Comments received on poems by LP2187
The infernal haze
Tristan Robert Lange said:
I love this poem and its structure. The imagery is vivid, touching upon the senses: visual, tactile, olfactory, auditory, and gustatory senses are all present in this poem, and it also has a kinesthetic sense, as the narrator is in motion throughout. The structure, again, is magnificent. I love how you wrote mostly in sestets but concluded with a tercet. That was really unexpected and effective, in my humble opinion. And that\'s not to mention the content...a blending of beauty (a beach scene)...with melancholy and the struggle to find hope and meaning in life. Such a hard task when the melancholy obscures the view and weighs you down to a crawl. I get this, I\'ve walked along this very oppressive shoreline. Thank you so much for putting it into words and capturing what many of us go through on a daily basis. A poignant write with a haunting urgency. Well done, my friend! 🌹👏
January 17th, 2025 08:52
Tristan Robert Lange said:
I love this poem and its structure. The imagery is vivid, touching upon the senses: visual, tactile, olfactory, auditory, and gustatory senses are all present in this poem, and it also has a kinesthetic sense, as the narrator is in motion throughout. The structure, again, is magnificent. I love how you wrote mostly in sestets but concluded with a tercet. That was really unexpected and effective, in my humble opinion. And that\'s not to mention the content...a blending of beauty (a beach scene)...with melancholy and the struggle to find hope and meaning in life. Such a hard task when the melancholy obscures the view and weighs you down to a crawl. I get this, I\'ve walked along this very oppressive shoreline. Thank you so much for putting it into words and capturing what many of us go through on a daily basis. A poignant write with a haunting urgency. Well done, my friend! 🌹👏
January 17th, 2025 08:52
The infernal haze
arqios said:
This poem transitions from tranquility to turmoil, capturing the complexity of navigating through a landscape filled with beauty, fear, and chaos. It uses vivid and powerful imagery to convey the speaker\'s journey, evoking a strong emotional response. 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
January 17th, 2025 07:14
arqios said:
This poem transitions from tranquility to turmoil, capturing the complexity of navigating through a landscape filled with beauty, fear, and chaos. It uses vivid and powerful imagery to convey the speaker\'s journey, evoking a strong emotional response. 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
January 17th, 2025 07:14
The infernal haze
Michael Edwards said:
Paints a great picture - a worthy read.
January 17th, 2025 03:29
Michael Edwards said:
Paints a great picture - a worthy read.
January 17th, 2025 03:29
Forever lost
Tristan Robert Lange said:
A wonderful senryu, my friend. Sadly, I know this feeling all too well! Well done. 🌹👏
January 16th, 2025 19:17
Tristan Robert Lange said:
A wonderful senryu, my friend. Sadly, I know this feeling all too well! Well done. 🌹👏
January 16th, 2025 19:17
Forever lost
Cassie58 said:
A strong senryu which delivers on its title. I like that Teddy has penned one for you that offers hope.
January 16th, 2025 17:05
Cassie58 said:
A strong senryu which delivers on its title. I like that Teddy has penned one for you that offers hope.
January 16th, 2025 17:05
Forever lost
Teddy.15 said:
I found your seryu incredibly powerful and poignant to how we all feel at some time,
Here is one for you inspired by yours, with a touch of hope. ❤️
Tears now fill my eyes
I\'m lost but not forever
Anxiety fades.
January 16th, 2025 14:18
Teddy.15 said:
I found your seryu incredibly powerful and poignant to how we all feel at some time,
Here is one for you inspired by yours, with a touch of hope. ❤️
Tears now fill my eyes
I\'m lost but not forever
Anxiety fades.
January 16th, 2025 14:18
A new day
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love the monorhyme and how it is structured in tercets with a concluding quatrain. The flow of this is very musical, each line feels very connected to the previous. The message is wonderful as well...the darkness is present but even more so is the presence of light. Well done, my friend. Enjoyed this a lot. An easy fave. 🌹👏
January 15th, 2025 16:33
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Love the monorhyme and how it is structured in tercets with a concluding quatrain. The flow of this is very musical, each line feels very connected to the previous. The message is wonderful as well...the darkness is present but even more so is the presence of light. Well done, my friend. Enjoyed this a lot. An easy fave. 🌹👏
January 15th, 2025 16:33
A new day
Cheeky Missy said:
Monorhyme in quatrains and I didn\'t bother to suss out the metre. Kinda a fun exercise, isn\'t it, though? Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a curious poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
January 15th, 2025 14:14
Cheeky Missy said:
Monorhyme in quatrains and I didn\'t bother to suss out the metre. Kinda a fun exercise, isn\'t it, though? Beautifully rendered with excellent imagery and a curious poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
January 15th, 2025 14:14
A walk in the park
NinjaGirl said:
One little action... just going for a walk
January 14th, 2025 12:54
NinjaGirl said:
One little action... just going for a walk
January 14th, 2025 12:54
A walk in the park
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Yikes! Beware that lake! 🤣 A wonderful limerick my friend! 🌹👏
January 14th, 2025 08:55
Tristan Robert Lange said:
Yikes! Beware that lake! 🤣 A wonderful limerick my friend! 🌹👏
January 14th, 2025 08:55
A walk in the park
arqios said:
Height of humour with a dark twist creating hilarious absurdity! 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
January 14th, 2025 04:39
arqios said:
Height of humour with a dark twist creating hilarious absurdity! 🙏🏻🕊👍🏻
January 14th, 2025 04:39
Scars of life
NinjaGirl said:
well, full health is far away, but a little step of healing is right around the corner
January 13th, 2025 20:28
NinjaGirl said:
well, full health is far away, but a little step of healing is right around the corner
January 13th, 2025 20:28
Scars of life
Cheeky Missy said:
Senryu. What\'s tripping me up is the suggestion that Time could ever be other than weighty and thieving. Fascinating and rendered to effect with an excellently haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
January 13th, 2025 17:37
Cheeky Missy said:
Senryu. What\'s tripping me up is the suggestion that Time could ever be other than weighty and thieving. Fascinating and rendered to effect with an excellently haunting poignancy. Thank you for sharing.
January 13th, 2025 17:37
Scars of life
arqios said:
Makes one ponder the stuff of life. A very moving read. 👍🏻🙏🏻🕊
January 13th, 2025 07:02
arqios said:
Makes one ponder the stuff of life. A very moving read. 👍🏻🙏🏻🕊
January 13th, 2025 07:02
My brother and I
jim56 said:
love this it shows brother sister love
epressess your feeling and emotion for your brother
it has a nice flow and written from the heart you
you really are a very talented writer
keep it up
January 13th, 2025 06:23
jim56 said:
love this it shows brother sister love
epressess your feeling and emotion for your brother
it has a nice flow and written from the heart you
you really are a very talented writer
keep it up
January 13th, 2025 06:23
Scars of life
TobaniNataiella said:
Few words, correct statement, some wounds do not heal, Enjoyed the read.
January 13th, 2025 04:58
TobaniNataiella said:
Few words, correct statement, some wounds do not heal, Enjoyed the read.
January 13th, 2025 04:58
Scars of life
Cassie58 said:
Some scars remain. Not all wounds heal, even though time is running out and forgiveness is a healer. For peace of mind, it is best to find forgiveness. Never too late to start. Enjoyed your haiku LP2187. All the best.
January 13th, 2025 02:45
Cassie58 said:
Some scars remain. Not all wounds heal, even though time is running out and forgiveness is a healer. For peace of mind, it is best to find forgiveness. Never too late to start. Enjoyed your haiku LP2187. All the best.
January 13th, 2025 02:45
Treacherous Beauty of Sin
Cheeky Missy said:
Iambic pentametre isn\'t your forté presently, but if you will yield to the sonnet\'s strictures, to the bars of this form\'s \"gilded cage\" as Wordsworth termed it, you\'ll discover the metre isn\'t so ugly after all. How fun! I\'m so very happy to have the pleasure of reading your first sonnet!!! Very lovely. If you want my editing advice I\'ll give it, otherwise I\'ll leave it in it\'s infant beauty. Charmingly rendered with excellent imagery, a haunting poignancy and teasing intrigue, it\'s very lovely. Thank you so much for sharing.
January 12th, 2025 19:33
Cheeky Missy said:
Iambic pentametre isn\'t your forté presently, but if you will yield to the sonnet\'s strictures, to the bars of this form\'s \"gilded cage\" as Wordsworth termed it, you\'ll discover the metre isn\'t so ugly after all. How fun! I\'m so very happy to have the pleasure of reading your first sonnet!!! Very lovely. If you want my editing advice I\'ll give it, otherwise I\'ll leave it in it\'s infant beauty. Charmingly rendered with excellent imagery, a haunting poignancy and teasing intrigue, it\'s very lovely. Thank you so much for sharing.
January 12th, 2025 19:33
Treacherous Beauty of Sin
orchidee said:
Oh, I dunno about those iambic thingys anyway. I wouldn\'t recognise one if I met one in the street! lol.
January 12th, 2025 08:07
orchidee said:
Oh, I dunno about those iambic thingys anyway. I wouldn\'t recognise one if I met one in the street! lol.
January 12th, 2025 08:07
Treacherous Beauty of Sin
TobaniNataiella said:
It paints many pictures as you read it, i know nothing about the terminology you have used in the authors comments, but i really enjoyed the read.
January 12th, 2025 05:37
TobaniNataiella said:
It paints many pictures as you read it, i know nothing about the terminology you have used in the authors comments, but i really enjoyed the read.
January 12th, 2025 05:37
Treacherous Beauty of Sin
arqios said:
It\'s wonderful to have a first go and see it posted up. Of course we continue to grow and develop as we go on in this journey of writing. Enjoy it and be happy in this first victory. The next sonnet is just around the corner! 🕊️👍
January 12th, 2025 05:04
arqios said:
It\'s wonderful to have a first go and see it posted up. Of course we continue to grow and develop as we go on in this journey of writing. Enjoy it and be happy in this first victory. The next sonnet is just around the corner! 🕊️👍
January 12th, 2025 05:04
Home
Tristan Robert Lange said:
A beautiful poem I find a home in. Easily faved! Well done!
January 12th, 2025 00:13
Tristan Robert Lange said:
A beautiful poem I find a home in. Easily faved! Well done!
January 12th, 2025 00:13
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