Comments received on poems by nikhilps
THE PATRIOT !!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting and thought-provoking. Good imagery. Excellent that the patriotic speaker does not cry, strengthening his fellows in his wake to stand firm against the foe. Beautiful visual image paired with it.
August 2nd, 2011 19:00
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting and thought-provoking. Good imagery. Excellent that the patriotic speaker does not cry, strengthening his fellows in his wake to stand firm against the foe. Beautiful visual image paired with it.
August 2nd, 2011 19:00
AN UNSPOKEN LANGUAGE !!!
Dolphine29 said:
It's beautiful! and completely true. The smile is universally (well maybe for the moment in our knowledge this planet) the language of joy.
And the phrase "Some are listening and some are hearing" is an eye opener.. or better seen as a heart opener to all of us.
:)
Best
Dolphine
April 20th, 2011 18:23
Dolphine29 said:
It's beautiful! and completely true. The smile is universally (well maybe for the moment in our knowledge this planet) the language of joy.
And the phrase "Some are listening and some are hearing" is an eye opener.. or better seen as a heart opener to all of us.
:)
Best
Dolphine
April 20th, 2011 18:23
FAKE...
Cheeky Missy said:
La, PS, but this is a sorrowful reflection. How very sad. I heartily agree with your concluding two lines about hating "smile" before a cry, preferring it after. It is a fascinating discussion on the fakery of smiling, for indeed we are taught to politely smile even if we are dying inside, and what is most detestable are the smiles that the eyes betray as derisively scornful and haughty. At least that is what I am thinking presently. Hmmm. Fascinating rather bittersweet write.
March 8th, 2011 00:13
Cheeky Missy said:
La, PS, but this is a sorrowful reflection. How very sad. I heartily agree with your concluding two lines about hating "smile" before a cry, preferring it after. It is a fascinating discussion on the fakery of smiling, for indeed we are taught to politely smile even if we are dying inside, and what is most detestable are the smiles that the eyes betray as derisively scornful and haughty. At least that is what I am thinking presently. Hmmm. Fascinating rather bittersweet write.
March 8th, 2011 00:13
MY GUZARISH!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Almost bittersweet, and so beautifully like you....I love it for that! What is "guzaarish" a dream? I like that you want to live in the real world....I guess I do not quite understand it...that is where you are walking, therefore you mean that you do not wish to live in a dream?
February 23rd, 2011 00:05
Cheeky Missy said:
Almost bittersweet, and so beautifully like you....I love it for that! What is "guzaarish" a dream? I like that you want to live in the real world....I guess I do not quite understand it...that is where you are walking, therefore you mean that you do not wish to live in a dream?
February 23rd, 2011 00:05
BARREL OF SADNESS!!
Rajat said:
hey!every man goes to slumber for a better hope for tomorrow!everyone lives because of expectations and this is the reason why a man sails the mighty furious ocean of life!
February 7th, 2011 09:04
Rajat said:
hey!every man goes to slumber for a better hope for tomorrow!everyone lives because of expectations and this is the reason why a man sails the mighty furious ocean of life!
February 7th, 2011 09:04
ONCE WHEN I SAW YOU....
Rajat said:
really very nice...a same incident happened with me too!i can empathize it!...the last 2 lines seems to be coated with pain!
February 7th, 2011 09:01
Rajat said:
really very nice...a same incident happened with me too!i can empathize it!...the last 2 lines seems to be coated with pain!
February 7th, 2011 09:01
RAIN IN DESERT !!!
Rajat said:
life starts with a search,
and it ends,when every soul find its pair!!..these lines r awesum!!
February 6th, 2011 07:47
Rajat said:
life starts with a search,
and it ends,when every soul find its pair!!..these lines r awesum!!
February 6th, 2011 07:47
A BOON AND A BANE !!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Your image is very interesting and fitting. Fascinating, rather intriguing...very interesting, curious story and your assessment in concluding is interesting. I agree we shouldn't harden our heart against love, therefore I think also if we will enter into it, we must be prepared to be hurt, for in some cases that seems inevitable, but a hardened heart seems much worse, you know? Anyway, I rather enjoyed this!
January 26th, 2011 23:43
Cheeky Missy said:
Your image is very interesting and fitting. Fascinating, rather intriguing...very interesting, curious story and your assessment in concluding is interesting. I agree we shouldn't harden our heart against love, therefore I think also if we will enter into it, we must be prepared to be hurt, for in some cases that seems inevitable, but a hardened heart seems much worse, you know? Anyway, I rather enjoyed this!
January 26th, 2011 23:43
ONCE WHEN I SAW YOU....
Cheeky Missy said:
Hey! 14 lines....great! Now you need to make it iambic pentametre...adding the end-rhyming in the Shakespearian or Petrarchan/Italian pattern. Wow. Where did you get the idea to try? This is too cool that you tried! I wish you all success. But to my limited knowledge, this is not a sonnet. It is a sad poem for the initial rejoicing and joyful life that the false friend gave and then the horrible truth that it was only a lie. Your last two lines are fascinating, in their poetic assessment of the usefulness of the apology. I am so very glad you are trying to write sonnets.....again, I wish you all success in this endeavor....la, you'll doubtless do so much better than me...oooh, your poor Chechi! This was a nice attempt. Love, your Chechi
January 21st, 2011 16:00
Cheeky Missy said:
Hey! 14 lines....great! Now you need to make it iambic pentametre...adding the end-rhyming in the Shakespearian or Petrarchan/Italian pattern. Wow. Where did you get the idea to try? This is too cool that you tried! I wish you all success. But to my limited knowledge, this is not a sonnet. It is a sad poem for the initial rejoicing and joyful life that the false friend gave and then the horrible truth that it was only a lie. Your last two lines are fascinating, in their poetic assessment of the usefulness of the apology. I am so very glad you are trying to write sonnets.....again, I wish you all success in this endeavor....la, you'll doubtless do so much better than me...oooh, your poor Chechi! This was a nice attempt. Love, your Chechi
January 21st, 2011 16:00
TIPS FOR BETTER LIVING!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Very fascinating and intriguing, little brother. Interesting meditation. Whom are you impersonating? Yourself? What you thought yourself to be? What you wish to be? I like how you began it with the blackboard, which symbolizes our teachers who would lead us in the right way to go/live...excellent metaphor! I enjoy how you brought in the contrary instructions of the evil world. Yet you mingled it all with the better way,....ie. what is good and right. Again, very fascinating.....I quite enjoyed it! Love, your Chechi
January 16th, 2011 12:13
Cheeky Missy said:
Very fascinating and intriguing, little brother. Interesting meditation. Whom are you impersonating? Yourself? What you thought yourself to be? What you wish to be? I like how you began it with the blackboard, which symbolizes our teachers who would lead us in the right way to go/live...excellent metaphor! I enjoy how you brought in the contrary instructions of the evil world. Yet you mingled it all with the better way,....ie. what is good and right. Again, very fascinating.....I quite enjoyed it! Love, your Chechi
January 16th, 2011 12:13
BARREL OF SADNESS!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, my dear brother, and so often in frustration at dashed expectations I conclude that I would be happier if I could just remember never to have expectations.....but somehow inexplicably I do have expectations....are they doomed for failure because they are expectations? I love to dream. Your image with it is perfect for the desperate sadness, but awful in its implications, nonetheless.
January 1st, 2011 21:52
Cheeky Missy said:
Ah, my dear brother, and so often in frustration at dashed expectations I conclude that I would be happier if I could just remember never to have expectations.....but somehow inexplicably I do have expectations....are they doomed for failure because they are expectations? I love to dream. Your image with it is perfect for the desperate sadness, but awful in its implications, nonetheless.
January 1st, 2011 21:52
A BREEZE!!!
ironmaiden_81186 said:
i guess this piece of urs...brings out the nature lover and a traveller in you..
very well written...loved it
December 9th, 2010 09:51
ironmaiden_81186 said:
i guess this piece of urs...brings out the nature lover and a traveller in you..
very well written...loved it
December 9th, 2010 09:51
Beautiful girl i had ever met...........
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting. I like your end-rhyming. I do not quite understand it all though...it is wonderful, but you are hopeless...she gives you hope but she is horribly marred and suffering....it is all a joke? Is it what it appears on the surface or alluding to something much deeper? Beauty is twisted by cruelty so that its promise is no promise and mocks the seeker......?
December 5th, 2010 11:42
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting. I like your end-rhyming. I do not quite understand it all though...it is wonderful, but you are hopeless...she gives you hope but she is horribly marred and suffering....it is all a joke? Is it what it appears on the surface or alluding to something much deeper? Beauty is twisted by cruelty so that its promise is no promise and mocks the seeker......?
December 5th, 2010 11:42
A BREEZE!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
A breeze IS so refreshing, especially in an oppressive day. And nature is often a relief to so very many from the oppressions of man. In light of that this is an excellent piece!!
November 26th, 2010 22:39
Cheeky Missy said:
A breeze IS so refreshing, especially in an oppressive day. And nature is often a relief to so very many from the oppressions of man. In light of that this is an excellent piece!!
November 26th, 2010 22:39
THE BED ON EARTH!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
I LOVE the picture with it! It is a very nice, interesting piece about the grass.....fascinatingly, since you wrote it on grass....the Word of God says that "All flesh is as grass..."....interesting, isn't that ?
November 26th, 2010 22:35
Cheeky Missy said:
I LOVE the picture with it! It is a very nice, interesting piece about the grass.....fascinatingly, since you wrote it on grass....the Word of God says that "All flesh is as grass..."....interesting, isn't that ?
November 26th, 2010 22:35
BEYOND THE BOUNDARIES.....
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw, my darling brother PS! It is very sweet and so like you, my dear brother! Yet, you have her with her back to you and I would gladly look into your face! And yet again, it is symbolic of the distance that keeps us from looking into each other's eyes when we speak. I like this very well.....and you are VERY sweet! And I too pray that it may not be only for here and now, but that the Lord Who made us both and brought us for this moment together, will save us both by Himself that we may see His face for eternity.
Thanks for this, PS!!!!
Your Chechi!
November 26th, 2010 08:59
Cheeky Missy said:
Aw, my darling brother PS! It is very sweet and so like you, my dear brother! Yet, you have her with her back to you and I would gladly look into your face! And yet again, it is symbolic of the distance that keeps us from looking into each other's eyes when we speak. I like this very well.....and you are VERY sweet! And I too pray that it may not be only for here and now, but that the Lord Who made us both and brought us for this moment together, will save us both by Himself that we may see His face for eternity.
Thanks for this, PS!!!!
Your Chechi!
November 26th, 2010 08:59
THE BEAUTIFUL THING I LOVE!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh too perfect! You begin it with (your?!) smiling face, and by its closing, I the reader am smiling too! That was so perfect! And it is very interesting to consider the list of things you enjoy.....great you admit it is not all worth the pleasure and love you honour it all with. I quite like this piece! I fell in love with the natural scenes/object, for they are some of my loves, and was rather fascinated by the other items you mentioned loving. What you've expressed is a sweet perspective...that many can argue against and yet, for some of us who think to be poets, it is so real.
November 25th, 2010 08:35
Cheeky Missy said:
Oh too perfect! You begin it with (your?!) smiling face, and by its closing, I the reader am smiling too! That was so perfect! And it is very interesting to consider the list of things you enjoy.....great you admit it is not all worth the pleasure and love you honour it all with. I quite like this piece! I fell in love with the natural scenes/object, for they are some of my loves, and was rather fascinated by the other items you mentioned loving. What you've expressed is a sweet perspective...that many can argue against and yet, for some of us who think to be poets, it is so real.
November 25th, 2010 08:35
SIGN OF HELP!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating. I like the way you painted the scenes. Unfortunately, for your loving entreaty, the earth everywhere is being helplessly, hopelessly destroyed, inspite of the cries of the people living on it, and likewise being destroyed.
As for the cruel god.....it is not the true God of the Bible....He is not cruel, His mercy endures forEVER and His tender mercies are over ALL His works, His Word says, and His Word is true.
Couplets, triplet, quatrains, triplets....very nice.
You did a very nice job. I like it.
November 24th, 2010 21:59
Cheeky Missy said:
Fascinating. I like the way you painted the scenes. Unfortunately, for your loving entreaty, the earth everywhere is being helplessly, hopelessly destroyed, inspite of the cries of the people living on it, and likewise being destroyed.
As for the cruel god.....it is not the true God of the Bible....He is not cruel, His mercy endures forEVER and His tender mercies are over ALL His works, His Word says, and His Word is true.
Couplets, triplet, quatrains, triplets....very nice.
You did a very nice job. I like it.
November 24th, 2010 21:59
PARALYSE...?
Cheeky Missy said:
Well, first off your comment/opinion....I hope we do never love loneliness over loved ones, yet I allow solitude to be somewhat universally praised in contrast to perpetual companionship, which mark is possibly where you are aiming. I dunno. Afterall, considering the closing lines of this piece, loneliness does NOT sound desirable, but rather a determination to say, "I WON'T buckle....I will NOT be crushed by my loneliness! They won't find weakness in ME!" Which reminds me slightly of the old song which sings "I am a ROCK/I am an island...." or some such.
I like this piece....you expressed it all very well.
And your image at the top is perfect!
November 24th, 2010 19:03
Cheeky Missy said:
Well, first off your comment/opinion....I hope we do never love loneliness over loved ones, yet I allow solitude to be somewhat universally praised in contrast to perpetual companionship, which mark is possibly where you are aiming. I dunno. Afterall, considering the closing lines of this piece, loneliness does NOT sound desirable, but rather a determination to say, "I WON'T buckle....I will NOT be crushed by my loneliness! They won't find weakness in ME!" Which reminds me slightly of the old song which sings "I am a ROCK/I am an island...." or some such.
I like this piece....you expressed it all very well.
And your image at the top is perfect!
November 24th, 2010 19:03
A RIDER!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting....I don't entirely understand it, but enjoyed the pictures you painted, Fascinating story.
I like it. Your symbolism is good.
November 22nd, 2010 22:34
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting....I don't entirely understand it, but enjoyed the pictures you painted, Fascinating story.
I like it. Your symbolism is good.
November 22nd, 2010 22:34
a light to a dark heart!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
I love the picture with it!
While it begins hopeless, it ends triumphant.
I enjoyed the way you presented this with the speaker's initially troubled thoughts turning to relating his deliverence.
November 22nd, 2010 22:28
Cheeky Missy said:
I love the picture with it!
While it begins hopeless, it ends triumphant.
I enjoyed the way you presented this with the speaker's initially troubled thoughts turning to relating his deliverence.
November 22nd, 2010 22:28
a lyric from the heart!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
You painted the scene delightfully. I quite enjoy it. It is sweet and romantic. Your similes were great.
November 22nd, 2010 22:16
Cheeky Missy said:
You painted the scene delightfully. I quite enjoy it. It is sweet and romantic. Your similes were great.
November 22nd, 2010 22:16
A SEPOY AT BORDER SAYS...........
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet. A reflective serious piece....good consideration. Thanks.
November 22nd, 2010 08:34
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet. A reflective serious piece....good consideration. Thanks.
November 22nd, 2010 08:34
THE UNKNOWN KNOWLEDGE !!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting. And like they say, exude a confidence you do not feel [just make sure you can back it, I say.].
Poor fellow, you have made him good for nothing......I hate to leave him in such a case, but it is I fear the fate of some. I prefer not to think so.
November 19th, 2010 09:44
Cheeky Missy said:
Very interesting. And like they say, exude a confidence you do not feel [just make sure you can back it, I say.].
Poor fellow, you have made him good for nothing......I hate to leave him in such a case, but it is I fear the fate of some. I prefer not to think so.
November 19th, 2010 09:44
RAIN IN DESERT !!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet. The picture is fitting.
I like the ending.....would that it were true.
November 19th, 2010 09:39
Cheeky Missy said:
Sweet. The picture is fitting.
I like the ending.....would that it were true.
November 19th, 2010 09:39
RIDE ME BEFORE THE DAWN!!!
Cheeky Missy said:
Ya, dreams.....and Reality......Oh but our dream world is so enticing.
I enjoyed this.
November 18th, 2010 10:11
Cheeky Missy said:
Ya, dreams.....and Reality......Oh but our dream world is so enticing.
I enjoyed this.
November 18th, 2010 10:11
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