Comments received on poems by Tony36
Secret Love
Goldfinch60 said:
There are many occasions like this, if only they would ask, the worse that could happen is they would answer no. Good write.
July 7th, 2017 00:39
Goldfinch60 said:
There are many occasions like this, if only they would ask, the worse that could happen is they would answer no. Good write.
July 7th, 2017 00:39
Secret Love
FredPeyer said:
Unrequited love painted so well in your poem. The longing for her love practically jumps off the page.
I like it a lot.
July 6th, 2017 19:06
FredPeyer said:
Unrequited love painted so well in your poem. The longing for her love practically jumps off the page.
I like it a lot.
July 6th, 2017 19:06
Secret Love
Michael Edwards said:
I feel for this chap - deeply moving write Tony
July 6th, 2017 13:45
Michael Edwards said:
I feel for this chap - deeply moving write Tony
July 6th, 2017 13:45
Secret Love
Fay Slimm. said:
Shyness can wreck all our good intentions - hope the time came to declare his love. A sad but moving read.
July 6th, 2017 13:35
Fay Slimm. said:
Shyness can wreck all our good intentions - hope the time came to declare his love. A sad but moving read.
July 6th, 2017 13:35
Secret Love
Cyprian Van Dyke said:
Isn\'t this how the story always goes in reality, or in literature. It\'s sad. But I liked the way you wrote it. Tyfs!
July 6th, 2017 11:29
Cyprian Van Dyke said:
Isn\'t this how the story always goes in reality, or in literature. It\'s sad. But I liked the way you wrote it. Tyfs!
July 6th, 2017 11:29
Secret Love
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks TONY ~ we inherit our personalities: Introvert ~ Neutral ~ Extrovert from our Parents GENES (you can\'t chose your Birth Parents !) and Society does shape and reshape a little but not much. An extrovert Girl usually chooses a JOCK which leaves your \"Subject\" in limbo ! However I have known some really WILD GIRLS to choose a nice quiet steady Guy (like me !) because we give them stability ! SO there is some hope for your SAD SACK but only if he sheds his shell and puts himself about ! Yours BRIAN
July 6th, 2017 11:25
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks TONY ~ we inherit our personalities: Introvert ~ Neutral ~ Extrovert from our Parents GENES (you can\'t chose your Birth Parents !) and Society does shape and reshape a little but not much. An extrovert Girl usually chooses a JOCK which leaves your \"Subject\" in limbo ! However I have known some really WILD GIRLS to choose a nice quiet steady Guy (like me !) because we give them stability ! SO there is some hope for your SAD SACK but only if he sheds his shell and puts himself about ! Yours BRIAN
July 6th, 2017 11:25
Secret Love
burning-embers said:
Sad isn\'t it this chap seems to be in a lot of poems i read on here. You brought out his dilemma here. I love to meet him and ask what have u got to lose ? go up and ask her out, she\'ll never notice you if u just keep hiding.
Give her a rose one day and tell her \"i just wanted to give you something beautiful\".
July 6th, 2017 10:56
burning-embers said:
Sad isn\'t it this chap seems to be in a lot of poems i read on here. You brought out his dilemma here. I love to meet him and ask what have u got to lose ? go up and ask her out, she\'ll never notice you if u just keep hiding.
Give her a rose one day and tell her \"i just wanted to give you something beautiful\".
July 6th, 2017 10:56
Beautiful
AmandaJade said:
I personally enjoyed this piece! There are so many ways of expression when it comes to writing and there definitely isn\'t just ONE way to do things, this was beautifully expressed and your writing style is perfect as it is!
July 5th, 2017 11:35
AmandaJade said:
I personally enjoyed this piece! There are so many ways of expression when it comes to writing and there definitely isn\'t just ONE way to do things, this was beautifully expressed and your writing style is perfect as it is!
July 5th, 2017 11:35
Beautiful
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
Poems made out of words, are quite nice. You have really tried here to do a work of art in doing this. I am a bit OCD about my poetry. It would be nice if you kept to the meter of your first line, and included the same amount of syllables in the other lines. Also, if your going to keep it the way it is I would change the word Unrestraint to Unrestrained. I think it is a typo. Secondly I would suggest practicing show not tell. Talk to us about what you know, and what you consider to be beautiful. What is the beauty of heart mind and soul look like in your surroundings? Lastly add commas where they are appropriate. This is a great rough draft, and you show some poetic promise in it. I hope that you can edit it, and make it truly beautiful. As it is if I were to grade it I would give it a 4/10.
July 5th, 2017 10:20
Stephen.Sapaugh said:
Poems made out of words, are quite nice. You have really tried here to do a work of art in doing this. I am a bit OCD about my poetry. It would be nice if you kept to the meter of your first line, and included the same amount of syllables in the other lines. Also, if your going to keep it the way it is I would change the word Unrestraint to Unrestrained. I think it is a typo. Secondly I would suggest practicing show not tell. Talk to us about what you know, and what you consider to be beautiful. What is the beauty of heart mind and soul look like in your surroundings? Lastly add commas where they are appropriate. This is a great rough draft, and you show some poetic promise in it. I hope that you can edit it, and make it truly beautiful. As it is if I were to grade it I would give it a 4/10.
July 5th, 2017 10:20
I will not change a word
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true, you are right to do what you did, nobody should tell you what you write is not suitable, that is an individual opinion. As we all know some like our words and some do not but that is the way of the world. NOBODY should tell you/us that we should not allow others to hear our words.
July 4th, 2017 02:08
Goldfinch60 said:
So very true, you are right to do what you did, nobody should tell you what you write is not suitable, that is an individual opinion. As we all know some like our words and some do not but that is the way of the world. NOBODY should tell you/us that we should not allow others to hear our words.
July 4th, 2017 02:08
I will not change a word
Fay Slimm. said:
You stood up for freedom of expression which in coming from heart and soul cannot be denied. This applies to all other writers and poets of course so - -- Bravo , I do admire you Tony.
July 3rd, 2017 13:42
Fay Slimm. said:
You stood up for freedom of expression which in coming from heart and soul cannot be denied. This applies to all other writers and poets of course so - -- Bravo , I do admire you Tony.
July 3rd, 2017 13:42
I will not change a word
malubotelho said:
Nice write. Greetings. You have a brave heart.
July 3rd, 2017 13:29
malubotelho said:
Nice write. Greetings. You have a brave heart.
July 3rd, 2017 13:29
I will not change a word
Louis Gibbs said:
As you evolve as a poet you may learn to express your deep felt emotion in a way that becomes more acceptable, and thereby reaches a wider audience. Never stop expressing deeply. Good poem, Tony!
July 3rd, 2017 13:02
Louis Gibbs said:
As you evolve as a poet you may learn to express your deep felt emotion in a way that becomes more acceptable, and thereby reaches a wider audience. Never stop expressing deeply. Good poem, Tony!
July 3rd, 2017 13:02
I will not change a word
burning-embers said:
The words of Billy Joel come to mind. \'Don\'t go changing to try and please me. You never let me down before. Don\'t imagine you\'re too familiar, and i don\'t see you anymore\'.
I wish i had been there sir!
July 3rd, 2017 12:36
burning-embers said:
The words of Billy Joel come to mind. \'Don\'t go changing to try and please me. You never let me down before. Don\'t imagine you\'re too familiar, and i don\'t see you anymore\'.
I wish i had been there sir!
July 3rd, 2017 12:36
I will not change a word
Michael Edwards said:
Brilliant - would love to do what you did .
July 3rd, 2017 12:12
Michael Edwards said:
Brilliant - would love to do what you did .
July 3rd, 2017 12:12
Color of Skin
Goldfinch60 said:
Very, very true. I do wish more people would live to this ideal of life.
June 30th, 2017 00:45
Goldfinch60 said:
Very, very true. I do wish more people would live to this ideal of life.
June 30th, 2017 00:45
Color of Skin
FredPeyer said:
It is sad that we have to be told, but little children never have any problem with skin color before they are \"contaminated\" by the outside. By the way, my wife is Chinese, but all I see is the woman I love, not the color.
June 29th, 2017 22:10
FredPeyer said:
It is sad that we have to be told, but little children never have any problem with skin color before they are \"contaminated\" by the outside. By the way, my wife is Chinese, but all I see is the woman I love, not the color.
June 29th, 2017 22:10
Color of Skin
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
JESUS love the little Children ~ All the Children of the World ~ Brown and Yellow ~ Black and White ~all are precious in His sight ~ JESUS loves unequivocally ~ All the People of the World ~ AMEN ~ BRIAN
June 29th, 2017 17:42
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
JESUS love the little Children ~ All the Children of the World ~ Brown and Yellow ~ Black and White ~all are precious in His sight ~ JESUS loves unequivocally ~ All the People of the World ~ AMEN ~ BRIAN
June 29th, 2017 17:42
Color of Skin
Michael Edwards said:
This means so much to me - my wife is from Burma but I\'m pleased to say she has always been accepted and never suffered from race issues - oh if that were only the case for all people who differ from the indigenous race.
June 29th, 2017 12:41
Michael Edwards said:
This means so much to me - my wife is from Burma but I\'m pleased to say she has always been accepted and never suffered from race issues - oh if that were only the case for all people who differ from the indigenous race.
June 29th, 2017 12:41
As a poet
Christina8 said:
I really liked this poem Tony! These words really seem to come from the heart. Very nice!
June 29th, 2017 12:03
Christina8 said:
I really liked this poem Tony! These words really seem to come from the heart. Very nice!
June 29th, 2017 12:03
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