Comments received on poems by Abora



nesting birds
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:

interesting wording here , definately an engaging read

May 7th, 2018 01:52

burn your dead eyes on a pyre of bones
onepauly said:

worth reading
good job.

April 28th, 2018 09:03

a silence in the ring
sylviasearcher said:

I prefer the birds tumbling from their nests too.



April 25th, 2018 02:02

a silence in the ring
MLHnow said:

Wow beautifully said! MLH

April 24th, 2018 12:09

base ten birds
onepauly said:

birds are natures way of saying we are free.

April 23rd, 2018 14:57

my dream girl is an asshole who drives faster than me
Goldfinch60 said:

Love can strike at the most strange moments sometimes.

April 18th, 2018 00:59

day matters
Nicholas Browning said:

This is awesome. Bravo.

April 12th, 2018 03:06

i\'ve got no teeth because of you guys
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:

i really like this :-)you have some very interesting lines, and i love your choice of words..

these lines are very strong and powerful , i love the idea here.

flinging away thoughts like kerosene rags
and still the pile burns brighter
now i am haunted by bath water ghosts

and i really like the mention of the heart being ripped like your leather jacket

April 3rd, 2018 16:23

stacking lobotomies
PACollin said:

lovely, I enjoyed the pace and message.

March 29th, 2018 12:11

a two dollar tip on a five dollar beer
FredPeyer said:

Well done Abora! It has flow and rhythm, great description of the single bar life! Not that I remember, for me it was a lifetime ago!!!!
Kudos!

February 2nd, 2018 23:12

for someone, someday
Tony36 said:

Great write

January 31st, 2018 11:06

for someone, someday
Lorna said:

Love the poem especially \"I’d let her laugh kindly at me all day
If it meant I could see her eyes light up\" - she\'d be crazy not to kiss you.....

January 31st, 2018 06:43

arthritic heroes and familiar villains
Lorna said:

I could really see the movies! The handsome dark stranger on the prairie just keeps us hoping with his possibilities! Maybe we just need his mystery.

January 22nd, 2018 05:45

i saw her in the eye of a storm and chose the wall
El_Pretzadente said:

Great imagery, I think the swearing makes it.
Now I know what to call those \"scumfuck dunes\" Thank you.

January 12th, 2018 16:54

a fistful of cheddar
Velvetlascivious said:

Happy that no sleep tonight has brought me here. Thank you for the pleasure 😊

January 8th, 2018 01:37

sharing the bed with the monsters that live underneath it
FredPeyer said:

So well written, Abora! Great metaphors, well structured! And that last stanza scares the you know what out of me!

December 14th, 2017 17:11

when i die just throw me in the trash
Syd said:

Hi Abora, I really like this poem and the message it delivers. The title drew me in. It\'s something my grandmother used to say \" When I die just throw me over the garden fence\" We cremated her though, I don\'t think the authorities would have been happy if we\'d took her words seriously lol

November 6th, 2017 05:34

edmund fitzgerald, tom petty, and elwood walk into a bar
Gary Edward Geraci said:

Been there and done that Abora. The poem screams of the dissatisfaction one experiences night after night after night here. Even more so if the purpose is to find love. Find a way out of that rut; you’re made for so much better.

October 29th, 2017 20:52

pretty women in barrels
FredPeyer said:

I like this Bukowski inspired poem of yours, BS! Am a big Bukowski fan.
You adapted your writing very well to his style, got the wine and the f...ng, the only thing missing is the cigarette!
Great job!
Oh, nearly forgot: The title is just great!!!

October 6th, 2017 22:38

Canal Denizens
Nicholas Browning said:

This is pretty good. A more realistic tone and style, which is appreciated. The way you connect your structure gives off a solitary state of mind, and it enhances the theme of a darker depiction of everyday life. Like I said, this is good. Bravo.

September 7th, 2017 21:47

Unbuckling
myself and me said:

I really hope, we know more about human brain, so that all your suffer will go. Keep your hope, one day there will be a solution for it.
You have my sympathy.
Very well done.

September 4th, 2017 18:54

Unbuckling
Mugsdaddy said:

Sometimes killing yourself slowly is your worst punishment just make sure you are punishing yourself for you and not someone else cause then it\'s not punishment your just the boobie prize the brass ring and they don\'t even have to grab for it they\'ll just sit back relax and wait for you to fall off into the palm of their hand. Bam! They win and you were just dinner and a movie.

September 4th, 2017 17:46

Hippocampus Photography
Quemis said:

\"Who is this guy\"
\"Holy shit, seriously. Thanks for showing me this.\"

\"How crazy is it that you found this in some little community online\"

These were my friends thoughts.

and like I said, Genius.

- Psentinel

August 24th, 2017 10:17

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