Comments received on poems by SabreLi


BRIAN HERE~ Thanks for sharing *SL* ~ Love the structure of the POEM ~ 9 neat quatrains witha consistant Rhyme Pattern (abab cdcd etc). This gives it FLOW facilitating reading & recitation. Because we are already in the ROBOAGE the message is very avant garde ! Current ROBOTS (like some Humans !) have KNOWLEGE but no FEELINGS ! Synopsis :

V 1 - 3. She find HIM broken & discarded
V 4 - 6. She adopts HIM & cares for HIM.
He understands the meaning of LOVE
V 7. He responds to Her with His LOVE
V 8. Her LOVE & TLC breaks down His conditioning

Thanks for sharing a lovely ROBOTIC
LOVE STORY We both loved it !
Blessings & Peace & Joy for CHRISTMAS !
Yours ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡💚🧡💚🧡

November 30th, 2019 13:33

Alan .S. Jeeves said:

Good rhyming sabreLi, important (I think). I would have liked to have seen metre polishing a little though.

Kind regards, Alan

November 30th, 2019 09:59

Goldfinch60 said:

How do you know when a politician is lying?
Their lips move!

November 29th, 2019 17:19

Michael Edwards said:

What a mess - the uneducated Public need to be led by the incompetants in Parliament who know even less. Fine write.

November 29th, 2019 10:17

Laura🌻 said:

This is so, so sad! My heart is breaking for you and Francesca!

December 12th, 2017 16:43

Dear Tragedy
Liberty_Shadows said:

Omg thats GOOD! You inspired me. Inspiration is rare for me.

December 8th, 2017 16:23

Seven said:

Writing from the difficulty is often the remedy, because as you confess to others, your soul will fly. I do not wish more pain for you, but if ever again that\'s when to spend time with the pen. Great work!

December 8th, 2017 16:02

Sleeping Dogs Lie
Reivax Camlost said:

Sleeping dogs will lie, and lying dogs will sleep forever, but only sleeping lies will kill you slowly.

February 18th, 2017 16:11

Days Of Torment Past
Francesco said:

Very nice. Torments have a way of coming back and it can be frightening or frustrating at times.
Lovely poem!

February 14th, 2017 10:12

Wind And Tide
Aals said:

i love this more than i can say, this has been my exact torment for pretty much my entire life. I love the way you express everything, hopefully one day i get this good.

February 2nd, 2017 18:38

Acid Rain
Seanachaidh said:

Emotionally charged and powerful

January 29th, 2017 16:25

Sleeping Dogs Lie
Augustus said:

You tell em sister. Well done.

January 2nd, 2017 22:18

Sleeping Dogs Lie
Tony36 said:

Wonderful write

January 2nd, 2017 19:39

Sleeping Dogs Lie
willyweed said:

Good new start I like it! peace ww

January 2nd, 2017 16:45

Sleeping Dogs Lie
WriteBeLight said:

It is tough to do. Have to sleep on it. But, it is so tempting to shake them awake. Great idea and great poem SabreLi! Happy New Year to You and a fresh start too!

January 2nd, 2017 15:57

Sleeping Dogs Lie
P.H.Rose said:

I like this one
Love the pic also

January 2nd, 2017 14:29

Days Of Torment Past

Thanks for sharing SABRE and our memories play tricks on all of us ! This one thing I do ~ forgetting those (negative) things which are in the past ~ I live for today (and it\'s CHRISTMAS DAY !) and I look forward ~ with JOY ~ to tomorrow and the Blessings and opportunities of 2017 ~ AMEN ~ Hugs for Christmas ~ BRIAN

December 25th, 2016 03:18

Days Of Torment Past
Reivax Camlost said:

We all live in the past sometimes... I would say that it\'s one of my biggest flaws, living in the past. Especially when one has regrets. But, like in this poem, we must overcome these regrets, for we cannot change the past, and the more quickly we acknowledge this, the happier we will be.

I usually try to say something important in my poems, but I often fail... This poem communicates perfectly, and does so beautifully while evoking emotion. Thanks. Merry Christmas.

I\'ve also noticed that you write a lot of sad poems, or at least bittersweet... I think than that one happy piece is in order, if only for Christmas. I know good writing cannot and will not be rushed, but I look forwards to it whenever you do write a poem of less melancholy nature (although, some of the best writing does come out of melancholy feelings).

December 24th, 2016 21:14

Days Of Torment Past
Augustus said:

I love the comparison with the silver screen. Flashbacks can be difficult. Out of nowhere I will suddenly moan and my wife will get upset. It passes quickly now. Nicely done.

December 24th, 2016 20:32

Days Of Torment Past
notapoet said:

Another great write SabreLi, enjoyed it very much!

December 24th, 2016 14:06

Burn Eternal
WriteBeLight said:

Some lines relate to a child\'s relationship with a parent. I relate to those lines. All of it, actually for me.

December 23rd, 2016 19:03

Burn Eternal
Augustus said:

I like this. Thermal memories. Neat.

December 23rd, 2016 17:40

Burn Eternal
Daniel said:

You do paint beautiful pictures with your words, always wonderful to read.

December 23rd, 2016 13:50

Burn Eternal
notapoet said:

Very poignant piece, your words flow like lyrics to a great country or maybe even a blues song. excellent work, a very enjoyable read

December 23rd, 2016 13:17

Burn Eternal
Reivax Camlost said:

A mourning ray of sunshine glimmers

There, with warming light in faintest shimmers

Singing songs of solitude and grace

I\'d trade my candle with my life, for a single glimpse a single picture

One last look upon your face

December 23rd, 2016 13:09

Burn Eternal
Hopey_xx said:

Nice poem!

December 23rd, 2016 12:27

Burn Eternal
Tony36 said:

Awesome write

December 23rd, 2016 12:17

Wind And Tide
notapoet said:

As with Daniel what more can be said but bravo on an amazing piece of poetry! Well done SabreLi....

December 23rd, 2016 11:17

Wind And Tide
Daniel said:

What can I say that has not already been said. The wonderful imagery brings this poem to life, absolutely brilliant!

December 23rd, 2016 00:56

Wind And Tide
Augustus said:

The photo of the enormous waves is the perfect backdrop for this poem of tears, anguish and intense pressure.

December 22nd, 2016 23:04

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