Comments received on poems by Dan Williams
Unrepentant Ventriloquist
Ezekiel Olayemi said:
Hmm... Still poundering on each verses , an ongoing message in process hope it finds it owner(s) 👌
October 28th, 2024 13:24
Ezekiel Olayemi said:
Hmm... Still poundering on each verses , an ongoing message in process hope it finds it owner(s) 👌
October 28th, 2024 13:24
Unrepentant Ventriloquist
sorenbarrett said:
A story all too familiar, upon hearing it I always check my own shadow to see if it is following me. But then having PTSD from past poetry wars I\'m paranoid. Quite the story my friend maybe the ventriloquist will speak sweeter words. Not too sugar sweet though.
October 28th, 2024 04:45
sorenbarrett said:
A story all too familiar, upon hearing it I always check my own shadow to see if it is following me. But then having PTSD from past poetry wars I\'m paranoid. Quite the story my friend maybe the ventriloquist will speak sweeter words. Not too sugar sweet though.
October 28th, 2024 04:45
Unrepentant Ventriloquist
Neville said:
Epic .. with so very many chuckles along the way .. Neville
October 28th, 2024 01:37
Neville said:
Epic .. with so very many chuckles along the way .. Neville
October 28th, 2024 01:37
Slightly Different Views
sorenbarrett said:
I liked this approach. It is full of mind provoking thoughts and pushes against the current of common thought. No Moses never did get to the promised land in this life and we never should either lest we grow in our complacency and stagnate.
October 26th, 2024 04:38
sorenbarrett said:
I liked this approach. It is full of mind provoking thoughts and pushes against the current of common thought. No Moses never did get to the promised land in this life and we never should either lest we grow in our complacency and stagnate.
October 26th, 2024 04:38
Small Ghosts
Cheeky Missy said:
Well, and I like you utilizing it too. This is too perfect and fascinating to boot. Beautifully rendered with a none too subtly haunting poignancy and excellent imagery. Thank you very much for sharing.
October 23rd, 2024 23:56
Cheeky Missy said:
Well, and I like you utilizing it too. This is too perfect and fascinating to boot. Beautifully rendered with a none too subtly haunting poignancy and excellent imagery. Thank you very much for sharing.
October 23rd, 2024 23:56
Small Ghosts
sorenbarrett said:
This reminded me of a philosophy class I had many many years ago. Very small issue but in the third stanza I think it should read Time not Tin but then again I could be wrong. There are so many thoughts branching out of this bush that it fills the space in all directions. I feel some hostility under the surface.
October 23rd, 2024 04:54
sorenbarrett said:
This reminded me of a philosophy class I had many many years ago. Very small issue but in the third stanza I think it should read Time not Tin but then again I could be wrong. There are so many thoughts branching out of this bush that it fills the space in all directions. I feel some hostility under the surface.
October 23rd, 2024 04:54
Illogical Soup
sorenbarrett said:
I know Dave that poems can be taken many different ways by readers and so this is probably not what you intended but what I saw. I heard this as a proclamation against political correctness and having to sheath our swords, the cowardice involved. Softened language all of which leads to compacency lulling us to sleep over what the real issues are (that can not be discussed any longer) We don\'t even know what we can talk about anymore and we end with an illogical soup. Going to Fav this one based on the subject matter and I think you did a politically correct wording to make it cryptic enough to be acceptable
October 22nd, 2024 05:16
sorenbarrett said:
I know Dave that poems can be taken many different ways by readers and so this is probably not what you intended but what I saw. I heard this as a proclamation against political correctness and having to sheath our swords, the cowardice involved. Softened language all of which leads to compacency lulling us to sleep over what the real issues are (that can not be discussed any longer) We don\'t even know what we can talk about anymore and we end with an illogical soup. Going to Fav this one based on the subject matter and I think you did a politically correct wording to make it cryptic enough to be acceptable
October 22nd, 2024 05:16
Essay on Excuses
sorenbarrett said:
(First little moths of senility flit more regularly now,) a great line there Dan. I can hear reproach and anger in this poem nicely done
October 22nd, 2024 05:05
sorenbarrett said:
(First little moths of senility flit more regularly now,) a great line there Dan. I can hear reproach and anger in this poem nicely done
October 22nd, 2024 05:05
Essay on Excuses
Neville said:
You have done a fine job of pulling all the threads together and making an excellent job of presenting the bigger picture as a single cohesive whole .. and for that I salute you, Neville
October 22nd, 2024 02:40
Neville said:
You have done a fine job of pulling all the threads together and making an excellent job of presenting the bigger picture as a single cohesive whole .. and for that I salute you, Neville
October 22nd, 2024 02:40
Spiderlace
NafisaSB said:
better luck for the next one - well written though
October 20th, 2024 23:17
NafisaSB said:
better luck for the next one - well written though
October 20th, 2024 23:17
Spiraling Down part two
sorenbarrett said:
A most powerful write full of indignation and anger. I have been there in a rage against the machine so to speak. Yes I feel the anger.
October 17th, 2024 05:10
sorenbarrett said:
A most powerful write full of indignation and anger. I have been there in a rage against the machine so to speak. Yes I feel the anger.
October 17th, 2024 05:10
Spiraling Down part one
Thad Wilk said:
Awesome poem,
thoughts and
message penned!! 💯
Wonderfully woven
great read my friend!! 😄
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 13th, 2024 13:39
Thad Wilk said:
Awesome poem,
thoughts and
message penned!! 💯
Wonderfully woven
great read my friend!! 😄
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 13th, 2024 13:39
Spiraling Down part one
sorenbarrett said:
Every generation is the same, we all see things different but the same, it is always worse now than then. We are always the last of the old and the first of the new. A thought provoking write Dan
October 13th, 2024 04:59
sorenbarrett said:
Every generation is the same, we all see things different but the same, it is always worse now than then. We are always the last of the old and the first of the new. A thought provoking write Dan
October 13th, 2024 04:59
Illogical Soup
Goldfinch60 said:
We need to see what is happening in our lives Dan and look for a better way to move forward.
Andy
October 11th, 2024 01:57
Goldfinch60 said:
We need to see what is happening in our lives Dan and look for a better way to move forward.
Andy
October 11th, 2024 01:57
Things Fell Down
MaxSmith said:
Sometimes the most beautiful writings come from sad places in our hearts.
Nicely written
October 9th, 2024 11:16
MaxSmith said:
Sometimes the most beautiful writings come from sad places in our hearts.
Nicely written
October 9th, 2024 11:16
Things Fell Down
sorenbarrett said:
The feeling that I get from this poem is that neglect contributes to decay and with decay things fall down. Very nicely written with that fifth line reoccuring throughout as an omen of what is to come. Creative and a bit haunting.
October 9th, 2024 04:43
sorenbarrett said:
The feeling that I get from this poem is that neglect contributes to decay and with decay things fall down. Very nicely written with that fifth line reoccuring throughout as an omen of what is to come. Creative and a bit haunting.
October 9th, 2024 04:43
Things Fell Down
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a passionate write for a lost love Dan.
Andy
October 9th, 2024 01:42
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a passionate write for a lost love Dan.
Andy
October 9th, 2024 01:42
Things Fell Down
Neville said:
At first, until around the middle, I now realise I got hold of the wrong stick .. Funny thing is, you managed to help me grab hold of the right one without even trying .. which just goes to reinforce my pre-existing belief that different eyes may see things differently .. Having now got that off my chest, I must hereby confess, I very much enjoyed the duality of my meandering here today .. Just in case you, or anyone else might be wondering what the hell is this guy waffling on about, I initially thought \'Things Fell Down\' was about some kind of war zone or conflict .. The turning point is when it dawned on me that it referred to the disintegration or failing of a relationship ..
Well penned, friend .. Neville
October 9th, 2024 01:24
Neville said:
At first, until around the middle, I now realise I got hold of the wrong stick .. Funny thing is, you managed to help me grab hold of the right one without even trying .. which just goes to reinforce my pre-existing belief that different eyes may see things differently .. Having now got that off my chest, I must hereby confess, I very much enjoyed the duality of my meandering here today .. Just in case you, or anyone else might be wondering what the hell is this guy waffling on about, I initially thought \'Things Fell Down\' was about some kind of war zone or conflict .. The turning point is when it dawned on me that it referred to the disintegration or failing of a relationship ..
Well penned, friend .. Neville
October 9th, 2024 01:24
Spiderlace
Thad Wilk said:
A mesmerizing, touching
and poignant write!! 😢
There\'s plenty of
fish in the sea, 🐠🐟🐠
don\'t give up the fight!! 💪
Great read, thanks
for sharing
to read a delight! , 💯
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 8th, 2024 21:04
Thad Wilk said:
A mesmerizing, touching
and poignant write!! 😢
There\'s plenty of
fish in the sea, 🐠🐟🐠
don\'t give up the fight!! 💪
Great read, thanks
for sharing
to read a delight! , 💯
Best regards ✌️ Thad
October 8th, 2024 21:04
Seeking Revenge
MaxSmith said:
Hmmm the vengeance mentality I am sure everyone has toyed with. Even if it isn\'t followed through, something I\'m sure we can all relate to.
But someone told me once, the best revenge is to succeed.
A great read Dan, thank you for sharing
October 8th, 2024 14:31
MaxSmith said:
Hmmm the vengeance mentality I am sure everyone has toyed with. Even if it isn\'t followed through, something I\'m sure we can all relate to.
But someone told me once, the best revenge is to succeed.
A great read Dan, thank you for sharing
October 8th, 2024 14:31
Spiderlace
sorenbarrett said:
Some great images and lines here. Spiderweb of lace very impactful with underlying possible meanings but my favorite line is \"Betrayal dug the grave while trust retreated\"
October 8th, 2024 06:30
sorenbarrett said:
Some great images and lines here. Spiderweb of lace very impactful with underlying possible meanings but my favorite line is \"Betrayal dug the grave while trust retreated\"
October 8th, 2024 06:30
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