Comments received on poems by MelissaJA
So I stayed silent (trigger warning: mentions of rape)
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
I have read many such true news stories international news stories and you have said it all in a powerful, taxing sarcastic way indeed. It is never the girls fault, it is the rapists crime and fault but it is quite the society\'s and parents fault too sometimes for failing to prevent such rape. Kudos.
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
February 15th, 2021 12:47
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
I have read many such true news stories international news stories and you have said it all in a powerful, taxing sarcastic way indeed. It is never the girls fault, it is the rapists crime and fault but it is quite the society\'s and parents fault too sometimes for failing to prevent such rape. Kudos.
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
February 15th, 2021 12:47
So I stayed silent (trigger warning: mentions of rape)
L. B. Mek said:
More power to you sister! Really well thought-out, hopefully your write will inspire/empower someone else to speak out and they can find a foothold to a tomorrow that\'s a little less bleak.
December 11th, 2020 03:52
L. B. Mek said:
More power to you sister! Really well thought-out, hopefully your write will inspire/empower someone else to speak out and they can find a foothold to a tomorrow that\'s a little less bleak.
December 11th, 2020 03:52
So I stayed silent (trigger warning: mentions of rape)
MelissaJA said:
Thanks everyone
December 10th, 2020 13:24
MelissaJA said:
Thanks everyone
December 10th, 2020 13:24
So I stayed silent (trigger warning: mentions of rape)
Vanz said:
Very powerful and I\'m proud of you for writing about it and sharing with all of us. Stay strong ❤️
December 10th, 2020 12:23
Vanz said:
Very powerful and I\'m proud of you for writing about it and sharing with all of us. Stay strong ❤️
December 10th, 2020 12:23
So I stayed silent (trigger warning: mentions of rape)
Goldfinch60 said:
In this life there are so many who \'stay silent\', they need to talk out and let the people who attacked them be dealt with.
December 10th, 2020 02:31
Goldfinch60 said:
In this life there are so many who \'stay silent\', they need to talk out and let the people who attacked them be dealt with.
December 10th, 2020 02:31
So I stayed silent (trigger warning: mentions of rape)
Amon said:
stanza no. 4, ey I got a 14 yr old cousin daughter who has been raped by her 56 yr old step father this past whole winter and we are struggling to bring justice for her, but the judiciary is like dead. She stayed silent too but the pain so unbearable that people could notice she was not right, to break the silence for her.
This yours is a voice which must be head and not left unconsidered for the wellness of young girls for circumstances might shut them up
December 10th, 2020 01:30
Amon said:
stanza no. 4, ey I got a 14 yr old cousin daughter who has been raped by her 56 yr old step father this past whole winter and we are struggling to bring justice for her, but the judiciary is like dead. She stayed silent too but the pain so unbearable that people could notice she was not right, to break the silence for her.
This yours is a voice which must be head and not left unconsidered for the wellness of young girls for circumstances might shut them up
December 10th, 2020 01:30
A child\'s Christmas Confession
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA here ~ God Evening Melissa - thanks for sharing an excellent Poem replete with rhyme & rhythm. Love the subject Im only 32 - BUT - one thing Ive really missed for the last 20 years is being a Child @ Christmas. Ive only been married 9 Months but Bran & I cant wait to start a Family as soon as COVID is over ~ AMEN ! Please check out SITE ~ Thanks A & B !
Love ~ Joy & Peace to You & Yours
Angela Brian & Smokey Cat ! ! !
December 8th, 2020 16:31
ANGELA & BRIAN said:
ANGELA here ~ God Evening Melissa - thanks for sharing an excellent Poem replete with rhyme & rhythm. Love the subject Im only 32 - BUT - one thing Ive really missed for the last 20 years is being a Child @ Christmas. Ive only been married 9 Months but Bran & I cant wait to start a Family as soon as COVID is over ~ AMEN ! Please check out SITE ~ Thanks A & B !
Love ~ Joy & Peace to You & Yours
Angela Brian & Smokey Cat ! ! !
December 8th, 2020 16:31
Wasted eden
L. B. Mek said:
like the imagery and conversational tone of voice, while clearly articulating rubbed-raw grievances, the mere fact these words are being shared - hints (to me) at a yearning for some form of bridge to be created/resurrected
October 26th, 2020 03:16
L. B. Mek said:
like the imagery and conversational tone of voice, while clearly articulating rubbed-raw grievances, the mere fact these words are being shared - hints (to me) at a yearning for some form of bridge to be created/resurrected
October 26th, 2020 03:16
Doe (Needs a better title)
Goldfinch60 said:
Experience has shown her the way to move forward in strength using the positive energy she has found within her.
Andy
September 23rd, 2020 00:34
Goldfinch60 said:
Experience has shown her the way to move forward in strength using the positive energy she has found within her.
Andy
September 23rd, 2020 00:34
Doe (Needs a better title)
Crowns4Christ said:
this is great,maybe a better title could be her strength just an idea, she sounds like a very strong woman melissa,keep up the good work! melissa(that\'s my name too)
September 22nd, 2020 14:20
Crowns4Christ said:
this is great,maybe a better title could be her strength just an idea, she sounds like a very strong woman melissa,keep up the good work! melissa(that\'s my name too)
September 22nd, 2020 14:20
Color (Looking for advice)
L. B. Mek said:
firstly a brilliantly imaginative piece of writing,
may I humbly suggest that before looking at \'completing\' this work you try it out written in different forms of poetry that are specifically non-verse/stanza in layout, I personally think this would work wonderfully as Prose poetry, but gain just a humble suggestion and no rush I have some works that I have been redrafting for years and still feel they need a little bit more fine tuning
September 22nd, 2020 04:37
L. B. Mek said:
firstly a brilliantly imaginative piece of writing,
may I humbly suggest that before looking at \'completing\' this work you try it out written in different forms of poetry that are specifically non-verse/stanza in layout, I personally think this would work wonderfully as Prose poetry, but gain just a humble suggestion and no rush I have some works that I have been redrafting for years and still feel they need a little bit more fine tuning
September 22nd, 2020 04:37
Empty
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderfully authentic write, using easily relatable yet transformative metaphor and imagery in a smooth - seamless delivery,
for some that cling on to a \'positive only\' mindset, your words may ring hollow, but for those of us who have seen the unexpected surrealism of our lives bitter twists and soft landing mercy\'s, the fears voiced in your musings of what unfortunate fate - may yet lie in wait: is completely relatable,
this is truly a mature and well informed write from a person with a strong sense of self and with enough wisdom to face life head-on,
brilliant!
September 16th, 2020 01:51
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderfully authentic write, using easily relatable yet transformative metaphor and imagery in a smooth - seamless delivery,
for some that cling on to a \'positive only\' mindset, your words may ring hollow, but for those of us who have seen the unexpected surrealism of our lives bitter twists and soft landing mercy\'s, the fears voiced in your musings of what unfortunate fate - may yet lie in wait: is completely relatable,
this is truly a mature and well informed write from a person with a strong sense of self and with enough wisdom to face life head-on,
brilliant!
September 16th, 2020 01:51
Empty
dusk arising said:
A metaphor for a life choice to hide away from emotion? Safely decay away from love? But such choice is unnatural - where are the scars which brought one to this barren shell of existence? Signs of a once lived in entity with hopes and dreams..... there must be a secret room, heavily disguised and barricaded where hope and joy once resided too.
Compelling reading.
September 15th, 2020 23:36
dusk arising said:
A metaphor for a life choice to hide away from emotion? Safely decay away from love? But such choice is unnatural - where are the scars which brought one to this barren shell of existence? Signs of a once lived in entity with hopes and dreams..... there must be a secret room, heavily disguised and barricaded where hope and joy once resided too.
Compelling reading.
September 15th, 2020 23:36
Toddler
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Wow a fantastic poem, guess they are all similar then because I have a toddler and it acts the same way, so cutely you pictured yours, I could relate and compare. Totally loved it. Kudos!!
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
September 11th, 2020 07:25
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Wow a fantastic poem, guess they are all similar then because I have a toddler and it acts the same way, so cutely you pictured yours, I could relate and compare. Totally loved it. Kudos!!
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
September 11th, 2020 07:25
solar system
L. B. Mek said:
appreciate how long you kept with the Sun metaphors, its not an easy thing to do, we mostly jump from one source of metaphor to another when we write,
I think that element of continuity has sustained the flow and sincerity in your write,
an engaging read
September 8th, 2020 03:50
L. B. Mek said:
appreciate how long you kept with the Sun metaphors, its not an easy thing to do, we mostly jump from one source of metaphor to another when we write,
I think that element of continuity has sustained the flow and sincerity in your write,
an engaging read
September 8th, 2020 03:50
Petals
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderfully playful perspective of life, these are the writes that let us linger a little longer with the giggles of carefree youth and stave-off our inevitable lilt towards the twilight grey of our lives
September 3rd, 2020 01:40
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderfully playful perspective of life, these are the writes that let us linger a little longer with the giggles of carefree youth and stave-off our inevitable lilt towards the twilight grey of our lives
September 3rd, 2020 01:40
Petals
Neville said:
... that\'s sure one way of looking at it ... and your unexpected ass reference made me smile bigly ... much enjoyed by me Melissa ...
September 2nd, 2020 01:15
Neville said:
... that\'s sure one way of looking at it ... and your unexpected ass reference made me smile bigly ... much enjoyed by me Melissa ...
September 2nd, 2020 01:15
Offensive to be Bipolar
dusk arising said:
And fat people don\'t complain about being called fatty? Bald people about being baldy? One legged people being called peg leg? My learning difficulties daughter being called nutter?
It\'s a cruel world. We need to accept how the uneducated society all around us sees us.
Or do you know a better alternative? Because you cannot change the attitudes and behaviour of the masses just because they hurt you. Proof of that is all around us.
August 29th, 2020 15:38
dusk arising said:
And fat people don\'t complain about being called fatty? Bald people about being baldy? One legged people being called peg leg? My learning difficulties daughter being called nutter?
It\'s a cruel world. We need to accept how the uneducated society all around us sees us.
Or do you know a better alternative? Because you cannot change the attitudes and behaviour of the masses just because they hurt you. Proof of that is all around us.
August 29th, 2020 15:38
Offensive to be Bipolar
Kim Goodell said:
I can relate to your apparent anger. I was diagnosed as being severly depressed in 1990. And it pisses me off when people tell me to \"just get over it\"!!
August 29th, 2020 15:13
Kim Goodell said:
I can relate to your apparent anger. I was diagnosed as being severly depressed in 1990. And it pisses me off when people tell me to \"just get over it\"!!
August 29th, 2020 15:13
I want to love.
mazen.safadi said:
your words moved me... the wild style you write in is unique!
August 27th, 2020 15:07
mazen.safadi said:
your words moved me... the wild style you write in is unique!
August 27th, 2020 15:07
suicidal
L. B. Mek said:
Let it all out!
Then, begin again...
Keep on repeating: that anxiety - frustration - pain is a source of fuel for your creativity, that creativity is a source of healing for your suffering.
\'Rage, rage! Against the dying of the light\' Dylan Thomas
July 28th, 2020 02:55
L. B. Mek said:
Let it all out!
Then, begin again...
Keep on repeating: that anxiety - frustration - pain is a source of fuel for your creativity, that creativity is a source of healing for your suffering.
\'Rage, rage! Against the dying of the light\' Dylan Thomas
July 28th, 2020 02:55
Lovely Little Lie
dusk arising said:
What a wonderful tease in your words today. The beautiful sensual ragged edge of passion oozes from this piece.
July 22nd, 2020 15:56
dusk arising said:
What a wonderful tease in your words today. The beautiful sensual ragged edge of passion oozes from this piece.
July 22nd, 2020 15:56
A Woman in Love
dusk arising said:
Aren\'t we all this fragile when love opens us up and we let another right into our tenderest places. That\'s why love can be so painful. But fulfilled, as you know, it is the most wonderful thing we will ever know.
Some find themselves hungry for love having felt it and lost it. Sadly they fall prey and become victims and damaged by their inate fragile state.
Great post from you today with piercing message and excellent structure.
July 21st, 2020 11:54
dusk arising said:
Aren\'t we all this fragile when love opens us up and we let another right into our tenderest places. That\'s why love can be so painful. But fulfilled, as you know, it is the most wonderful thing we will ever know.
Some find themselves hungry for love having felt it and lost it. Sadly they fall prey and become victims and damaged by their inate fragile state.
Great post from you today with piercing message and excellent structure.
July 21st, 2020 11:54
A Woman in Love
L. B. Mek said:
Intimate, revealing and delicate
appreciate the tone and reemphasised imagery
July 21st, 2020 02:17
L. B. Mek said:
Intimate, revealing and delicate
appreciate the tone and reemphasised imagery
July 21st, 2020 02:17
Carved in Stone
Roselyn said:
\"Always seen, But never known.\"
I loved this part, i resonate well with this idea, perhaps even am the idea.
misunderstood.
xoxo
July 20th, 2020 20:23
Roselyn said:
\"Always seen, But never known.\"
I loved this part, i resonate well with this idea, perhaps even am the idea.
misunderstood.
xoxo
July 20th, 2020 20:23
Carved in Stone
Goldfinch60 said:
In our minds eye we can see the perfection that we perceive in ourselves and we may keep that thought but the people we are has been fashioned from our experience in life and that experience teaches us that our lives will be wonderful as we get older. Now in old age I can look back and see the wonder in life and I am sure there has been and will be wonder in your life Melissa.
Being a sculptor you could carve that image of the person in your mind but the person that you are is the better version.
Enjoy your life
Andy
July 20th, 2020 00:25
Goldfinch60 said:
In our minds eye we can see the perfection that we perceive in ourselves and we may keep that thought but the people we are has been fashioned from our experience in life and that experience teaches us that our lives will be wonderful as we get older. Now in old age I can look back and see the wonder in life and I am sure there has been and will be wonder in your life Melissa.
Being a sculptor you could carve that image of the person in your mind but the person that you are is the better version.
Enjoy your life
Andy
July 20th, 2020 00:25
Carved in Stone
dusk arising said:
One day, your name may be carved in stone and you could today choose the shape of that stone and perhaps an accompanying few words.
The comedian Spike Milligan chose the words ..... I told you I was ill.....
I\'d look better carved in a more desireable shape along with half the other poets on here i dare say too.
When i first heard the words to the Janis Ian song called ...at 17... I felt every word of it. I am much much older now and lived with what i am as we all have had to do. there will always be lesser and greater people than ourselves. But you and me are ..... a child of the universe with as much right to be here as the stars and the trees.....
July 19th, 2020 13:07
dusk arising said:
One day, your name may be carved in stone and you could today choose the shape of that stone and perhaps an accompanying few words.
The comedian Spike Milligan chose the words ..... I told you I was ill.....
I\'d look better carved in a more desireable shape along with half the other poets on here i dare say too.
When i first heard the words to the Janis Ian song called ...at 17... I felt every word of it. I am much much older now and lived with what i am as we all have had to do. there will always be lesser and greater people than ourselves. But you and me are ..... a child of the universe with as much right to be here as the stars and the trees.....
July 19th, 2020 13:07
Once Love
dusk arising said:
It changes. it changes us, teaches us and sometimes deserts us, only to once again teach us. Do we ever stop learning about love? I haven\'t.
Some say .... lifes a bitch, then you die..... but shes a wonderful bitch and theres been sunshine and butterflies along the way.
Perhaps we get new eyes to see differently as time does its stuff and wisdom creeps up on us.
July 18th, 2020 19:12
dusk arising said:
It changes. it changes us, teaches us and sometimes deserts us, only to once again teach us. Do we ever stop learning about love? I haven\'t.
Some say .... lifes a bitch, then you die..... but shes a wonderful bitch and theres been sunshine and butterflies along the way.
Perhaps we get new eyes to see differently as time does its stuff and wisdom creeps up on us.
July 18th, 2020 19:12
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