Comments received on poems by queer-with-a-pen
sharps
Lauraš» said:
Boaz,
A brutally honest and painful write! š£
So sorry you had to experience such physical pain and mental anguish!
Laura
May 23rd, 2020 06:32
Lauraš» said:
Boaz,
A brutally honest and painful write! š£
So sorry you had to experience such physical pain and mental anguish!
Laura
May 23rd, 2020 06:32
empty bottles and tattered sails
ChippedNailPolish said:
I love the metaphor you use, and the way in which you reveal further depth in every cleverly written line is beautifully done.
May 14th, 2020 07:28
ChippedNailPolish said:
I love the metaphor you use, and the way in which you reveal further depth in every cleverly written line is beautifully done.
May 14th, 2020 07:28
a love like crashing waves
My_Brain said:
Beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing.
Bella
April 23rd, 2020 12:51
My_Brain said:
Beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing.
Bella
April 23rd, 2020 12:51
a love like crashing waves
FredPeyer said:
Boaz, this is good! Enjoyed reading it.
April 23rd, 2020 11:50
FredPeyer said:
Boaz, this is good! Enjoyed reading it.
April 23rd, 2020 11:50
a love like crashing waves
dusk arising said:
The sea is a wicked temptress who will never leave you unstirred. She will offer solace and smash you upon rocks of despair, yet tickle your toes in cold foam of tease.....
The sea will sit you down and watch as you teach yourself of life beside her constance.
April 23rd, 2020 04:23
dusk arising said:
The sea is a wicked temptress who will never leave you unstirred. She will offer solace and smash you upon rocks of despair, yet tickle your toes in cold foam of tease.....
The sea will sit you down and watch as you teach yourself of life beside her constance.
April 23rd, 2020 04:23
home again, home again
FredPeyer said:
no matter how, no matter where, eventually we are always coming home. I do like your poem!
April 18th, 2020 10:46
FredPeyer said:
no matter how, no matter where, eventually we are always coming home. I do like your poem!
April 18th, 2020 10:46
darling bardling
dusk arising said:
You are among people tarred with a similar brush for we all love to write verse when so inspired.
I can imagine that for you the heartache and longing is compounded for the gay community has part timers who are only true to their desires at short notice and quickly shrink into self denial.
Very emotional and well expressed writing. Sympathy to you and your quest in these lockdown times. Stay safe and live for a future. On the other side of this coronavirus the world will have become a different place. Some of the changes, whatever they are, may prove to be positives for you.
April 13th, 2020 06:36
dusk arising said:
You are among people tarred with a similar brush for we all love to write verse when so inspired.
I can imagine that for you the heartache and longing is compounded for the gay community has part timers who are only true to their desires at short notice and quickly shrink into self denial.
Very emotional and well expressed writing. Sympathy to you and your quest in these lockdown times. Stay safe and live for a future. On the other side of this coronavirus the world will have become a different place. Some of the changes, whatever they are, may prove to be positives for you.
April 13th, 2020 06:36
prettier on paper
dusk arising said:
This shouts \"I dunno what i want but i sure don\'t want what i\'ve got\"
The frustration of so much good stuff being out there but none of it coming your way i guess. And the harder you try to attract it the more frustrated you get.
Catch 22 .
So maybe you turn your back on it so as to stop getting so wound up.... cos one day what you want is gonna come tapping you on the shoulder.
April 7th, 2020 11:41
dusk arising said:
This shouts \"I dunno what i want but i sure don\'t want what i\'ve got\"
The frustration of so much good stuff being out there but none of it coming your way i guess. And the harder you try to attract it the more frustrated you get.
Catch 22 .
So maybe you turn your back on it so as to stop getting so wound up.... cos one day what you want is gonna come tapping you on the shoulder.
April 7th, 2020 11:41
prettier on paper
jarcher54 said:
I adore this:
the only heart iāve ever
broken is my own
Thanks for that contribution to my day!
April 7th, 2020 08:47
jarcher54 said:
I adore this:
the only heart iāve ever
broken is my own
Thanks for that contribution to my day!
April 7th, 2020 08:47
oh, my darling
MendedFences27 said:
This poem may be short, but it says a lot. It exudes the melancholy/sorrow of a lost or failing love. The emotion of a separation or ending can cause one to physically tremble. The writers pain is felt by those who read this. A great communication of love\'s darker side. - Phil A.
April 4th, 2020 16:22
MendedFences27 said:
This poem may be short, but it says a lot. It exudes the melancholy/sorrow of a lost or failing love. The emotion of a separation or ending can cause one to physically tremble. The writers pain is felt by those who read this. A great communication of love\'s darker side. - Phil A.
April 4th, 2020 16:22
oh, my darling
Goldfinch60 said:
A bard who may not be able to hold a note but can certainly show their love in their words - shaky or otherwise. Love is always strong.
Andy
April 4th, 2020 01:46
Goldfinch60 said:
A bard who may not be able to hold a note but can certainly show their love in their words - shaky or otherwise. Love is always strong.
Andy
April 4th, 2020 01:46
who\'s your daddy?
dusk arising said:
There is a great deal of pain and sadness pouring out of your words today. And sincerity. Very moving indeed.
March 21st, 2020 01:18
dusk arising said:
There is a great deal of pain and sadness pouring out of your words today. And sincerity. Very moving indeed.
March 21st, 2020 01:18
hanahaki (or: two birds/one poem)
Saxon Crow said:
Love this Poem QWP. Especially the line and the roses, pink like the sunset and downy soft i planted between my ribs for you. Brilliant
March 11th, 2020 09:19
Saxon Crow said:
Love this Poem QWP. Especially the line and the roses, pink like the sunset and downy soft i planted between my ribs for you. Brilliant
March 11th, 2020 09:19
reckless in love and other things
Saxon Crow said:
I love this poem. It tells me of the recklessness of youth maturing and shaping into wisdom of the heart. The only journey that is important.
February 14th, 2020 04:26
Saxon Crow said:
I love this poem. It tells me of the recklessness of youth maturing and shaping into wisdom of the heart. The only journey that is important.
February 14th, 2020 04:26
reckless in love and other things
dusk arising said:
Love as an emotion, rther than a physical act, is a noble place to begin for it is surely where you will finish too. Hopefully finishing with a finer trust and understanding of how huge a thing love really is.
You writing tells of coming to terms with your struggle which in a gay world must be some emotional battering given that there are so many part timers who are married.
Good luck to you and persevere.
February 14th, 2020 01:12
dusk arising said:
Love as an emotion, rther than a physical act, is a noble place to begin for it is surely where you will finish too. Hopefully finishing with a finer trust and understanding of how huge a thing love really is.
You writing tells of coming to terms with your struggle which in a gay world must be some emotional battering given that there are so many part timers who are married.
Good luck to you and persevere.
February 14th, 2020 01:12
u&i
Seek said:
How well put QWAP! Snoring turns from a nuisance to sweet music when sleeping with the beloved. This is reminiscent of my own romantic poem (August 2019) called \"Asleep) on a similar theme. I invite you to take a look and comment. Amazing read!
January 8th, 2020 22:34
Seek said:
How well put QWAP! Snoring turns from a nuisance to sweet music when sleeping with the beloved. This is reminiscent of my own romantic poem (August 2019) called \"Asleep) on a similar theme. I invite you to take a look and comment. Amazing read!
January 8th, 2020 22:34
longing
myself and me said:
Fully understand the feeling. like the mirage, you could never reach and touch. Beautifully expressed.
December 16th, 2019 18:20
myself and me said:
Fully understand the feeling. like the mirage, you could never reach and touch. Beautifully expressed.
December 16th, 2019 18:20
after hours
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
The personification of sorrow ... Being like a monster . Very good ! Sometimes pain can make us lash out and hurt others and sometimes that can feel out of our control ... \" these claws only know how to rend and tear \" pain can affect how we sometimes are with other people ... Sometimes .
November 24th, 2019 01:52
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
The personification of sorrow ... Being like a monster . Very good ! Sometimes pain can make us lash out and hurt others and sometimes that can feel out of our control ... \" these claws only know how to rend and tear \" pain can affect how we sometimes are with other people ... Sometimes .
November 24th, 2019 01:52
almosts
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
I\'m sorry . It\'s so sad . But you expressed yourself well here
November 24th, 2019 01:39
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
I\'m sorry . It\'s so sad . But you expressed yourself well here
November 24th, 2019 01:39
call me maybe
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
I really like this . I like how you compare her to the call of the sea , and your fall onto the concrete hurts ... Just like wanting her hurts you . I can sense the seperation between the call of the sea ( this girl ) and you as if there is a pull between both of you but there is a distance there ... A distance which simply hurts
November 24th, 2019 01:32
Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose) said:
I really like this . I like how you compare her to the call of the sea , and your fall onto the concrete hurts ... Just like wanting her hurts you . I can sense the seperation between the call of the sea ( this girl ) and you as if there is a pull between both of you but there is a distance there ... A distance which simply hurts
November 24th, 2019 01:32
oh, father (or: what i would say at my father\'s funeral)
dusk arising said:
These feelings are out and good for you for saying it BLUNT cos its so hurtful for you. He damaged you.
But you are not beyond recovery. The very fact that you are poetic shows you are evacuating the damage from your soul. It will take time and you should be gentle with the process.
MPS is a very theraputic place where goodwill exists in bucket loads.
Publishing what you write when drunk really gets it off your chest. I hope your head feels ok - hangover wise.
August 12th, 2019 00:27
dusk arising said:
These feelings are out and good for you for saying it BLUNT cos its so hurtful for you. He damaged you.
But you are not beyond recovery. The very fact that you are poetic shows you are evacuating the damage from your soul. It will take time and you should be gentle with the process.
MPS is a very theraputic place where goodwill exists in bucket loads.
Publishing what you write when drunk really gets it off your chest. I hope your head feels ok - hangover wise.
August 12th, 2019 00:27
lover boy
dusk arising said:
When a love is special poetry is in the air. When a poet finds that love, then poetry fills the air and powers the hand to write.
A lovely love poem today.
August 5th, 2019 12:57
dusk arising said:
When a love is special poetry is in the air. When a poet finds that love, then poetry fills the air and powers the hand to write.
A lovely love poem today.
August 5th, 2019 12:57
old wounds
Christina8 said:
This is a heartwrenching write but very well done! I hope you have found the peace you so richly deserve.---Christina
July 28th, 2019 12:03
Christina8 said:
This is a heartwrenching write but very well done! I hope you have found the peace you so richly deserve.---Christina
July 28th, 2019 12:03
secrets
Suresh said:
As the old saying goes \" you wear your heart on your sleeves\", but you know what, it\'s the cuffs that truly show the wear.
June 22nd, 2019 18:36
Suresh said:
As the old saying goes \" you wear your heart on your sleeves\", but you know what, it\'s the cuffs that truly show the wear.
June 22nd, 2019 18:36
this body/my body
Goddess of the Mist said:
Beautiful! Very honest, and you did a wonderful job of expressing something that is hard to say.
May 22nd, 2019 20:58
Goddess of the Mist said:
Beautiful! Very honest, and you did a wonderful job of expressing something that is hard to say.
May 22nd, 2019 20:58
this body/my body
dusk arising said:
Great finale there. Your words made me think of your mind and its struggle with your body while i was making a comparison. You see some people who ARE their bodies - the architypical \'dumb blonde\' - who are apparently of little mind.
May 22nd, 2019 01:57
dusk arising said:
Great finale there. Your words made me think of your mind and its struggle with your body while i was making a comparison. You see some people who ARE their bodies - the architypical \'dumb blonde\' - who are apparently of little mind.
May 22nd, 2019 01:57
who are you (to me)?
Poetic Dan said:
Wow, powerful stuff my friend reminds me of when I confronted my real father at 18 asking why he was never there! My sister and brother both had memories but I have none, even when the words sorry left his lips, I could not expect it!
How could I from a man I didn\'t know, I may look like him but there was not an ounce of respect for him.
12 years later I was getting a divorce and becoming a part time dad, that\'s when I understood not everyone can handle this kind of pain but I\'d make sure mine would never feel the same.
Thank you for sharing yours, if this is actually happening I hope you find the same strength.
Much peace and respect
May 9th, 2019 08:47
Poetic Dan said:
Wow, powerful stuff my friend reminds me of when I confronted my real father at 18 asking why he was never there! My sister and brother both had memories but I have none, even when the words sorry left his lips, I could not expect it!
How could I from a man I didn\'t know, I may look like him but there was not an ounce of respect for him.
12 years later I was getting a divorce and becoming a part time dad, that\'s when I understood not everyone can handle this kind of pain but I\'d make sure mine would never feel the same.
Thank you for sharing yours, if this is actually happening I hope you find the same strength.
Much peace and respect
May 9th, 2019 08:47
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