Comments received on poems by TrystanBehm
The Path You Paved
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A great poem, fine sublime muse in awesome rhyming wow,. Kudos.
Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too .
January 28th, 2019 12:32
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
A great poem, fine sublime muse in awesome rhyming wow,. Kudos.
Pleez do review/comment my newest poem too .
January 28th, 2019 12:32
The Path You Paved
Goldfinch60 said:
That first seed WILL grow and soon you will be filled with a field of dreams.
January 14th, 2019 01:57
Goldfinch60 said:
That first seed WILL grow and soon you will be filled with a field of dreams.
January 14th, 2019 01:57
The Path You Paved
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
“There is only one soil with this soul
Can it rebuild, hold the weight, pay the toll?”
YES...YES...and YES!
That soil is rich and fertile...
Let go...
and that seed will show and grow stronger than ever...
with some good watering!
~Laura~
January 13th, 2019 18:16
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
“There is only one soil with this soul
Can it rebuild, hold the weight, pay the toll?”
YES...YES...and YES!
That soil is rich and fertile...
Let go...
and that seed will show and grow stronger than ever...
with some good watering!
~Laura~
January 13th, 2019 18:16
A Self Fulfilling Prophecy
dusk arising said:
\"Do not go gentle into that dark night,
Rage, RAGE against the dying of the light\"
By Dylan Thomas
Evocative writing.
January 6th, 2019 06:51
dusk arising said:
\"Do not go gentle into that dark night,
Rage, RAGE against the dying of the light\"
By Dylan Thomas
Evocative writing.
January 6th, 2019 06:51
A Self Fulfilling Prophecy
orchidee said:
If it wasn\'t such a serious theme, I might say \'Oohh, it\'s a nuisance; it\'s holding up the traffic on the bridge; can\'t ya come back tomorrow when there\'s less traffic?\' (Bit of dark humour there!)
January 6th, 2019 03:27
orchidee said:
If it wasn\'t such a serious theme, I might say \'Oohh, it\'s a nuisance; it\'s holding up the traffic on the bridge; can\'t ya come back tomorrow when there\'s less traffic?\' (Bit of dark humour there!)
January 6th, 2019 03:27
A Self Fulfilling Prophecy
Goldfinch60 said:
You must always fight the negatives in life and go forward with the positives.
January 5th, 2019 16:11
Goldfinch60 said:
You must always fight the negatives in life and go forward with the positives.
January 5th, 2019 16:11
A Self Fulfilling Prophecy
psychofemale said:
yes you have to fight, don\'t let the demons win, they will try their hardest.
January 5th, 2019 15:15
psychofemale said:
yes you have to fight, don\'t let the demons win, they will try their hardest.
January 5th, 2019 15:15
A Self Fulfilling Prophecy
Laura🌻 said:
Tryst,
Spot on my friend!
There is NO
“lack of will and fight”
within you!
I Love this inspirational write!
It radiates with positivity!
~Laura~
January 5th, 2019 13:52
Laura🌻 said:
Tryst,
Spot on my friend!
There is NO
“lack of will and fight”
within you!
I Love this inspirational write!
It radiates with positivity!
~Laura~
January 5th, 2019 13:52
A Self Fulfilling Prophecy
MrNobody40 said:
Ive researched people who have survived suicide attempts and how they describe it from their perspective. This one guy who survived after jumping from the san francisco bay bridge said he immediatly regretted it. Still tho i wonder how it feels when you do finally let go..
January 5th, 2019 13:51
MrNobody40 said:
Ive researched people who have survived suicide attempts and how they describe it from their perspective. This one guy who survived after jumping from the san francisco bay bridge said he immediatly regretted it. Still tho i wonder how it feels when you do finally let go..
January 5th, 2019 13:51
Hippocratic Oath
Laura🌻 said:
Tryst,
Wow 😲
An interesting title to begin with and the content is phenomenal because it awakened a sleeping giant within me!
That is a good thing!
A reminder of what we can be ... and what we actually are! The choice is ours to make.
“You swore not to hurt me
Your words the anesthesia...”
We’re anesthetized for the moment...
“Complete destruction during the
collapse”
With a strong and solid foundation, the rebuilding will happen and astound you!
“The heart could have pumped
For the two of us
-forever and always”
It could have, but it wasn’t meant to be.
“I want to hate you
But I can’t”...
...because that is NOT you...
the forgiving, honorable man whose huge heart will never die.
You ARE the living heart and soul of your world!
Along with a few tears, this exceptional poem has touched my heart and soul!
Thank you for sharing and letting me see a bit of you!
~Laura~
January 2nd, 2019 18:29
Laura🌻 said:
Tryst,
Wow 😲
An interesting title to begin with and the content is phenomenal because it awakened a sleeping giant within me!
That is a good thing!
A reminder of what we can be ... and what we actually are! The choice is ours to make.
“You swore not to hurt me
Your words the anesthesia...”
We’re anesthetized for the moment...
“Complete destruction during the
collapse”
With a strong and solid foundation, the rebuilding will happen and astound you!
“The heart could have pumped
For the two of us
-forever and always”
It could have, but it wasn’t meant to be.
“I want to hate you
But I can’t”...
...because that is NOT you...
the forgiving, honorable man whose huge heart will never die.
You ARE the living heart and soul of your world!
Along with a few tears, this exceptional poem has touched my heart and soul!
Thank you for sharing and letting me see a bit of you!
~Laura~
January 2nd, 2019 18:29
Hippocratic Oath
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very nice work..I can relate to this poem very much..it brought tears to my eyes, and if it can do that to me, its good stuff...take care...
December 30th, 2018 21:54
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very nice work..I can relate to this poem very much..it brought tears to my eyes, and if it can do that to me, its good stuff...take care...
December 30th, 2018 21:54
Ferdinand Chasing The Wind
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing and very good write Trystan. Whichever way you read it you obviously enjoy the moments.
December 12th, 2018 01:34
Goldfinch60 said:
Intriguing and very good write Trystan. Whichever way you read it you obviously enjoy the moments.
December 12th, 2018 01:34
Ferdinand Chasing The Wind
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
Wow...
An engaging and very interesting read!
Depending on the reader, your excellent written poem is open-ended for interpretation!
I love the words you used to end your poem.
“Together you are one - You, the wind and the sea:
- the Trinity”
~Laura~
December 11th, 2018 09:58
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
Wow...
An engaging and very interesting read!
Depending on the reader, your excellent written poem is open-ended for interpretation!
I love the words you used to end your poem.
“Together you are one - You, the wind and the sea:
- the Trinity”
~Laura~
December 11th, 2018 09:58
Avalon Forest
Laura🌻 said:
Tryst,
Our resolve is constantly being tested.
That man that came “down the path and sits at the tree” does not need to show his face. You know who he is!
You chose the “fork in the road” that was right for you.
Your heart is no longer “lost in a sea of ambiguity”! Having found those “silver breadcrumbs” you “dropped years ago” in the hand of THE ONE you were looking for will walk along with you! Now two hearts are joyfully beating as one!
An excellent, vivid write which was a pleasure to read!
Thank you for sharing!
~Laura~
December 7th, 2018 12:58
Laura🌻 said:
Tryst,
Our resolve is constantly being tested.
That man that came “down the path and sits at the tree” does not need to show his face. You know who he is!
You chose the “fork in the road” that was right for you.
Your heart is no longer “lost in a sea of ambiguity”! Having found those “silver breadcrumbs” you “dropped years ago” in the hand of THE ONE you were looking for will walk along with you! Now two hearts are joyfully beating as one!
An excellent, vivid write which was a pleasure to read!
Thank you for sharing!
~Laura~
December 7th, 2018 12:58
Blind Justice
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
Many truths ‘spoken’ is your insightful write!
• “Blind Justice”
Definitely “A space defined by changing rules and values”...
It’s becoming more difficult because justice is not always blind. So it is up to us to be that “master of balance” and to be fully aware of the many disruptions!
~Laura~
December 7th, 2018 10:16
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
Many truths ‘spoken’ is your insightful write!
• “Blind Justice”
Definitely “A space defined by changing rules and values”...
It’s becoming more difficult because justice is not always blind. So it is up to us to be that “master of balance” and to be fully aware of the many disruptions!
~Laura~
December 7th, 2018 10:16
Avalon Forest
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
\"Silver breadcrumbs leading \" wow so imaginatively beautiful and poetic as you wander then find. I liked this poem lots and it reads nicely. Kudos.
Pleez do review/add your thoughts/comment under my newest poem too . I like meeting new poets and their poems.
December 7th, 2018 10:11
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
\"Silver breadcrumbs leading \" wow so imaginatively beautiful and poetic as you wander then find. I liked this poem lots and it reads nicely. Kudos.
Pleez do review/add your thoughts/comment under my newest poem too . I like meeting new poets and their poems.
December 7th, 2018 10:11
Avalon Forest
sylviasearcher said:
💜💜💜
I loved this.
It reminded me of a story I think I posted here but noone read. Until her last breath passed. Only yours had a happy ending!
December 7th, 2018 07:14
sylviasearcher said:
💜💜💜
I loved this.
It reminded me of a story I think I posted here but noone read. Until her last breath passed. Only yours had a happy ending!
December 7th, 2018 07:14
Blind Justice
sylviasearcher said:
I am the master of imbalance...
Dizzy.
A thought provoking poem. As a social constructionist intrigued by the possibility of this space between us, it made me think.
December 6th, 2018 11:04
sylviasearcher said:
I am the master of imbalance...
Dizzy.
A thought provoking poem. As a social constructionist intrigued by the possibility of this space between us, it made me think.
December 6th, 2018 11:04
Anywhere But Here
Goldfinch60 said:
That path we travel may have many obstacles but every time we overcome them our live get stronger and happier.
November 29th, 2018 01:57
Goldfinch60 said:
That path we travel may have many obstacles but every time we overcome them our live get stronger and happier.
November 29th, 2018 01:57
Anywhere But Here
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
When we choose our own path, we have to be ready and willing to accept all that we encounter along the way! The onus is on us!
This was a fine write...open-ended interpretation...the quality of an excellent writer!
~Laura~
November 28th, 2018 12:06
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
When we choose our own path, we have to be ready and willing to accept all that we encounter along the way! The onus is on us!
This was a fine write...open-ended interpretation...the quality of an excellent writer!
~Laura~
November 28th, 2018 12:06
Boca to Cabo
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
I felt the sand,
I felt the cold.
I’ve traveled alone from East to West.
It’s never about the
“land or even the sea”...
It’s all about the one I wanted to hold so dear!
Your poem has awakened the memories of decades ago! I traced my steps from sea to shining sea; unfortunately, I was too late. I missed that boat...so I waited for another!
An excellent write which I enjoyed reading!
~Laura~
November 27th, 2018 08:18
Laura🌻 said:
Trys,
I felt the sand,
I felt the cold.
I’ve traveled alone from East to West.
It’s never about the
“land or even the sea”...
It’s all about the one I wanted to hold so dear!
Your poem has awakened the memories of decades ago! I traced my steps from sea to shining sea; unfortunately, I was too late. I missed that boat...so I waited for another!
An excellent write which I enjoyed reading!
~Laura~
November 27th, 2018 08:18
Deceptive Expectation
Goldfinch60 said:
Though provoking write Trystan but no matter how dark the world is the light is always there for us, and always will be.
November 21st, 2018 01:36
Goldfinch60 said:
Though provoking write Trystan but no matter how dark the world is the light is always there for us, and always will be.
November 21st, 2018 01:36
Deceptive Expectation
Laura🌻 said:
Trystan,
After reading a few more of your poems,
I can see why you said that your writing is usually a little more ambiguous or cryptic!
I do enjoy the challenge of reading and attempting to decipher them!
•“Deceptive Expectation”
An excellent write! The rhyming did not confuscate its meaning!
This is one of my favorite lines...
“Suffering and agony the only charges on the bill”
Regardless of the consequences, some of us will never get our fill!
~Laura~
November 20th, 2018 11:45
Laura🌻 said:
Trystan,
After reading a few more of your poems,
I can see why you said that your writing is usually a little more ambiguous or cryptic!
I do enjoy the challenge of reading and attempting to decipher them!
•“Deceptive Expectation”
An excellent write! The rhyming did not confuscate its meaning!
This is one of my favorite lines...
“Suffering and agony the only charges on the bill”
Regardless of the consequences, some of us will never get our fill!
~Laura~
November 20th, 2018 11:45
Still Frame
Goldfinch60 said:
The mystery of words and life seen in your very good poem.
November 19th, 2018 01:12
Goldfinch60 said:
The mystery of words and life seen in your very good poem.
November 19th, 2018 01:12
Eviscerated
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good thought provoking write Trystan, I see different things in it every time I read it but I do see a good way forward in the last verse.
November 17th, 2018 01:38
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good thought provoking write Trystan, I see different things in it every time I read it but I do see a good way forward in the last verse.
November 17th, 2018 01:38
Eviscerated
Laura🌻 said:
Trystan,
I’ve read your poem a few times! It’s veered me in different directions; however, the one I keep returning to is of an individual known to my family! He had it all and lost it all to alcohol! An alcoholic who lost his battle to his addiction!
An excellent write! Thank you for sharing!
~Laura~
November 16th, 2018 16:48
Laura🌻 said:
Trystan,
I’ve read your poem a few times! It’s veered me in different directions; however, the one I keep returning to is of an individual known to my family! He had it all and lost it all to alcohol! An alcoholic who lost his battle to his addiction!
An excellent write! Thank you for sharing!
~Laura~
November 16th, 2018 16:48
Eviscerated
sylviasearcher said:
I felt quite intrigued by this one.
Like I was walking into a room that was a puzzle that I may never quite find the pieces of.
November 16th, 2018 09:25
sylviasearcher said:
I felt quite intrigued by this one.
Like I was walking into a room that was a puzzle that I may never quite find the pieces of.
November 16th, 2018 09:25
Voltage
Goldfinch60 said:
That feeling is so well portrayed in your words Trystan. It is a feeling that happens so rarely but is never forgotten.
November 16th, 2018 01:16
Goldfinch60 said:
That feeling is so well portrayed in your words Trystan. It is a feeling that happens so rarely but is never forgotten.
November 16th, 2018 01:16
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