Comments received on poems by SHELLY
Who is she?
vividvoid14 said:
this women sounds a lot like my mother. i love the mysterious way you approached the poem good write . keep it up
February 21st, 2024 09:42
vividvoid14 said:
this women sounds a lot like my mother. i love the mysterious way you approached the poem good write . keep it up
February 21st, 2024 09:42
Fragile Life
mvvenkataraman said:
Be kind and considerate always,
Everyone plays a tough game,
Show kindness soon with mercy,
Too late show creates a tragedy !
January 23rd, 2024 08:09
mvvenkataraman said:
Be kind and considerate always,
Everyone plays a tough game,
Show kindness soon with mercy,
Too late show creates a tragedy !
January 23rd, 2024 08:09
Fragile Life
Cassie58 said:
Words of wisdom. We don’t know how long we have got here. Pays to be kind and to mend those broken fences. A good metaphor used here.
January 23rd, 2024 05:09
Cassie58 said:
Words of wisdom. We don’t know how long we have got here. Pays to be kind and to mend those broken fences. A good metaphor used here.
January 23rd, 2024 05:09
Just Be You
novaa said:
\'All you have to simply do
Is to yourself be true \'....Beautiful message. Loved the rhymings.
October 19th, 2023 07:08
novaa said:
\'All you have to simply do
Is to yourself be true \'....Beautiful message. Loved the rhymings.
October 19th, 2023 07:08
Familiar Feeling
Thomas W Case said:
Great job. You describe the mood and feeling well.
October 18th, 2023 09:48
Thomas W Case said:
Great job. You describe the mood and feeling well.
October 18th, 2023 09:48
Familiar Feeling
Firefall said:
Your poem captures that “feeling” perfectly.
October 18th, 2023 08:31
Firefall said:
Your poem captures that “feeling” perfectly.
October 18th, 2023 08:31
Tornado
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully realised, a great read
thanks for sharing
October 13th, 2023 07:21
L. B. Mek said:
wonderfully realised, a great read
thanks for sharing
October 13th, 2023 07:21
L.O.M.L.
L. B. Mek said:
hey,
the distance between friend and lover
is a moonless night, a bottle
and someone
taking that brave step, closer
..
keep hope alive, let miracles
grant you, those gifts in life
(I wish you the best
unless he/she is already spoken for
then I\'ll hope he/she has a twin, free)
lol
October 6th, 2023 08:52
L. B. Mek said:
hey,
the distance between friend and lover
is a moonless night, a bottle
and someone
taking that brave step, closer
..
keep hope alive, let miracles
grant you, those gifts in life
(I wish you the best
unless he/she is already spoken for
then I\'ll hope he/she has a twin, free)
lol
October 6th, 2023 08:52
Empty Promises
janiselizabeth said:
It\'s hard to not see the time we spend with someone that didn\'t treat us well as a waste, because inevitably we think to ourselves, \"I could have been with someone else.\" It robs us of our peace.
October 3rd, 2023 04:44
janiselizabeth said:
It\'s hard to not see the time we spend with someone that didn\'t treat us well as a waste, because inevitably we think to ourselves, \"I could have been with someone else.\" It robs us of our peace.
October 3rd, 2023 04:44
Empty Promises
Neville said:
Heart-rending .. I wonder just how many others have been in the same situation you describe so well ..
I suspect you have poemed one of the reasons I so often despise certain members of my own species ..
I wish you all good things, Neville
October 3rd, 2023 04:26
Neville said:
Heart-rending .. I wonder just how many others have been in the same situation you describe so well ..
I suspect you have poemed one of the reasons I so often despise certain members of my own species ..
I wish you all good things, Neville
October 3rd, 2023 04:26
Lemonade
Neville said:
it\'s what happens .. I enjoyed your ink ma\'am .. Neville
October 2nd, 2023 10:46
Neville said:
it\'s what happens .. I enjoyed your ink ma\'am .. Neville
October 2nd, 2023 10:46
Unknown Love
Christina8 said:
In my younger years I can definitely relate to this. Super powerful poem!
September 30th, 2023 10:40
Christina8 said:
In my younger years I can definitely relate to this. Super powerful poem!
September 30th, 2023 10:40
Unspoken Words
L. B. Mek said:
some of the most fulfilling love stories
don\'t have happily ever after endings
like all things
love comes in may shapes and shades
love is love, nothing can detract
from its brilliance
even packaged in hurt and unfulfilled dreams..
(thanks for sharing, really well written)
September 11th, 2023 04:44
L. B. Mek said:
some of the most fulfilling love stories
don\'t have happily ever after endings
like all things
love comes in may shapes and shades
love is love, nothing can detract
from its brilliance
even packaged in hurt and unfulfilled dreams..
(thanks for sharing, really well written)
September 11th, 2023 04:44
Unspoken Words
Bobby O said:
This suggestion came from a super talented poet and master ofjazz piano and it still helps me today
Write the poem , set it aside for 30 min to an hour. Then begin a rewrite using the first draft as blue print
First, we all get in the habit of pronoun overuse and if “I” appears more than three or 4
Times in the piece, mark ir circle with intentions of holding same basic content or idea but reworded without the pronoun.
Second, we all get in the habit if subject : verb sentence structure. You’ll find that simply shifting that order will add a benefit to Rythym and perhaps provide a different rhyme scheme.
You can kill two birds w one stone if you initially gives on the repeated pronouns I’ll adjust your first stanza using his guidelines
Drawn in by an inviting glance
New joy is mine looking at your face my eyes flutter as if lost in space my head now filled with a swirl of words
Thrill kept unsaid best to stay unheard
I just used your blueprint. You did the creative Then there’s many ways to reshape with just two simple guides.
Thanks for allowing me to share
September 11th, 2023 01:50
Bobby O said:
This suggestion came from a super talented poet and master ofjazz piano and it still helps me today
Write the poem , set it aside for 30 min to an hour. Then begin a rewrite using the first draft as blue print
First, we all get in the habit of pronoun overuse and if “I” appears more than three or 4
Times in the piece, mark ir circle with intentions of holding same basic content or idea but reworded without the pronoun.
Second, we all get in the habit if subject : verb sentence structure. You’ll find that simply shifting that order will add a benefit to Rythym and perhaps provide a different rhyme scheme.
You can kill two birds w one stone if you initially gives on the repeated pronouns I’ll adjust your first stanza using his guidelines
Drawn in by an inviting glance
New joy is mine looking at your face my eyes flutter as if lost in space my head now filled with a swirl of words
Thrill kept unsaid best to stay unheard
I just used your blueprint. You did the creative Then there’s many ways to reshape with just two simple guides.
Thanks for allowing me to share
September 11th, 2023 01:50
Plastic Smile
peto said:
Such a sad situation
The 3rd verse is particularly telling
Great and very emotional writing
August 29th, 2023 05:26
peto said:
Such a sad situation
The 3rd verse is particularly telling
Great and very emotional writing
August 29th, 2023 05:26
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