Comments received on poems by Mottakeenur Rehman
Struggle is the Alchemy of Life
sorenbarrett said:
Mottakeenur you have done it again. A magnificent poem of wisdom set in great lines (your youth is ink spilled on the wind, Every brick claims it bears the wall alone) many others as well. Then the jewel decorated with good rhyme. But I must add that although poetry does not feed the poet it feeds others being an unselfish gift. On the impressions it leaves in others unforeseen choices are made and a world that might never have been takes shape. A definite fave
July 3rd, 2025 05:15
sorenbarrett said:
Mottakeenur you have done it again. A magnificent poem of wisdom set in great lines (your youth is ink spilled on the wind, Every brick claims it bears the wall alone) many others as well. Then the jewel decorated with good rhyme. But I must add that although poetry does not feed the poet it feeds others being an unselfish gift. On the impressions it leaves in others unforeseen choices are made and a world that might never have been takes shape. A definite fave
July 3rd, 2025 05:15
How a Good Man Loves
Poetic Licence said:
Another lovely write, trust is the foundation of any meaningful worthwhile relationship or friendship, once broken never truly healed, enjoyed the read
July 2nd, 2025 14:06
Poetic Licence said:
Another lovely write, trust is the foundation of any meaningful worthwhile relationship or friendship, once broken never truly healed, enjoyed the read
July 2nd, 2025 14:06
How a Good Man Loves
sorenbarrett said:
Truth the basis of trust that is the foundation of a relationship. Love supersedes all but without trust there is no relationship. A most lovely write of love real or fanciful (Dulcinea) Loved the write Mottakeenur
July 2nd, 2025 07:20
sorenbarrett said:
Truth the basis of trust that is the foundation of a relationship. Love supersedes all but without trust there is no relationship. A most lovely write of love real or fanciful (Dulcinea) Loved the write Mottakeenur
July 2nd, 2025 07:20
Motta, Your Alter Ego
Poetic Licence said:
I understand the concept of the write that no one is ever alone as somewhere inside you is a glimmer of hope looking for the light, but as someone who spends 95 percent of my life on their own it is sometimes incredibly difficult to imagine that hope, still enjoyed the read and it was wonderfully written
July 1st, 2025 19:39
Poetic Licence said:
I understand the concept of the write that no one is ever alone as somewhere inside you is a glimmer of hope looking for the light, but as someone who spends 95 percent of my life on their own it is sometimes incredibly difficult to imagine that hope, still enjoyed the read and it was wonderfully written
July 1st, 2025 19:39
Motta, Your Alter Ego
sorenbarrett said:
Mottakeemur this poem speaks of that time of doubt when we feel divided, separated from others. I hold a belief that we are all part of the whole, mere parts and cells of a greater existence and so we are never alone anymore than a finger that hurts is not a part of the body. Not just brothers and sisters but all the same with the rocks and trees the sun and moon, all bits of a greater whole, we are always home. A fave
July 1st, 2025 08:24
sorenbarrett said:
Mottakeemur this poem speaks of that time of doubt when we feel divided, separated from others. I hold a belief that we are all part of the whole, mere parts and cells of a greater existence and so we are never alone anymore than a finger that hurts is not a part of the body. Not just brothers and sisters but all the same with the rocks and trees the sun and moon, all bits of a greater whole, we are always home. A fave
July 1st, 2025 08:24
The Taxonomy of Goodbye
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of mourning the loss of love, a heart that won\'t forget the sorrow and pain, beautifully written, pleasure to read
June 30th, 2025 06:33
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of mourning the loss of love, a heart that won\'t forget the sorrow and pain, beautifully written, pleasure to read
June 30th, 2025 06:33
The Taxonomy of Goodbye
sorenbarrett said:
This poem requires several readings to appreciate its subtle and gentle lines. It speaks to me out of quiet sorrow, with a sense of lingering mourning that can not let go. It is brilliant and a fave
June 30th, 2025 04:28
sorenbarrett said:
This poem requires several readings to appreciate its subtle and gentle lines. It speaks to me out of quiet sorrow, with a sense of lingering mourning that can not let go. It is brilliant and a fave
June 30th, 2025 04:28
The Nocturne of Unwritten Laws
Poetic Licence said:
Oh how I wish we could exchange reality for wishes, enjoyed the read
June 30th, 2025 00:40
Poetic Licence said:
Oh how I wish we could exchange reality for wishes, enjoyed the read
June 30th, 2025 00:40
The Nocturne of Unwritten Laws
sorenbarrett said:
The beginning of this poem made me think of the angels alphabet and the Kabala (where shadows stitch their seams, does time collapse into a single vowel.) A great line. Dreams a shadowy place where reality is exchanged for wishes that are lived in another dimension. A very nice piece of work
June 29th, 2025 13:16
sorenbarrett said:
The beginning of this poem made me think of the angels alphabet and the Kabala (where shadows stitch their seams, does time collapse into a single vowel.) A great line. Dreams a shadowy place where reality is exchanged for wishes that are lived in another dimension. A very nice piece of work
June 29th, 2025 13:16
The Great Poetry, or The Highest Part of Life
Poetic Licence said:
A lovely write implying we are mere small particles of nature and its beauty, and it is nature itself that is the poem, enjoyed the read
June 28th, 2025 04:36
Poetic Licence said:
A lovely write implying we are mere small particles of nature and its beauty, and it is nature itself that is the poem, enjoyed the read
June 28th, 2025 04:36
The Great Poetry, or The Highest Part of Life
sorenbarrett said:
Well written Nature and all the world is the poem. All that we write just fragments. A lovely poem Mottakeenur
June 28th, 2025 04:08
sorenbarrett said:
Well written Nature and all the world is the poem. All that we write just fragments. A lovely poem Mottakeenur
June 28th, 2025 04:08
Evergreen: The Timeless Power of Poetry
Poetic Licence said:
This is an exceptional wonderful piece of writing, a pleasure to read
June 27th, 2025 09:10
Poetic Licence said:
This is an exceptional wonderful piece of writing, a pleasure to read
June 27th, 2025 09:10
Evergreen: The Timeless Power of Poetry
arqios said:
Such a passionate love letter to poetry itself—its endurance, its quiet power, and its refusal to be diminished. It elevates the art from mere ornament to essential force: sunlight, river, lantern, key. There’s something deeply personal yet collective in the voice: speaking as one who’s walked through life empty-handed yet fully armed with language, as if poetry alone was enough to confront the dark. Lines like “no armor but the word, no shield but ‘why?’” land with striking honesty. The poet isn’t cloaked in grandeur, but in the relentless asking and seeking that poetry demands. That stanza in particular feels like a manifesto: a gentle defiance, a deep belief that sight (perception, understanding) is more powerful than conquest. And when the speaker claims to hold “only keys,” it’s a beautiful paradox: nothing flashy, just the means to unlock: imagination, insight, even time itself. The final image is especially haunting and affirming: poetry as the ghost wind that moves unseen but unmistakably, still whispering truth into the sleeping world. There’s reverence here, but also grit. Poetry isn’t being canonised, it is being lived. And you feel, reading it, that it really is evergreen.
June 27th, 2025 06:58
arqios said:
Such a passionate love letter to poetry itself—its endurance, its quiet power, and its refusal to be diminished. It elevates the art from mere ornament to essential force: sunlight, river, lantern, key. There’s something deeply personal yet collective in the voice: speaking as one who’s walked through life empty-handed yet fully armed with language, as if poetry alone was enough to confront the dark. Lines like “no armor but the word, no shield but ‘why?’” land with striking honesty. The poet isn’t cloaked in grandeur, but in the relentless asking and seeking that poetry demands. That stanza in particular feels like a manifesto: a gentle defiance, a deep belief that sight (perception, understanding) is more powerful than conquest. And when the speaker claims to hold “only keys,” it’s a beautiful paradox: nothing flashy, just the means to unlock: imagination, insight, even time itself. The final image is especially haunting and affirming: poetry as the ghost wind that moves unseen but unmistakably, still whispering truth into the sleeping world. There’s reverence here, but also grit. Poetry isn’t being canonised, it is being lived. And you feel, reading it, that it really is evergreen.
June 27th, 2025 06:58
Evergreen: The Timeless Power of Poetry
sorenbarrett said:
Brilliant!! A most wonderful write a poem that sets in masterful lines the essence of poetry. With wonderful metaphor this poem displays poetry\'s glory in some exceptional lines. (I walked with nothing yet carried the sky) so much said in so little. The second to the last stanza is amazing and all is culminated in the last stanza. This deserves a much wider read. Without doubt a fave
June 27th, 2025 06:34
sorenbarrett said:
Brilliant!! A most wonderful write a poem that sets in masterful lines the essence of poetry. With wonderful metaphor this poem displays poetry\'s glory in some exceptional lines. (I walked with nothing yet carried the sky) so much said in so little. The second to the last stanza is amazing and all is culminated in the last stanza. This deserves a much wider read. Without doubt a fave
June 27th, 2025 06:34
Charity Begins At Home
Poetic Licence said:
A beautiful write with such an important message, your poems are so beautifully constructed creating wonderful images, enjoyed the read
June 25th, 2025 16:08
Poetic Licence said:
A beautiful write with such an important message, your poems are so beautifully constructed creating wonderful images, enjoyed the read
June 25th, 2025 16:08
Charity Begins At Home
sorenbarrett said:
A lovely and important message set in beautiful rhyme and polished with great images a fave
June 25th, 2025 04:16
sorenbarrett said:
A lovely and important message set in beautiful rhyme and polished with great images a fave
June 25th, 2025 04:16
The Human Fabric
Poetic Licence said:
A sad tale of the ignorance and arrogance man inhales and displays in its for ever more greed, asking if humanity has failed, enjoyed the read
June 23rd, 2025 09:13
Poetic Licence said:
A sad tale of the ignorance and arrogance man inhales and displays in its for ever more greed, asking if humanity has failed, enjoyed the read
June 23rd, 2025 09:13
The Human Fabric
sorenbarrett said:
Ignorance to our own dark side and frailties a fallen or maybe never risen species that in its greed takes more than needed. Cynical yet truthful it tells of life bought with wealth and a sad and cruel world where man more parasite than human takes in his arrogance and ignorance. nicely written in good rhyme a fave.
June 23rd, 2025 05:29
sorenbarrett said:
Ignorance to our own dark side and frailties a fallen or maybe never risen species that in its greed takes more than needed. Cynical yet truthful it tells of life bought with wealth and a sad and cruel world where man more parasite than human takes in his arrogance and ignorance. nicely written in good rhyme a fave.
June 23rd, 2025 05:29
The Human Fabric
arqios said:
This poem is a tapestry woven with solemn fire; bold, fearless, and lit with the sorrowful wisdom of someone who has stood too long at the crossroads of power and conscience. Each couplet hums with both lament and fierce clarity, asking not if humanity has failed, but how deeply it has forgotten what it means to be whole. Most thoroughly enjoyed. 🙏🏻🕊️
June 23rd, 2025 05:02
arqios said:
This poem is a tapestry woven with solemn fire; bold, fearless, and lit with the sorrowful wisdom of someone who has stood too long at the crossroads of power and conscience. Each couplet hums with both lament and fierce clarity, asking not if humanity has failed, but how deeply it has forgotten what it means to be whole. Most thoroughly enjoyed. 🙏🏻🕊️
June 23rd, 2025 05:02
I Was Not Born a Ghost (The Eternal Cry of the Unbroken)
arqios said:
Here is a cry carved from the marrow of history; a poetic reckoning with colonisation, erasure, and resistance. Your poetic speaker bears witness to how identity is not just erased but overwritten, priced, policed, then reborn—fiercer. 🕊️🙏🏻
June 23rd, 2025 03:11
arqios said:
Here is a cry carved from the marrow of history; a poetic reckoning with colonisation, erasure, and resistance. Your poetic speaker bears witness to how identity is not just erased but overwritten, priced, policed, then reborn—fiercer. 🕊️🙏🏻
June 23rd, 2025 03:11
I Was Not Born a Ghost (The Eternal Cry of the Unbroken)
Poetic Licence said:
An interesting and thought provoking write regarding the differences between war and piece and the reasons for it. War is always remembered, peace or wanting of it is so easily forgotten, but we have to keep sowing those seeds and hope some take route, enjoyed the read
June 22nd, 2025 19:46
Poetic Licence said:
An interesting and thought provoking write regarding the differences between war and piece and the reasons for it. War is always remembered, peace or wanting of it is so easily forgotten, but we have to keep sowing those seeds and hope some take route, enjoyed the read
June 22nd, 2025 19:46
I Was Not Born a Ghost (The Eternal Cry of the Unbroken)
Mourgana of the Fey said:
Hello,
This seemed a piece that was aimed to balance the scales between war and peace. Where motives behind war often have nothing to do with the human side each piece of peace is eternally forgotten though through poetry shards of it , perhaps intentions can be sowed as kernels. Ink can send out ripples, even small ripples can find union within ink and within poems and poetry, I enjoyed the read
June 22nd, 2025 15:11
Mourgana of the Fey said:
Hello,
This seemed a piece that was aimed to balance the scales between war and peace. Where motives behind war often have nothing to do with the human side each piece of peace is eternally forgotten though through poetry shards of it , perhaps intentions can be sowed as kernels. Ink can send out ripples, even small ripples can find union within ink and within poems and poetry, I enjoyed the read
June 22nd, 2025 15:11
I Was Not Born a Ghost (The Eternal Cry of the Unbroken)
sorenbarrett said:
All seem the same be they politicians, physicians, technicians doesn\'t matter the name. Religion or any institution they are all the same. Good write
June 22nd, 2025 13:53
sorenbarrett said:
All seem the same be they politicians, physicians, technicians doesn\'t matter the name. Religion or any institution they are all the same. Good write
June 22nd, 2025 13:53
A Forever Moment
RSM0812 said:
A unique poem comparing nature to love. Well written and thought up with good verses, imagery and rhyme. Nice job.
June 22nd, 2025 04:54
RSM0812 said:
A unique poem comparing nature to love. Well written and thought up with good verses, imagery and rhyme. Nice job.
June 22nd, 2025 04:54
The Fisherman’s Last Tide
Poetic Licence said:
A touching and sad of a women reflecting on the sacrifices her husband made to provide and wishing he could return, then accepting he is not coming back and now remembering the love instead, lovely write, enjoyed the read
June 21st, 2025 07:35
Poetic Licence said:
A touching and sad of a women reflecting on the sacrifices her husband made to provide and wishing he could return, then accepting he is not coming back and now remembering the love instead, lovely write, enjoyed the read
June 21st, 2025 07:35
The Fisherman’s Last Tide
sorenbarrett said:
Mottakeenur you outdo yourself. Another most wonderful poem that pulls at the heart with line after line of great poetry. To cite one would do disservice to the others unless the whole poem was cited. Brilliant! and a fave
June 21st, 2025 04:36
sorenbarrett said:
Mottakeenur you outdo yourself. Another most wonderful poem that pulls at the heart with line after line of great poetry. To cite one would do disservice to the others unless the whole poem was cited. Brilliant! and a fave
June 21st, 2025 04:36
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