Comments received on poems by Aman 12
Purple Diary
Doggerel Dave said:
The function of a secret diary well noted. But why here?
The read, smooth and sharp was easy and in its own way entertaining.
November 27th, 2025 05:56
Doggerel Dave said:
The function of a secret diary well noted. But why here?
The read, smooth and sharp was easy and in its own way entertaining.
November 27th, 2025 05:56
Purple Diary
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of recorded private history in the form of a diary. I love the line \"It wheezes loud like broken trumpets\" this leaves the feeling that what it contains is earnest but maybe not totally accurate, a one sided view perhaps. Well written
November 27th, 2025 04:14
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of recorded private history in the form of a diary. I love the line \"It wheezes loud like broken trumpets\" this leaves the feeling that what it contains is earnest but maybe not totally accurate, a one sided view perhaps. Well written
November 27th, 2025 04:14
Sharks
Doggerel Dave said:
Your commentary made it for me. Each of your statistics could be woven into separate pins with the chance of separate solutions Your home page tells me nothing of whom you are.
Poem retained my interest though.
November 26th, 2025 19:17
Doggerel Dave said:
Your commentary made it for me. Each of your statistics could be woven into separate pins with the chance of separate solutions Your home page tells me nothing of whom you are.
Poem retained my interest though.
November 26th, 2025 19:17
Sharks
sorenbarrett said:
The metaphor is a great one that speaks loudly. The author\'s note was quite helpful in narrowing the meaning and putting the poem in context. Women encounter different hazards in life and with the women\'s movement in latter years their struggle has become more widely known. Men\'s story has been neglected in this tide lacks representation. Very nicely written
November 26th, 2025 04:36
sorenbarrett said:
The metaphor is a great one that speaks loudly. The author\'s note was quite helpful in narrowing the meaning and putting the poem in context. Women encounter different hazards in life and with the women\'s movement in latter years their struggle has become more widely known. Men\'s story has been neglected in this tide lacks representation. Very nicely written
November 26th, 2025 04:36
Tailor
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Woweee totally impressive awesome content, rhyming and flow, Kudos aplenty!!!
Last stanza was a moral jewel in the crown of entire poem!
Plz also read and comment on my newest poem
November 25th, 2025 11:18
🐤s.zaynab.kamoonpuri🌷🐦😽 said:
Woweee totally impressive awesome content, rhyming and flow, Kudos aplenty!!!
Last stanza was a moral jewel in the crown of entire poem!
Plz also read and comment on my newest poem
November 25th, 2025 11:18
Tailor
sorenbarrett said:
There are a few characteristics that human\'s possess and those are lust and greed. Capitalism thrives on them with top sellers being sex, power, wealth and fame. A lovely poem that emphasizes at least one if not more of these. Well done
November 24th, 2025 04:06
sorenbarrett said:
There are a few characteristics that human\'s possess and those are lust and greed. Capitalism thrives on them with top sellers being sex, power, wealth and fame. A lovely poem that emphasizes at least one if not more of these. Well done
November 24th, 2025 04:06
Boundless Skin
sorenbarrett said:
Beautiful it speaks with the savor of Arabic poetry a seasoning of the east. It is lovely in its vivid images and associations. Loved it satisfying my taste for the exotic
November 22nd, 2025 06:48
sorenbarrett said:
Beautiful it speaks with the savor of Arabic poetry a seasoning of the east. It is lovely in its vivid images and associations. Loved it satisfying my taste for the exotic
November 22nd, 2025 06:48
Revenge Needed Me
sorenbarrett said:
Every once in a while I read a poem that I wish I had written and this is one. Most wonderful it is
November 21st, 2025 07:41
sorenbarrett said:
Every once in a while I read a poem that I wish I had written and this is one. Most wonderful it is
November 21st, 2025 07:41
Tragedy of Intellect
sorenbarrett said:
A great critique on comedy as seen in our era. Put in poetic form with good rhyme and meter it turns itself into a sonnet. Well done
November 20th, 2025 03:48
sorenbarrett said:
A great critique on comedy as seen in our era. Put in poetic form with good rhyme and meter it turns itself into a sonnet. Well done
November 20th, 2025 03:48
Butter storms
sorenbarrett said:
Such a good write. A easily identifiable life that serves as a metaphor for the development of some relationships or rather the deterioration of them. Nicely done.
November 19th, 2025 08:16
sorenbarrett said:
Such a good write. A easily identifiable life that serves as a metaphor for the development of some relationships or rather the deterioration of them. Nicely done.
November 19th, 2025 08:16
Jingle Bells
sorenbarrett said:
Funny how tradition melts into plastic and candles become LED lights. Christmas is Christmas where fifty percent of sales are made over things that no one needs be feel obligated to buy. A lovely satirical write that I happen to agree with one hundred percent. Well written and a fave
November 17th, 2025 11:18
sorenbarrett said:
Funny how tradition melts into plastic and candles become LED lights. Christmas is Christmas where fifty percent of sales are made over things that no one needs be feel obligated to buy. A lovely satirical write that I happen to agree with one hundred percent. Well written and a fave
November 17th, 2025 11:18
Who
sorenbarrett said:
A fave for the creativity in subject and manner of expressing it in metaphor and allegory. Loved the cynical approach to societies establishment of rules or customs for social convenience. Nicely done
November 15th, 2025 03:52
sorenbarrett said:
A fave for the creativity in subject and manner of expressing it in metaphor and allegory. Loved the cynical approach to societies establishment of rules or customs for social convenience. Nicely done
November 15th, 2025 03:52
Nest of Stillborn Rats
sorenbarrett said:
A poem full of allegories that cast shadows of violence in a darkening world. We still live in a world where we fight over who\'s god is bigger.
November 14th, 2025 03:58
sorenbarrett said:
A poem full of allegories that cast shadows of violence in a darkening world. We still live in a world where we fight over who\'s god is bigger.
November 14th, 2025 03:58
Twice
sorenbarrett said:
Didn\'t realize that it was declared twice this makes a good deal of sense in the poem. Well written with graphic images that rattle the bones, jar the brain and shrivel the innards. Dark and sad it is a haunting tragedy
November 12th, 2025 08:43
sorenbarrett said:
Didn\'t realize that it was declared twice this makes a good deal of sense in the poem. Well written with graphic images that rattle the bones, jar the brain and shrivel the innards. Dark and sad it is a haunting tragedy
November 12th, 2025 08:43
Chilled Champagne
sorenbarrett said:
Veiled in metaphor this poem holds deep criticism of man\'s iron irony. I loved
\"Dolphins flesh ruptures
floating belly-up, they wash
ashore beside plastic rosaries.\"
What an image, metaphor and satire all in one. This poem is masterful and plays out to the end. A fave
November 11th, 2025 07:28
sorenbarrett said:
Veiled in metaphor this poem holds deep criticism of man\'s iron irony. I loved
\"Dolphins flesh ruptures
floating belly-up, they wash
ashore beside plastic rosaries.\"
What an image, metaphor and satire all in one. This poem is masterful and plays out to the end. A fave
November 11th, 2025 07:28
Happiness
sorenbarrett said:
A great metaphor told in good rhyme and meter making a great narrative with a moral. Well done
November 7th, 2025 08:33
sorenbarrett said:
A great metaphor told in good rhyme and meter making a great narrative with a moral. Well done
November 7th, 2025 08:33
Bootprints in Bellies
sorenbarrett said:
This poem is brutally raw and explicit in its metaphors. It is hard to read but then so too is reality. Its imagery is graphic and its message most pertinent. It calls out against the savagery of war and mankind. In the last line there is a double twist where a glimmer of hope is given to women\'s control as bleak and dark as that might be. A fave
November 5th, 2025 04:00
sorenbarrett said:
This poem is brutally raw and explicit in its metaphors. It is hard to read but then so too is reality. Its imagery is graphic and its message most pertinent. It calls out against the savagery of war and mankind. In the last line there is a double twist where a glimmer of hope is given to women\'s control as bleak and dark as that might be. A fave
November 5th, 2025 04:00
Dearest November
sorenbarrett said:
Most poetic lines paint this poem with colors and feelings The whole first stanza is a painting. Most lovely
November 3rd, 2025 09:17
sorenbarrett said:
Most poetic lines paint this poem with colors and feelings The whole first stanza is a painting. Most lovely
November 3rd, 2025 09:17
Advice
sorenbarrett said:
So nicely rhymed this poem fits so well with the term it portrays. It flows like advice free and given on every side. A wonderful poem and a fave
November 2nd, 2025 05:03
sorenbarrett said:
So nicely rhymed this poem fits so well with the term it portrays. It flows like advice free and given on every side. A wonderful poem and a fave
November 2nd, 2025 05:03
Raised by Mannequin
Rocky Lagou said:
Oooof this is great! I love a good persona poem and this perspective from which you write from is very eye opening. “Silent saints of scarcity.” Ah! I love me a good alliterative line.
November 1st, 2025 09:39
Rocky Lagou said:
Oooof this is great! I love a good persona poem and this perspective from which you write from is very eye opening. “Silent saints of scarcity.” Ah! I love me a good alliterative line.
November 1st, 2025 09:39
Raised by Mannequin
sorenbarrett said:
This is creative and individualistic in nature a great metaphor of consumerism painted in a mannequin and of capitalism in a store window and shopping cart. Lovely
November 1st, 2025 04:25
sorenbarrett said:
This is creative and individualistic in nature a great metaphor of consumerism painted in a mannequin and of capitalism in a store window and shopping cart. Lovely
November 1st, 2025 04:25
Oranges
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of metaphor where oranges and lemons are the fruits of the garden and the seeds sprout. Well done
October 30th, 2025 09:54
sorenbarrett said:
A poem of metaphor where oranges and lemons are the fruits of the garden and the seeds sprout. Well done
October 30th, 2025 09:54
Clock
sorenbarrett said:
A great metaphor in this poem. Are we not like the clock. A fun read full of great images as well it ticks its way along and winds down and I was expecting it to say (apart) rather than part at the end.
October 29th, 2025 10:19
sorenbarrett said:
A great metaphor in this poem. Are we not like the clock. A fun read full of great images as well it ticks its way along and winds down and I was expecting it to say (apart) rather than part at the end.
October 29th, 2025 10:19
Clout
sorenbarrett said:
Such social commentary in vivid metaphor that uncovers civility\'s darker nature and false front. So well imaged and with great rhyme and flow. It mirrors the veneer of society and what lays beneath.
October 28th, 2025 07:52
sorenbarrett said:
Such social commentary in vivid metaphor that uncovers civility\'s darker nature and false front. So well imaged and with great rhyme and flow. It mirrors the veneer of society and what lays beneath.
October 28th, 2025 07:52
Decorated Mule
sorenbarrett said:
For those in power ignorance of the masses is in their best interest. A lovely write of a dystopia not far from where we are.
October 27th, 2025 06:54
sorenbarrett said:
For those in power ignorance of the masses is in their best interest. A lovely write of a dystopia not far from where we are.
October 27th, 2025 06:54
Tabled, as always
sorenbarrett said:
The old saying (opinions are like assholes everybody has one) but actually they are more like fingerprints with everyone\'s being different. There are no right ones or wrong just different and everyone thinks that theirs is sacred. Wars are started that way. A good write
October 25th, 2025 09:56
sorenbarrett said:
The old saying (opinions are like assholes everybody has one) but actually they are more like fingerprints with everyone\'s being different. There are no right ones or wrong just different and everyone thinks that theirs is sacred. Wars are started that way. A good write
October 25th, 2025 09:56
Yet to
sorenbarrett said:
A poem that speaks of women as a commodity to be looked at, coveted, lusted after, bought and sold. Well written
October 23rd, 2025 06:43
sorenbarrett said:
A poem that speaks of women as a commodity to be looked at, coveted, lusted after, bought and sold. Well written
October 23rd, 2025 06:43
Curses are Nurses
sorenbarrett said:
Mixing clever wordplay and rhyme this poem sends its message well. Fun to read and with a good message it is a fave
October 21st, 2025 06:54
sorenbarrett said:
Mixing clever wordplay and rhyme this poem sends its message well. Fun to read and with a good message it is a fave
October 21st, 2025 06:54
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