Comments received on poems by SabreLi
Wind And Tide
Reivax Camlost said:
Your meter and rhyme scheme are consistent, so much as any I have seen on this site, and such as it is, this is one of the greater poems I have encountered here on Mypoeticside. I think you\'ll do well here- please keep writing. No writer is ever done improving their writing, as what we write is but an extension of ourselves, and one truly never stops living, learning, loving, and leaving it all behind so long as they draw breath.
December 22nd, 2016 19:40
Reivax Camlost said:
Your meter and rhyme scheme are consistent, so much as any I have seen on this site, and such as it is, this is one of the greater poems I have encountered here on Mypoeticside. I think you\'ll do well here- please keep writing. No writer is ever done improving their writing, as what we write is but an extension of ourselves, and one truly never stops living, learning, loving, and leaving it all behind so long as they draw breath.
December 22nd, 2016 19:40
Wind And Tide
Reivax Camlost said:
This is reminiscent of song lyrics. It fades away into the background, repeating the refrain as it ends. This musical beauty carries the deep sadness in this poem, lifts it up, and garnishes it with a sprinkle of sorrow, remorse, and frustration that one\'s very attempts to break with their fate result only more of the same.
Thank you for this.
December 22nd, 2016 19:37
Reivax Camlost said:
This is reminiscent of song lyrics. It fades away into the background, repeating the refrain as it ends. This musical beauty carries the deep sadness in this poem, lifts it up, and garnishes it with a sprinkle of sorrow, remorse, and frustration that one\'s very attempts to break with their fate result only more of the same.
Thank you for this.
December 22nd, 2016 19:37
Wind And Tide
WriteBeLight said:
I feel frustration in this. I would want to help them, but know that I could only go as far as they might let me. And, finally, maybe just give up because they might still insist that all is well, not admitting that inside they are drowning. This poem makes me think of people I know. Very compelling poem.
December 22nd, 2016 18:53
WriteBeLight said:
I feel frustration in this. I would want to help them, but know that I could only go as far as they might let me. And, finally, maybe just give up because they might still insist that all is well, not admitting that inside they are drowning. This poem makes me think of people I know. Very compelling poem.
December 22nd, 2016 18:53
Wind And Tide
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks SABRE for a very challenging poem. I work with Young People and it takes a lot of 1:1 TLC to get a tortured person back on higher ground ! The methods used to relieve the PAIN ~ self harming ~ drugs ~ alcohol etc are often more damaging than the PAIN itself. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ Hugs BRIAN XOX
December 22nd, 2016 18:02
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks SABRE for a very challenging poem. I work with Young People and it takes a lot of 1:1 TLC to get a tortured person back on higher ground ! The methods used to relieve the PAIN ~ self harming ~ drugs ~ alcohol etc are often more damaging than the PAIN itself. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ Hugs BRIAN XOX
December 22nd, 2016 18:02
Wind And Tide
Hopey_xx said:
Great poem! I love the deeper meaning and feelings to it.
December 22nd, 2016 17:16
Hopey_xx said:
Great poem! I love the deeper meaning and feelings to it.
December 22nd, 2016 17:16
Tempest Of Temptation
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Amazing brilliant work as usual...this could be said about any drug I would think and it also could be about a bitch who takes your man somehow...I love how you write ..I always am captivated..xx:)
December 21st, 2016 01:26
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Amazing brilliant work as usual...this could be said about any drug I would think and it also could be about a bitch who takes your man somehow...I love how you write ..I always am captivated..xx:)
December 21st, 2016 01:26
Going, Going, Gone
myinnervoice said:
This struck a cord with me, because I myself am struggling with this. Currently unmedicated tho, its a double edged sword and it feels as if there are no right answers as to what should be done. Some really awesome things come out of me unmedicated, but im also impossible.
December 20th, 2016 17:44
myinnervoice said:
This struck a cord with me, because I myself am struggling with this. Currently unmedicated tho, its a double edged sword and it feels as if there are no right answers as to what should be done. Some really awesome things come out of me unmedicated, but im also impossible.
December 20th, 2016 17:44
Going, Going, Gone
Augustus said:
It has got to be difficult to struggle with \"sanity\" as defined by others and what is your own reality. The ambivalence here clearly shows with a struggle between parts of self, now considering a third medicated self. (Hope I made sense) Well done. Hugs.
December 20th, 2016 15:54
Augustus said:
It has got to be difficult to struggle with \"sanity\" as defined by others and what is your own reality. The ambivalence here clearly shows with a struggle between parts of self, now considering a third medicated self. (Hope I made sense) Well done. Hugs.
December 20th, 2016 15:54
Fallen
Augustus said:
Depicts the suffering of an addict very well. Nice rhyme.
December 19th, 2016 21:25
Augustus said:
Depicts the suffering of an addict very well. Nice rhyme.
December 19th, 2016 21:25
Fallen
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing such a beautiful SONG (it is more than a POEM) ~ Loved the refrain ~ I found myself singing it. In the SONG you have encapsulated the state of mind that drives beautiful people to despair ~ drugs ~ death. I have workd with \"damaged\" Young people (16 - 25) in the YMCA and now work with the same age group in a College. In the end DRUGS kill and Young People need to be warned and supported ! Very graphic visual ~ Thanks for caring & sharing ~ Hugs ~ BRIAN
December 19th, 2016 16:43
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing such a beautiful SONG (it is more than a POEM) ~ Loved the refrain ~ I found myself singing it. In the SONG you have encapsulated the state of mind that drives beautiful people to despair ~ drugs ~ death. I have workd with \"damaged\" Young people (16 - 25) in the YMCA and now work with the same age group in a College. In the end DRUGS kill and Young People need to be warned and supported ! Very graphic visual ~ Thanks for caring & sharing ~ Hugs ~ BRIAN
December 19th, 2016 16:43
Fallen
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Awesome work , as usual , Sabre Lei. I am going to start putting out some if older ones soon as well..anyway, can\'t wait for your next one..you gave made me a fan..lol..xxx :)
December 19th, 2016 16:38
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Awesome work , as usual , Sabre Lei. I am going to start putting out some if older ones soon as well..anyway, can\'t wait for your next one..you gave made me a fan..lol..xxx :)
December 19th, 2016 16:38
Fallen
Vic E said:
Powerful poem. The repeating stanza enhances the message beautifully
December 19th, 2016 12:09
Vic E said:
Powerful poem. The repeating stanza enhances the message beautifully
December 19th, 2016 12:09
Fallen
WriteBeLight said:
Excellent job expressing the yearning this person has for peace of mind.
December 19th, 2016 11:25
WriteBeLight said:
Excellent job expressing the yearning this person has for peace of mind.
December 19th, 2016 11:25
Schizophrenia
WriteBeLight said:
Love the I wish I could see you fly stanza very much. You are so intelligent in your words. Very great work!
December 19th, 2016 09:00
WriteBeLight said:
Love the I wish I could see you fly stanza very much. You are so intelligent in your words. Very great work!
December 19th, 2016 09:00
When Cultures Clash
isituorme said:
Wow I like this ,goes to show how things have alway been the same but this is one good piece of work it puts so many images in mind of epic scenes ,fantastic and so well written .
December 17th, 2016 07:17
isituorme said:
Wow I like this ,goes to show how things have alway been the same but this is one good piece of work it puts so many images in mind of epic scenes ,fantastic and so well written .
December 17th, 2016 07:17
Acid Rain
P.H.Rose said:
Yes I too think it
sounds like a song
I love it, so bloody good.
Well done !!!!
December 17th, 2016 03:37
P.H.Rose said:
Yes I too think it
sounds like a song
I love it, so bloody good.
Well done !!!!
December 17th, 2016 03:37
Acid Rain
Augustus said:
Powerful and also seductive as the reader is anxious for the next line.
December 16th, 2016 18:06
Augustus said:
Powerful and also seductive as the reader is anxious for the next line.
December 16th, 2016 18:06
Acid Rain
Elegant_Style said:
wow!! every time i read one of your poems they just are awesome!! so happy that i have the opportunity to read these!!
December 16th, 2016 17:10
Elegant_Style said:
wow!! every time i read one of your poems they just are awesome!! so happy that i have the opportunity to read these!!
December 16th, 2016 17:10
Acid Rain
Tony36 said:
Sadness in this writer. Yet a wonderfully expensive and powerful write
December 16th, 2016 16:55
Tony36 said:
Sadness in this writer. Yet a wonderfully expensive and powerful write
December 16th, 2016 16:55
Acid Rain
WriteBeLight said:
A painfully excellent expression of the pain, SabreLi. You really do know how to show emotions through your words. Nice work.
December 16th, 2016 16:26
WriteBeLight said:
A painfully excellent expression of the pain, SabreLi. You really do know how to show emotions through your words. Nice work.
December 16th, 2016 16:26
Infinity On End (The Puppeteer)
littlegoat23 said:
Beautiful, Stunning. I am at a loss for words.
December 15th, 2016 14:25
littlegoat23 said:
Beautiful, Stunning. I am at a loss for words.
December 15th, 2016 14:25
Tempest Of Temptation
Faith_01 said:
I love what you wrote its written well 😊
December 15th, 2016 12:31
Faith_01 said:
I love what you wrote its written well 😊
December 15th, 2016 12:31
Where I Belong
isituorme said:
I really like this it takes the question of is there or isnt there and puts u in the next place ,when it\'s to late to decide ,great poem x
December 15th, 2016 10:35
isituorme said:
I really like this it takes the question of is there or isnt there and puts u in the next place ,when it\'s to late to decide ,great poem x
December 15th, 2016 10:35
Infinity On End (The Puppeteer)
Tony36 said:
Truthful and very well expressed
December 15th, 2016 09:14
Tony36 said:
Truthful and very well expressed
December 15th, 2016 09:14
Infinity On End (The Puppeteer)
Seeker said:
Nothing short of excellent Sabre!! I think you\'re correct there will be crimson in the end. At least here in the USA. We can\'t continue in our current state of constant stress. I\'m glad I\'m too old to see it but you may not be.
December 15th, 2016 06:42
Seeker said:
Nothing short of excellent Sabre!! I think you\'re correct there will be crimson in the end. At least here in the USA. We can\'t continue in our current state of constant stress. I\'m glad I\'m too old to see it but you may not be.
December 15th, 2016 06:42
Where I Belong
Elegant_Style said:
wow, this is amazing and deep and oh so beautiful. Haunting, but beautiful!! AMAZING
December 14th, 2016 21:40
Elegant_Style said:
wow, this is amazing and deep and oh so beautiful. Haunting, but beautiful!! AMAZING
December 14th, 2016 21:40
Where I Belong
SharonMoemise said:
Wow! I\'m speechless at this masterpiece. You\'ve once again outdone yourself, SabreLi. Great read.
December 14th, 2016 10:22
SharonMoemise said:
Wow! I\'m speechless at this masterpiece. You\'ve once again outdone yourself, SabreLi. Great read.
December 14th, 2016 10:22
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