Comments received on poems by a__pott
An Oasis in a Desert.
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hello a, pott..
i really love this .. the contrast of highs and lows are made very clear here.. they are all high on alcohol and music whilst you are clearly drowning in your own sorrow. i love the ending to this.. the guy in the room who feels just the same as you .
\'\'an oasis in a desert \'\' this is such a good line...
in a crowded room of people who are all drinking alcohol.. no wander the room seems dry.
i love this line
But the rain won\'t come and your heart sinks more.
It finds its way on down and it hits the floor.
Sinks down and hits the dirt,
it sounds to me like the situation is causing you distress and that ache for something different is causing you pain .. the rain outside of the window wont even appear and hence your heart sinks to the floor.
oh , to be the only one who is hurting , its not nice to feel alone in your hurt but at least you could relate to the guy in the back of the room
March 15th, 2018 07:19
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hello a, pott..
i really love this .. the contrast of highs and lows are made very clear here.. they are all high on alcohol and music whilst you are clearly drowning in your own sorrow. i love the ending to this.. the guy in the room who feels just the same as you .
\'\'an oasis in a desert \'\' this is such a good line...
in a crowded room of people who are all drinking alcohol.. no wander the room seems dry.
i love this line
But the rain won\'t come and your heart sinks more.
It finds its way on down and it hits the floor.
Sinks down and hits the dirt,
it sounds to me like the situation is causing you distress and that ache for something different is causing you pain .. the rain outside of the window wont even appear and hence your heart sinks to the floor.
oh , to be the only one who is hurting , its not nice to feel alone in your hurt but at least you could relate to the guy in the back of the room
March 15th, 2018 07:19
I’m sorry
FredPeyer said:
Sometimes not knowing why is worse than the loss. Sometimes there is no why.
Your poem, Alex, is not only well written, but addresses something that troubles many people.
February 23rd, 2018 16:28
FredPeyer said:
Sometimes not knowing why is worse than the loss. Sometimes there is no why.
Your poem, Alex, is not only well written, but addresses something that troubles many people.
February 23rd, 2018 16:28
Seriously
FredPeyer said:
Alex, it seems as if you wrote this poem about me, or for me. It fits so well I made it a favorite AND it will go on my wall of great poems, right beside Charles Bukowski!!!
You see, I take you seriously!!!
February 20th, 2018 21:45
FredPeyer said:
Alex, it seems as if you wrote this poem about me, or for me. It fits so well I made it a favorite AND it will go on my wall of great poems, right beside Charles Bukowski!!!
You see, I take you seriously!!!
February 20th, 2018 21:45
Crystal Clarity
FredPeyer said:
Love the twists and turns in this poem. Alex, this sounds like magic. You could have called it \'crystal ball\'. Tried to make it about myself, but you are right, it is not, it is definitely for you! Great imaginative writing!!!
February 14th, 2018 14:50
FredPeyer said:
Love the twists and turns in this poem. Alex, this sounds like magic. You could have called it \'crystal ball\'. Tried to make it about myself, but you are right, it is not, it is definitely for you! Great imaginative writing!!!
February 14th, 2018 14:50
Crystal Clarity
dusk arising said:
My but this is a clever piece of thinking put into verse beautifully. A pleasure to read stuff of this quality. Goes into my favourites.
February 13th, 2018 17:18
dusk arising said:
My but this is a clever piece of thinking put into verse beautifully. A pleasure to read stuff of this quality. Goes into my favourites.
February 13th, 2018 17:18
Windy
FredPeyer said:
Love these last two lines, Alex! And how many times does something temporary turn into something permanent!
February 4th, 2018 04:00
FredPeyer said:
Love these last two lines, Alex! And how many times does something temporary turn into something permanent!
February 4th, 2018 04:00
Moon on the Ground
FredPeyer said:
While this poem is incredibly well written, well rhymed, great metaphors, I would be lying if I said I understood it. Maybe it\'s my age or my befuddled brain, but I don\'t get it!
January 31st, 2018 01:26
FredPeyer said:
While this poem is incredibly well written, well rhymed, great metaphors, I would be lying if I said I understood it. Maybe it\'s my age or my befuddled brain, but I don\'t get it!
January 31st, 2018 01:26
Lovesick
FredPeyer said:
Yes, Alex, love can be terminal...at least it is in my case. It just won\'t go away! But it can also be like the common flu...a week and a few pills later you are ready for the next bug!
January 29th, 2018 02:03
FredPeyer said:
Yes, Alex, love can be terminal...at least it is in my case. It just won\'t go away! But it can also be like the common flu...a week and a few pills later you are ready for the next bug!
January 29th, 2018 02:03
Lovesick
dusk arising said:
LOL i love your spin on this. Of course it does get better and is rarely terminal. Hope to see happier writes from you but this sure is a cute verse.
January 28th, 2018 12:47
dusk arising said:
LOL i love your spin on this. Of course it does get better and is rarely terminal. Hope to see happier writes from you but this sure is a cute verse.
January 28th, 2018 12:47
Disguised Rainbow
FredPeyer said:
I guess you could call it a disfunct family!
I like it Alex, short, to the point, very imaginative. You nailed it!
January 25th, 2018 13:57
FredPeyer said:
I guess you could call it a disfunct family!
I like it Alex, short, to the point, very imaginative. You nailed it!
January 25th, 2018 13:57
Silver Charcoal
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
very good ! :-) this is so cleverly expressed , \'\' a silver future with a charcoal past \'\' very nice ! i love the wording here
January 20th, 2018 13:52
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
very good ! :-) this is so cleverly expressed , \'\' a silver future with a charcoal past \'\' very nice ! i love the wording here
January 20th, 2018 13:52
Sea & Sky
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hello, interesting writing , i love the reference to the sea andn the sky ... sometimes the way we see people is not who they always truly are .. good piece of writing here
January 20th, 2018 13:49
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
hello, interesting writing , i love the reference to the sea andn the sky ... sometimes the way we see people is not who they always truly are .. good piece of writing here
January 20th, 2018 13:49
Sea & Sky
FredPeyer said:
I like your metaphor of light as maybe replacement for \'good\', Alex. Your poem makes me think that sometimes we see another person reflected in the light we shine on them, mistaking it for their own light. Once that light is not there anymore we see that person for what he/she really is.
January 20th, 2018 13:25
FredPeyer said:
I like your metaphor of light as maybe replacement for \'good\', Alex. Your poem makes me think that sometimes we see another person reflected in the light we shine on them, mistaking it for their own light. Once that light is not there anymore we see that person for what he/she really is.
January 20th, 2018 13:25
A Question
FredPeyer said:
tepo said it all already!
Agree completely with him, Alex. Great poem!
January 3rd, 2018 00:19
FredPeyer said:
tepo said it all already!
Agree completely with him, Alex. Great poem!
January 3rd, 2018 00:19
Yesterday
FredPeyer said:
Alex, I have to assume you are talking about incontinence in the sense of Lack of moderation or self-control, especially related to sexual desire (Wikipedia). And believe me, NO moment will EVER come together quite the same way!
Very nicely penned, love that poem!
December 3rd, 2017 22:59
FredPeyer said:
Alex, I have to assume you are talking about incontinence in the sense of Lack of moderation or self-control, especially related to sexual desire (Wikipedia). And believe me, NO moment will EVER come together quite the same way!
Very nicely penned, love that poem!
December 3rd, 2017 22:59
Silver Charcoal
Confia.En.Tu.Corazon 87 said:
I like how you didn\'t have to say much to get your point across and leave a good imprint between the charcoal past and sliver lining of life. I also agree with (WHOWEARE) it was very easy to identify with. Great write \"Alex\"
November 28th, 2017 01:27
Confia.En.Tu.Corazon 87 said:
I like how you didn\'t have to say much to get your point across and leave a good imprint between the charcoal past and sliver lining of life. I also agree with (WHOWEARE) it was very easy to identify with. Great write \"Alex\"
November 28th, 2017 01:27
Silver Charcoal
whoweare said:
Good write, easy to identify with. Good job!
November 27th, 2017 22:10
whoweare said:
Good write, easy to identify with. Good job!
November 27th, 2017 22:10
Raging Flames
FredPeyer said:
Wow! You are messing around with me here. Flames inside the mind and flames outside on paper.
November 21st, 2017 03:26
FredPeyer said:
Wow! You are messing around with me here. Flames inside the mind and flames outside on paper.
November 21st, 2017 03:26
The Fear of the Unknown
FredPeyer said:
Alex, well written! We keep on going in our rut simply because we are afraid to change. Great poem!
November 14th, 2017 02:23
FredPeyer said:
Alex, well written! We keep on going in our rut simply because we are afraid to change. Great poem!
November 14th, 2017 02:23
Let it Sink
FredPeyer said:
Alex, your poems definitely float! Haven\'t read a sinker yet.
Good writing!
November 6th, 2017 03:04
FredPeyer said:
Alex, your poems definitely float! Haven\'t read a sinker yet.
Good writing!
November 6th, 2017 03:04
Let it Sink
dusk arising said:
I love this... and it\'s so clever. Makes me smile each time i read it. A definate for my favourites.
November 5th, 2017 12:02
dusk arising said:
I love this... and it\'s so clever. Makes me smile each time i read it. A definate for my favourites.
November 5th, 2017 12:02
Even if
FredPeyer said:
I would call that \'love\', Alex.
Very well written, with a lot in-between the lines. Something else that came to my mind when reading was that you could also have added \'even if we don\'t talk\' or similar. Sometimes silence can be enjoyed together.
I do like the way you write, you always make me think, and I guess that is a good thing.
November 1st, 2017 15:26
FredPeyer said:
I would call that \'love\', Alex.
Very well written, with a lot in-between the lines. Something else that came to my mind when reading was that you could also have added \'even if we don\'t talk\' or similar. Sometimes silence can be enjoyed together.
I do like the way you write, you always make me think, and I guess that is a good thing.
November 1st, 2017 15:26
Hear Me
FredPeyer said:
I hear you, Alex, but so many times we do not hear. I do like your poem, well written, and it does make me think!
October 18th, 2017 04:54
FredPeyer said:
I hear you, Alex, but so many times we do not hear. I do like your poem, well written, and it does make me think!
October 18th, 2017 04:54
Original Sin
FredPeyer said:
Alex, I read it three times. Are you talking about Adam?
October 12th, 2017 03:44
FredPeyer said:
Alex, I read it three times. Are you talking about Adam?
October 12th, 2017 03:44
Don’t Stop People in the Night
FredPeyer said:
Don\'t open your heart to strangers, no matter what time it is.
A very intriguing, well written poem. It made me think! Thanks Alex!
October 4th, 2017 01:48
FredPeyer said:
Don\'t open your heart to strangers, no matter what time it is.
A very intriguing, well written poem. It made me think! Thanks Alex!
October 4th, 2017 01:48
From Venus to Mars
FredPeyer said:
Great poem, Alex. Beautifully written, with an interesting and very apt metaphor.
Sorry, but had to lol because the book Women are from Venus and Men are from Mars came to mind! :-)
September 25th, 2017 20:04
FredPeyer said:
Great poem, Alex. Beautifully written, with an interesting and very apt metaphor.
Sorry, but had to lol because the book Women are from Venus and Men are from Mars came to mind! :-)
September 25th, 2017 20:04
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