Comments received on poems by rebellion_in_sanity
The Best Sparrow Is a Dead Sparrow
Poetic Licence said:
A very nicely crafted and thought write, democracy is under attack all around the world as highlighted in this write, enjoyed the read
August 14th, 2025 10:41
Poetic Licence said:
A very nicely crafted and thought write, democracy is under attack all around the world as highlighted in this write, enjoyed the read
August 14th, 2025 10:41
The Best Sparrow Is a Dead Sparrow
sorenbarrett said:
Social commentary in metaphor well written.
August 14th, 2025 10:22
sorenbarrett said:
Social commentary in metaphor well written.
August 14th, 2025 10:22
Low End of Middle-class
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, this poem walks a fine, painful line between self-awareness and complicity, and you capture it with almost theatrical precision. The “chasing the passing clouds” refrain hits like an unshakable metaphor for striving in a rigged game, and that final thought...climbing toward what might be your own grave...carries a brutal, quiet truth. The voice is confessional yet performative, which makes it sting even more. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ Wonderful write!
August 12th, 2025 17:19
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, this poem walks a fine, painful line between self-awareness and complicity, and you capture it with almost theatrical precision. The “chasing the passing clouds” refrain hits like an unshakable metaphor for striving in a rigged game, and that final thought...climbing toward what might be your own grave...carries a brutal, quiet truth. The voice is confessional yet performative, which makes it sting even more. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ Wonderful write!
August 12th, 2025 17:19
Low End of Middle-class
Poetic Licence said:
Our votes count to get them in, then they turn to there own agenda and ignore the masses, enjoyed the read
August 12th, 2025 13:45
Poetic Licence said:
Our votes count to get them in, then they turn to there own agenda and ignore the masses, enjoyed the read
August 12th, 2025 13:45
Low End of Middle-class
sorenbarrett said:
A poem with the feeling of futility that accompanies life itself. Well done
August 12th, 2025 10:13
sorenbarrett said:
A poem with the feeling of futility that accompanies life itself. Well done
August 12th, 2025 10:13
Intelligence
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, this is chilling in its precision. You’ve built the tension step by step until it tips from satire into something almost prophetic. The shift from corporate greed to existential threat lands hard…and stays there, right where it belogns. Strong, unnerving work. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ I hope all has been well in my absence.
August 10th, 2025 07:53
Tristan Robert Lange said:
My friend, this is chilling in its precision. You’ve built the tension step by step until it tips from satire into something almost prophetic. The shift from corporate greed to existential threat lands hard…and stays there, right where it belogns. Strong, unnerving work. 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛ I hope all has been well in my absence.
August 10th, 2025 07:53
Intelligence
Poetic Licence said:
A very relevant and poignant write in today\'s frightening world of technology, I have now doubt that for some the essence of this write, will happen, nicely written
August 10th, 2025 07:10
Poetic Licence said:
A very relevant and poignant write in today\'s frightening world of technology, I have now doubt that for some the essence of this write, will happen, nicely written
August 10th, 2025 07:10
Intelligence
sorenbarrett said:
A concern I share and have written on a couple of times. I thought for sure that the poem was going to end with the owner finding an e-mail on his monitor saying he had been deleted as a cost factor as well. Nicely done it leaves an eerie dystopian feel
August 10th, 2025 04:01
sorenbarrett said:
A concern I share and have written on a couple of times. I thought for sure that the poem was going to end with the owner finding an e-mail on his monitor saying he had been deleted as a cost factor as well. Nicely done it leaves an eerie dystopian feel
August 10th, 2025 04:01
An Apology To My Poems
Neville said:
................................ Epic & rammed with metaphor .. bloomin well inked my friend .. Neville
July 8th, 2025 13:22
Neville said:
................................ Epic & rammed with metaphor .. bloomin well inked my friend .. Neville
July 8th, 2025 13:22
Design Flaw
Neville said:
Best chuckle I\'ve had for a very long while .. Neville
July 8th, 2025 08:01
Neville said:
Best chuckle I\'ve had for a very long while .. Neville
July 8th, 2025 08:01
Design Flaw
Tristan Robert Lange said:
First. Wow! I say these were very serious. Very profound and deep, righteous truth is in here. What you have done is held up God\'s mirror to us! To answer the final question. Yes they were/are. Which is why hate can never be the answer. BUT, sadly, some children go really really wayward. This is not a religious truth...per se...but it is SPIRITUAL and PRACTICAL one. In fact, religion houses the faithful and the wayward alike. There\'s grace in that. But it can also be hell! Ah...the complexities. Behind every question\'s answer lies more questions. And I will stop rambling and just say what is obvious: BRAVO! This is a fave! 🌹👏 Oh...and yes, the humor is what made this and got its point so eloquently across. Again. Bravo.
July 2nd, 2025 11:39
Tristan Robert Lange said:
First. Wow! I say these were very serious. Very profound and deep, righteous truth is in here. What you have done is held up God\'s mirror to us! To answer the final question. Yes they were/are. Which is why hate can never be the answer. BUT, sadly, some children go really really wayward. This is not a religious truth...per se...but it is SPIRITUAL and PRACTICAL one. In fact, religion houses the faithful and the wayward alike. There\'s grace in that. But it can also be hell! Ah...the complexities. Behind every question\'s answer lies more questions. And I will stop rambling and just say what is obvious: BRAVO! This is a fave! 🌹👏 Oh...and yes, the humor is what made this and got its point so eloquently across. Again. Bravo.
July 2nd, 2025 11:39
Design Flaw
Poetic Licence said:
A very well written write with a lovely sense of humour, enjoyed the read
July 2nd, 2025 00:57
Poetic Licence said:
A very well written write with a lovely sense of humour, enjoyed the read
July 2nd, 2025 00:57
Past Tells No Lies
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write and I like the metaphor in the write, very enjoyable read
July 1st, 2025 11:44
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write and I like the metaphor in the write, very enjoyable read
July 1st, 2025 11:44
Design Flaw
sorenbarrett said:
Only if he played the milkman. It is a poem that reminds me of the story of Lord Krishna as an avatar and the kings advisor spoke to him as a friend advising him on battle. Women not allowed, no weapons. A fun read that seems at the same time mythical with a celestial sense of humor.
July 1st, 2025 10:45
sorenbarrett said:
Only if he played the milkman. It is a poem that reminds me of the story of Lord Krishna as an avatar and the kings advisor spoke to him as a friend advising him on battle. Women not allowed, no weapons. A fun read that seems at the same time mythical with a celestial sense of humor.
July 1st, 2025 10:45
An Apology To My Poems
Poetic Licence said:
This is such a valid write, many try to beautify their writes loosing the message they want to pervey. I am of limited education and i write from the heart, it may not be pretty, but it is honest, enjoyed the read, nicely expressed and written
May 26th, 2025 01:00
Poetic Licence said:
This is such a valid write, many try to beautify their writes loosing the message they want to pervey. I am of limited education and i write from the heart, it may not be pretty, but it is honest, enjoyed the read, nicely expressed and written
May 26th, 2025 01:00
Penance for Imaginary
Poetic Licence said:
That last paragraph is so relatable to me, often i ask am I to blame. Wonderful write the effects of misunderstanding and blame have on any relationship, nicely expressed and written
May 24th, 2025 06:43
Poetic Licence said:
That last paragraph is so relatable to me, often i ask am I to blame. Wonderful write the effects of misunderstanding and blame have on any relationship, nicely expressed and written
May 24th, 2025 06:43
An Apology To My Poems
sorenbarrett said:
Loved this poem and the metaphor here. Vanity is one of the greatest foes of poetry. I has a false ring to its sound and does not live but is dead to the reader. Nicely said.
May 24th, 2025 06:43
sorenbarrett said:
Loved this poem and the metaphor here. Vanity is one of the greatest foes of poetry. I has a false ring to its sound and does not live but is dead to the reader. Nicely said.
May 24th, 2025 06:43
EDGE DOCTRINE
Poetic Licence said:
Prejudice comes in many forms and across many subjects, I feel it occurs by our inability to take our time to understand people different to ourselves, hereditary prejudice passed on by family beliefs and ignorance, by not fitting in to what we consider the norm and lastly notting having empathy for other human beings and there circumstances, it is easy for them to hate than understand. Great write highlighting many deep thinking issues, enjoyed the read
May 20th, 2025 12:20
Poetic Licence said:
Prejudice comes in many forms and across many subjects, I feel it occurs by our inability to take our time to understand people different to ourselves, hereditary prejudice passed on by family beliefs and ignorance, by not fitting in to what we consider the norm and lastly notting having empathy for other human beings and there circumstances, it is easy for them to hate than understand. Great write highlighting many deep thinking issues, enjoyed the read
May 20th, 2025 12:20
EDGE DOCTRINE
sorenbarrett said:
Prejudice is pervasive not only about race, religion, politics and immigration status but anyone that is not considered family. We should all consider that we are all immigrants
May 20th, 2025 10:49
sorenbarrett said:
Prejudice is pervasive not only about race, religion, politics and immigration status but anyone that is not considered family. We should all consider that we are all immigrants
May 20th, 2025 10:49
The Gospel of The Modern God
Poetic Licence said:
A powerful write from the heart,many justify there selfish actions as a benifit to the many, but it is at the cost of the many that the few get richer and more powerful, nicely expressed and written
May 17th, 2025 04:07
Poetic Licence said:
A powerful write from the heart,many justify there selfish actions as a benifit to the many, but it is at the cost of the many that the few get richer and more powerful, nicely expressed and written
May 17th, 2025 04:07
The Gospel of The Modern God
2781 said:
And saith unto him, All these things I will give thee, if thou will fall down and worship me.
May 17th, 2025 03:42
2781 said:
And saith unto him, All these things I will give thee, if thou will fall down and worship me.
May 17th, 2025 03:42
And .... I Seek
Cheeky Missy said:
\"...men loved darkness rather than light because their deeds were evil--\" and, \"...seek ye the LORD while He may be found, call ye upon Him while He is near--\" \"...for in Him we live, and move, and have our being, for we are also His offspring--\" [see Acts 17; Is. 55:6; Jn 3:19-21, etc.] Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery, this is gorgeous with a resonating, haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
May 12th, 2025 10:17
Cheeky Missy said:
\"...men loved darkness rather than light because their deeds were evil--\" and, \"...seek ye the LORD while He may be found, call ye upon Him while He is near--\" \"...for in Him we live, and move, and have our being, for we are also His offspring--\" [see Acts 17; Is. 55:6; Jn 3:19-21, etc.] Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery, this is gorgeous with a resonating, haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
May 12th, 2025 10:17
And .... I Seek
Doggerel Dave said:
Now a search for God (and please no offence) has always seemed to me to be a pretty futile exercise. However if in your search, you produce such poetry then please keep looking and don’t forget to keep me apprised of your findings.
May 12th, 2025 08:00
Doggerel Dave said:
Now a search for God (and please no offence) has always seemed to me to be a pretty futile exercise. However if in your search, you produce such poetry then please keep looking and don’t forget to keep me apprised of your findings.
May 12th, 2025 08:00
And .... I Seek
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write in the search of faith after overcoming many obstacles along the way, very well written and expressed
May 11th, 2025 13:27
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write in the search of faith after overcoming many obstacles along the way, very well written and expressed
May 11th, 2025 13:27
And .... I Seek
sorenbarrett said:
A powerful poem that points a child\'s finger at the emperor with no cloths. Oh the shame. A fave
May 11th, 2025 13:19
sorenbarrett said:
A powerful poem that points a child\'s finger at the emperor with no cloths. Oh the shame. A fave
May 11th, 2025 13:19
Penance for Imaginary
Tristan Robert Lange said:
I have felt this. That last stanza, something I have literally wrestled with inside. Do I just take the blame? Powerful write, my friend. A fave. 🌹👏
May 4th, 2025 18:24
Tristan Robert Lange said:
I have felt this. That last stanza, something I have literally wrestled with inside. Do I just take the blame? Powerful write, my friend. A fave. 🌹👏
May 4th, 2025 18:24
Penance for Imaginary
sorenbarrett said:
Misunderstanding and blame powerful tools to wrack havoc in any relationship and drive a wedge of mistrust, not just by the viewer but into the very heart of the innocent. Lovely
May 4th, 2025 05:04
sorenbarrett said:
Misunderstanding and blame powerful tools to wrack havoc in any relationship and drive a wedge of mistrust, not just by the viewer but into the very heart of the innocent. Lovely
May 4th, 2025 05:04
River of Time
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting poem of an evolving nature. A lovely write.
May 2nd, 2025 12:31
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting poem of an evolving nature. A lovely write.
May 2nd, 2025 12:31
Silencing the Dissonance
sorenbarrett said:
Once again full of metaphor this poem speaks to me of control and quieting those who speak for liberty. The Cuckoo the noisy one who calls out. I found it interesting that you also used the word mocking ( As in mocking bird). A wonderful poem full of symbolic meaning.
May 1st, 2025 10:40
sorenbarrett said:
Once again full of metaphor this poem speaks to me of control and quieting those who speak for liberty. The Cuckoo the noisy one who calls out. I found it interesting that you also used the word mocking ( As in mocking bird). A wonderful poem full of symbolic meaning.
May 1st, 2025 10:40
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