Comments received on poems by Dan Williams
Things Fell Down
sorenbarrett said:
The feeling that I get from this poem is that neglect contributes to decay and with decay things fall down. Very nicely written with that fifth line reoccuring throughout as an omen of what is to come. Creative and a bit haunting.
October 9th, 2024 04:43
sorenbarrett said:
The feeling that I get from this poem is that neglect contributes to decay and with decay things fall down. Very nicely written with that fifth line reoccuring throughout as an omen of what is to come. Creative and a bit haunting.
October 9th, 2024 04:43
Things Fell Down
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a passionate write for a lost love Dan.
Andy
October 9th, 2024 01:42
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a passionate write for a lost love Dan.
Andy
October 9th, 2024 01:42
Things Fell Down
Neville said:
At first, until around the middle, I now realise I got hold of the wrong stick .. Funny thing is, you managed to help me grab hold of the right one without even trying .. which just goes to reinforce my pre-existing belief that different eyes may see things differently .. Having now got that off my chest, I must hereby confess, I very much enjoyed the duality of my meandering here today .. Just in case you, or anyone else might be wondering what the hell is this guy waffling on about, I initially thought \'Things Fell Down\' was about some kind of war zone or conflict .. The turning point is when it dawned on me that it referred to the disintegration or failing of a relationship ..
Well penned, friend .. Neville
October 9th, 2024 01:24
Neville said:
At first, until around the middle, I now realise I got hold of the wrong stick .. Funny thing is, you managed to help me grab hold of the right one without even trying .. which just goes to reinforce my pre-existing belief that different eyes may see things differently .. Having now got that off my chest, I must hereby confess, I very much enjoyed the duality of my meandering here today .. Just in case you, or anyone else might be wondering what the hell is this guy waffling on about, I initially thought \'Things Fell Down\' was about some kind of war zone or conflict .. The turning point is when it dawned on me that it referred to the disintegration or failing of a relationship ..
Well penned, friend .. Neville
October 9th, 2024 01:24
Spiderlace
Thad Wilk said:
A mesmerizing, touching
and poignant write!! 😢
There\'s plenty of
fish in the sea, 🐠🐟🐠
don\'t give up the fight!! 💪
Great read, thanks
for sharing
to read a delight! , 💯
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 8th, 2024 21:04
Thad Wilk said:
A mesmerizing, touching
and poignant write!! 😢
There\'s plenty of
fish in the sea, 🐠🐟🐠
don\'t give up the fight!! 💪
Great read, thanks
for sharing
to read a delight! , 💯
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 8th, 2024 21:04
Seeking Revenge
MaxSmith said:
Hmmm the vengeance mentality I am sure everyone has toyed with. Even if it isn\'t followed through, something I\'m sure we can all relate to.
But someone told me once, the best revenge is to succeed.
A great read Dan, thank you for sharing
October 8th, 2024 14:31
MaxSmith said:
Hmmm the vengeance mentality I am sure everyone has toyed with. Even if it isn\'t followed through, something I\'m sure we can all relate to.
But someone told me once, the best revenge is to succeed.
A great read Dan, thank you for sharing
October 8th, 2024 14:31
Spiderlace
sorenbarrett said:
Some great images and lines here. Spiderweb of lace very impactful with underlying possible meanings but my favorite line is \"Betrayal dug the grave while trust retreated\"
October 8th, 2024 06:30
sorenbarrett said:
Some great images and lines here. Spiderweb of lace very impactful with underlying possible meanings but my favorite line is \"Betrayal dug the grave while trust retreated\"
October 8th, 2024 06:30
Spiderlace
Neville said:
Sshh .. it happens but then you clearly know that, don\'t you .. let\'s keep it to ourselves since there\'s no point spreading it around .. and anyway, there\'s always more fish in the sea .. or that\'s what my folks said back in the day .. Neville
October 8th, 2024 00:57
Neville said:
Sshh .. it happens but then you clearly know that, don\'t you .. let\'s keep it to ourselves since there\'s no point spreading it around .. and anyway, there\'s always more fish in the sea .. or that\'s what my folks said back in the day .. Neville
October 8th, 2024 00:57
Seeking Revenge
sorenbarrett said:
I believe in forgiveness for the good of the forgiver but all things have a time and place and revenge can be quite satisfying as anyone that watches movies can attest. Nicely written my friend.
October 7th, 2024 04:45
sorenbarrett said:
I believe in forgiveness for the good of the forgiver but all things have a time and place and revenge can be quite satisfying as anyone that watches movies can attest. Nicely written my friend.
October 7th, 2024 04:45
Seeking Revenge
Neville said:
I congratulate you sir on the construction and content of what amounts to a real eye opener into your psyche .. and I have absolutely no doubt that many will agree with you .. as indeed, I do .. Neville
p.s.
No, don\'t hold your breath but I hope that now others will make their way here in the wake I have created .. Kind Regards
October 7th, 2024 03:40
Neville said:
I congratulate you sir on the construction and content of what amounts to a real eye opener into your psyche .. and I have absolutely no doubt that many will agree with you .. as indeed, I do .. Neville
p.s.
No, don\'t hold your breath but I hope that now others will make their way here in the wake I have created .. Kind Regards
October 7th, 2024 03:40
In the U.S.A.
sorenbarrett said:
Glad to hear that no sheep were harmed but I do love lamb chops. To lie is a prerequisit to being a politition those that can\'t lie don\'t get elected and we can blame ourselves the voters for that. Greed and corruption begins in the bed of voters that elect polititions, we and our self interests. A powerful write
October 6th, 2024 05:23
sorenbarrett said:
Glad to hear that no sheep were harmed but I do love lamb chops. To lie is a prerequisit to being a politition those that can\'t lie don\'t get elected and we can blame ourselves the voters for that. Greed and corruption begins in the bed of voters that elect polititions, we and our self interests. A powerful write
October 6th, 2024 05:23
Night Watchman
Neville said:
I have oft thought similarly ..
they all come out at night, don\'t they and need to be watched ..
Thanks for literarily keeping your eyes open for us Dan .. AGT\'s
Neville
October 6th, 2024 02:48
Neville said:
I have oft thought similarly ..
they all come out at night, don\'t they and need to be watched ..
Thanks for literarily keeping your eyes open for us Dan .. AGT\'s
Neville
October 6th, 2024 02:48
In the U.S.A.
Neville said:
I know nothing much about US politics, but I know a liar, a bigot and a narcissist when I see or hear one ..
I had a good deal of time for Obama and believe him to have been an eloquent statesman with vision and good intent ..
Your words hang mighty pretty on this page though regardless sir .. Neville
October 6th, 2024 02:41
Neville said:
I know nothing much about US politics, but I know a liar, a bigot and a narcissist when I see or hear one ..
I had a good deal of time for Obama and believe him to have been an eloquent statesman with vision and good intent ..
Your words hang mighty pretty on this page though regardless sir .. Neville
October 6th, 2024 02:41
Night Watchman
sorenbarrett said:
When young I worked both swing and graveyard shifts and relate to this poem. I have slept on my feet and been prodded by the night watchman when they saw I was going through motions with my eyes closed. The repetative nature of the line I am the night watchman is hypnotic in a sense and contributes to the feel of the poem. Very nicely done
October 5th, 2024 05:42
sorenbarrett said:
When young I worked both swing and graveyard shifts and relate to this poem. I have slept on my feet and been prodded by the night watchman when they saw I was going through motions with my eyes closed. The repetative nature of the line I am the night watchman is hypnotic in a sense and contributes to the feel of the poem. Very nicely done
October 5th, 2024 05:42
No Trick to This
sorenbarrett said:
Another twist to the Irish blessing \"May the road rise up to meet you. May the wind be always at your back....\" Very nicely written
October 4th, 2024 05:06
sorenbarrett said:
Another twist to the Irish blessing \"May the road rise up to meet you. May the wind be always at your back....\" Very nicely written
October 4th, 2024 05:06
Keep Me from Sleep
NinjaGirl said:
Begging for sleep to come back -
Hold me tight like it used to
October 3rd, 2024 11:12
NinjaGirl said:
Begging for sleep to come back -
Hold me tight like it used to
October 3rd, 2024 11:12
Keep Me from Sleep
sorenbarrett said:
Several great lines in this poem but my favorite are the last two lines. Deterministic in view it packs a punch
October 3rd, 2024 04:42
sorenbarrett said:
Several great lines in this poem but my favorite are the last two lines. Deterministic in view it packs a punch
October 3rd, 2024 04:42
Keep Me from Sleep
Goldfinch60 said:
This is understandable Dan but we also have those wonderful dreams when sleep does come to us.
Andy
October 3rd, 2024 01:15
Goldfinch60 said:
This is understandable Dan but we also have those wonderful dreams when sleep does come to us.
Andy
October 3rd, 2024 01:15
Fallen Giants Land
sorenbarrett said:
Most metaphoric Dan it took two reads but I think I got it.
October 2nd, 2024 04:48
sorenbarrett said:
Most metaphoric Dan it took two reads but I think I got it.
October 2nd, 2024 04:48
Fierce Longing
Tom Dylan said:
You express yourself so well in these reflections. A fine write with some wonderful lines. Sometimes we have to process these things to get them out. Cheers, Tom.
September 30th, 2024 06:34
Tom Dylan said:
You express yourself so well in these reflections. A fine write with some wonderful lines. Sometimes we have to process these things to get them out. Cheers, Tom.
September 30th, 2024 06:34
Width of Sorrow
sorenbarrett said:
Clever tlhree dimensional thinking expressed in such good verse. Very well done
September 30th, 2024 05:23
sorenbarrett said:
Clever tlhree dimensional thinking expressed in such good verse. Very well done
September 30th, 2024 05:23
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