for you ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) I trust you found it cathartic ~ when I vent in a Poem it always make me fell better ~ B
August 17th, 2017 17:15
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW ~ ELENA ~ This is quite a rant about how you feel and the hand life deals you ! But it is not a reflection of the true inner you. You are lovely ! Count your BLESSINGS and you will be surprised just how much you have to live for ! Thinking of you ~ praying for you ~ Yours BRIAN (UK) I trust you found it cathartic ~ when I vent in a Poem it always make me fell better ~ B
August 17th, 2017 17:15
My Apologies
Goldfinch60 said:
The words will come, something will suddenly trigger your mind and the words will fow.
August 7th, 2017 01:55
Goldfinch60 said:
The words will come, something will suddenly trigger your mind and the words will fow.
August 7th, 2017 01:55
I Hope There Are Monsters Under My Bed
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Don\'t have enough spirit
To end it myself
My Bed is like a Spinsters shelf
I\'m freezing for a lack of LOVE
O hear my Prayer my god above
Let the Monster leap out
And ravish me
Then I unfrozen and SATED WILL BE
Hope you like my ending ! My Lady friends tell that Monsters under the bed always turn into gentle lovers when they get into bed ~ so keep your fingers crossed WARM HUGS BRIAN !
July 30th, 2017 10:52
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Don\'t have enough spirit
To end it myself
My Bed is like a Spinsters shelf
I\'m freezing for a lack of LOVE
O hear my Prayer my god above
Let the Monster leap out
And ravish me
Then I unfrozen and SATED WILL BE
Hope you like my ending ! My Lady friends tell that Monsters under the bed always turn into gentle lovers when they get into bed ~ so keep your fingers crossed WARM HUGS BRIAN !
July 30th, 2017 10:52
Today||Tomorrow
Goldfinch60 said:
Today is the tomorrow that you worried about yesterday.
Good write.
July 25th, 2017 00:49
Goldfinch60 said:
Today is the tomorrow that you worried about yesterday.
Good write.
July 25th, 2017 00:49
Today||Tomorrow
FredPeyer said:
...and the moon gave her an inspiration to write another poem tomorrow, just as good, or maybe even better than this one!
Great writing Elena.
July 24th, 2017 16:15
FredPeyer said:
...and the moon gave her an inspiration to write another poem tomorrow, just as good, or maybe even better than this one!
Great writing Elena.
July 24th, 2017 16:15
Today||Tomorrow
charlesbarrett said:
Beautifully written. Always looking forward. I enjoyed this. You expressed that sentiment very well. New adventures always lie ahead with the rising of each sun. Thank you for sharing.
July 24th, 2017 11:15
charlesbarrett said:
Beautifully written. Always looking forward. I enjoyed this. You expressed that sentiment very well. New adventures always lie ahead with the rising of each sun. Thank you for sharing.
July 24th, 2017 11:15
Sometimes I Call My Mother A Whore
FredPeyer said:
Elena, I think you said it all, very eloquently. I am no expert, but I think the word \"him\" could be removed on the last line of the third stanza. We already know who it is, and somehow at least to me it seems to flow better.
Well written, like it!
July 20th, 2017 18:04
FredPeyer said:
Elena, I think you said it all, very eloquently. I am no expert, but I think the word \"him\" could be removed on the last line of the third stanza. We already know who it is, and somehow at least to me it seems to flow better.
Well written, like it!
July 20th, 2017 18:04
Sometimes I Call My Mother A Whore
Poetic Dan said:
Not sure about giving views for editing as my brain just can\'t see things like that.
But you told my life in your way, just brilliant but sad I call my mum that too!
My sister now jokes saying when she to old and needs help it will be booze and not food that she\'ll want.
So my view, a beautiful piece of art!
July 20th, 2017 13:57
Poetic Dan said:
Not sure about giving views for editing as my brain just can\'t see things like that.
But you told my life in your way, just brilliant but sad I call my mum that too!
My sister now jokes saying when she to old and needs help it will be booze and not food that she\'ll want.
So my view, a beautiful piece of art!
July 20th, 2017 13:57
Oops
onepauly said:
keep writing that\'s the only way you are going to find out.
July 16th, 2017 12:31
onepauly said:
keep writing that\'s the only way you are going to find out.
July 16th, 2017 12:31
Oops
Domi said:
Its very well written and I think its just fine the way it is. I pictured what you were writing and it leaves my mind to think. Were you trying to make a specific point or idea to why this is a rough draft?
July 16th, 2017 11:38
Domi said:
Its very well written and I think its just fine the way it is. I pictured what you were writing and it leaves my mind to think. Were you trying to make a specific point or idea to why this is a rough draft?
July 16th, 2017 11:38
Reality?
FredPeyer said:
Elena, love your shorty!
Who says that fantasy cannot be real, and reality cannot be fantastic?
Writers and actors live in fantasy worlds. Take a writer engrossed in writing a novel. He creates a whole world, characters, moods, and feelings. While writing that world is as real as the world outside the window.
That\'s my opinion - and I stick to it!
Your poem is one of the few that gets printed out and stuck on my wall!
July 15th, 2017 18:41
FredPeyer said:
Elena, love your shorty!
Who says that fantasy cannot be real, and reality cannot be fantastic?
Writers and actors live in fantasy worlds. Take a writer engrossed in writing a novel. He creates a whole world, characters, moods, and feelings. While writing that world is as real as the world outside the window.
That\'s my opinion - and I stick to it!
Your poem is one of the few that gets printed out and stuck on my wall!
July 15th, 2017 18:41
Reality?
burning-embers said:
I\'m with you there definitely. Reality is but an illusion.
July 15th, 2017 16:55
burning-embers said:
I\'m with you there definitely. Reality is but an illusion.
July 15th, 2017 16:55
Reality?
Poetic Dan said:
I believe you, we create the world that we perceive. Mine is amazingly strange at bit like Alice in wonderland!
July 15th, 2017 16:43
Poetic Dan said:
I believe you, we create the world that we perceive. Mine is amazingly strange at bit like Alice in wonderland!
July 15th, 2017 16:43
Wishes: Denied
burning-embers said:
Cute! My grandmother used to say \"if wishes were horses, then beggars would ride.\" Nice mental picture created.
July 15th, 2017 06:22
burning-embers said:
Cute! My grandmother used to say \"if wishes were horses, then beggars would ride.\" Nice mental picture created.
July 15th, 2017 06:22
Wishes: Denied
Nicholas Browning said:
Short but true. Wishes don\'t get acknowledged by anything other than one\'s own actions. Criticism? Hmm. Punctuation is a great way to add a punch in a line. Try working with it if you want, but if not that\'s perfectly fine! Leaving it a little bare adds plenty of room for us using our imagination, which is a very good thing. Happy writing!
July 15th, 2017 01:31
Nicholas Browning said:
Short but true. Wishes don\'t get acknowledged by anything other than one\'s own actions. Criticism? Hmm. Punctuation is a great way to add a punch in a line. Try working with it if you want, but if not that\'s perfectly fine! Leaving it a little bare adds plenty of room for us using our imagination, which is a very good thing. Happy writing!
July 15th, 2017 01:31
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