Comments received on poems by Mary73223
The Silent King
Poetic Licence said:
I thoroughly enjoyed the read, kept me interested all the way through, nicely expressed and crafted, enjoyed the read
June 15th, 2025 04:16
Poetic Licence said:
I thoroughly enjoyed the read, kept me interested all the way through, nicely expressed and crafted, enjoyed the read
June 15th, 2025 04:16
The Silent King
sorenbarrett said:
I must congratulate you on a most wonderful fable and poem. It reads so smoothly and the fable itself is classical and well crafted it immediately caught my attention and kept it throughout. The only minor suggestion I might make is the second to the last stanza seems to have an extra line that would sound better as the first line of the last stanza. Or the last two stanza\'s may be combined into one. Otherwise I wouldn\'t alter what seems perfect. A definite fave
June 15th, 2025 04:12
sorenbarrett said:
I must congratulate you on a most wonderful fable and poem. It reads so smoothly and the fable itself is classical and well crafted it immediately caught my attention and kept it throughout. The only minor suggestion I might make is the second to the last stanza seems to have an extra line that would sound better as the first line of the last stanza. Or the last two stanza\'s may be combined into one. Otherwise I wouldn\'t alter what seems perfect. A definite fave
June 15th, 2025 04:12
The Silent King
Mary73223 said:
Hello to anyone reading this. This is my first fable Ive written to competition. And Im a bit embarrassed to admit it\'s taking me a little over 7 months to write this, and get the rhyme scheme just the way I wanted it. If you have any constructive feedback please let me know. Ive been writing poetry for over 5 years no and Im always looking to improve.
June 14th, 2025 21:21
Mary73223 said:
Hello to anyone reading this. This is my first fable Ive written to competition. And Im a bit embarrassed to admit it\'s taking me a little over 7 months to write this, and get the rhyme scheme just the way I wanted it. If you have any constructive feedback please let me know. Ive been writing poetry for over 5 years no and Im always looking to improve.
June 14th, 2025 21:21
Hollow Girl
Poetic Licence said:
This is a sad and touching write, you can feel the pain and suffering in the words, appearing to be very close to the edge, nicely expressed and written
June 12th, 2025 04:32
Poetic Licence said:
This is a sad and touching write, you can feel the pain and suffering in the words, appearing to be very close to the edge, nicely expressed and written
June 12th, 2025 04:32
Hollow Girl
sorenbarrett said:
The poem of a person who is on the edge of breaking and is in pain. Well written in good rhyme and meter. Nicely done
June 12th, 2025 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
The poem of a person who is on the edge of breaking and is in pain. Well written in good rhyme and meter. Nicely done
June 12th, 2025 03:46
She
Thomas W Case said:
And metaphorically speaking, she finds a relationship and spreads the disease. Point being, we have to heal, people can\'t fix us. Tremendous write.
November 2nd, 2023 02:39
Thomas W Case said:
And metaphorically speaking, she finds a relationship and spreads the disease. Point being, we have to heal, people can\'t fix us. Tremendous write.
November 2nd, 2023 02:39
Welcome to America
Doggerel Dave said:
Although the stark realities you so eloquently present in your post here are clearer in America, Paul (above) is right to point out that other so called wealthy western countries are well along that same road too.
Great write - thanks.
September 1st, 2022 00:28
Doggerel Dave said:
Although the stark realities you so eloquently present in your post here are clearer in America, Paul (above) is right to point out that other so called wealthy western countries are well along that same road too.
Great write - thanks.
September 1st, 2022 00:28
Welcome to America
Paul Bell said:
Sadly, this is most western countries.
The rich get richer, the poor just die.
August 31st, 2022 13:58
Paul Bell said:
Sadly, this is most western countries.
The rich get richer, the poor just die.
August 31st, 2022 13:58
Graveyard of Thoughts
dusk arising said:
Sad tale of a soul destroyed by mistreatment wondering if they can repair themself. A good read.
June 23rd, 2021 02:09
dusk arising said:
Sad tale of a soul destroyed by mistreatment wondering if they can repair themself. A good read.
June 23rd, 2021 02:09
Sink
Goldfinch60 said:
May she rise in the light of wonder that is within this world.
Andy
April 11th, 2021 00:16
Goldfinch60 said:
May she rise in the light of wonder that is within this world.
Andy
April 11th, 2021 00:16
Tell Me
dusk arising said:
Beautiful love poem which reads like watching a bud turn into a wonderful flower.
March 26th, 2020 03:32
dusk arising said:
Beautiful love poem which reads like watching a bud turn into a wonderful flower.
March 26th, 2020 03:32
Restless
dusk arising said:
Hmmm, experience shows me that opposites attract, similar repels.
July 20th, 2019 04:30
dusk arising said:
Hmmm, experience shows me that opposites attract, similar repels.
July 20th, 2019 04:30
Restless
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Well described M that old game of hide and seek
July 20th, 2019 03:44
Andrew Charles Forrest said:
Well described M that old game of hide and seek
July 20th, 2019 03:44
Sisters
Amherrera1190 said:
I can feel this love i have 2sisters close in ahe to me. I love this one.
February 12th, 2019 02:43
Amherrera1190 said:
I can feel this love i have 2sisters close in ahe to me. I love this one.
February 12th, 2019 02:43
my love
Amherrera1190 said:
Very nice im almost 30 and i can tell you it never changes.
February 12th, 2019 02:40
Amherrera1190 said:
Very nice im almost 30 and i can tell you it never changes.
February 12th, 2019 02:40
Who am I
Aislinn Wilson said:
I\'m struggling with this too. I wish you the best. Well said.
January 9th, 2019 11:15
Aislinn Wilson said:
I\'m struggling with this too. I wish you the best. Well said.
January 9th, 2019 11:15
Death
whisperingquill said:
\"My only fear of death is coming back reincarnated\" Tupac Shakur
Death is just another interval
Pure energy awaits
Or the cycle of life again
Depends on how many deaths you already kissed
January 7th, 2019 23:23
whisperingquill said:
\"My only fear of death is coming back reincarnated\" Tupac Shakur
Death is just another interval
Pure energy awaits
Or the cycle of life again
Depends on how many deaths you already kissed
January 7th, 2019 23:23
Death
said:
Every single day I think about killing myself.
I just can’t bring myself to do it
But it’s been hard for me to live my life because I can’t get over my past
All we can do is enjoy life while we still here and be the person you wanna be
Don’t let anything or anybody stop you from being who you wanna be
January 7th, 2019 16:14
said:
Every single day I think about killing myself.
I just can’t bring myself to do it
But it’s been hard for me to live my life because I can’t get over my past
All we can do is enjoy life while we still here and be the person you wanna be
Don’t let anything or anybody stop you from being who you wanna be
January 7th, 2019 16:14
My mind
Saima said:
Nice poem! It’s hard when you feel like giving up but I guess sometimes there’s someone or something to hold on to? Continue being strong and you’ll get through it x
August 11th, 2018 04:14
Saima said:
Nice poem! It’s hard when you feel like giving up but I guess sometimes there’s someone or something to hold on to? Continue being strong and you’ll get through it x
August 11th, 2018 04:14
My mind
Resa71 said:
It’s ecuasting fighting the demons.
Some days are good.
I wish I could package them up and save them for the crappy days.
Like a sweet snack that gets you through a dreaded chore.
Nice write.’
Resa.
August 11th, 2018 03:05
Resa71 said:
It’s ecuasting fighting the demons.
Some days are good.
I wish I could package them up and save them for the crappy days.
Like a sweet snack that gets you through a dreaded chore.
Nice write.’
Resa.
August 11th, 2018 03:05
Loss
SLR said:
I\'m sorry for your loss. It\'s sounds like someone died that you cared deeply about and that took good care of you. I could feel the emotion. Good job.
June 13th, 2018 20:47
SLR said:
I\'m sorry for your loss. It\'s sounds like someone died that you cared deeply about and that took good care of you. I could feel the emotion. Good job.
June 13th, 2018 20:47
Ruins
FredPeyer said:
Ari, I am not sure what you want to say with this poem. Maybe I am a little daft! Could use a little illumination!
September 15th, 2017 23:09
FredPeyer said:
Ari, I am not sure what you want to say with this poem. Maybe I am a little daft! Could use a little illumination!
September 15th, 2017 23:09
Ruins
Gary Edward Geraci said:
But I will be the mighty beacon in the light house illuminating your crumpled form awash in a foaming and thrashing sea...Seek my light; seek my light...cries our loving Savior!
September 15th, 2017 22:53
Gary Edward Geraci said:
But I will be the mighty beacon in the light house illuminating your crumpled form awash in a foaming and thrashing sea...Seek my light; seek my light...cries our loving Savior!
September 15th, 2017 22:53
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