Comments received on poems by Lorenz
Sandcastles
Priya Tomar said:
Wow ! Well written...
Lovely metaphor for fragility...
September 2nd, 2025 14:22
Priya Tomar said:
Wow ! Well written...
Lovely metaphor for fragility...
September 2nd, 2025 14:22
Sandcastles
Ellen Marsell said:
It’s an allegory of the futility of war and of human missions that seem important, but in the end turn out to be nothing more than sand carried away by the tide.
September 2nd, 2025 13:20
Ellen Marsell said:
It’s an allegory of the futility of war and of human missions that seem important, but in the end turn out to be nothing more than sand carried away by the tide.
September 2nd, 2025 13:20
Sandcastles
sorenbarrett said:
Sandcastles fall easily with the incoming waves and tide leaving little to show. They say build upon a rock but there are few rocks on this beach. Maybe a lighthouse. Good write my friend
September 2nd, 2025 12:28
sorenbarrett said:
Sandcastles fall easily with the incoming waves and tide leaving little to show. They say build upon a rock but there are few rocks on this beach. Maybe a lighthouse. Good write my friend
September 2nd, 2025 12:28
Lethal poetry
NafisaSB said:
stay succumbed so that she helps inspire and generate some beautiful lines
September 2nd, 2025 01:48
NafisaSB said:
stay succumbed so that she helps inspire and generate some beautiful lines
September 2nd, 2025 01:48
The lover wave
Ellen Marsell said:
In this poem, the sea conveys a sense of boundlessness, weight, and depth. It becomes the symbol of all memory and all love - infinite and all-consuming. It is at once a scar, a solace, and a sentence. The sea both devours and preserves, turning love into a fateful current where there is no escape, except to surrender to the final wave. A beautiful work!
August 31st, 2025 13:23
Ellen Marsell said:
In this poem, the sea conveys a sense of boundlessness, weight, and depth. It becomes the symbol of all memory and all love - infinite and all-consuming. It is at once a scar, a solace, and a sentence. The sea both devours and preserves, turning love into a fateful current where there is no escape, except to surrender to the final wave. A beautiful work!
August 31st, 2025 13:23
The lover wave
sorenbarrett said:
So many metaphors of the inner self in this poem Lovez. A lovely write with deep mysteries within it. A lot of symbolism here. Very nice
August 31st, 2025 11:02
sorenbarrett said:
So many metaphors of the inner self in this poem Lovez. A lovely write with deep mysteries within it. A lot of symbolism here. Very nice
August 31st, 2025 11:02
Lethal poetry
sorenbarrett said:
Alluring, evil, dark but the only light. Very nicely said
August 29th, 2025 15:59
sorenbarrett said:
Alluring, evil, dark but the only light. Very nicely said
August 29th, 2025 15:59
Lethal poetry
Alex Arnot said:
A muse, a demon, an affliction, she is all those things. We use her to spread our own wrath and desire and she eagerly obliges! Excellent write!
August 29th, 2025 15:04
Alex Arnot said:
A muse, a demon, an affliction, she is all those things. We use her to spread our own wrath and desire and she eagerly obliges! Excellent write!
August 29th, 2025 15:04
Lethal poetry
Priya Tomar said:
Brilliant metaphor for a fatal woman.
Nicely done !
August 29th, 2025 11:06
Priya Tomar said:
Brilliant metaphor for a fatal woman.
Nicely done !
August 29th, 2025 11:06
Lethal poetry
Ellen Marsell said:
A very powerful allusion to poetry as a fatal woman. She is not an abstract muse like in the works of the ancient poets - she is a fateful lover. In her image intertwine seduction, danger, and the inevitability of destiny. Brilliantly written!
August 29th, 2025 10:55
Ellen Marsell said:
A very powerful allusion to poetry as a fatal woman. She is not an abstract muse like in the works of the ancient poets - she is a fateful lover. In her image intertwine seduction, danger, and the inevitability of destiny. Brilliantly written!
August 29th, 2025 10:55
The rose of time
Ellen Marsell said:
Against the backdrop of changing generations and senseless conflicts, the roses go on blooming - a symbol of peace and wisdom. The contrast between destruction and beauty makes your poem profound and deeply moving.
August 28th, 2025 13:56
Ellen Marsell said:
Against the backdrop of changing generations and senseless conflicts, the roses go on blooming - a symbol of peace and wisdom. The contrast between destruction and beauty makes your poem profound and deeply moving.
August 28th, 2025 13:56
The rose of time
Lorenz said:
A political message beneath the sweetness of summer roses !
August 28th, 2025 11:09
Lorenz said:
A political message beneath the sweetness of summer roses !
August 28th, 2025 11:09
The rose of time
sorenbarrett said:
And the band played waltzing Matilda and where have all the flowers gone long time passing, In peace sons bury their fathers, in times of war fathers bury their sons. Bob Dylan painted it well in Masters of War. A vivid and heartfelt poem Lorenz
August 28th, 2025 10:52
sorenbarrett said:
And the band played waltzing Matilda and where have all the flowers gone long time passing, In peace sons bury their fathers, in times of war fathers bury their sons. Bob Dylan painted it well in Masters of War. A vivid and heartfelt poem Lorenz
August 28th, 2025 10:52
Double game
Ellen Marsell said:
Two faces of one soul, gazing at each other through the mist of oblivion and memory. One rejects, the other draws, yet together they are the breath of eternity.
August 27th, 2025 15:21
Ellen Marsell said:
Two faces of one soul, gazing at each other through the mist of oblivion and memory. One rejects, the other draws, yet together they are the breath of eternity.
August 27th, 2025 15:21
Double game
sorenbarrett said:
A faithful double game indeed with so many oppositions included as well as incongruencies. Nicely done Lorenz
August 27th, 2025 10:48
sorenbarrett said:
A faithful double game indeed with so many oppositions included as well as incongruencies. Nicely done Lorenz
August 27th, 2025 10:48
The house of the unsaid
Sealgair said:
A powerful text. It feels like a psychological monologue, where the metaphor of the house turns into a metaphor of the soul, and the \"unsaid\" becomes that inner depth which seeks an outlet.That’s how I see it…
August 27th, 2025 04:50
Sealgair said:
A powerful text. It feels like a psychological monologue, where the metaphor of the house turns into a metaphor of the soul, and the \"unsaid\" becomes that inner depth which seeks an outlet.That’s how I see it…
August 27th, 2025 04:50
Chaos symphony
Sealgair said:
The text sounds like a clap of thunder breaking into the darkness, or like a strange, dark song of liberation.
Darkly mesmerizing.
August 27th, 2025 04:33
Sealgair said:
The text sounds like a clap of thunder breaking into the darkness, or like a strange, dark song of liberation.
Darkly mesmerizing.
August 27th, 2025 04:33
The child of the depths
NafisaSB said:
a child\'s imagination always flies into the realms of fantasy and creates beautiful tales ..well described
August 27th, 2025 00:24
NafisaSB said:
a child\'s imagination always flies into the realms of fantasy and creates beautiful tales ..well described
August 27th, 2025 00:24
Chaos symphony
Ellen Marsell said:
The poem is close to the spirit of prophetic poetry and full of apocalyptic energy. A black mass, where echoes of Nietzsche and Artaud can be heard.
August 26th, 2025 13:42
Ellen Marsell said:
The poem is close to the spirit of prophetic poetry and full of apocalyptic energy. A black mass, where echoes of Nietzsche and Artaud can be heard.
August 26th, 2025 13:42
Chaos symphony
sorenbarrett said:
Dark and death oriented this poem speaks from the shadows. A religion of a sort. Well spoken
August 26th, 2025 11:13
sorenbarrett said:
Dark and death oriented this poem speaks from the shadows. A religion of a sort. Well spoken
August 26th, 2025 11:13
The house of the unsaid
sorenbarrett said:
This tickles the brain in places that can not be itched or scratched only the edges. A provocative write Lorenz
August 25th, 2025 15:00
sorenbarrett said:
This tickles the brain in places that can not be itched or scratched only the edges. A provocative write Lorenz
August 25th, 2025 15:00
The house of the unsaid
Ellen Marsell said:
This poem speaks of separation - of breaking away from a toxic inheritance, of the truth that one can only truly become oneself by destroying what was imposed. It reads like a psychological map of the soul, a confession before oneself.
August 25th, 2025 14:18
Ellen Marsell said:
This poem speaks of separation - of breaking away from a toxic inheritance, of the truth that one can only truly become oneself by destroying what was imposed. It reads like a psychological map of the soul, a confession before oneself.
August 25th, 2025 14:18
Enlightenment flowers
Ellen Marsell said:
It is a kind of mystical diary of humanity. Within it resonate archetypes, religions, and philosophies, yet everything converges into one: life is a game, and only by accepting it as such do we attain that ‘dark clarity’ which you call enlightenment.
August 23rd, 2025 13:12
Ellen Marsell said:
It is a kind of mystical diary of humanity. Within it resonate archetypes, religions, and philosophies, yet everything converges into one: life is a game, and only by accepting it as such do we attain that ‘dark clarity’ which you call enlightenment.
August 23rd, 2025 13:12
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