Comments received on poems by Shadowbox15



An Obsession of Life and Death
Christina8 said:

I think this is a wonderful write!

June 2nd, 2018 19:39

A Lucky Poodle
rheaume76 said:

Great job. Please keep writing, just please try to assure accuracy by doing fact-checking in the future. Inaccuracy pulls readers like me out of the experience. The reason I say this is because poodles are well-known and beloved for being one of the few non-shedding dog breeds, so it doesn\'t make sense that her poodle would be shedding all over her. I know because I have had a standard poodle for a decade. I also know toy and miniature poodle owners. Keep writing, though! I don\'t mean to discourage you. I mean this constructively. All the best!

February 26th, 2018 13:59

Senses
Aislinn Wilson said:

Well, this tickled my own senses, mission accomplished. Fun write.

January 29th, 2018 13:27

To the boy I’ve never met~a slam poem
Lorna said:

Very touching............

January 25th, 2018 05:09

self~love
Lorna said:

I think some people look in a mirror to try very hard to love something about themselves.

January 18th, 2018 18:26

Il me t\'aime/He loves me
Lorna said:

Yes..... beautiful.

January 18th, 2018 18:24

Il me t\'aime/He loves me
Heather T said:

Lovely and delicately written.

January 18th, 2018 18:15

Predator
Jessie said:

Great write, great imagery

January 15th, 2018 12:25

Fairy Wings~A Slam Poem
Janie said:

I love this and i would loooove to see it performed :):)

January 12th, 2018 19:58

games
dusk arising said:

erm..... i\'m 65. after a while you really get fed up with those games and when the real thing comes along (and i just found it again) it\'s a treasure. Just like it\'s supposed to be.
Nice writing.

January 8th, 2018 20:55

Holding back
Jessie said:

I like this a lot. It is relatable and well written.

January 6th, 2018 14:53

lonely~ little red fox
Tony36 said:

Great write

January 4th, 2018 17:02

Holding back
Goldfinch60 said:

Good emotive write.

January 3rd, 2018 01:49

Holding back
Tony36 said:

Well written and expressed

January 2nd, 2018 16:18

self~love
Clarita said:

very true but mighty difficult for some to acknowledge

January 1st, 2018 23:56

self~love
Jayce Elliot said:

I agree

January 1st, 2018 16:16

Playgrounds
poelove said:

loved the transitive nature of this write . From the young child\'s enjoyment to the elder child\'s reflections and enjoyment of memories...another well thought out provoking poem

December 31st, 2017 08:03

Schizophrenia
poelove said:

its always good for a poet to be able to contemplate the many different options our thoughts offer.

December 31st, 2017 07:52

I am (The Ocean)
poelove said:

I say \'you are a poet\"
(might be some typos here the word day (twice) possibly hit the wrong key? I suspect you meant to type \'say\'

December 31st, 2017 07:45

Glass
poelove said:

excellent

December 31st, 2017 07:38

Glass
Christina8 said:

What a profound write! Would we shatter into a million pieces or would we remain strong? I really like this!

December 30th, 2017 14:19

honestly,
Michael Edwards said:

Observations of reality are often not articulated - well observed - great little piece of work.

Just looked through your portfolio and there are some great writes - loads of talent - carry on writing and posting.

December 27th, 2017 11:50

honestly,
Jayce Elliot said:

I agree

December 27th, 2017 10:53

Schizophrenia
Joe Dawson said:

I doubt it, more likely you\'re getting ready to become a poet of note. If you don\'t hear things in your head how can you write them later? Short, but to the point. Joe

December 26th, 2017 17:06

Schizophrenia
Candlewitch said:

I know the feeling... nice write!

*hugs, Cat

December 26th, 2017 15:28

Let you go
Lost at the beginning said:

This is beautifully said and it’s so true. I’ve had to do this with many past loves as well. Trust me that it will get better

Much love,
Travezty

December 25th, 2017 00:35

Torture~An Attempted Sonnet
BRIAN & ANGELA said:

WELL DONE SHADOW ~ This is a Sonnet ! I teach the FORM & FUNCTION of Poetry to Adults and they often ask \"What is a Sonnet\". There are certain basic criteria most of which you fulfil !
1. It must have exactly 14 lines !
2. Rhyme Pattern: There are a variety of Rhyme Patterns (check in Google) or it can be Blank Verse ~ Each line has the same number of syllables. In your Poem 5 lines (3 4 5 8 & 12) have IAMBIC PENTAMETER (10 syllables in each line) the other lines are close and could easily be tweaked to be IP ! It can also be FREE VERSE (No Rhyme & No Rhythm) ! Shakespeare is easy to read and recite because it is BLANK VERSE (I am a Performance Poet) which gives it RHTHYM (one of the criteria of good poetry !) and RECITABILITY ! Poetry is an ORAL ART !
3. Versification: There are generally counter themes in sonnets. THEME ONE ~ Torture ~ ends at line 8 which is effectively the end of verse ONE ~ THEME TWO (Verse two) ~ Secrets ~ begins at line 9 ~ so it is an 8 ~ 6 Sonnet !
I liked the themes of your \"SONNET\" ~ Hundreds of People are subject to Torture & Interrogation every day ~ so it is an \"interesting\" topic to choose ! Thanks for sharing ~ Yours BRIAN

December 19th, 2017 08:37

mirrors
JSpeak said:

This is amazing! You should keep writing.

December 17th, 2017 22:50

Playgrounds
BRIAN & ANGELA said:

Thanks SHADOW ~ Lovely poem that brought back many memories of \"Playgrounds in the SUN\" In the UK we have excellent Playgrounds in all our Primary Schools ~ Villages and Parks with swings and slides etc. In our Secondary Schools we have Playing Fields and Tennis Courts etc ! I love CANADA and the Canadians ~ you have so much space ! I have visited Vancouver ~ Jasper ~ Banf ~ Calgary also Niagara (Horseshoe Falls) and Toronto also Grand Manan Island ! At night I always have hot milk with Canadian Maple Syrup ~ beautiful ~ The structure of your poem was excellent ! Yours Brian (UK)

December 10th, 2017 11:10

Mr. Cat Eyes
Mottakeenur Rehman said:

Enjoyed ! Nice 1!

December 4th, 2017 13:07

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