Comments received on poems by shadow424
BREATHING IT IN
Goldfinch60 said:
Rain is really amazing in what it can do both in reality and in our minds.
Andy
May 19th, 2021 01:43
Goldfinch60 said:
Rain is really amazing in what it can do both in reality and in our minds.
Andy
May 19th, 2021 01:43
IT WAS YESTERDAY
L. B. Mek said:
beautifully worded, relatability is so underappreciated
as an integral quality: of True artistry
keep climbing Poetry\'s endless peaks, we scribblers - few
are right there, scrambling our way - in your footsteps, dear poet...
thanks for sharing
May 17th, 2021 05:57
L. B. Mek said:
beautifully worded, relatability is so underappreciated
as an integral quality: of True artistry
keep climbing Poetry\'s endless peaks, we scribblers - few
are right there, scrambling our way - in your footsteps, dear poet...
thanks for sharing
May 17th, 2021 05:57
NO PLACE SPECIAL
L. B. Mek said:
what a quaint read, liked the last stanza especially
thank you for sharing
May 13th, 2021 03:31
L. B. Mek said:
what a quaint read, liked the last stanza especially
thank you for sharing
May 13th, 2021 03:31
TRAVELERS
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully serene words that seep-in: soothingly, ever subtly..
reminds me of Tang Dynasty poetry, in style
like that of Li Po (or Li Bai.. etc):
\'You ask me why I dwell in the green mountain;
I smile and make no reply for my heart is free of care.
As the peach-blossom flows down stream and is gone into the unknown,
I have a world apart that is not among men.\'
from an abbreviated version of his Poetry
sometimes titled \'Green Mountain\':
( https://mypoeticside.com/show-classic-poem-22489 )
May 11th, 2021 04:08
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully serene words that seep-in: soothingly, ever subtly..
reminds me of Tang Dynasty poetry, in style
like that of Li Po (or Li Bai.. etc):
\'You ask me why I dwell in the green mountain;
I smile and make no reply for my heart is free of care.
As the peach-blossom flows down stream and is gone into the unknown,
I have a world apart that is not among men.\'
from an abbreviated version of his Poetry
sometimes titled \'Green Mountain\':
( https://mypoeticside.com/show-classic-poem-22489 )
May 11th, 2021 04:08
BACK LOT
L. B. Mek said:
a vivid read, I get a yearning for a past that can never be re-lived
and that old age, creeping-up: on all of us
insuring, we\'ll end-up:
\'red chipped
clapboard sided
railroad station\'
\'chain locked doors
weeds between tracks,
broken glass\'
in memories of those loved one\'s: we live behind...
(a wonderful read, thanks for sharing)
May 7th, 2021 05:05
L. B. Mek said:
a vivid read, I get a yearning for a past that can never be re-lived
and that old age, creeping-up: on all of us
insuring, we\'ll end-up:
\'red chipped
clapboard sided
railroad station\'
\'chain locked doors
weeds between tracks,
broken glass\'
in memories of those loved one\'s: we live behind...
(a wonderful read, thanks for sharing)
May 7th, 2021 05:05
NIGHT CANDLES
L. B. Mek said:
I like the crisp imagery adding to the relatability of your write
but sadly I lack the IQ capacity, to unfurl its message or meaning
(if any specific, was meant to be conveyed)..
still, I found this an enjoyable read
thanks for sharing
May 4th, 2021 04:29
L. B. Mek said:
I like the crisp imagery adding to the relatability of your write
but sadly I lack the IQ capacity, to unfurl its message or meaning
(if any specific, was meant to be conveyed)..
still, I found this an enjoyable read
thanks for sharing
May 4th, 2021 04:29
NIGHT CANDLES
Goldfinch60 said:
Those lights in our lives are there for all of us.
Andy
May 4th, 2021 00:11
Goldfinch60 said:
Those lights in our lives are there for all of us.
Andy
May 4th, 2021 00:11
REALLY, SEE HER
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Beautiful words 🙂
May 1st, 2021 00:46
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Beautiful words 🙂
May 1st, 2021 00:46
TAKE ME THERE
rosiedm said:
Neat write took me to a street out on a warm nite having a coffee maybe at a tapas bar
I wish!
April 30th, 2021 17:16
rosiedm said:
Neat write took me to a street out on a warm nite having a coffee maybe at a tapas bar
I wish!
April 30th, 2021 17:16
BROKEN HEART
L. B. Mek said:
(a wonderfully worded read!
and thanks for inspiring my little scribbled reply)..
...\'and once you\'ve learnt to squeeze-out
that remnant of love\'s: tepid breath
you\'ll once more, attend a dancehall or two
look-for a new partner, to pass the time
then - before you know it
breathing is once again, as easy
as that beat you\'re timing
each effortlessly synchronised - step, to
and inside, you push back
hope\'s: yearning hands
suppressing magnetic chemistry
by doing maths - in your head, like
1, 2, 3, - 1, 2, 3, and one, two: those eyes, lips
and maybe - someday, me...\'
April 30th, 2021 04:25
L. B. Mek said:
(a wonderfully worded read!
and thanks for inspiring my little scribbled reply)..
...\'and once you\'ve learnt to squeeze-out
that remnant of love\'s: tepid breath
you\'ll once more, attend a dancehall or two
look-for a new partner, to pass the time
then - before you know it
breathing is once again, as easy
as that beat you\'re timing
each effortlessly synchronised - step, to
and inside, you push back
hope\'s: yearning hands
suppressing magnetic chemistry
by doing maths - in your head, like
1, 2, 3, - 1, 2, 3, and one, two: those eyes, lips
and maybe - someday, me...\'
April 30th, 2021 04:25
BROKEN HEART
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Very lovely 🙂🙂
April 29th, 2021 11:18
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
Very lovely 🙂🙂
April 29th, 2021 11:18
GRAVESIDE PRIEST
L. B. Mek said:
I read this write as a dedication to a beloved, who met with that final rest of fate
and in that sense, these words can represent
wonderful words of comfort..
thanks for sharing
April 23rd, 2021 05:18
L. B. Mek said:
I read this write as a dedication to a beloved, who met with that final rest of fate
and in that sense, these words can represent
wonderful words of comfort..
thanks for sharing
April 23rd, 2021 05:18
BROKEN SOUNDS
L. B. Mek said:
a brilliant write! in my humble opinion
wonderful imagery, and an intriguing journey within words that I can\'t help but translate through my rose tinted glasses for those elysian fields of timeless wisdom:
\'starting, with those last minutes of Socrates
where it must have felt like - all of existence, paused
passing-by that Greek wedding, dance of plates
where Plato slept his final rest
and eases us gently, to our now
of romanticised tragedy, when we presume
surely: this - is as broken, as we get...\'
(please forgive me for indulging in my own translation of your work, I mean no disrespect dear poet)
April 22nd, 2021 04:26
L. B. Mek said:
a brilliant write! in my humble opinion
wonderful imagery, and an intriguing journey within words that I can\'t help but translate through my rose tinted glasses for those elysian fields of timeless wisdom:
\'starting, with those last minutes of Socrates
where it must have felt like - all of existence, paused
passing-by that Greek wedding, dance of plates
where Plato slept his final rest
and eases us gently, to our now
of romanticised tragedy, when we presume
surely: this - is as broken, as we get...\'
(please forgive me for indulging in my own translation of your work, I mean no disrespect dear poet)
April 22nd, 2021 04:26
AND NOT AT ALL, TOO
L. B. Mek said:
\'a eulogy
to the area between
where safety
treats a shadow
with a name
as if a friend\'..
had to read this five or more times, for my limited IQ to comprehend just how profound and insightful your words capture the \'far too ugly\' - veracity, of our cripplingly degrading reality:
we lucky few with relationships to lean-on
do so, while busily marking out our own safety zones
families going for days without a word spoken between them
not out of animosity or lingering quarrels, instead
as our adopted natural state, huddled in-front of handheld screens
where strangers indulge our weakness to procrastinations - whim
and consequence is dealt with by a mere delete button
existing a mere backspace away - to that quick escape
from our abundance of ignorant mistakes..
who needs words like duty, integrity and introspection
in pixel screen realm\'s
where right and wrong, is just a matter of perception..
purposely regressing
our evolutionary need to progress - willingly
because cup-noodles are but 50p
and our tap water runs free,
why harbour ambitions
when we can dream-up our own solace
to that nightmare circumstance of failure
from a few sips of short-lived alcoholic distractions
or chain smoke those fears
into that polluting dust of marginalised regret..
soon: they will start surgically inserting circuit boards
in our heads - to counteract the damage
from generationally inept development
of our collective intellect
and the tabloids will be highlighting
jus how much demand surpasses - supply...
April 20th, 2021 04:02
L. B. Mek said:
\'a eulogy
to the area between
where safety
treats a shadow
with a name
as if a friend\'..
had to read this five or more times, for my limited IQ to comprehend just how profound and insightful your words capture the \'far too ugly\' - veracity, of our cripplingly degrading reality:
we lucky few with relationships to lean-on
do so, while busily marking out our own safety zones
families going for days without a word spoken between them
not out of animosity or lingering quarrels, instead
as our adopted natural state, huddled in-front of handheld screens
where strangers indulge our weakness to procrastinations - whim
and consequence is dealt with by a mere delete button
existing a mere backspace away - to that quick escape
from our abundance of ignorant mistakes..
who needs words like duty, integrity and introspection
in pixel screen realm\'s
where right and wrong, is just a matter of perception..
purposely regressing
our evolutionary need to progress - willingly
because cup-noodles are but 50p
and our tap water runs free,
why harbour ambitions
when we can dream-up our own solace
to that nightmare circumstance of failure
from a few sips of short-lived alcoholic distractions
or chain smoke those fears
into that polluting dust of marginalised regret..
soon: they will start surgically inserting circuit boards
in our heads - to counteract the damage
from generationally inept development
of our collective intellect
and the tabloids will be highlighting
jus how much demand surpasses - supply...
April 20th, 2021 04:02
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