Comments received on poems by arobot
Shelf life
Bobby O said:
It switched to metaphor at the end and I’m thinking that conclusion may benefit from another line or two of transition support. ??
April 30th, 2023 07:54
Bobby O said:
It switched to metaphor at the end and I’m thinking that conclusion may benefit from another line or two of transition support. ??
April 30th, 2023 07:54
Elon Musk
mvvenkataraman said:
Earlier Twitter had a variety of Tweets,
Now only Tesla and Elon Musk fully,
Okay. He had paid 43 billion dollars,
So, let him enjoy, but let me quit,
Everything will change in life,
So, no use in lamenting sadly!
April 25th, 2023 10:11
mvvenkataraman said:
Earlier Twitter had a variety of Tweets,
Now only Tesla and Elon Musk fully,
Okay. He had paid 43 billion dollars,
So, let him enjoy, but let me quit,
Everything will change in life,
So, no use in lamenting sadly!
April 25th, 2023 10:11
March
Lorna said:
One ripping the other’s hair like weeds.... made me laugh out loud......
April 5th, 2023 04:06
Lorna said:
One ripping the other’s hair like weeds.... made me laugh out loud......
April 5th, 2023 04:06
Greenhouse Childhood
Doggerel Dave said:
Solid message I like. Sooner or later those fragile beings surely must get out into a real world experience........... But perhaps they won\'t?
February 26th, 2023 19:54
Doggerel Dave said:
Solid message I like. Sooner or later those fragile beings surely must get out into a real world experience........... But perhaps they won\'t?
February 26th, 2023 19:54
Greenhouse Childhood
thinkerbell said:
Interesting title for a poem on a very relevant issue..well written ,dear poet😍🥰
February 26th, 2023 08:36
thinkerbell said:
Interesting title for a poem on a very relevant issue..well written ,dear poet😍🥰
February 26th, 2023 08:36
The Dawn is just a Cobweb away
arobot said:
it is about a recent tragedy. one night this highshooler was missing from his dorm despite all the security cameras. A massive search went on for more than three months afterwards. I t was recently found out the body had been hanging right in the small wood grove at the schoolyard. the student had recorded his attempts of suicide in his recording device for being unendurable of the pressure of school and meaninglessness of life.
February 19th, 2023 05:11
arobot said:
it is about a recent tragedy. one night this highshooler was missing from his dorm despite all the security cameras. A massive search went on for more than three months afterwards. I t was recently found out the body had been hanging right in the small wood grove at the schoolyard. the student had recorded his attempts of suicide in his recording device for being unendurable of the pressure of school and meaninglessness of life.
February 19th, 2023 05:11
The Dawn is just a Cobweb away
David Wakeling said:
This reads like the author wants to give some life advice.Unfortunately nothing is explained.It is not clear how the advice should be put into practice.But hey what would I know
February 19th, 2023 04:50
David Wakeling said:
This reads like the author wants to give some life advice.Unfortunately nothing is explained.It is not clear how the advice should be put into practice.But hey what would I know
February 19th, 2023 04:50
Trust
Parisab said:
Your words can describe the strength and vulnerability of our bond to others: as is the toddler’s bond to her mother. This poem also seems to live in the mother’s own childhood struggles. Keep writing about this most essential topic. Thank you dear Poet.
February 12th, 2023 11:00
Parisab said:
Your words can describe the strength and vulnerability of our bond to others: as is the toddler’s bond to her mother. This poem also seems to live in the mother’s own childhood struggles. Keep writing about this most essential topic. Thank you dear Poet.
February 12th, 2023 11:00
tough pear
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful metaphor
thanks for sharing dear poet
(all that is Spring, viewed
upon its Autumnal demise
should be treasured
for surviving without being consumed
by that chaos of existence...)
November 28th, 2022 05:19
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful metaphor
thanks for sharing dear poet
(all that is Spring, viewed
upon its Autumnal demise
should be treasured
for surviving without being consumed
by that chaos of existence...)
November 28th, 2022 05:19
Gleaner i
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, a strong voice!
thanks for sharing
October 31st, 2022 05:01
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful imagery, a strong voice!
thanks for sharing
October 31st, 2022 05:01
Last cicada at odds
PoetVids - I am WriteBeLight only in Video Version :) said:
Wow. Nice job. Those creatures are so loud, though.
September 9th, 2022 09:21
PoetVids - I am WriteBeLight only in Video Version :) said:
Wow. Nice job. Those creatures are so loud, though.
September 9th, 2022 09:21
water melon
L. B. Mek said:
\'I suppose it is not because you don’t like me
But because this melon is not big enough.”
how this line applies, to most of life..
Brilliant!
thank you for choosing to share
such a timely, witty
and most gentle, poetic caress
to all-things, youthful
in summer and romance
August 12th, 2022 02:19
L. B. Mek said:
\'I suppose it is not because you don’t like me
But because this melon is not big enough.”
how this line applies, to most of life..
Brilliant!
thank you for choosing to share
such a timely, witty
and most gentle, poetic caress
to all-things, youthful
in summer and romance
August 12th, 2022 02:19
A Midsummer Dream
L. B. Mek said:
lovely imagery, weaved
in-to
such a seamless flow..
thanks for sharing
June 3rd, 2022 04:30
L. B. Mek said:
lovely imagery, weaved
in-to
such a seamless flow..
thanks for sharing
June 3rd, 2022 04:30
Sakura，Sakura
Rocky Lagou said:
Wow, I enjoy this analogy of a cherry blossom representing this maiden. It feels quite hopeless however seeing that there\'s \"no tomb\" and \"no fruits.\" I feel the fruits could represent children, so like a longing to create a family. Sad yet touching.
April 26th, 2022 08:31
Rocky Lagou said:
Wow, I enjoy this analogy of a cherry blossom representing this maiden. It feels quite hopeless however seeing that there\'s \"no tomb\" and \"no fruits.\" I feel the fruits could represent children, so like a longing to create a family. Sad yet touching.
April 26th, 2022 08:31
crow over
Pearcemelville 兎敏 said:
Aha then I read in a different light
Your translation is fine
If you would like to discuss a couple of finer points please inbox me
for this is not the forum
April 18th, 2022 11:26
Pearcemelville 兎敏 said:
Aha then I read in a different light
Your translation is fine
If you would like to discuss a couple of finer points please inbox me
for this is not the forum
April 18th, 2022 11:26
crow over
Pearcemelville 兎敏 said:
Nice writing
If I may be bold and suggest
a couple of Chinese translations
that I feel depict more fully the English
You might feel wickedly delicious 你可會覺到厲害得得意
And verdant grass scorches my eyes 深綠草暴曬我眼
And can be 而 but is superfluous in Chinese and makes it clumsy
What is your opinion?
Are you student of Chinese or are
you Chinese?
I am half Compilation English
Thank you
Zengda
April 17th, 2022 17:02
Pearcemelville 兎敏 said:
Nice writing
If I may be bold and suggest
a couple of Chinese translations
that I feel depict more fully the English
You might feel wickedly delicious 你可會覺到厲害得得意
And verdant grass scorches my eyes 深綠草暴曬我眼
And can be 而 but is superfluous in Chinese and makes it clumsy
What is your opinion?
Are you student of Chinese or are
you Chinese?
I am half Compilation English
Thank you
Zengda
April 17th, 2022 17:02
Rain & Cuckoo
Rocky Lagou said:
These are both so picturesque and marvelous. You truly utilize imagery splendidly and your emotions are conveyed to precision. Amazing.
April 14th, 2022 09:58
Rocky Lagou said:
These are both so picturesque and marvelous. You truly utilize imagery splendidly and your emotions are conveyed to precision. Amazing.
April 14th, 2022 09:58
No-mad
Rocky Lagou said:
We\'re all searching. Some for a purpose and others out of selfishness. But I sense this poem\'s power. Great job!
April 11th, 2022 09:21
Rocky Lagou said:
We\'re all searching. Some for a purpose and others out of selfishness. But I sense this poem\'s power. Great job!
April 11th, 2022 09:21
“April is a cruel time of the year...”
Christina8 said:
I have friends that would agree that April is a cruel time of year....but here the flowers don\'t bloom till May, so...But I do love your poem, very nice!
April 10th, 2022 09:52
Christina8 said:
I have friends that would agree that April is a cruel time of year....but here the flowers don\'t bloom till May, so...But I do love your poem, very nice!
April 10th, 2022 09:52
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