Comments received on poems by Jerry Wayne Lawrence
The Moth
lalalaEulalie said:
A day in the life.
It sounds like you have found peace - at least for one Thursday in July.
Nice thoughts, thanks for sharing. Wishing you the best (and maybe another fine cup of coffee) today.
-Lolly
July 22nd, 2022 12:15
lalalaEulalie said:
A day in the life.
It sounds like you have found peace - at least for one Thursday in July.
Nice thoughts, thanks for sharing. Wishing you the best (and maybe another fine cup of coffee) today.
-Lolly
July 22nd, 2022 12:15
Llaena Gibraltar
L. B. Mek said:
\'Dad, Step-Dad Will B Miserable Without His Plan:B.\'
yeah, no degree in Freudian
theory, needed
to work out what\'s at the root
of the abundant - broken
we see all around us, daily..
(so much insight, dear Poet
unfurled
and delivered, unashamedly raw
blunt, like life
in those trenches, they label
as our inner city, hood\'s
without declaring them, as
the warzones, they clearly are..)
July 19th, 2022 05:30
L. B. Mek said:
\'Dad, Step-Dad Will B Miserable Without His Plan:B.\'
yeah, no degree in Freudian
theory, needed
to work out what\'s at the root
of the abundant - broken
we see all around us, daily..
(so much insight, dear Poet
unfurled
and delivered, unashamedly raw
blunt, like life
in those trenches, they label
as our inner city, hood\'s
without declaring them, as
the warzones, they clearly are..)
July 19th, 2022 05:30
Velvet
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderful dedication
maybe, this will work
like \'field of dreams\'
if your write, it
\'they will come\'
lol
really liked this line
\'Either Candy Or Sundae.\'
marriage, as teeth rot
sweetness that kills
while
love, is just tempered
dentist proof
lol
a fun read, thank you!
July 18th, 2022 04:25
L. B. Mek said:
a wonderful dedication
maybe, this will work
like \'field of dreams\'
if your write, it
\'they will come\'
lol
really liked this line
\'Either Candy Or Sundae.\'
marriage, as teeth rot
sweetness that kills
while
love, is just tempered
dentist proof
lol
a fun read, thank you!
July 18th, 2022 04:25
Treasury
L. B. Mek said:
i read it a few times and am still lost
lol
still, worth the effort
I like its depth and multiple perspectives
to what is, in essence a simple theme
shows great skill
thanks for sharing, dear poet
July 15th, 2022 02:07
L. B. Mek said:
i read it a few times and am still lost
lol
still, worth the effort
I like its depth and multiple perspectives
to what is, in essence a simple theme
shows great skill
thanks for sharing, dear poet
July 15th, 2022 02:07
M.A.R.R.Y.
L. B. Mek said:
you know what, dear poet
I actually have time
for that monogamous, aspect
in a public declaration of loyalty
and love..
so the institute of marriage
is something i respect, genuinely
but
then you add in paperwork
\'a celibate priest\' dictating terms
to \'bless\' your union
and then those skewed laws
which dictate every man
best get themselves an iron tight
prenup
and then, I\'m like
nah
fck all that..
like Wyclef said, best
\'I\'ll be back in November\'
😎✌
lol
July 12th, 2022 02:10
L. B. Mek said:
you know what, dear poet
I actually have time
for that monogamous, aspect
in a public declaration of loyalty
and love..
so the institute of marriage
is something i respect, genuinely
but
then you add in paperwork
\'a celibate priest\' dictating terms
to \'bless\' your union
and then those skewed laws
which dictate every man
best get themselves an iron tight
prenup
and then, I\'m like
nah
fck all that..
like Wyclef said, best
\'I\'ll be back in November\'
😎✌
lol
July 12th, 2022 02:10
L.O.V.E.L.Y.
L. B. Mek said:
lol
that \'O.M.G\' of \'Y.O.U\'
in unique
Poetic creativity, indeed!
hope you had a good weekend, dear poet
thanks for keeping it light
and the chuckles you gift
my life
July 5th, 2022 04:28
L. B. Mek said:
lol
that \'O.M.G\' of \'Y.O.U\'
in unique
Poetic creativity, indeed!
hope you had a good weekend, dear poet
thanks for keeping it light
and the chuckles you gift
my life
July 5th, 2022 04:28
C.L.E.O.P.A.T.R.A.
L. B. Mek said:
that, she\'ll forever be
remembered
as the last Pharaoh
is such, an injustice!
so many of the unworthy
in that 5000, year dynasty
escaped that ill-Fate
still
her legacy of Feminine
power, will
also be remembered, aside
her story
and in that, she shall ever-Remain
a phoenix Queen, of eternal
Flame, guiding
all who will come after her!
\'Radically, Allusrtius\', indeed
our African queen, supreme
June 30th, 2022 05:52
L. B. Mek said:
that, she\'ll forever be
remembered
as the last Pharaoh
is such, an injustice!
so many of the unworthy
in that 5000, year dynasty
escaped that ill-Fate
still
her legacy of Feminine
power, will
also be remembered, aside
her story
and in that, she shall ever-Remain
a phoenix Queen, of eternal
Flame, guiding
all who will come after her!
\'Radically, Allusrtius\', indeed
our African queen, supreme
June 30th, 2022 05:52
R.E.S.T.
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:
Onliest On Point U R, L B. Thanks. Our Synergizing Of Poetics & Poeticals Continues.......
June 28th, 2022 09:26
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:
Onliest On Point U R, L B. Thanks. Our Synergizing Of Poetics & Poeticals Continues.......
June 28th, 2022 09:26
P.A.R.L.O.R.
L. B. Mek said:
when we find \'em
we gotta, fight for \'em
our parlor\'s of salvation
those corners of the world
where, we can be free
to show ourselves, broken
fallible and beautifully, human...
(a lovely message, dear poet
thank you)
June 28th, 2022 04:00
L. B. Mek said:
when we find \'em
we gotta, fight for \'em
our parlor\'s of salvation
those corners of the world
where, we can be free
to show ourselves, broken
fallible and beautifully, human...
(a lovely message, dear poet
thank you)
June 28th, 2022 04:00
R.E.S.T.
L. B. Mek said:
yeah, we be at our best
when
feeling relaxed and free
to be
who, we choose to be...
that\'s a great, acrostic
thank you, dear Poet
June 28th, 2022 02:39
L. B. Mek said:
yeah, we be at our best
when
feeling relaxed and free
to be
who, we choose to be...
that\'s a great, acrostic
thank you, dear Poet
June 28th, 2022 02:39
M.I.S.S.
L. B. Mek said:
Mesmerising aesthetics
Intimate synced-Pulses
Seizing serendipity\'s gifts
Soulful connections
Destitute dreamless states
Reality\'s stubborn gates
Enveloped in stagnant fates
Amassing hope to eradicate
Mind\'s state, that decimate
Enshrined tepid refrain
Refusing to accept
Your enriching presence
my Dream.ery Miss
come n visit, help
me rhyme, Mr with
chance
June 21st, 2022 04:35
L. B. Mek said:
Mesmerising aesthetics
Intimate synced-Pulses
Seizing serendipity\'s gifts
Soulful connections
Destitute dreamless states
Reality\'s stubborn gates
Enveloped in stagnant fates
Amassing hope to eradicate
Mind\'s state, that decimate
Enshrined tepid refrain
Refusing to accept
Your enriching presence
my Dream.ery Miss
come n visit, help
me rhyme, Mr with
chance
June 21st, 2022 04:35
Regard
L. B. Mek said:
sadly, this over me head
legacy
of that limited intellect..
still I really liked your lines
especially that first one..
indeed
\'I have high regard
for your Renegade\'
ways..
thanks for sharing, dear poet
lol
June 13th, 2022 05:25
L. B. Mek said:
sadly, this over me head
legacy
of that limited intellect..
still I really liked your lines
especially that first one..
indeed
\'I have high regard
for your Renegade\'
ways..
thanks for sharing, dear poet
lol
June 13th, 2022 05:25
Flying Guillotine
L. B. Mek said:
ok the title alone worked so well
in lining me up for this fantastical, tale
I think an empress, with power to wield
a chorus of flying guillotines
is a better premise, than
a white haired girl
\'walking on fire\'
and taming mindless, dragons!
lol
only thing is
how you gonna connect
your story\'s
Japan and French, themes
since the french got kicked out of japan, decades before
the english and americans fought
over arming that child emperor..
lol
a fun read, dear poet
thanks for the chuckles
June 10th, 2022 04:39
L. B. Mek said:
ok the title alone worked so well
in lining me up for this fantastical, tale
I think an empress, with power to wield
a chorus of flying guillotines
is a better premise, than
a white haired girl
\'walking on fire\'
and taming mindless, dragons!
lol
only thing is
how you gonna connect
your story\'s
Japan and French, themes
since the french got kicked out of japan, decades before
the english and americans fought
over arming that child emperor..
lol
a fun read, dear poet
thanks for the chuckles
June 10th, 2022 04:39
Lady
L. B. Mek said:
\'That Continually Provokes Me.
Fancy Fantassy.\'
(I too first observed
the true grace and majesty
of a woman, when i met
my friend\'s mother
till then, everything I rated
was aesthetic and physical
but
with her, i finally realised
having the right: \'LADY\'
as your partner, means
you can never, Lose
at life...
and so I learnt, to not settle
\'for no cheap, imitation\'
and till, this day
though, my ticket may have expired
I would rather wilt, at my station
awaiting
than jump on a train with a wrong
destination)..
this had such a cool groove to it
I imagine a Blue\'s band, playing
and some hype guy, reading these words
in some downstairs, dingy jazz bar
in Paris
in the 60\'s/70\'s..
lol
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
June 9th, 2022 04:24
L. B. Mek said:
\'That Continually Provokes Me.
Fancy Fantassy.\'
(I too first observed
the true grace and majesty
of a woman, when i met
my friend\'s mother
till then, everything I rated
was aesthetic and physical
but
with her, i finally realised
having the right: \'LADY\'
as your partner, means
you can never, Lose
at life...
and so I learnt, to not settle
\'for no cheap, imitation\'
and till, this day
though, my ticket may have expired
I would rather wilt, at my station
awaiting
than jump on a train with a wrong
destination)..
this had such a cool groove to it
I imagine a Blue\'s band, playing
and some hype guy, reading these words
in some downstairs, dingy jazz bar
in Paris
in the 60\'s/70\'s..
lol
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
June 9th, 2022 04:24
My Crush On Cynthia Twiggs
L. B. Mek said:
ermmm, it\'s Friday
and you\'ve got me thinking
of Miss \'gardenTease\' Parker
from that funTastic film
titled, ermmm Friday..
lol
thank you! gonna gift myself
a few laughs and watch it again
over the weekend
\'DaaaaaaMMMMMMMnnnnnn!\'
🤣
June 3rd, 2022 04:39
L. B. Mek said:
ermmm, it\'s Friday
and you\'ve got me thinking
of Miss \'gardenTease\' Parker
from that funTastic film
titled, ermmm Friday..
lol
thank you! gonna gift myself
a few laughs and watch it again
over the weekend
\'DaaaaaaMMMMMMMnnnnnn!\'
🤣
June 3rd, 2022 04:39
We Need A Hero
L. B. Mek said:
we sure do
or, just something
to give us hope
of a coming, of one..
\'Enhanced By The Cybernetics
That Make Her So Sleek.\'
like your creativity\'s poetics, dear poet
another fun read
June 2nd, 2022 04:15
L. B. Mek said:
we sure do
or, just something
to give us hope
of a coming, of one..
\'Enhanced By The Cybernetics
That Make Her So Sleek.\'
like your creativity\'s poetics, dear poet
another fun read
June 2nd, 2022 04:15
P.O.R.T.A.L.
L. B. Mek said:
huh, a zombie apocalypse b-movie
...
the walking dead?
(that\'s how desperate Hollywood is)
ideas for b-movies
are mainstream successes....
lol
long may it devolve and regress
the scripts/shows are truly, pathetic
but watching Hollywood\'s, demise
is great fun
especially with me butter caramel
popcorn
and Tennessee whisky, in-hand
and while i\'m at it, can i order more
slap happy, testorone willy\'s pls
(signed, thanks in advance
a belly fool, sceptic)
dear Poet, not sure
you can excuse Herd mindset\'s
as being, imprisoned
see
like their cattle, kin
they spend a lot of time, grazing
on wide open fields
getting, fattened-up
for that bitter twist, of fate\'s knife
but, they simply choose
to keep their head down
following each other\'s, rectums
allowing
to be shat on, endlessly
cos the feeding, be easy....!
May 31st, 2022 04:36
L. B. Mek said:
huh, a zombie apocalypse b-movie
...
the walking dead?
(that\'s how desperate Hollywood is)
ideas for b-movies
are mainstream successes....
lol
long may it devolve and regress
the scripts/shows are truly, pathetic
but watching Hollywood\'s, demise
is great fun
especially with me butter caramel
popcorn
and Tennessee whisky, in-hand
and while i\'m at it, can i order more
slap happy, testorone willy\'s pls
(signed, thanks in advance
a belly fool, sceptic)
dear Poet, not sure
you can excuse Herd mindset\'s
as being, imprisoned
see
like their cattle, kin
they spend a lot of time, grazing
on wide open fields
getting, fattened-up
for that bitter twist, of fate\'s knife
but, they simply choose
to keep their head down
following each other\'s, rectums
allowing
to be shat on, endlessly
cos the feeding, be easy....!
May 31st, 2022 04:36
Gaunzew (The Witch)
L. B. Mek said:
worth the read, just for the
\'Gaunzew\'
is it a character or morphed word?
(in my head I\'m pronouncing it
as G uan zew, and its so fun
with a solemn bushi era tone and accent)
lol
thanks for the chuckles, dear poet
(sorry if my humorous take
seems rude, or disrespectful
was never my intention)
May 27th, 2022 05:20
L. B. Mek said:
worth the read, just for the
\'Gaunzew\'
is it a character or morphed word?
(in my head I\'m pronouncing it
as G uan zew, and its so fun
with a solemn bushi era tone and accent)
lol
thanks for the chuckles, dear poet
(sorry if my humorous take
seems rude, or disrespectful
was never my intention)
May 27th, 2022 05:20
Doll-Gree
L. B. Mek said:
reading this
an image of Halle Berry
(the actor that never was!
the fckry of her getting that first Oscar
is such a stain on all black actresses, before n after
\'in my unhumble and unrepentant
opinionated, opinion\')
playing storm in X-Men
and that brilliant CGI
of her gliding up to the sky
with glowing eyes..
(that\'s the kinda of empowered
feminine image
your words portrayed
well, to me at least)
thanks for sharing, dear poet U Niq!
another fun read:
\'Unique
4 The Wisdom That Cements
Her Sovereign.
Power Herself: B N Awe
As Her
Mighty Fist Levels Another Wall.\'
Doll-Gree.\'
May 26th, 2022 05:44
L. B. Mek said:
reading this
an image of Halle Berry
(the actor that never was!
the fckry of her getting that first Oscar
is such a stain on all black actresses, before n after
\'in my unhumble and unrepentant
opinionated, opinion\')
playing storm in X-Men
and that brilliant CGI
of her gliding up to the sky
with glowing eyes..
(that\'s the kinda of empowered
feminine image
your words portrayed
well, to me at least)
thanks for sharing, dear poet U Niq!
another fun read:
\'Unique
4 The Wisdom That Cements
Her Sovereign.
Power Herself: B N Awe
As Her
Mighty Fist Levels Another Wall.\'
Doll-Gree.\'
May 26th, 2022 05:44
Bedtyme
L. B. Mek said:
(thanks for sharing
sorry for my opinionated, rambling
I just think in 2022
we should have gotten over
all this silly, depictions
of sex, set aside
animalistic actions of lust
they really
have nothing in common!
from their outset of inspiration
to that part of themselves
they seek gratification, for...
it\'s like assuming
running and walking are the same;
ask your lungs
they ain\'t!
and with sex
ask your Heart
it will clarify the differences for you!)
\'the warping of eroticism, exists
in the mind\'s of those, imaginations
viewing, that intimacy of attraction
from the exiled, borders
of vengeful, loneliness..
where-as
those, in Love
see it for what it is, simply
tow individuals
expressing their chemistry and affection
physically...
nothing more
n
nothing less, either..
and to them, other\'s opinion
of their natural, actions
mean nothing
as it should be...\'
\'sex, is not a sin!\'
May 24th, 2022 06:28
L. B. Mek said:
(thanks for sharing
sorry for my opinionated, rambling
I just think in 2022
we should have gotten over
all this silly, depictions
of sex, set aside
animalistic actions of lust
they really
have nothing in common!
from their outset of inspiration
to that part of themselves
they seek gratification, for...
it\'s like assuming
running and walking are the same;
ask your lungs
they ain\'t!
and with sex
ask your Heart
it will clarify the differences for you!)
\'the warping of eroticism, exists
in the mind\'s of those, imaginations
viewing, that intimacy of attraction
from the exiled, borders
of vengeful, loneliness..
where-as
those, in Love
see it for what it is, simply
tow individuals
expressing their chemistry and affection
physically...
nothing more
n
nothing less, either..
and to them, other\'s opinion
of their natural, actions
mean nothing
as it should be...\'
\'sex, is not a sin!\'
May 24th, 2022 06:28
C.E.N.S.U.R.E.
L. B. Mek said:
Extremity\'s
Rendering
Unforeseen
Sagacity
Now
Enhanced...
(so much self-insight, dear poet
what a skill, you strive to cultivate)
I read and learn
May 24th, 2022 05:12
L. B. Mek said:
Extremity\'s
Rendering
Unforeseen
Sagacity
Now
Enhanced...
(so much self-insight, dear poet
what a skill, you strive to cultivate)
I read and learn
May 24th, 2022 05:12
Bdraujj
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:
Thanks, Again, 4 Reading, My Friend. It\'s Just A Made-Up Girl Name, Nothing More. Again, U Honor Me With The Blessings Of Your Enhanced Realizations. Again, I\'m Uplifted. Please, Stay Kool, L.B.
May 23rd, 2022 22:51
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:
Thanks, Again, 4 Reading, My Friend. It\'s Just A Made-Up Girl Name, Nothing More. Again, U Honor Me With The Blessings Of Your Enhanced Realizations. Again, I\'m Uplifted. Please, Stay Kool, L.B.
May 23rd, 2022 22:51
Bdraujj
L. B. Mek said:
Cosmic, as
humble eyes, looking, up
and staring at those stars
looking back at endless millennia\'s
of fantastical, Time
a fantasy reality, we take for granted..
then amass, amusement
at our supposedly
far-fetched, fantasy tales..
(fantasy, is merely
imagined reality, waiting
to be realised)..
thank you! dear poet
another puzzle of a read, intriguing
from title, and I must ask
what\'s it mean? is it just
a character name or syllables you surgical morphed..
lol
May 23rd, 2022 04:35
L. B. Mek said:
Cosmic, as
humble eyes, looking, up
and staring at those stars
looking back at endless millennia\'s
of fantastical, Time
a fantasy reality, we take for granted..
then amass, amusement
at our supposedly
far-fetched, fantasy tales..
(fantasy, is merely
imagined reality, waiting
to be realised)..
thank you! dear poet
another puzzle of a read, intriguing
from title, and I must ask
what\'s it mean? is it just
a character name or syllables you surgical morphed..
lol
May 23rd, 2022 04:35
Ol\' Vz. Young
jarcher54 said:
JW, quite an intriguing dream! I don\'t know if I like it but your bold diction and inventiveness are interesting... PS You are not \"aging\" at 44! Welcome!
May 21st, 2022 15:42
jarcher54 said:
JW, quite an intriguing dream! I don\'t know if I like it but your bold diction and inventiveness are interesting... PS You are not \"aging\" at 44! Welcome!
May 21st, 2022 15:42
Lady:Venus
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:
Real Nice Cut, Brother: L.B. Yeah, Mr.: Kweli & I Were Mos Def On The Same Vibe. Thank Ya 4 Yet Another Magnificent Response. Please, Stay Up, My Brother.
May 19th, 2022 13:01
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:
Real Nice Cut, Brother: L.B. Yeah, Mr.: Kweli & I Were Mos Def On The Same Vibe. Thank Ya 4 Yet Another Magnificent Response. Please, Stay Up, My Brother.
May 19th, 2022 13:01
Lady:Venus
L. B. Mek said:
have you heard the song \'broken glass\' by talib kweli?
in which a small town, Venus
meets, harsh fate
in that unfair
of ambition\'s, city strife
in the face of callous, ill-fate..
\'Dreams shattered like broken glass
Press ignore it and your hopes get broken fast
You complain for the life you supposed to have
But when you try to make plans, god is known to laugh\'..
(if you get a sec, check it out
there\'s a thread between your words
and his lyrics - well maybe
at least, I think?
or that\'s just my distorted reading
of your wonderful poetry)
lol
May 19th, 2022 04:58
L. B. Mek said:
have you heard the song \'broken glass\' by talib kweli?
in which a small town, Venus
meets, harsh fate
in that unfair
of ambition\'s, city strife
in the face of callous, ill-fate..
\'Dreams shattered like broken glass
Press ignore it and your hopes get broken fast
You complain for the life you supposed to have
But when you try to make plans, god is known to laugh\'..
(if you get a sec, check it out
there\'s a thread between your words
and his lyrics - well maybe
at least, I think?
or that\'s just my distorted reading
of your wonderful poetry)
lol
May 19th, 2022 04:58
Agent:B
L. B. Mek said:
\'B for Blindfolded..
don\'t get it twisted
its Ignorance: by design
as
our everyday reality
and secrecy, as our agent
of choice
giving us enough, room
to act all bewildered and offended
in the face of Truth...\'
lol
there\'s so much depth, to your ink
dear Poet
May 16th, 2022 06:09
L. B. Mek said:
\'B for Blindfolded..
don\'t get it twisted
its Ignorance: by design
as
our everyday reality
and secrecy, as our agent
of choice
giving us enough, room
to act all bewildered and offended
in the face of Truth...\'
lol
there\'s so much depth, to your ink
dear Poet
May 16th, 2022 06:09
H.E.I.D.I.
L. B. Mek said:
Helplessly
Enraptured
Infatuated,
Daringly
Initiated...
(and so their story, begins..)
funtastic! dear Poet
thank you
May 16th, 2022 04:50
L. B. Mek said:
Helplessly
Enraptured
Infatuated,
Daringly
Initiated...
(and so their story, begins..)
funtastic! dear Poet
thank you
May 16th, 2022 04:50
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