Comments received on poems by jark
wither
Soman Ragavan said:
There is a play on the word \"wither\" : with her...
Clever writing... Soman Ragavan. 6 February, 2024.
February 6th, 2024 07:12
Soman Ragavan said:
There is a play on the word \"wither\" : with her...
Clever writing... Soman Ragavan. 6 February, 2024.
February 6th, 2024 07:12
permanent
L. B. Mek said:
sobering topic but a delight to read
must have been fun to write
impressive skills, dear poet
thanks for sharing
June 23rd, 2023 03:18
L. B. Mek said:
sobering topic but a delight to read
must have been fun to write
impressive skills, dear poet
thanks for sharing
June 23rd, 2023 03:18
let
2781 said:
\"I said in my heart concerning the estate of sons of men, that God might manifest them, and they might see that they themselves beasts.\"
May 6th, 2023 18:35
2781 said:
\"I said in my heart concerning the estate of sons of men, that God might manifest them, and they might see that they themselves beasts.\"
May 6th, 2023 18:35
let
Bobby O said:
I read it twice as I was unprepared for that last line and thought reading again would get me ready to absorb. It didn’t bit I liked the piece more the second read and now I’m unsure who to introduce it to, some fir my own fun and some cuz they will be glad. Add all this up and it defines why I read poetic verse. Thank you.
May 6th, 2023 18:23
Bobby O said:
I read it twice as I was unprepared for that last line and thought reading again would get me ready to absorb. It didn’t bit I liked the piece more the second read and now I’m unsure who to introduce it to, some fir my own fun and some cuz they will be glad. Add all this up and it defines why I read poetic verse. Thank you.
May 6th, 2023 18:23
reset
arqios said:
Much enjoyed and relished the fresh play of words and phrases. Brings to mind \'eating\' and ingesting so much in quantity and variety that insomnia inevitably sets in. Thanks for sharing.
August 24th, 2022 01:52
arqios said:
Much enjoyed and relished the fresh play of words and phrases. Brings to mind \'eating\' and ingesting so much in quantity and variety that insomnia inevitably sets in. Thanks for sharing.
August 24th, 2022 01:52
hike 2
L. B. Mek said:
\'quietly, with light steps
i try not to intrude
for i\'m never first
to a valley of soft grass and tender earth\'
\'my whole life is a handful of sketches
their whole existence is a trash bag of dishes
and i don’t know how people can compartmentalize
i wouldn’t last a day with my overstimulated eyes\'
(did so well, to poetically enrich
your work
by painstakingly, refining your complex thoughts)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
a great read!
July 28th, 2022 03:28
L. B. Mek said:
\'quietly, with light steps
i try not to intrude
for i\'m never first
to a valley of soft grass and tender earth\'
\'my whole life is a handful of sketches
their whole existence is a trash bag of dishes
and i don’t know how people can compartmentalize
i wouldn’t last a day with my overstimulated eyes\'
(did so well, to poetically enrich
your work
by painstakingly, refining your complex thoughts)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
a great read!
July 28th, 2022 03:28
enamel pin
L. B. Mek said:
ok, so
I read this 3 times, slower
each time
and it just went over my head
I know, I have little
knowledge of accessories
so, maybe that\'s the reason
or its the heatwave, frying
what little braincells I have..
still
it was written so well, i enjoyed
each reading experience..
may come back and try again
thanks for sharing, dear poet
July 25th, 2022 04:21
L. B. Mek said:
ok, so
I read this 3 times, slower
each time
and it just went over my head
I know, I have little
knowledge of accessories
so, maybe that\'s the reason
or its the heatwave, frying
what little braincells I have..
still
it was written so well, i enjoyed
each reading experience..
may come back and try again
thanks for sharing, dear poet
July 25th, 2022 04:21
the action of inaction
L. B. Mek said:
(sadly video or image
is not playing for me..)
either way, this was so well written
thanks for sharing, dear poet
\'losing sight of my self
my reflection haunted and ugly
that’s what i thought i had to be
a pile of me worthlessly waiting
i’d count ticks on the clock
and play songs about rage
losing weight, fixed in place\'
(kinda crazy, how easily
the world
convinces and teaches
us
how to betray, ourselves...)
July 19th, 2022 05:14
L. B. Mek said:
(sadly video or image
is not playing for me..)
either way, this was so well written
thanks for sharing, dear poet
\'losing sight of my self
my reflection haunted and ugly
that’s what i thought i had to be
a pile of me worthlessly waiting
i’d count ticks on the clock
and play songs about rage
losing weight, fixed in place\'
(kinda crazy, how easily
the world
convinces and teaches
us
how to betray, ourselves...)
July 19th, 2022 05:14
the action of inaction
lalalaEulalie said:
Very nice writing. I saw myself in this one. Lol. Especially with the Medusa mane. Lol..I liked that. Clever!
July 19th, 2022 00:19
lalalaEulalie said:
Very nice writing. I saw myself in this one. Lol. Especially with the Medusa mane. Lol..I liked that. Clever!
July 19th, 2022 00:19
flower / ant infestation
L. B. Mek said:
you should be grateful
for being gifted a life
that affords you such luxuries..
but for
a callous universe\'s
chanced, fate
of a coin flip
it may have been you or me
as that helpless
Ant...
who knows? still
good to write
and work through your thoughts
none of us are squeaky clean
that darkness, brings
some horridly warped perspectives
of life..
stay strong, dear poet
thanks for sharing
I wish you, peace!
May 6th, 2022 03:46
L. B. Mek said:
you should be grateful
for being gifted a life
that affords you such luxuries..
but for
a callous universe\'s
chanced, fate
of a coin flip
it may have been you or me
as that helpless
Ant...
who knows? still
good to write
and work through your thoughts
none of us are squeaky clean
that darkness, brings
some horridly warped perspectives
of life..
stay strong, dear poet
thanks for sharing
I wish you, peace!
May 6th, 2022 03:46
gossip
L. B. Mek said:
lol
\'bleh\'
is perfectly fine, dear poet!
(Gertrude Stein, an iconic member/mother figure
to that Paris \'lost generation\'
once
on receiving an exam paper
chose to answer, with a single line:
“I am sorry but really I do not feel a bit like an examination paper in philosophy today.”
To this, William James
(yeah, that\'s \'The\' William James)
responded:
“I know exactly how you feel.\"
and gave her an A mark...)
what am I on about..?
\'its ok, to not
feel ok, dear poet
and to worry
about our portraits
in posterity\'s, reductive light..\'
it\'s all natural, so lament freely
to your heart\'s content
then get back up, when
you\'re good n ready
and give it all, another go!
(thanks for sharing)
April 22nd, 2022 04:09
L. B. Mek said:
lol
\'bleh\'
is perfectly fine, dear poet!
(Gertrude Stein, an iconic member/mother figure
to that Paris \'lost generation\'
once
on receiving an exam paper
chose to answer, with a single line:
“I am sorry but really I do not feel a bit like an examination paper in philosophy today.”
To this, William James
(yeah, that\'s \'The\' William James)
responded:
“I know exactly how you feel.\"
and gave her an A mark...)
what am I on about..?
\'its ok, to not
feel ok, dear poet
and to worry
about our portraits
in posterity\'s, reductive light..\'
it\'s all natural, so lament freely
to your heart\'s content
then get back up, when
you\'re good n ready
and give it all, another go!
(thanks for sharing)
April 22nd, 2022 04:09
nuclear semiotics
L. B. Mek said:
vitally important, and so well written:
thank you for sharing, dear poet
\'my wood grain brain
my grey matter mind
my loose liquid innards
countless cells counting time\'
\'in their wood grain brains
and grey matter minds
wishing for time, dreaming of leaving
they’d be left to write the poems\'
April 19th, 2022 05:15
L. B. Mek said:
vitally important, and so well written:
thank you for sharing, dear poet
\'my wood grain brain
my grey matter mind
my loose liquid innards
countless cells counting time\'
\'in their wood grain brains
and grey matter minds
wishing for time, dreaming of leaving
they’d be left to write the poems\'
April 19th, 2022 05:15
walking regular routes
dusk arising said:
Man against the machines we are forced to live among. You are a long way from obsolete. Machines will never have what you have.
April 6th, 2022 14:28
dusk arising said:
Man against the machines we are forced to live among. You are a long way from obsolete. Machines will never have what you have.
April 6th, 2022 14:28
a
Rocky Lagou said:
Writer\'s block is really such a nag. Hope you find your inspiration soon though. As for now, this was interesting. ✨
March 30th, 2022 08:59
Rocky Lagou said:
Writer\'s block is really such a nag. Hope you find your inspiration soon though. As for now, this was interesting. ✨
March 30th, 2022 08:59
a poem about geese
Crowns4Christ said:
So incredibly true, they honestly do what they want, when they want, hilarious
March 26th, 2022 23:44
Crowns4Christ said:
So incredibly true, they honestly do what they want, when they want, hilarious
March 26th, 2022 23:44
cooking in the kitchen
L. B. Mek said:
get well soon, dear poet
(wonderful imagery and great utilisation of metaphor
to reinforce the helpless, infuriated states
depicted in your poetic voice)
March 15th, 2022 06:32
L. B. Mek said:
get well soon, dear poet
(wonderful imagery and great utilisation of metaphor
to reinforce the helpless, infuriated states
depicted in your poetic voice)
March 15th, 2022 06:32
clench
L. B. Mek said:
Seneca wrote:
\'“Can you no longer see a road to freedom? It\'s right in front of you. You need only turn over your wrists.”
meaning
It\'s the harder choice, to stay and fight
to find worth in every breath..
all that BS, glamorising suicide
is just people, doing all they can
to hide from the fact, that
they\'re more scared of attaining
the joy\'s in life..
Camus
jumped from country to country
newspaper to newspaper
to carve out, his corner of literary history
in amongst war and stifling oppression..
he chose to fight for life!
knowing more about the author, helps
add context to the books we read
and our interpretations of their words
March 14th, 2022 05:24
L. B. Mek said:
Seneca wrote:
\'“Can you no longer see a road to freedom? It\'s right in front of you. You need only turn over your wrists.”
meaning
It\'s the harder choice, to stay and fight
to find worth in every breath..
all that BS, glamorising suicide
is just people, doing all they can
to hide from the fact, that
they\'re more scared of attaining
the joy\'s in life..
Camus
jumped from country to country
newspaper to newspaper
to carve out, his corner of literary history
in amongst war and stifling oppression..
he chose to fight for life!
knowing more about the author, helps
add context to the books we read
and our interpretations of their words
March 14th, 2022 05:24
my algorithm
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
poetic wrath, in the age
of digitalised, absurdity
March 11th, 2022 05:50
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
poetic wrath, in the age
of digitalised, absurdity
March 11th, 2022 05:50
disillusionment
Rocky Lagou said:
Very relatable. I find myself consuming all my time writing and reading poetry, and literature in general, and before I know it, the day\'s gone. Well done! ✍
March 4th, 2022 09:30
Rocky Lagou said:
Very relatable. I find myself consuming all my time writing and reading poetry, and literature in general, and before I know it, the day\'s gone. Well done! ✍
March 4th, 2022 09:30
disillusionment
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful, off-beat flow
a good read
if it\'s fun, keep writing
and thanks for sharing
March 4th, 2022 06:42
L. B. Mek said:
wonderful, off-beat flow
a good read
if it\'s fun, keep writing
and thanks for sharing
March 4th, 2022 06:42
internet art
Rocky Lagou said:
Technology is a blessing. But, it can also separate us and make us more isolated than we should be. We need more time for true connections not based on a back and forth text. Well done! 💖✨
March 3rd, 2022 10:29
Rocky Lagou said:
Technology is a blessing. But, it can also separate us and make us more isolated than we should be. We need more time for true connections not based on a back and forth text. Well done! 💖✨
March 3rd, 2022 10:29
prayer
Rocky Lagou said:
Okay the lines \"I feel like a dead body in a hotel lobby that no one sees\" and the last line \"people should see me now and be not afraid\" give your poem LIFE! The first line I mentioned I highlighted not only for its creativity, but also the way you were able to express a human sensation so darn well without directly stating it is ingenious, I really felt that line. Also I point out the last line because the final words \"be not afraid\" are technically grammatically incorrect, it would normally be written, \"not be afraid.\" BUT, whether or not intentional, LITERALLY TIED THE MEANING OF THE POEM, the sensation of strangeness within our consciousness, CLEVER. So bravo on that. I mean this was so intense and I totally felt your message. I feel like I feel like this all the time. Just a sense of something inside of you being \"off\" or a sense of always seeing the world a little \"blurry.\" Life is crazy. Great poem! 💖
March 2nd, 2022 11:19
Rocky Lagou said:
Okay the lines \"I feel like a dead body in a hotel lobby that no one sees\" and the last line \"people should see me now and be not afraid\" give your poem LIFE! The first line I mentioned I highlighted not only for its creativity, but also the way you were able to express a human sensation so darn well without directly stating it is ingenious, I really felt that line. Also I point out the last line because the final words \"be not afraid\" are technically grammatically incorrect, it would normally be written, \"not be afraid.\" BUT, whether or not intentional, LITERALLY TIED THE MEANING OF THE POEM, the sensation of strangeness within our consciousness, CLEVER. So bravo on that. I mean this was so intense and I totally felt your message. I feel like I feel like this all the time. Just a sense of something inside of you being \"off\" or a sense of always seeing the world a little \"blurry.\" Life is crazy. Great poem! 💖
March 2nd, 2022 11:19
Bad Art
Rocky Lagou said:
Yes! I feel that this is a human rights message and I totally stand for it! Bad taste just won\'t be tolerated! Preach! 💖
February 28th, 2022 11:28
Rocky Lagou said:
Yes! I feel that this is a human rights message and I totally stand for it! Bad taste just won\'t be tolerated! Preach! 💖
February 28th, 2022 11:28
i care... because you do
L. B. Mek said:
social networking
and world wide, conformity web\'s
ease of access
and pseudo merit by popularity\'s numbers
has made it so hard
for the genuine Artist\'s, to find a share
of all the abundant light
lest, they confirm to profiteering trends
and sell-out\'s hack choices..
the rest, can only strive and hope
that they\'ll be part of the lucky few
that make it, on the back of their talent alone..
(a relatable write, thanks for sharing
wish you the very best!
if you enjoy
what you\'re doing, do it
if you don\'t, then take a break
come back in a few weeks
see if you\'ve missed it)
February 28th, 2022 05:21
L. B. Mek said:
social networking
and world wide, conformity web\'s
ease of access
and pseudo merit by popularity\'s numbers
has made it so hard
for the genuine Artist\'s, to find a share
of all the abundant light
lest, they confirm to profiteering trends
and sell-out\'s hack choices..
the rest, can only strive and hope
that they\'ll be part of the lucky few
that make it, on the back of their talent alone..
(a relatable write, thanks for sharing
wish you the very best!
if you enjoy
what you\'re doing, do it
if you don\'t, then take a break
come back in a few weeks
see if you\'ve missed it)
February 28th, 2022 05:21
fear
Christina8 said:
nice write Jake. It\'s hard when you can\'t sleep, I used to have a problem with that too. Hopefully better nights are ahead. great job!
February 26th, 2022 21:24
Christina8 said:
nice write Jake. It\'s hard when you can\'t sleep, I used to have a problem with that too. Hopefully better nights are ahead. great job!
February 26th, 2022 21:24
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