Comments received on poems by JustABird
Fear of Rejection
princesslay said:
Found this quite moving and enjoyed reading, the repitition and imagery particularly.
October 5th, 2016 18:07
princesslay said:
Found this quite moving and enjoyed reading, the repitition and imagery particularly.
October 5th, 2016 18:07
Just a Dream
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing JAB ~ Great poem ~ Great song ~ Great pathos. Trust you found it cathartic ~ It made me quite sad because in these circumstances 9 times out of 10 it's not a DREAM ~ Yours BRIAN
October 5th, 2016 16:17
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing JAB ~ Great poem ~ Great song ~ Great pathos. Trust you found it cathartic ~ It made me quite sad because in these circumstances 9 times out of 10 it's not a DREAM ~ Yours BRIAN
October 5th, 2016 16:17
Girl on a Pedestal
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Better on a pedestal JAB than in a gilded cage. Love the poem ~ lots of lovely Ladies only exist in my imagination as well ! Thanks for sharing ~ Your Friend BRIAN
August 24th, 2016 18:17
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Better on a pedestal JAB than in a gilded cage. Love the poem ~ lots of lovely Ladies only exist in my imagination as well ! Thanks for sharing ~ Your Friend BRIAN
August 24th, 2016 18:17
Fear of Rejection
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
HI JAB ~ Thanks for sharing ~ a well structured poem throbbing with rhythm ~ nice to read ! However the message is rather sombre ~ but we all have times like that ! When the song won't sing ~ the poem is wordless ~ inky fingers but no story ~ paint everywhere but a blank canvas ~ yes the World is cruel ~ BUT ~ if we don't take chances ~ the DEMONS will have won ! Every blessing ~ BRIAN
August 3rd, 2016 16:55
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
HI JAB ~ Thanks for sharing ~ a well structured poem throbbing with rhythm ~ nice to read ! However the message is rather sombre ~ but we all have times like that ! When the song won't sing ~ the poem is wordless ~ inky fingers but no story ~ paint everywhere but a blank canvas ~ yes the World is cruel ~ BUT ~ if we don't take chances ~ the DEMONS will have won ! Every blessing ~ BRIAN
August 3rd, 2016 16:55
Pretty Lies
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for your second poem. Unfortunately most Men are liars and we lie more easily (and as you say less convincingly) than most Ladies. I can't excuse it and unfortunately when our lies are uncovered it can destroy an excellent relationship. Love the chastisement of you poem and I will try to be much more truthful in future ! Yours BRIAN
June 5th, 2016 11:08
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for your second poem. Unfortunately most Men are liars and we lie more easily (and as you say less convincingly) than most Ladies. I can't excuse it and unfortunately when our lies are uncovered it can destroy an excellent relationship. Love the chastisement of you poem and I will try to be much more truthful in future ! Yours BRIAN
June 5th, 2016 11:08
Girl In Search Of...
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME JAB - Thanks for a lovely first poem. Our Love Poems are often about Unrequited Love because we all experience it ! I love the structure of the poem it sizzles with rhyme and rhythm as a good love poem should - nice to read easy to recite. Love the subject and I can empathise as I have (several times) loved someone who didn't really love me ! I love the sentiment at the end of the opening and closing stanza. "You're EVERYWHERE to me". Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
June 5th, 2016 11:00
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELCOME JAB - Thanks for a lovely first poem. Our Love Poems are often about Unrequited Love because we all experience it ! I love the structure of the poem it sizzles with rhyme and rhythm as a good love poem should - nice to read easy to recite. Love the subject and I can empathise as I have (several times) loved someone who didn't really love me ! I love the sentiment at the end of the opening and closing stanza. "You're EVERYWHERE to me". Thanks for sharing - BRIAN
June 5th, 2016 11:00
Pretty Lies
lysistrata said:
Who is telling lies to whom?
This poem is indeed a bunch of 'Pretty Lies',so CONGRATS!😁
In the first stanza the lies are a fantasy,
In the third stanza the lies materialize,
while finally you think that the lies are his defence to hide his true feelings...
Do you lie to yourself?
Sort this out and Keep writing....
June 5th, 2016 03:23
lysistrata said:
Who is telling lies to whom?
This poem is indeed a bunch of 'Pretty Lies',so CONGRATS!😁
In the first stanza the lies are a fantasy,
In the third stanza the lies materialize,
while finally you think that the lies are his defence to hide his true feelings...
Do you lie to yourself?
Sort this out and Keep writing....
June 5th, 2016 03:23
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