Comments received on poems by camille
The soul thief.
willyweed said:
wow this is an interest read, I like poems related to soul, and this one has a certain mystic about it. Good work C. ww
July 7th, 2016 09:43
willyweed said:
wow this is an interest read, I like poems related to soul, and this one has a certain mystic about it. Good work C. ww
July 7th, 2016 09:43
Tears by moonlight.
willyweed said:
oh please stay, just a little bit longer!
I can relate sometimes it all just don't
seem worth the while. write on. ww
July 6th, 2016 08:39
willyweed said:
oh please stay, just a little bit longer!
I can relate sometimes it all just don't
seem worth the while. write on. ww
July 6th, 2016 08:39
Dark embrace.
willyweed said:
great poem, good imagery, and flow. nicely done. ww
July 5th, 2016 12:41
willyweed said:
great poem, good imagery, and flow. nicely done. ww
July 5th, 2016 12:41
Dark embrace.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW CAMILLE ~ such a beautifully crafted poem ~ neat quatrains and consistent xaxa xbxb etc rhyming pattern. Poems about the sea must always have flow ! I was brought up near the sea and I have been on several cruises. And you describe the open ocean graphically ! Tempestuous ~ brutal ~ relentless ~ unyielding ~ unchanging ~ majestic ~ powerful queen and hungry ! The final stanza is a very powerful expression of (when all is lost) willingly surrendering you soul to the arms of your beautiful and hungry Queen ~ AWESOME ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
July 5th, 2016 08:55
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WOW CAMILLE ~ such a beautifully crafted poem ~ neat quatrains and consistent xaxa xbxb etc rhyming pattern. Poems about the sea must always have flow ! I was brought up near the sea and I have been on several cruises. And you describe the open ocean graphically ! Tempestuous ~ brutal ~ relentless ~ unyielding ~ unchanging ~ majestic ~ powerful queen and hungry ! The final stanza is a very powerful expression of (when all is lost) willingly surrendering you soul to the arms of your beautiful and hungry Queen ~ AWESOME ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
July 5th, 2016 08:55
Bleeding heart .
Daniel said:
I really liked this poem, great flow, great imagery, great poem!
July 4th, 2016 12:51
Daniel said:
I really liked this poem, great flow, great imagery, great poem!
July 4th, 2016 12:51
Just a breath away.
Daniel said:
Wow, great poem. I could picture myself on that riverbank! Brilliant imagery.
July 1st, 2016 13:10
Daniel said:
Wow, great poem. I could picture myself on that riverbank! Brilliant imagery.
July 1st, 2016 13:10
Just a breath away.
willyweed said:
reaching for the higher self, wonderful message you ink.
nice one! peace ww
July 1st, 2016 11:25
willyweed said:
reaching for the higher self, wonderful message you ink.
nice one! peace ww
July 1st, 2016 11:25
Final hour.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks CAMILLE a reminder for each of us to CARPE DIEM ~ Seize the Day. Every hour of each day is precious. God wants us all to live "Abundant Lives" every single day ! Yours BRIAN
June 29th, 2016 14:19
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks CAMILLE a reminder for each of us to CARPE DIEM ~ Seize the Day. Every hour of each day is precious. God wants us all to live "Abundant Lives" every single day ! Yours BRIAN
June 29th, 2016 14:19
Final hour.
Daniel said:
We all live behind our masks, afraid to show the world our face. A deep and beautifully written poem.
June 29th, 2016 11:23
Daniel said:
We all live behind our masks, afraid to show the world our face. A deep and beautifully written poem.
June 29th, 2016 11:23
Out of the fog.
lysistrata said:
What am I thinking now?
That you are killing me...Slowly...with your words..
I would have nominated,but what troubles me and I want you to check it out is your description of "the mouth as a capsized canoe" and of " the little bobbing boat on your throat - up and down in its saliva river..."
We have 1 canoe,1 boat and a river.I would have preferred the mouth as " the bay"?!
This is from my first reading,but Camille,congrats,because you challenge yourself......🌷🍀
June 28th, 2016 11:26
lysistrata said:
What am I thinking now?
That you are killing me...Slowly...with your words..
I would have nominated,but what troubles me and I want you to check it out is your description of "the mouth as a capsized canoe" and of " the little bobbing boat on your throat - up and down in its saliva river..."
We have 1 canoe,1 boat and a river.I would have preferred the mouth as " the bay"?!
This is from my first reading,but Camille,congrats,because you challenge yourself......🌷🍀
June 28th, 2016 11:26
Broken doll.
lysistrata said:
Camille,
You know I have faith in your talent and imagination.
Be open to experiments,e.g. a broken doll who becomes nauseating or a Phoetus that poses with fear on the face for a 'selfie'.....
Looking forward to the next one.😃😏
June 27th, 2016 07:50
lysistrata said:
Camille,
You know I have faith in your talent and imagination.
Be open to experiments,e.g. a broken doll who becomes nauseating or a Phoetus that poses with fear on the face for a 'selfie'.....
Looking forward to the next one.😃😏
June 27th, 2016 07:50
Broken doll.
camille said:
I wrote this a while back and was a reflection at the time .
June 27th, 2016 06:06
camille said:
I wrote this a while back and was a reflection at the time .
June 27th, 2016 06:06
Broken doll.
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Ohhhhhhhh CAMILLE ~ so so sad ! There is nothing more pathetic than a broken DOLLY her face marred and scarred and her beautiful dress tattered and torn. No longer loved consigned to the scrap heap. Is that how you really see yourself compared to the days when YOU were the FAVOURITE DOLL and everyone loved you ? You are still you and we all love you. Your poem is very cathartic ~ I hope my comments will dry your tears and you can become an UNBROKEN DOLL again. Love BRIAN
June 27th, 2016 06:02
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Ohhhhhhhh CAMILLE ~ so so sad ! There is nothing more pathetic than a broken DOLLY her face marred and scarred and her beautiful dress tattered and torn. No longer loved consigned to the scrap heap. Is that how you really see yourself compared to the days when YOU were the FAVOURITE DOLL and everyone loved you ? You are still you and we all love you. Your poem is very cathartic ~ I hope my comments will dry your tears and you can become an UNBROKEN DOLL again. Love BRIAN
June 27th, 2016 06:02
Dancing in the light
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
HI CAMILLE ~ i AM PLEASED YOU ARE GETTING SOME POSITIVE COMMENTS ON YOUR POEMS. In my experience every cloud really does have a silver lining ~ but (as you say) it is only when we experience the blackness of the cloud that we appreciate the silver of the lining ! As you say in your last line freedom is also important. When we allow our soul to be fettered we can't see the light fro the chains. An elegant poem ~ four quatrains (good length) and a consistent xaxa xbxb etc rhyme pattern. Titles are important and "Dancing in the Light" is perfect. I often choose a poem because of the title ~ or the Poet ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
June 26th, 2016 15:51
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
HI CAMILLE ~ i AM PLEASED YOU ARE GETTING SOME POSITIVE COMMENTS ON YOUR POEMS. In my experience every cloud really does have a silver lining ~ but (as you say) it is only when we experience the blackness of the cloud that we appreciate the silver of the lining ! As you say in your last line freedom is also important. When we allow our soul to be fettered we can't see the light fro the chains. An elegant poem ~ four quatrains (good length) and a consistent xaxa xbxb etc rhyme pattern. Titles are important and "Dancing in the Light" is perfect. I often choose a poem because of the title ~ or the Poet ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
June 26th, 2016 15:51
Dancing in the light
camille said:
Thank you so much for your positive critique
June 26th, 2016 14:26
camille said:
Thank you so much for your positive critique
June 26th, 2016 14:26
Dancing in the light
Dee said:
Hi Camille,
Wonderful rhyme and flow and a fine message found in the reading of this great poem. I agree with Daniel's comments and I also love your closing two lines.. Thank you for sharing , a pleasure to read and review your fine work.....Dee.
June 26th, 2016 14:18
Dee said:
Hi Camille,
Wonderful rhyme and flow and a fine message found in the reading of this great poem. I agree with Daniel's comments and I also love your closing two lines.. Thank you for sharing , a pleasure to read and review your fine work.....Dee.
June 26th, 2016 14:18
Dancing in the light
camille said:
Thank you .. In my experience I find this to be true .
June 26th, 2016 14:12
camille said:
Thank you .. In my experience I find this to be true .
June 26th, 2016 14:12
Dancing in the light
Daniel said:
I really liked this poem and the notion that you must first experience the bad to appreciate the good.
June 26th, 2016 13:56
Daniel said:
I really liked this poem and the notion that you must first experience the bad to appreciate the good.
June 26th, 2016 13:56
Destination nothingness
lysistrata said:
Just a tiny typo in "It's bars a prison "...
I am intrigued by the shining + silvery + iridescence filling the sky.I hope you'd give us more in the future.
And you got there first "destination nothingness"!!😞
I want to use "The Country of Nowhere" for kids poetry.😏
June 26th, 2016 02:04
lysistrata said:
Just a tiny typo in "It's bars a prison "...
I am intrigued by the shining + silvery + iridescence filling the sky.I hope you'd give us more in the future.
And you got there first "destination nothingness"!!😞
I want to use "The Country of Nowhere" for kids poetry.😏
June 26th, 2016 02:04
The weed.
lysistrata said:
I lower myself to this trivial dandelion
I caress,I adore,I remove,I own...
The following are my favourite lines:
"The weed is honest and unapologetic for its existence.
It does not await applause from shallow onlookers.
Confident on its journey ."
If you have not read E.Bishop's "Weed" poem,do so...
And continue confident your journey....
June 24th, 2016 11:31
lysistrata said:
I lower myself to this trivial dandelion
I caress,I adore,I remove,I own...
The following are my favourite lines:
"The weed is honest and unapologetic for its existence.
It does not await applause from shallow onlookers.
Confident on its journey ."
If you have not read E.Bishop's "Weed" poem,do so...
And continue confident your journey....
June 24th, 2016 11:31
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