Comments received on poems by little lay lay
What A Girl Wants
L. B. Mek said:
\'A manifesto
when I look into your eyes
A manifesto
in my dreams\'
wonderfully acute imagery
a lovely read, thank you
April 24th, 2023 05:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'A manifesto
when I look into your eyes
A manifesto
in my dreams\'
wonderfully acute imagery
a lovely read, thank you
April 24th, 2023 05:50
poetry a word
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS LAY LAY ~ This is an elegantly penned Poem full of rhythm and nice to read and recite ! BUT the message is quite sad from a lovely Young Lady like you. You say you write to alleviate your HURT and to ESCAPE ~ BUT on the positive side you say POETRY ~ Stops you DYING ~ AMEN ~ Encourages you to keep TRYING ~ helps you to grow STRONGER & KEEP TRACK and enables you to COPE with YOURSELF ~ Keep writing LAY LAY ~ you sure need it ! It always does you REAL GOOD ! Angela and I were TEENS a few years ago but we survived and growing up helped ! We hope to be married in 2020 I\'ll be 37 and ANGEL 32 we cant wait !
Please check our today POEM (NUTS) and our FUSION on CHRISTMAS. You have to click on DEVELOPING to see it and add a POEM !
Every Blessing ~ Thinking of YOU ~ Your MPS Friends ~ BRIAN & ANGELA
October 30th, 2018 13:44
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
THANKS LAY LAY ~ This is an elegantly penned Poem full of rhythm and nice to read and recite ! BUT the message is quite sad from a lovely Young Lady like you. You say you write to alleviate your HURT and to ESCAPE ~ BUT on the positive side you say POETRY ~ Stops you DYING ~ AMEN ~ Encourages you to keep TRYING ~ helps you to grow STRONGER & KEEP TRACK and enables you to COPE with YOURSELF ~ Keep writing LAY LAY ~ you sure need it ! It always does you REAL GOOD ! Angela and I were TEENS a few years ago but we survived and growing up helped ! We hope to be married in 2020 I\'ll be 37 and ANGEL 32 we cant wait !
Please check our today POEM (NUTS) and our FUSION on CHRISTMAS. You have to click on DEVELOPING to see it and add a POEM !
Every Blessing ~ Thinking of YOU ~ Your MPS Friends ~ BRIAN & ANGELA
October 30th, 2018 13:44
philosophy
Poetic Dan said:
... My thoughts are going wild, tangle in words. I know it\'s the truth so I\'m letting it all go, as Bruce Lee said \"don\'t think, feel\" and I feel he would of loved your philosophical flow.
Thank you for sharing
October 25th, 2018 18:29
Poetic Dan said:
... My thoughts are going wild, tangle in words. I know it\'s the truth so I\'m letting it all go, as Bruce Lee said \"don\'t think, feel\" and I feel he would of loved your philosophical flow.
Thank you for sharing
October 25th, 2018 18:29
should i stay or should i go
Poetic Dan said:
They say only time will tell you but from experience and a line from a song, the problem is \"time can stand still in the fall.\" I guess this is why we feel we never truly know and love feels like a drug we can\'t get or give enough of.
I\'m sure your find yours just keep writing from an open heart, thank you for sharing
May 16th, 2018 15:21
Poetic Dan said:
They say only time will tell you but from experience and a line from a song, the problem is \"time can stand still in the fall.\" I guess this is why we feel we never truly know and love feels like a drug we can\'t get or give enough of.
I\'m sure your find yours just keep writing from an open heart, thank you for sharing
May 16th, 2018 15:21
sickness
orchidee said:
Thinking of you all in prayers! Maybe going \'upstairs\' somehow, rather than the \'downstairs\' layout of this poem.
November 11th, 2017 03:09
orchidee said:
Thinking of you all in prayers! Maybe going \'upstairs\' somehow, rather than the \'downstairs\' layout of this poem.
November 11th, 2017 03:09
Rose Danielle
Verta said:
Selena. La Reyna de la Cumbia. And LaReynaDeLaFlor. Very beautiful words you wrote.
October 25th, 2017 22:19
Verta said:
Selena. La Reyna de la Cumbia. And LaReynaDeLaFlor. Very beautiful words you wrote.
October 25th, 2017 22:19
\"The Chronicles of Loving a White Man as a Black Woman in a White World\"
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing and caring BIANCA ~ I trust you found penning and posting this poem cathartic. It is very passionate but also sad ~ because of your apparent rejection because of your skin tone ~ totally unacceptable in the 21st Century. I was raised in Liverpool which is very cosmopolitan and multiracial. Some of my Friends were colored and when i danced with and kissed an Indian or African or West Indian or Chinese Girl it was equally as exotic as kissing a White Girl and (if I\'m honest) in som e cases more so. there was very little racial prejudice and if I took a Colored Girl home my parents and siblings were always \"color blind\" ! When i went to College i did date Colored Girls and truly enjoyed their capacity for and enjoyment of Physical Love ~ we never got engaged or married but form and my Family color would not have ben a Barrier and some of my Pink friends are happily married to Colored Girls and Men ! My current GF (29) Angela is half Spanish so her skin tone is darker than mine and she has Spanish customs ~ but they are no barrier to Love and my Mum thinks she is an ANGEL ! Every Blessing ~ thinking of You and Praying for You ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
September 10th, 2017 11:01
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks for sharing and caring BIANCA ~ I trust you found penning and posting this poem cathartic. It is very passionate but also sad ~ because of your apparent rejection because of your skin tone ~ totally unacceptable in the 21st Century. I was raised in Liverpool which is very cosmopolitan and multiracial. Some of my Friends were colored and when i danced with and kissed an Indian or African or West Indian or Chinese Girl it was equally as exotic as kissing a White Girl and (if I\'m honest) in som e cases more so. there was very little racial prejudice and if I took a Colored Girl home my parents and siblings were always \"color blind\" ! When i went to College i did date Colored Girls and truly enjoyed their capacity for and enjoyment of Physical Love ~ we never got engaged or married but form and my Family color would not have ben a Barrier and some of my Pink friends are happily married to Colored Girls and Men ! My current GF (29) Angela is half Spanish so her skin tone is darker than mine and she has Spanish customs ~ but they are no barrier to Love and my Mum thinks she is an ANGEL ! Every Blessing ~ thinking of You and Praying for You ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
September 10th, 2017 11:01
Shut In Shut Out
charlotte black said:
written with true feeling. I felt each sentence- beautiful work!
August 30th, 2017 19:29
charlotte black said:
written with true feeling. I felt each sentence- beautiful work!
August 30th, 2017 19:29
Tasting Berries
Adri said:
Wow Bianca! That oozes seductiveness, passion, and pain! Excellent! The first line was my favorite! 🦋
August 4th, 2017 20:56
Adri said:
Wow Bianca! That oozes seductiveness, passion, and pain! Excellent! The first line was my favorite! 🦋
August 4th, 2017 20:56
Tasting Berries
Thewildfire said:
That was a beautiful poem and certainly something I can coincide with. The last part is what really got me because it explains my last love perfectly. Thank you for the amazing poem!
August 4th, 2017 20:44
Thewildfire said:
That was a beautiful poem and certainly something I can coincide with. The last part is what really got me because it explains my last love perfectly. Thank you for the amazing poem!
August 4th, 2017 20:44
What I Saw vs. What It Is
ShannonXx said:
A brilliant message! Loved reading this
July 6th, 2017 11:31
ShannonXx said:
A brilliant message! Loved reading this
July 6th, 2017 11:31
What I Saw vs. What It Is
burning-embers said:
I am a white man born in 1952 in UK and brought up in a racist environment encouraged to be racist, taught just as u say. As i became a teenager i did all the teenage things like listening to music, going to youth clubs and of course watching TV. In mid 60\'s civil rights marches were on Brit TV and we saw in our living room the horrors of people being beaten for standing up for their rights. I was finding that the music i was most interested in was coming from people of dark skin. At14 we would go across the river to a black neighborhood where we could hear some really cool music and our white boy faces were a tiny minority. I learned by being with people that racism was a pile of dung. As i grew older and became a musician i found that all the great players were black people, my heroes.
When any of us speak of our own experiences on this, then we can speak from our heart.
Your work here is very powerful and disturbing and let it continue for as long as is needed.
Shout it out loud and clear. And let he/she who disagrees attempt to justify themselves for they shall surely make ridicule of themselves.
I make no apology for taking up a lot of space here with these comments because i have very strong anti racist conviction.
July 5th, 2017 23:25
burning-embers said:
I am a white man born in 1952 in UK and brought up in a racist environment encouraged to be racist, taught just as u say. As i became a teenager i did all the teenage things like listening to music, going to youth clubs and of course watching TV. In mid 60\'s civil rights marches were on Brit TV and we saw in our living room the horrors of people being beaten for standing up for their rights. I was finding that the music i was most interested in was coming from people of dark skin. At14 we would go across the river to a black neighborhood where we could hear some really cool music and our white boy faces were a tiny minority. I learned by being with people that racism was a pile of dung. As i grew older and became a musician i found that all the great players were black people, my heroes.
When any of us speak of our own experiences on this, then we can speak from our heart.
Your work here is very powerful and disturbing and let it continue for as long as is needed.
Shout it out loud and clear. And let he/she who disagrees attempt to justify themselves for they shall surely make ridicule of themselves.
I make no apology for taking up a lot of space here with these comments because i have very strong anti racist conviction.
July 5th, 2017 23:25
What I Saw vs. What It Is
kevin browne said:
a very inteersting read. a well educated poem in fact. I love you already and I\'m a white man who loves everything alive or dead. there is no stopping this historically bad issue you capture so wonderfully to me that even as an infant you recognised rasilism, now your teaching how to put an end to it. a great well done to you x
July 5th, 2017 23:10
kevin browne said:
a very inteersting read. a well educated poem in fact. I love you already and I\'m a white man who loves everything alive or dead. there is no stopping this historically bad issue you capture so wonderfully to me that even as an infant you recognised rasilism, now your teaching how to put an end to it. a great well done to you x
July 5th, 2017 23:10
From He to She
FredPeyer said:
Bianca, thank you! You just described my wife of 40 years perfectly! Very well written too!
July 3rd, 2017 21:35
FredPeyer said:
Bianca, thank you! You just described my wife of 40 years perfectly! Very well written too!
July 3rd, 2017 21:35
Can I Be?
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Nice Bianca - this universal longing to be loved that we all share points to something much larger, grander and more stable than anyone human being can provide. That\'s why we are so often let down by others. The lines in your poem \"Can I Be\" will resonate with all whom read it.
June 22nd, 2017 22:33
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Nice Bianca - this universal longing to be loved that we all share points to something much larger, grander and more stable than anyone human being can provide. That\'s why we are so often let down by others. The lines in your poem \"Can I Be\" will resonate with all whom read it.
June 22nd, 2017 22:33
The Lucky 13
ShannonXx said:
This is a really deep poem but the message is great and a lot of thought has gone into it, well done!
June 19th, 2017 16:50
ShannonXx said:
This is a really deep poem but the message is great and a lot of thought has gone into it, well done!
June 19th, 2017 16:50
It Isn\'t Okay :/
Discreation said:
I may not take it for me, but for the little girl in me.
June 18th, 2017 22:42
Discreation said:
I may not take it for me, but for the little girl in me.
June 18th, 2017 22:42
I Am
swingline said:
Your desire to be perfect is to be like God . And you should only worry about pleasing God instead of anyone else . You will be happy on life if you do .
June 17th, 2017 04:22
swingline said:
Your desire to be perfect is to be like God . And you should only worry about pleasing God instead of anyone else . You will be happy on life if you do .
June 17th, 2017 04:22
I Am
John Gover said:
I absolutely love the line \"I am capable.\"
Very powerful. I loved reading this.
June 17th, 2017 03:44
John Gover said:
I absolutely love the line \"I am capable.\"
Very powerful. I loved reading this.
June 17th, 2017 03:44
All I Ask
Gary Edward Geraci said:
\"Love\" the verb - then you will tell. Love the wreath of flowers on your head; a foreshadowing of the great crown of victory in store for you blessed sister.
June 11th, 2017 22:32
Gary Edward Geraci said:
\"Love\" the verb - then you will tell. Love the wreath of flowers on your head; a foreshadowing of the great crown of victory in store for you blessed sister.
June 11th, 2017 22:32
All I Ask
Augustus said:
When you\'re not living it you can\'t tell. Nicely done
June 11th, 2017 22:18
Augustus said:
When you\'re not living it you can\'t tell. Nicely done
June 11th, 2017 22:18
All I Ask
The Invisible said:
I feel like we all feel like that at one point or another. Just some people feel it more and stronger than others. But life is life, there\'s no real definition of it cause everyone\'s life is different.
June 11th, 2017 22:00
The Invisible said:
I feel like we all feel like that at one point or another. Just some people feel it more and stronger than others. But life is life, there\'s no real definition of it cause everyone\'s life is different.
June 11th, 2017 22:00
Seeing Red
Hopey_xx said:
So beautiful. Brought tears to my eyes, I feel the same way as you do. As the song says, hold on..
June 8th, 2017 12:17
Hopey_xx said:
So beautiful. Brought tears to my eyes, I feel the same way as you do. As the song says, hold on..
June 8th, 2017 12:17
NUMB
The Invisible said:
I love this poem. You did great, I can totally relate. Good for you to move on and not dwell.
June 5th, 2017 21:26
The Invisible said:
I love this poem. You did great, I can totally relate. Good for you to move on and not dwell.
June 5th, 2017 21:26
∞ Always ∞
aciaa. said:
Love is shown to be something powerful, It really touches me, I\'ve felt like this before. Great poem!
June 2nd, 2017 03:00
aciaa. said:
Love is shown to be something powerful, It really touches me, I\'ve felt like this before. Great poem!
June 2nd, 2017 03:00
This Isn\'t About Me
P.H.Rose said:
I love this......
Hard subject
For one so young
But really well written
People come in two
Forms.. stone and glass
Bullies will always eventually
Break..... I was stone as
A child, all the glass people
Who bullied me Eventually broke
May 31st, 2017 16:32
P.H.Rose said:
I love this......
Hard subject
For one so young
But really well written
People come in two
Forms.. stone and glass
Bullies will always eventually
Break..... I was stone as
A child, all the glass people
Who bullied me Eventually broke
May 31st, 2017 16:32
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