Comments received on poems by Jalso
sinking
baj-a said:
you are someone if you just look and see... you are a person worthy of life, you are a poet who expresses feelings with maturity and true feelings, you are someone's child and you still have things to discover. a very poignant poem.
April 17th, 2013 07:51
baj-a said:
you are someone if you just look and see... you are a person worthy of life, you are a poet who expresses feelings with maturity and true feelings, you are someone's child and you still have things to discover. a very poignant poem.
April 17th, 2013 07:51
Go to Sleep
baj-a said:
so sad and heartbreaking. it is hard to watch someone we love die especially when they are unaware of your presence and there is nothing you can do but watch and wait. so very sad.
April 17th, 2013 07:48
baj-a said:
so sad and heartbreaking. it is hard to watch someone we love die especially when they are unaware of your presence and there is nothing you can do but watch and wait. so very sad.
April 17th, 2013 07:48
sinking
sokibgb said:
This poem shows me that you are some one very talented, very deep
and searching for something meaningful. You are someone SPECIAL, soki
April 16th, 2013 06:59
sokibgb said:
This poem shows me that you are some one very talented, very deep
and searching for something meaningful. You are someone SPECIAL, soki
April 16th, 2013 06:59
I've come home
baj-a said:
what a beautiful dance! and a lovely way to describe the final dance we will take.
April 12th, 2013 08:15
baj-a said:
what a beautiful dance! and a lovely way to describe the final dance we will take.
April 12th, 2013 08:15
Illusion
sokibgb said:
Illusion, the feeling of not being real, invisible and helpless. came thru very clearly. Excellent write, soki
April 11th, 2013 16:40
sokibgb said:
Illusion, the feeling of not being real, invisible and helpless. came thru very clearly. Excellent write, soki
April 11th, 2013 16:40
Illusion
baj-a said:
powerful and poignant and well expressed. the feeling of not being sure of who one is and what is real comes through very clearly.
April 11th, 2013 07:43
baj-a said:
powerful and poignant and well expressed. the feeling of not being sure of who one is and what is real comes through very clearly.
April 11th, 2013 07:43
Illusion
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating and with that repetition serving rather as a vividly poignant refrain, intensely haunting in its unanswered query. Lost in the midst reality, drifting from the shores of the tangible to find oneself in foamy sea of unknowns, wrestling with truth and sensations....very interesting with excellent imagery. Wish I could help you. May the LORD have mercy on you.
ttfn,
Jenny
April 10th, 2013 22:17
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating and with that repetition serving rather as a vividly poignant refrain, intensely haunting in its unanswered query. Lost in the midst reality, drifting from the shores of the tangible to find oneself in foamy sea of unknowns, wrestling with truth and sensations....very interesting with excellent imagery. Wish I could help you. May the LORD have mercy on you.
ttfn,
Jenny
April 10th, 2013 22:17
tomorrow
baj-a said:
listen to that little voice that tells you there is always tomorrow :-). things may seem as if they will never get better but if you wait long enough the sun always shines again. good write.
April 6th, 2013 07:44
baj-a said:
listen to that little voice that tells you there is always tomorrow :-). things may seem as if they will never get better but if you wait long enough the sun always shines again. good write.
April 6th, 2013 07:44
How can I be
diamonddagger said:
As long as you can ask these questions then you are. But we ask the questions anyway because we are here and it is a miracle. Well written.
April 5th, 2013 23:20
diamonddagger said:
As long as you can ask these questions then you are. But we ask the questions anyway because we are here and it is a miracle. Well written.
April 5th, 2013 23:20
tomorrow
diamonddagger said:
This is a very nice story of coming of age and growing up. Finding yourself and living for tomorrow. Believing in yourself and not falling into the traps a lot of teens fall into of depression and feeling worthless and wanting to commit suicide because of the moment. I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!!!!
April 5th, 2013 22:43
diamonddagger said:
This is a very nice story of coming of age and growing up. Finding yourself and living for tomorrow. Believing in yourself and not falling into the traps a lot of teens fall into of depression and feeling worthless and wanting to commit suicide because of the moment. I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!!!!
April 5th, 2013 22:43
How can I be
baj-a said:
You put into words what I have sometimes asked myself? how can I be and am I real or is it all just a crazy game and I a piece of it. well written.
April 5th, 2013 07:27
baj-a said:
You put into words what I have sometimes asked myself? how can I be and am I real or is it all just a crazy game and I a piece of it. well written.
April 5th, 2013 07:27
How can I be
Cheeky Missy said:
Floundering for dear life, though apparently it is rather out of the line of vision, in subtle poignancy this begs an answer while needing none, as it were. Thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.
ttfn,
Jenny
April 4th, 2013 19:24
Cheeky Missy said:
Floundering for dear life, though apparently it is rather out of the line of vision, in subtle poignancy this begs an answer while needing none, as it were. Thought-provoking. Thanks for sharing.
ttfn,
Jenny
April 4th, 2013 19:24
Space Between
diamonddagger said:
Beautiful but sad. I hope you find something to fill those empty spaces with.
April 3rd, 2013 17:49
diamonddagger said:
Beautiful but sad. I hope you find something to fill those empty spaces with.
April 3rd, 2013 17:49
Space Between
sokibgb said:
Fsill those empty space spaces with love and your life will be fuu of happiness. Good write, soki
April 3rd, 2013 08:10
sokibgb said:
Fsill those empty space spaces with love and your life will be fuu of happiness. Good write, soki
April 3rd, 2013 08:10
Space Between
baj-a said:
I know you categorized this as a love poem but I find it sad that there are those spaces between that you can't figure out how to fill and remove. good write!
April 3rd, 2013 07:29
baj-a said:
I know you categorized this as a love poem but I find it sad that there are those spaces between that you can't figure out how to fill and remove. good write!
April 3rd, 2013 07:29
Oblivion
diamonddagger said:
You do very well at rhyme and rhythm. I enjoy your writing very much.
April 2nd, 2013 12:20
diamonddagger said:
You do very well at rhyme and rhythm. I enjoy your writing very much.
April 2nd, 2013 12:20
I Cannot Disagree
baj-a said:
I cannot disagree this is a well penned poem. So sad that it is true that we cannot take back words once said. A good reason to remember what our parents taught us when we were young... think before we speak :-).
April 2nd, 2013 07:25
baj-a said:
I cannot disagree this is a well penned poem. So sad that it is true that we cannot take back words once said. A good reason to remember what our parents taught us when we were young... think before we speak :-).
April 2nd, 2013 07:25
I Cannot Disagree
diamonddagger said:
This is very sad but very well written. I loved reading it. I read it three times over I liked it so much. diamond
April 1st, 2013 19:09
diamonddagger said:
This is very sad but very well written. I loved reading it. I read it three times over I liked it so much. diamond
April 1st, 2013 19:09
Tasteing
baj-a said:
You had me from line one :-)! I understand what you are saying and applaud your honesty and hope you keep writing inspired poems like this and keep trying to lead the blind to the truth.
March 28th, 2013 07:10
baj-a said:
You had me from line one :-)! I understand what you are saying and applaud your honesty and hope you keep writing inspired poems like this and keep trying to lead the blind to the truth.
March 28th, 2013 07:10
Reach The Sky
baj-a said:
hey! interesting and intriguing poem. i got lost in the words and enjoyed he trip. i especially like the lines
If it’s not so bad then why do I despise
What the other voice is selling
could be a political write :-)
March 23rd, 2013 07:15
baj-a said:
hey! interesting and intriguing poem. i got lost in the words and enjoyed he trip. i especially like the lines
If it’s not so bad then why do I despise
What the other voice is selling
could be a political write :-)
March 23rd, 2013 07:15
time
Cheeky Missy said:
No thank you, please. It did not look rosy but rather grey, yet this is nigh terrifying in its grim prognosis. La, but beautifully frightening.
October 13th, 2011 11:01
Cheeky Missy said:
No thank you, please. It did not look rosy but rather grey, yet this is nigh terrifying in its grim prognosis. La, but beautifully frightening.
October 13th, 2011 11:01
you are
Dolphine29 said:
I think we are responsible of what we are, not what others think of what we are; we are just as free or as chained as we let others control over us. So, don't betray who you are.
Just a thought.
Best
Dolphine
September 13th, 2011 12:55
Dolphine29 said:
I think we are responsible of what we are, not what others think of what we are; we are just as free or as chained as we let others control over us. So, don't betray who you are.
Just a thought.
Best
Dolphine
September 13th, 2011 12:55
the box
Cheeky Missy said:
Intriguing. Since the television has aptly been termed "the idiot box" and that description would almost fit the above as a tribute, it could be about the TV, is it? Or is it about the 'box" folk like to put folk in, when they try to define the person as one thing or another they "box" them into whatever they think the person must be. That might almost be applicable as well. And then, I am out of ideas. Interesting tribute to...?!
September 9th, 2011 22:38
Cheeky Missy said:
Intriguing. Since the television has aptly been termed "the idiot box" and that description would almost fit the above as a tribute, it could be about the TV, is it? Or is it about the 'box" folk like to put folk in, when they try to define the person as one thing or another they "box" them into whatever they think the person must be. That might almost be applicable as well. And then, I am out of ideas. Interesting tribute to...?!
September 9th, 2011 22:38
the drains and faith
Cheeky Missy said:
Almost subtly powerful and nearly intriguing. Interesting diatribe with pointed imagery. Curious perspective and yet makes sense.
September 7th, 2011 16:46
Cheeky Missy said:
Almost subtly powerful and nearly intriguing. Interesting diatribe with pointed imagery. Curious perspective and yet makes sense.
September 7th, 2011 16:46
keep the lights on
Cheeky Missy said:
It is eerie, chilling and haunting, not to mention reminiscent of a devilish experience I know about. I hope it is not realistic, and yet, seems only too likely so. Excellently poignant and creepy. The repetition of keeping the lights on and "they've come back" evokes the sentiments and situation, seems to me.
September 6th, 2011 18:07
Cheeky Missy said:
It is eerie, chilling and haunting, not to mention reminiscent of a devilish experience I know about. I hope it is not realistic, and yet, seems only too likely so. Excellently poignant and creepy. The repetition of keeping the lights on and "they've come back" evokes the sentiments and situation, seems to me.
September 6th, 2011 18:07
awake
Cheeky Missy said:
Eerie and intriguing. The mono-rhyme in the first and final stanzas is interesting. The sentiments seem too true, as applicable to not a few situations in life, the fascination is the recipient of the speaker's monologue. Very interesting.
September 2nd, 2011 20:17
Cheeky Missy said:
Eerie and intriguing. The mono-rhyme in the first and final stanzas is interesting. The sentiments seem too true, as applicable to not a few situations in life, the fascination is the recipient of the speaker's monologue. Very interesting.
September 2nd, 2011 20:17
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