Comments received on poems by NafisaSB
Mind your business
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve said NO! in some very neat lines Nafisa, They may pay more attention and consider their next line more carefully in future....
April 4th, 2023 02:06
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve said NO! in some very neat lines Nafisa, They may pay more attention and consider their next line more carefully in future....
April 4th, 2023 02:06
Lessons learnt
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
and so true
\'quality over quantity
and
sincerity over simplicity\'
to follow, as other\'s do
to belong to majority\'s, rule
is that safe passage
and choice, in any life
(a short allegory, if you permit me:
used to be, scientist\'s assumed
zebra\'s evolved their black n white stripes
to blend-in with their surroundings
and yet, eventually
logic prevailed and people realised
blank n white, could never blend-in
amongst nature\'s barren desserts and forest green
aesthetics
so then, it became clear
zebra\'s, camouflage themselves
so they blend-in
with each other
as a defence mechanism, see
the odd one out from the herd
is first to be targeted
by nature\'s hunter\'s and bullies...
and in Japan, there is a saying
to avoid, needless allegorical story telling
\'“The nail that sticks out gets hammered down, first”)
and yet this inherited, zeal
for conformity and self-subjugated states
of existence
do not seat easily, with some of us
and it shows
in the choices we make, from the miniscule
to those we let, stand by our sides
as we traverse, this accursed
life of endlessly chaotic, strife
and how do you recognise
these few, who choose
to be true to themselves:
by the glint in their weary eyes
and those smile lines
not too evident, when not in use
but deep as dimpled craters
when they share a laugh, with those
they care about...)
April 3rd, 2023 03:13
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
and so true
\'quality over quantity
and
sincerity over simplicity\'
to follow, as other\'s do
to belong to majority\'s, rule
is that safe passage
and choice, in any life
(a short allegory, if you permit me:
used to be, scientist\'s assumed
zebra\'s evolved their black n white stripes
to blend-in with their surroundings
and yet, eventually
logic prevailed and people realised
blank n white, could never blend-in
amongst nature\'s barren desserts and forest green
aesthetics
so then, it became clear
zebra\'s, camouflage themselves
so they blend-in
with each other
as a defence mechanism, see
the odd one out from the herd
is first to be targeted
by nature\'s hunter\'s and bullies...
and in Japan, there is a saying
to avoid, needless allegorical story telling
\'“The nail that sticks out gets hammered down, first”)
and yet this inherited, zeal
for conformity and self-subjugated states
of existence
do not seat easily, with some of us
and it shows
in the choices we make, from the miniscule
to those we let, stand by our sides
as we traverse, this accursed
life of endlessly chaotic, strife
and how do you recognise
these few, who choose
to be true to themselves:
by the glint in their weary eyes
and those smile lines
not too evident, when not in use
but deep as dimpled craters
when they share a laugh, with those
they care about...)
April 3rd, 2023 03:13
Legacy
L. B. Mek said:
Amen!
so true, dear poet
(indeed, deeds of vanquishing feats
may appeal to youth\'s vehement ideals
but, wiser heads
do realise, it be those small gifts
in life, that reward us
our most meaningful mementos
and curate, with every choice made
the echoing legacy\'s of worth
in those footprints, we leave behind...)
April 3rd, 2023 02:54
L. B. Mek said:
Amen!
so true, dear poet
(indeed, deeds of vanquishing feats
may appeal to youth\'s vehement ideals
but, wiser heads
do realise, it be those small gifts
in life, that reward us
our most meaningful mementos
and curate, with every choice made
the echoing legacy\'s of worth
in those footprints, we leave behind...)
April 3rd, 2023 02:54
Explore
L. B. Mek said:
I so relate, dear poet
(and I too, have learned
to heed wisdom of a heart\'s
innate, whispers
over, logical mind\'s reasoning
assertions...)
April 3rd, 2023 02:46
L. B. Mek said:
I so relate, dear poet
(and I too, have learned
to heed wisdom of a heart\'s
innate, whispers
over, logical mind\'s reasoning
assertions...)
April 3rd, 2023 02:46
Lessons learnt
NafisaSB said:
absolutely - a few good friends will make up for all the fake ones, and sycophants
thanks for your views - have a great weekend
April 2nd, 2023 00:17
NafisaSB said:
absolutely - a few good friends will make up for all the fake ones, and sycophants
thanks for your views - have a great weekend
April 2nd, 2023 00:17
Lessons learnt
Doggerel Dave said:
And learnt well by the feel of it.
The term \'Friends\' is used far too loosely. \'few good friends\' with the emphasis on \'good\' just about covers it.
April 1st, 2023 16:16
Doggerel Dave said:
And learnt well by the feel of it.
The term \'Friends\' is used far too loosely. \'few good friends\' with the emphasis on \'good\' just about covers it.
April 1st, 2023 16:16
F is for father
L. B. Mek said:
lovely words
may he rest in peace, thanks for sharing
March 27th, 2023 05:13
L. B. Mek said:
lovely words
may he rest in peace, thanks for sharing
March 27th, 2023 05:13
the cycle ride
Goldfinch60 said:
Some memories just cannot be forgotten as they were so meaningful.
Andy
March 22nd, 2023 03:45
Goldfinch60 said:
Some memories just cannot be forgotten as they were so meaningful.
Andy
March 22nd, 2023 03:45
all the trinkets
Myth said:
You did cite it correctly. .
Most of the time .. humans do more harm to each other than nature .. It is shame when political elites plan a war, then project every aspect of their decision .. even the number of casualties. . Death toll..!
March 21st, 2023 16:24
Myth said:
You did cite it correctly. .
Most of the time .. humans do more harm to each other than nature .. It is shame when political elites plan a war, then project every aspect of their decision .. even the number of casualties. . Death toll..!
March 21st, 2023 16:24
Gliding
Myth said:
Even if the flight were very short one I always overwhelmed by feeling of abandoning mother earth .. I never thought of writing a poem while I\'m being locked in a metal box and thrown between clouds ..
I wonder is this a poem depicting air flight or just moment of meditation.? .
(In both cases it a 👍piece)
March 20th, 2023 10:14
Myth said:
Even if the flight were very short one I always overwhelmed by feeling of abandoning mother earth .. I never thought of writing a poem while I\'m being locked in a metal box and thrown between clouds ..
I wonder is this a poem depicting air flight or just moment of meditation.? .
(In both cases it a 👍piece)
March 20th, 2023 10:14
Be \'the best\'
Ok Waleed said:
I never liked the point a finger, 4 back at me line. I’ve always thought it was stupid. But good poem
February 12th, 2023 08:34
Ok Waleed said:
I never liked the point a finger, 4 back at me line. I’ve always thought it was stupid. But good poem
February 12th, 2023 08:34
musings-2
jarcher54 said:
The long tradition of poetry to pass on advice and wisdom continues! Sweet little piece.
January 28th, 2023 01:37
jarcher54 said:
The long tradition of poetry to pass on advice and wisdom continues! Sweet little piece.
January 28th, 2023 01:37
Peace of mind
mvvenkataraman said:
Outstanding poem indeed,
Thanks for this real beauty,
Perfect in every aspect,
Carry on to inspire all!
January 19th, 2023 01:50
mvvenkataraman said:
Outstanding poem indeed,
Thanks for this real beauty,
Perfect in every aspect,
Carry on to inspire all!
January 19th, 2023 01:50
Art of living
jarcher54 said:
A nice little throwback to those medieval didactic poems teaching people how to live well. Sometimes a break from modern style is interesting! Thanks.
January 14th, 2023 13:02
jarcher54 said:
A nice little throwback to those medieval didactic poems teaching people how to live well. Sometimes a break from modern style is interesting! Thanks.
January 14th, 2023 13:02
Seventy
jarcher54 said:
I\'m just a couple years behind you... thanks for leading the way with humility and grace!
January 14th, 2023 13:01
jarcher54 said:
I\'m just a couple years behind you... thanks for leading the way with humility and grace!
January 14th, 2023 13:01
who are friends
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful, thanks for sharing
Happy New Year to you, too
January 13th, 2023 05:51
L. B. Mek said:
beautiful, thanks for sharing
Happy New Year to you, too
January 13th, 2023 05:51
in appreciation
mvvenkataraman said:
Thank you for the poem as it has a positive note,
Being positive always shows us the right route!
January 10th, 2023 02:35
mvvenkataraman said:
Thank you for the poem as it has a positive note,
Being positive always shows us the right route!
January 10th, 2023 02:35
Old year vs new
mvvenkataraman said:
I like this reasonable comparison,
You have perfectly analyzed indeed,
A homage to the Old Year kindly
And a well-wish for the New Year!
January 1st, 2023 01:28
mvvenkataraman said:
I like this reasonable comparison,
You have perfectly analyzed indeed,
A homage to the Old Year kindly
And a well-wish for the New Year!
January 1st, 2023 01:28
things i love..
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Yeah i too love doves, grass, flowers, and i esp hate conmen, rats, but i dont hate dogs, i just fear them lots, i dont hate or fear bats though. You expressed in a fab way. Kudos!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Wishing u a happy new year.
December 29th, 2022 12:03
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Yeah i too love doves, grass, flowers, and i esp hate conmen, rats, but i dont hate dogs, i just fear them lots, i dont hate or fear bats though. You expressed in a fab way. Kudos!
Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Wishing u a happy new year.
December 29th, 2022 12:03
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