Comments received on poems by Jerry Wayne Lawrence



The Darqueside Of The Moon
Lincoln said:

Great penning . keep it up!


September 3rd, 2022 14:23

Melony
LittleTalks said:

I could not help but smile while reading this with a rap beat in my head...well done

August 27th, 2022 15:40

Wind & Rain
L. B. Mek said:

Brilliant!
(and she looks-up, searching
but in-place of stars and wonder\'s
there\'s just satellite debris
glaring back, in that dull
of a restless night
as-if stating loud, in her mind
even up here, its all just sht
others throw out
while others, still
can barely dream and aspire
to reach)

August 18th, 2022 01:15

T.A.R.G.E.T.
L. B. Mek said:

Tools
Acquired
Readymade
\'to\'
Germinate
Evermore
Tragedy
.
.
.
(have a great weekend, dear Poet
stay cool, stuck by the fridge
my motto for weekend summers)
lol

August 12th, 2022 03:30

M.A.Z.E./B.O.X.
L. B. Mek said:

this is so true, dear Poet
its like daydreaming in-to reality
our own bleak labyrinth, only
we\'re wide awake
and despairingly, aware!

August 11th, 2022 02:47

Revenges Of Planet X
L. B. Mek said:

reading these poignant words, dear Poet
made me want to recommend to you
(if you haven\'t read it yet)
a short book by Douglas Adam
titled
\'Dirk Gently\'s Holistic Detective Agency\'
the first book in the series..
in that story line, you\'ll find
a theme that very closely
matches your poetry\'s, wisdom:
\'\"Let This B The Lesson Of Our Ultimate Power!\" Speaks A Confident Planet X Leaving The Losers B...\'

\'\"Rush 2 Rebuilding: U.N.I.T.Y. Is The Ultimate Prophecy!\" Planet X States Calmly While Escaping 2wards The Freedoms Of Saturn & The Moon\'
(may be worthwhile, for us to contemplate
the notion that those heralded, Aliens
may just be as callous
as we pathetic, humans)

August 9th, 2022 03:18

GAMMATHANON
L. B. Mek said:

\'Survive Only 2 Curse Being Able 2 Do So.\'..
what a whirlwind of a read, you
at your imaginative and profound best
dear Poet!
(you know
story goes, satan
that father of devil and demon
lore
was supposedly an arch angel
once
who - so, despised humanity
it gave up, such a high position
to show, its God
how worthless we were of his
kindness and patience..
\'or so the story goes\'
knowing this, makes me laugh
at the absurdity of humanity
our chosen, evolution
equates, to fearing/celebrating
all-thing evil, satanic and devilish
while refuting
the existence of goodness, godliness
and moral virtues...
surely
when we tried to kill, those deities
we should start
with the Hades\' of myth
and theological, lore..
I mean
its like celebrating Hitler
and denouncing Gandhi..
a little, flipped
our logic: be...)
lol

August 9th, 2022 01:34

S.H.A.G.R.O.N. (Sha-Gron)
L. B. Mek said:

ah, ok
a character\'s, characteristics
got lost there for a bit
lol
thanks for the puzzle, dear poet
got my lazy brain in-gear for a bit

August 5th, 2022 02:27

J.E.E.B.R.A.
L. B. Mek said:

angel-\'lique\'
lol
yeah, all angels on earth
have a \'lique\', quality
about them..
like all our demon-\'esque\'
friend and families..
those amazing-lic strangers
far too much
in but a glimpse
to feel, entirely
fool-\'proof\', pivot-\'less\'
of fate..
(lol
forgive me, dear poet
had a little fun with this one)


August 2nd, 2022 04:47

Roses
L. B. Mek said:

\'give them their flowers
while they yet, still breathe
and
can smell, that fragrance
of a beating, sweet Nature\'..
(well erm, friend
I rate that you making sure no one gets left out
I just hope this list, doesn\'t leak..)
lol
a fun read, thank you!

August 1st, 2022 03:07

Roses
L. B. Mek said:

\'give them their flowers
while they yet, still breathe
and
can smell, that fragrance
of a beating, sweet Nature\'..
(well erm, friend
I rate that you making sure no one gets left out
I just hope this list, doesn\'t leak..)
lol
a fun read, thank you!

August 1st, 2022 03:07

The Ultimate System
L. B. Mek said:

Brilliant!
(could literally spend a few fun filled minutes
guessing at all the references;
and that\'s just at the surface level..)
\'This Whole Affair Has Made It 2 Far 2 Serious.
Furious Combat From A Place That Almost Totally Defied The System\'s Programming Did This.\'

July 28th, 2022 03:38

Rachel
L. B. Mek said:

\'Groove, I Now Do, N My Fly Nu Whip\'
lmao!
across the road, but yeah
best greet her in your whip
let me pause to insta my image nation
this is what i foresee:
(squatting by your car
in the summer heat
paying a kid, for getting you
a change of shirt and water
every 5 mins
and eventually, when kid
is rich enough to outsource the work
to his bro\'s, she
oblivious
walks out...
you
change shirt, gulp down
your fears
jump into that leather seat
which immediately begins
frying your $ss, so bad
you no longer fear, hellfire..
and squirming from left
to right, sautéed cheek
you, drive around the block
just to pull up by her side
and call out, \'Ayo Rachel\'
despairing, loud
only
she, used to catcalls
all day, long
from wannabees, in their rentals
has her ears blockaded
by trojan beats
loader, than any noise
trying to ensnare her
so with her, head down
completely ignores
your red raw, panting face
screaming your heart out
till
you pass out, crash
and
have the kids, roll you back home
at double the rate...)
dude, \'You\'ve got Game!\'
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

July 25th, 2022 04:06

The Moth
lalalaEulalie said:

A day in the life.
It sounds like you have found peace - at least for one Thursday in July.

Nice thoughts, thanks for sharing. Wishing you the best (and maybe another fine cup of coffee) today.

-Lolly

July 22nd, 2022 12:15

Llaena Gibraltar
L. B. Mek said:

\'Dad, Step-Dad Will B Miserable Without His Plan:B.\'
yeah, no degree in Freudian
theory, needed
to work out what\'s at the root
of the abundant - broken
we see all around us, daily..
(so much insight, dear Poet
unfurled
and delivered, unashamedly raw
blunt, like life
in those trenches, they label
as our inner city, hood\'s
without declaring them, as
the warzones, they clearly are..)

July 19th, 2022 05:30

Velvet
L. B. Mek said:

a wonderful dedication
maybe, this will work
like \'field of dreams\'
if your write, it
\'they will come\'
lol
really liked this line
\'Either Candy Or Sundae.\'
marriage, as teeth rot
sweetness that kills
while
love, is just tempered
dentist proof
lol
a fun read, thank you!

July 18th, 2022 04:25

Treasury
L. B. Mek said:

i read it a few times and am still lost
lol
still, worth the effort
I like its depth and multiple perspectives
to what is, in essence a simple theme
shows great skill
thanks for sharing, dear poet

July 15th, 2022 02:07

C.A.N.
L. B. Mek said:

Amen!
\'Yes, we CAN!\'


July 14th, 2022 00:11

M.A.R.R.Y.
L. B. Mek said:

you know what, dear poet
I actually have time
for that monogamous, aspect
in a public declaration of loyalty
and love..
so the institute of marriage
is something i respect, genuinely
but
then you add in paperwork
\'a celibate priest\' dictating terms
to \'bless\' your union
and then those skewed laws
which dictate every man
best get themselves an iron tight
prenup
and then, I\'m like
nah
fck all that..
like Wyclef said, best
\'I\'ll be back in November\'
😎✌
lol

July 12th, 2022 02:10

L.O.V.E.L.Y.
L. B. Mek said:

lol
that \'O.M.G\' of \'Y.O.U\'
in unique
Poetic creativity, indeed!
hope you had a good weekend, dear poet
thanks for keeping it light
and the chuckles you gift
my life

July 5th, 2022 04:28

C.L.E.O.P.A.T.R.A.
L. B. Mek said:

that, she\'ll forever be
remembered
as the last Pharaoh
is such, an injustice!
so many of the unworthy
in that 5000, year dynasty
escaped that ill-Fate
still
her legacy of Feminine
power, will
also be remembered, aside
her story
and in that, she shall ever-Remain
a phoenix Queen, of eternal
Flame, guiding
all who will come after her!
\'Radically, Allusrtius\', indeed
our African queen, supreme


June 30th, 2022 05:52

R.E.S.T.
Jerry Wayne Lawrence said:

Onliest On Point U R, L B. Thanks. Our Synergizing Of Poetics & Poeticals Continues.......

June 28th, 2022 09:26

P.A.R.L.O.R.
L. B. Mek said:

when we find \'em
we gotta, fight for \'em
our parlor\'s of salvation
those corners of the world
where, we can be free
to show ourselves, broken
fallible and beautifully, human...
(a lovely message, dear poet
thank you)

June 28th, 2022 04:00

R.E.S.T.
L. B. Mek said:

yeah, we be at our best
when
feeling relaxed and free
to be
who, we choose to be...
that\'s a great, acrostic
thank you, dear Poet

June 28th, 2022 02:39

B.I.R.D.S.
Morwenna said:

Sweet and clever. Thank you for making me smile.

June 25th, 2022 17:10

M.I.S.S.
L. B. Mek said:

Mesmerising aesthetics
Intimate synced-Pulses
Seizing serendipity\'s gifts
Soulful connections

Destitute dreamless states
Reality\'s stubborn gates
Enveloped in stagnant fates
Amassing hope to eradicate
Mind\'s state, that decimate

Enshrined tepid refrain
Refusing to accept
Your enriching presence

my Dream.ery Miss
come n visit, help
me rhyme, Mr with
chance

June 21st, 2022 04:35

Regard
L. B. Mek said:

sadly, this over me head
legacy
of that limited intellect..
still I really liked your lines
especially that first one..
indeed
\'I have high regard
for your Renegade\'
ways..
thanks for sharing, dear poet
lol

June 13th, 2022 05:25

Flying Guillotine
L. B. Mek said:

ok the title alone worked so well
in lining me up for this fantastical, tale
I think an empress, with power to wield
a chorus of flying guillotines
is a better premise, than
a white haired girl
\'walking on fire\'
and taming mindless, dragons!
lol
only thing is
how you gonna connect
your story\'s
Japan and French, themes
since the french got kicked out of japan, decades before
the english and americans fought
over arming that child emperor..
lol
a fun read, dear poet
thanks for the chuckles

June 10th, 2022 04:39

Lady
L. B. Mek said:

\'That Continually Provokes Me.
Fancy Fantassy.\'
(I too first observed
the true grace and majesty
of a woman, when i met
my friend\'s mother
till then, everything I rated
was aesthetic and physical
but
with her, i finally realised
having the right: \'LADY\'
as your partner, means
you can never, Lose
at life...
and so I learnt, to not settle
\'for no cheap, imitation\'
and till, this day
though, my ticket may have expired
I would rather wilt, at my station
awaiting
than jump on a train with a wrong
destination)..
this had such a cool groove to it
I imagine a Blue\'s band, playing
and some hype guy, reading these words
in some downstairs, dingy jazz bar
in Paris
in the 60\'s/70\'s..
lol
thanks for sharing, dear Poet

June 9th, 2022 04:24

My Crush On Cynthia Twiggs
L. B. Mek said:

ermmm, it\'s Friday
and you\'ve got me thinking
of Miss \'gardenTease\' Parker
from that funTastic film
titled, ermmm Friday..
lol
thank you! gonna gift myself
a few laughs and watch it again
over the weekend
\'DaaaaaaMMMMMMMnnnnnn!\'
🤣

June 3rd, 2022 04:39

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