Comments received on poems by Garth Rakumakoe
Inside Out
L. B. Mek said:
\'Ravaged
by my own \'narcissistic\'
expectations\'..
(there are no \'expectations\'
in narcissism, dear poet
All, is as willed - it just is
or if it fails - to be
its existence, degraded
to irrelevance)
ergo, your way of thinking
doesn\'t denote, narcissistic tendencies
rather, it demonstrates your lack
of it..
When the world is so full of mindset\'s
that oppose our own, we
far - too readily, assume
and internalise, the wrongness
we perceive, in that self-sabotaging
\'it must be me\', ideology.
When in fact
try: as the world might
its us - stubborn few
who see, clearly
its just, we\'re so much
a minority
our vision is belittled, to fantasy.
\'mismatched color virtues
wrinkled and tumble dried;
though never ironed
Perhaps loyalty’s quality
is an overrated double stitch
It seems, when genuine still had longevity
what seemed real was the fantasy\'
(a great write!
with seemingly endless, depth
thanks for sharing)
November 26th, 2021 06:56
L. B. Mek said:
\'Ravaged
by my own \'narcissistic\'
expectations\'..
(there are no \'expectations\'
in narcissism, dear poet
All, is as willed - it just is
or if it fails - to be
its existence, degraded
to irrelevance)
ergo, your way of thinking
doesn\'t denote, narcissistic tendencies
rather, it demonstrates your lack
of it..
When the world is so full of mindset\'s
that oppose our own, we
far - too readily, assume
and internalise, the wrongness
we perceive, in that self-sabotaging
\'it must be me\', ideology.
When in fact
try: as the world might
its us - stubborn few
who see, clearly
its just, we\'re so much
a minority
our vision is belittled, to fantasy.
\'mismatched color virtues
wrinkled and tumble dried;
though never ironed
Perhaps loyalty’s quality
is an overrated double stitch
It seems, when genuine still had longevity
what seemed real was the fantasy\'
(a great write!
with seemingly endless, depth
thanks for sharing)
November 26th, 2021 06:56
The Tele-visions In Their Televisions
spilleronsheet said:
What perfect lines
Tells me stop binge watching and wander and get lost at different sites
Good one dear poet
November 26th, 2021 03:35
spilleronsheet said:
What perfect lines
Tells me stop binge watching and wander and get lost at different sites
Good one dear poet
November 26th, 2021 03:35
The Tele-visions In Their Televisions
Paul Bell said:
There must be a generation who only know life online. This will be the same generation who have never seen the countryside, think milk comes from supermarkets, and will probably die watching the telly. That sure is so sad, but it is what it is.
November 25th, 2021 10:05
Paul Bell said:
There must be a generation who only know life online. This will be the same generation who have never seen the countryside, think milk comes from supermarkets, and will probably die watching the telly. That sure is so sad, but it is what it is.
November 25th, 2021 10:05
The Tele-visions In Their Televisions
L. B. Mek said:
\'who left awander *seeking
the oasis that once germinated
the very roots of his being
and the wisdom of his elders
If only we could learn to read
and follow the stars
like we did before, surely
the cradle still longs our rebirth\'..
(this just beautiful, dear Poet
a hymn for the losses
we accumulate, in trying
to distance ourselves
from the bloodshed, stains
in our collective: heritage...)
when will it end
this cyclical need, to differ
from one generation, to the next
imprinting our foreshadowing, mistakes
for our next generations, pitfalls
of neglect
and far - too, belatedly realised: regret...
November 25th, 2021 06:29
L. B. Mek said:
\'who left awander *seeking
the oasis that once germinated
the very roots of his being
and the wisdom of his elders
If only we could learn to read
and follow the stars
like we did before, surely
the cradle still longs our rebirth\'..
(this just beautiful, dear Poet
a hymn for the losses
we accumulate, in trying
to distance ourselves
from the bloodshed, stains
in our collective: heritage...)
when will it end
this cyclical need, to differ
from one generation, to the next
imprinting our foreshadowing, mistakes
for our next generations, pitfalls
of neglect
and far - too, belatedly realised: regret...
November 25th, 2021 06:29
The Tele-visions In Their Televisions
Neville said:
you should pen another along similar lines & we could make it into a televised serial ... joking aside .. this was both intriguing and compelling my friend .... Neville
November 25th, 2021 05:18
Neville said:
you should pen another along similar lines & we could make it into a televised serial ... joking aside .. this was both intriguing and compelling my friend .... Neville
November 25th, 2021 05:18
The Tele-visions In Their Televisions
Caring dove said:
You certainly have an interesting way with words ! I liked the read 🙂
November 25th, 2021 04:36
Caring dove said:
You certainly have an interesting way with words ! I liked the read 🙂
November 25th, 2021 04:36
Poor Woman
Neville said:
a sad tale told so terribly well .. and held my attention from beginning to end .. The very feel of it made me think back to my days spent volunteering in West Africa .. Top marks from me brother ... N
November 24th, 2021 08:25
Neville said:
a sad tale told so terribly well .. and held my attention from beginning to end .. The very feel of it made me think back to my days spent volunteering in West Africa .. Top marks from me brother ... N
November 24th, 2021 08:25
Poor Woman
Caring dove said:
A good writing , feel sorry for this lady… she sounds sad and alone .
You have expressed yourself nicely in this and it’s an engaging read , although sad
November 24th, 2021 07:01
Caring dove said:
A good writing , feel sorry for this lady… she sounds sad and alone .
You have expressed yourself nicely in this and it’s an engaging read , although sad
November 24th, 2021 07:01
She
Paul Bell said:
This could be, Joan of Arc, formidable in life, betrayed by man.
Isn\'t it strange how you don\'t see women starting wars. Is it because they\'re too busy doing real work..
November 24th, 2021 06:23
Paul Bell said:
This could be, Joan of Arc, formidable in life, betrayed by man.
Isn\'t it strange how you don\'t see women starting wars. Is it because they\'re too busy doing real work..
November 24th, 2021 06:23
She
Nicholas Browning said:
A literary roller coaster, and I like roller coasters.
November 23rd, 2021 11:31
Nicholas Browning said:
A literary roller coaster, and I like roller coasters.
November 23rd, 2021 11:31
She
Neville said:
a real joy to read Garth .. and quite excellent too sir ..... Neville
November 23rd, 2021 08:01
Neville said:
a real joy to read Garth .. and quite excellent too sir ..... Neville
November 23rd, 2021 08:01
She
L. B. Mek said:
\'It has run the length
of a tomorrow\'s expectations
It has journeyed the detours
of hopes delayed
It has travelled the picturesque miles
and like fine wine
emerged refined, wisdom gains
of disappointments and strife\'..
(glad to know
there\'s still some genuine: Men
around
for me to learn from, thank you
for choosing to share, wise Poet)
a Great write!
(if you\'re free, check out one of my older write\'s
titled:
\'adorned, with their petals of thorns\', on page 6
so you can see my feeble attempt
at writing, similar themes
to what, you so eloquently voiced in your pitch-perfect poem today)
November 23rd, 2021 04:15
L. B. Mek said:
\'It has run the length
of a tomorrow\'s expectations
It has journeyed the detours
of hopes delayed
It has travelled the picturesque miles
and like fine wine
emerged refined, wisdom gains
of disappointments and strife\'..
(glad to know
there\'s still some genuine: Men
around
for me to learn from, thank you
for choosing to share, wise Poet)
a Great write!
(if you\'re free, check out one of my older write\'s
titled:
\'adorned, with their petals of thorns\', on page 6
so you can see my feeble attempt
at writing, similar themes
to what, you so eloquently voiced in your pitch-perfect poem today)
November 23rd, 2021 04:15
She
Fay Slimm. said:
First class writing Garth - full of literary surprises this goes straight into my list of favourites.
November 22nd, 2021 14:32
Fay Slimm. said:
First class writing Garth - full of literary surprises this goes straight into my list of favourites.
November 22nd, 2021 14:32
She
Caring dove said:
Great writing ! 🙂 such an engaging read ..
Really like your words
November 22nd, 2021 13:02
Caring dove said:
Great writing ! 🙂 such an engaging read ..
Really like your words
November 22nd, 2021 13:02
Walls Of Hypocrisy
Neville said:
Firstly, it is such a shame this ever had to be writ in the first place ... in the second .. because it was crying out to be writ .. it is just as well that it was writ so superbly ... I\'m write behind you sir ... N
November 22nd, 2021 02:52
Neville said:
Firstly, it is such a shame this ever had to be writ in the first place ... in the second .. because it was crying out to be writ .. it is just as well that it was writ so superbly ... I\'m write behind you sir ... N
November 22nd, 2021 02:52
Salty Tears
Accidental Poet said:
The way I read this, he\'s grieving the loss of his loved one. And her spirit is always with him wanting him to smile and live on with her memory to brighten each new day. Hopefully he will see her light beside him and smile. 😊
November 21st, 2021 10:15
Accidental Poet said:
The way I read this, he\'s grieving the loss of his loved one. And her spirit is always with him wanting him to smile and live on with her memory to brighten each new day. Hopefully he will see her light beside him and smile. 😊
November 21st, 2021 10:15
Salty Tears
Paul Bell said:
You can feel the pain running through this write. The closing of the curtains end another day, and so it goes on. Is there an end for her. Who knows, it\'s the real story of life in the raw.
November 21st, 2021 05:12
Paul Bell said:
You can feel the pain running through this write. The closing of the curtains end another day, and so it goes on. Is there an end for her. Who knows, it\'s the real story of life in the raw.
November 21st, 2021 05:12
Salty Tears
Neville said:
I have always found the saltier the tears, the more genuine they are ...
This has the makings of an excellent story poem Garth and I am mightily impressed with just how you stimulate my own imagination with so many descriptive words and scenes .. I would personally assign top marks .. but I hope others will now follow in the wake I have created and submit their own thoughts also ..
Neville
November 20th, 2021 18:10
Neville said:
I have always found the saltier the tears, the more genuine they are ...
This has the makings of an excellent story poem Garth and I am mightily impressed with just how you stimulate my own imagination with so many descriptive words and scenes .. I would personally assign top marks .. but I hope others will now follow in the wake I have created and submit their own thoughts also ..
Neville
November 20th, 2021 18:10
Walls Of Hypocrisy
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write Garth. So many people will not accept others into their lives for many reasons. One day I hope that ALL will be seen with respect in our world.
Andy
November 20th, 2021 01:47
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good write Garth. So many people will not accept others into their lives for many reasons. One day I hope that ALL will be seen with respect in our world.
Andy
November 20th, 2021 01:47
Walls Of Hypocrisy
spilleronsheet said:
Such a powerful stand you took with fully supportive words
What a powerful poetry
And the title so apt “Walls of hypocrisy”
Well penned dear poet
Keep writing and sharing
November 19th, 2021 15:00
spilleronsheet said:
Such a powerful stand you took with fully supportive words
What a powerful poetry
And the title so apt “Walls of hypocrisy”
Well penned dear poet
Keep writing and sharing
November 19th, 2021 15:00
Walls Of Hypocrisy
Caring dove said:
I especially like the verse before the last … a really engaging read tho .., I like this ) nicely expressed poem and interesting to read
November 19th, 2021 09:38
Caring dove said:
I especially like the verse before the last … a really engaging read tho .., I like this ) nicely expressed poem and interesting to read
November 19th, 2021 09:38
The Mothers We Lost
Neville said:
an impressive and well justified dedication my friend .. beautiful in its very own write .............. Neville
November 18th, 2021 13:57
Neville said:
an impressive and well justified dedication my friend .. beautiful in its very own write .............. Neville
November 18th, 2021 13:57
The Mothers We Lost
Paul Bell said:
We walk in shoes of mothers.
Sometimes you feel a bit grown up when parents die, but still value the advice they would have given you when times were tough.
November 18th, 2021 10:26
Paul Bell said:
We walk in shoes of mothers.
Sometimes you feel a bit grown up when parents die, but still value the advice they would have given you when times were tough.
November 18th, 2021 10:26
The Mothers We Lost
Fay Slimm. said:
Your title drew my attention as it surmounted the worded tribute to mothers who tried their very best to leave us with memories which nothing else could replace. A compelling read dear friend.
November 18th, 2021 09:40
Fay Slimm. said:
Your title drew my attention as it surmounted the worded tribute to mothers who tried their very best to leave us with memories which nothing else could replace. A compelling read dear friend.
November 18th, 2021 09:40
Dove In A Cathedral
Neville said:
You paint a very pretty & vivid picture with the tools of your craft dear poet ..
All Good Things, to you & yours sir ..
Neville
November 16th, 2021 12:31
Neville said:
You paint a very pretty & vivid picture with the tools of your craft dear poet ..
All Good Things, to you & yours sir ..
Neville
November 16th, 2021 12:31
Dove In A Cathedral
Paul Bell said:
A beautiful woman has come into view, and the world is now a better place.
November 16th, 2021 11:30
Paul Bell said:
A beautiful woman has come into view, and the world is now a better place.
November 16th, 2021 11:30
Dove In A Cathedral
Fay Slimm. said:
A most tender and poetically beautiful confession of love that surely no lady could ever refuse.
November 16th, 2021 08:20
Fay Slimm. said:
A most tender and poetically beautiful confession of love that surely no lady could ever refuse.
November 16th, 2021 08:20
Dove In A Cathedral
L. B. Mek said:
love the imagery, not quite sure I\'ve grasped the meaning fully
bust still, a wonderful read
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
November 16th, 2021 07:22
L. B. Mek said:
love the imagery, not quite sure I\'ve grasped the meaning fully
bust still, a wonderful read
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
November 16th, 2021 07:22
Dove In A Cathedral
Job Welime said:
I like this ending\'I am but a dove
You are the Cathedral
and I adore you dearly\'
November 16th, 2021 06:36
Job Welime said:
I like this ending\'I am but a dove
You are the Cathedral
and I adore you dearly\'
November 16th, 2021 06:36
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