Comments received on poems by Jal
Fragile
sorenbarrett said:
This poem has a inner beauty to it that shines through and can be felt by the reader. Well done
July 19th, 2024 05:33
sorenbarrett said:
This poem has a inner beauty to it that shines through and can be felt by the reader. Well done
July 19th, 2024 05:33
Second Chance
Lil said:
I just am touched honestly this is a great poem really. Keep it up!!!!
November 12th, 2023 12:49
Lil said:
I just am touched honestly this is a great poem really. Keep it up!!!!
November 12th, 2023 12:49
Mirror
L. B. Mek said:
a relatable read, thanks for sharing
(maybe, we need only realise
\'it\'s okay: to not - be ok\'
then, afford that mirror reflection
a small merciful smile
as your poetry, wisely suggests
and let that
be our anchor, to fall back upon
when the sea\'s
start getting rough, yet again
when we arrive
at those brief, still waters of relief
we find a new anchor
add to our survivor\'s fight, armoury
one anchor, at a time
we forge our unbreakable, spine
fly our flag, high
on that mast of self-excavated
worth! and
in each daybreaks, Aurora success
hope for the best)
May 8th, 2023 06:34
L. B. Mek said:
a relatable read, thanks for sharing
(maybe, we need only realise
\'it\'s okay: to not - be ok\'
then, afford that mirror reflection
a small merciful smile
as your poetry, wisely suggests
and let that
be our anchor, to fall back upon
when the sea\'s
start getting rough, yet again
when we arrive
at those brief, still waters of relief
we find a new anchor
add to our survivor\'s fight, armoury
one anchor, at a time
we forge our unbreakable, spine
fly our flag, high
on that mast of self-excavated
worth! and
in each daybreaks, Aurora success
hope for the best)
May 8th, 2023 06:34
Mirror
2781 said:
Self loathing ministers from the pit.
We are all made in God\'s image
That\'s no shit
From the depths of despair
We all can grow
To take our inheritance
At the foot of the throne.
May 8th, 2023 04:31
2781 said:
Self loathing ministers from the pit.
We are all made in God\'s image
That\'s no shit
From the depths of despair
We all can grow
To take our inheritance
At the foot of the throne.
May 8th, 2023 04:31
Warmth Amongst The Stars
L. B. Mek said:
we never know, and we assume too much
in our not knowing, ease of hypothetical
and we intrust in fate, too little
when it was fate
that gave us existence
in the first place..
so yeah, we can\'t be sure
but we can hope
and cope, as best we can
if that means keeping close
that which we\'ve lost
from material, reality
then so be it
its all meaningful, in this our only promised
journey..
thanks for sharing
a tender touch, to your subtle pen
and I relate to that unspoken
longing and pain
stay Strong!
August 19th, 2022 04:28
L. B. Mek said:
we never know, and we assume too much
in our not knowing, ease of hypothetical
and we intrust in fate, too little
when it was fate
that gave us existence
in the first place..
so yeah, we can\'t be sure
but we can hope
and cope, as best we can
if that means keeping close
that which we\'ve lost
from material, reality
then so be it
its all meaningful, in this our only promised
journey..
thanks for sharing
a tender touch, to your subtle pen
and I relate to that unspoken
longing and pain
stay Strong!
August 19th, 2022 04:28
Of Another Design
RiverJordan said:
Well thought out, if you ever feel lonely or empty remembet you are not alone!
October 14th, 2019 21:26
RiverJordan said:
Well thought out, if you ever feel lonely or empty remembet you are not alone!
October 14th, 2019 21:26
Self Reflection
sylviasearcher said:
I hope that writing this provided some catharsis.
I could feel a push and pull between wanting to believe and hope and apathy and self loathing.
I hope you have moments when you can keep hold of hope 🌟
January 28th, 2019 07:18
sylviasearcher said:
I hope that writing this provided some catharsis.
I could feel a push and pull between wanting to believe and hope and apathy and self loathing.
I hope you have moments when you can keep hold of hope 🌟
January 28th, 2019 07:18
Self Reflection
delaneynichols said:
this really captures what you\'re feeling. descriptive, so i can get a glimpse at your emotions. i love this.
January 27th, 2019 22:26
delaneynichols said:
this really captures what you\'re feeling. descriptive, so i can get a glimpse at your emotions. i love this.
January 27th, 2019 22:26
Conflicted
onepauly said:
between me and you. you hit the nail right on the head. I hope you let me print your poem.
so I can read it over and over again.
great write. the best!
April 20th, 2018 11:10
onepauly said:
between me and you. you hit the nail right on the head. I hope you let me print your poem.
so I can read it over and over again.
great write. the best!
April 20th, 2018 11:10
Calm
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very well written and expressed...I also enjoyed your description of the poem and taking the time to explain what it meant to you...Abslutely beautiful work hun
October 15th, 2017 20:36
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very well written and expressed...I also enjoyed your description of the poem and taking the time to explain what it meant to you...Abslutely beautiful work hun
October 15th, 2017 20:36
Guilt of Lost.
myself and me said:
The effect of the ramen must be very strong, it stir up such a romantic yet sad poem. You could work a bit more on the last stanza, especially the last two sentences. Over all, a nice piece.
August 15th, 2017 20:37
myself and me said:
The effect of the ramen must be very strong, it stir up such a romantic yet sad poem. You could work a bit more on the last stanza, especially the last two sentences. Over all, a nice piece.
August 15th, 2017 20:37
Sights of Mine.
Goldfinch60 said:
We need to know the bad to see the good. Good write,
May 5th, 2017 01:06
Goldfinch60 said:
We need to know the bad to see the good. Good write,
May 5th, 2017 01:06
Sights of Mine.
swingline said:
I think I know where you are going here . One has to walk on both sides of the street to know the block .
May 4th, 2017 19:39
swingline said:
I think I know where you are going here . One has to walk on both sides of the street to know the block .
May 4th, 2017 19:39
Sights of Mine.
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very interesting....I understand you in many ways...We have to see the opposite of things in order to appreciate them correctly. Light & Darkness are equal and you cannot have anything good without respecting the fact that it may not last forever....Nice job
May 4th, 2017 19:01
LIGHT WARRIOR said:
Very interesting....I understand you in many ways...We have to see the opposite of things in order to appreciate them correctly. Light & Darkness are equal and you cannot have anything good without respecting the fact that it may not last forever....Nice job
May 4th, 2017 19:01
