Comments received on poems by Shadowbox15
An Obsession of Life and Death
Christina8 said:
I think this is a wonderful write!
June 2nd, 2018 19:39
Christina8 said:
I think this is a wonderful write!
June 2nd, 2018 19:39
A Lucky Poodle
rheaume76 said:
Great job. Please keep writing, just please try to assure accuracy by doing fact-checking in the future. Inaccuracy pulls readers like me out of the experience. The reason I say this is because poodles are well-known and beloved for being one of the few non-shedding dog breeds, so it doesn\'t make sense that her poodle would be shedding all over her. I know because I have had a standard poodle for a decade. I also know toy and miniature poodle owners. Keep writing, though! I don\'t mean to discourage you. I mean this constructively. All the best!
February 26th, 2018 13:59
rheaume76 said:
Great job. Please keep writing, just please try to assure accuracy by doing fact-checking in the future. Inaccuracy pulls readers like me out of the experience. The reason I say this is because poodles are well-known and beloved for being one of the few non-shedding dog breeds, so it doesn\'t make sense that her poodle would be shedding all over her. I know because I have had a standard poodle for a decade. I also know toy and miniature poodle owners. Keep writing, though! I don\'t mean to discourage you. I mean this constructively. All the best!
February 26th, 2018 13:59
Senses
Aislinn Wilson said:
Well, this tickled my own senses, mission accomplished. Fun write.
January 29th, 2018 13:27
Aislinn Wilson said:
Well, this tickled my own senses, mission accomplished. Fun write.
January 29th, 2018 13:27
self~love
Lorna said:
I think some people look in a mirror to try very hard to love something about themselves.
January 18th, 2018 18:26
Lorna said:
I think some people look in a mirror to try very hard to love something about themselves.
January 18th, 2018 18:26
Fairy Wings~A Slam Poem
Janie said:
I love this and i would loooove to see it performed :):)
January 12th, 2018 19:58
Janie said:
I love this and i would loooove to see it performed :):)
January 12th, 2018 19:58
games
dusk arising said:
erm..... i\'m 65. after a while you really get fed up with those games and when the real thing comes along (and i just found it again) it\'s a treasure. Just like it\'s supposed to be.
Nice writing.
January 8th, 2018 20:55
dusk arising said:
erm..... i\'m 65. after a while you really get fed up with those games and when the real thing comes along (and i just found it again) it\'s a treasure. Just like it\'s supposed to be.
Nice writing.
January 8th, 2018 20:55
Holding back
Jessie said:
I like this a lot. It is relatable and well written.
January 6th, 2018 14:53
Jessie said:
I like this a lot. It is relatable and well written.
January 6th, 2018 14:53
self~love
Clarita said:
very true but mighty difficult for some to acknowledge
January 1st, 2018 23:56
Clarita said:
very true but mighty difficult for some to acknowledge
January 1st, 2018 23:56
Playgrounds
poelove said:
loved the transitive nature of this write . From the young child\'s enjoyment to the elder child\'s reflections and enjoyment of memories...another well thought out provoking poem
December 31st, 2017 08:03
poelove said:
loved the transitive nature of this write . From the young child\'s enjoyment to the elder child\'s reflections and enjoyment of memories...another well thought out provoking poem
December 31st, 2017 08:03
Schizophrenia
poelove said:
its always good for a poet to be able to contemplate the many different options our thoughts offer.
December 31st, 2017 07:52
poelove said:
its always good for a poet to be able to contemplate the many different options our thoughts offer.
December 31st, 2017 07:52
I am (The Ocean)
poelove said:
I say \'you are a poet\"
(might be some typos here the word day (twice) possibly hit the wrong key? I suspect you meant to type \'say\'
December 31st, 2017 07:45
poelove said:
I say \'you are a poet\"
(might be some typos here the word day (twice) possibly hit the wrong key? I suspect you meant to type \'say\'
December 31st, 2017 07:45
Glass
Christina8 said:
What a profound write! Would we shatter into a million pieces or would we remain strong? I really like this!
December 30th, 2017 14:19
Christina8 said:
What a profound write! Would we shatter into a million pieces or would we remain strong? I really like this!
December 30th, 2017 14:19
honestly,
Michael Edwards said:
Observations of reality are often not articulated - well observed - great little piece of work.
Just looked through your portfolio and there are some great writes - loads of talent - carry on writing and posting.
December 27th, 2017 11:50
Michael Edwards said:
Observations of reality are often not articulated - well observed - great little piece of work.
Just looked through your portfolio and there are some great writes - loads of talent - carry on writing and posting.
December 27th, 2017 11:50
Let you go
Lost at the beginning said:
This is beautifully said and it’s so true. I’ve had to do this with many past loves as well. Trust me that it will get better
Much love,
Travezty
December 25th, 2017 00:35
Lost at the beginning said:
This is beautifully said and it’s so true. I’ve had to do this with many past loves as well. Trust me that it will get better
Much love,
Travezty
December 25th, 2017 00:35
Torture~An Attempted Sonnet
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELL DONE SHADOW ~ This is a Sonnet ! I teach the FORM & FUNCTION of Poetry to Adults and they often ask \"What is a Sonnet\". There are certain basic criteria most of which you fulfil !
1. It must have exactly 14 lines !
2. Rhyme Pattern: There are a variety of Rhyme Patterns (check in Google) or it can be Blank Verse ~ Each line has the same number of syllables. In your Poem 5 lines (3 4 5 8 & 12) have IAMBIC PENTAMETER (10 syllables in each line) the other lines are close and could easily be tweaked to be IP ! It can also be FREE VERSE (No Rhyme & No Rhythm) ! Shakespeare is easy to read and recite because it is BLANK VERSE (I am a Performance Poet) which gives it RHTHYM (one of the criteria of good poetry !) and RECITABILITY ! Poetry is an ORAL ART !
3. Versification: There are generally counter themes in sonnets. THEME ONE ~ Torture ~ ends at line 8 which is effectively the end of verse ONE ~ THEME TWO (Verse two) ~ Secrets ~ begins at line 9 ~ so it is an 8 ~ 6 Sonnet !
I liked the themes of your \"SONNET\" ~ Hundreds of People are subject to Torture & Interrogation every day ~ so it is an \"interesting\" topic to choose ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
December 19th, 2017 08:37
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
WELL DONE SHADOW ~ This is a Sonnet ! I teach the FORM & FUNCTION of Poetry to Adults and they often ask \"What is a Sonnet\". There are certain basic criteria most of which you fulfil !
1. It must have exactly 14 lines !
2. Rhyme Pattern: There are a variety of Rhyme Patterns (check in Google) or it can be Blank Verse ~ Each line has the same number of syllables. In your Poem 5 lines (3 4 5 8 & 12) have IAMBIC PENTAMETER (10 syllables in each line) the other lines are close and could easily be tweaked to be IP ! It can also be FREE VERSE (No Rhyme & No Rhythm) ! Shakespeare is easy to read and recite because it is BLANK VERSE (I am a Performance Poet) which gives it RHTHYM (one of the criteria of good poetry !) and RECITABILITY ! Poetry is an ORAL ART !
3. Versification: There are generally counter themes in sonnets. THEME ONE ~ Torture ~ ends at line 8 which is effectively the end of verse ONE ~ THEME TWO (Verse two) ~ Secrets ~ begins at line 9 ~ so it is an 8 ~ 6 Sonnet !
I liked the themes of your \"SONNET\" ~ Hundreds of People are subject to Torture & Interrogation every day ~ so it is an \"interesting\" topic to choose ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN
December 19th, 2017 08:37
Playgrounds
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks SHADOW ~ Lovely poem that brought back many memories of \"Playgrounds in the SUN\" In the UK we have excellent Playgrounds in all our Primary Schools ~ Villages and Parks with swings and slides etc. In our Secondary Schools we have Playing Fields and Tennis Courts etc ! I love CANADA and the Canadians ~ you have so much space ! I have visited Vancouver ~ Jasper ~ Banf ~ Calgary also Niagara (Horseshoe Falls) and Toronto also Grand Manan Island ! At night I always have hot milk with Canadian Maple Syrup ~ beautiful ~ The structure of your poem was excellent ! Yours Brian (UK)
December 10th, 2017 11:10
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks SHADOW ~ Lovely poem that brought back many memories of \"Playgrounds in the SUN\" In the UK we have excellent Playgrounds in all our Primary Schools ~ Villages and Parks with swings and slides etc. In our Secondary Schools we have Playing Fields and Tennis Courts etc ! I love CANADA and the Canadians ~ you have so much space ! I have visited Vancouver ~ Jasper ~ Banf ~ Calgary also Niagara (Horseshoe Falls) and Toronto also Grand Manan Island ! At night I always have hot milk with Canadian Maple Syrup ~ beautiful ~ The structure of your poem was excellent ! Yours Brian (UK)
December 10th, 2017 11:10
Pearls
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks SHADOW for some very sound avice ! God looked at ADAM and thought ~ We can do better than that ! So he created EVE ~ PERFECTION ! My MUM tauht me to always respect Ladies and treat them with TLC and I always DO ! Because of this they NEVER EVER walk away ~ AMEN ! Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check todays POEM and my FUSION on CHRISTMAS ~ Thanks B. To access the FUSION you scroll down to FUSIONS and click on DEVELOPING which will reveal it ~ OK ~ BRIAN
November 29th, 2017 11:52
BRIAN & ANGELA said:
Thanks SHADOW for some very sound avice ! God looked at ADAM and thought ~ We can do better than that ! So he created EVE ~ PERFECTION ! My MUM tauht me to always respect Ladies and treat them with TLC and I always DO ! Because of this they NEVER EVER walk away ~ AMEN ! Yours BRIAN (UK) Please check todays POEM and my FUSION on CHRISTMAS ~ Thanks B. To access the FUSION you scroll down to FUSIONS and click on DEVELOPING which will reveal it ~ OK ~ BRIAN
November 29th, 2017 11:52
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