Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie
The great fall
jarcher54 said:
I enjoy your free flow of thought, heading in different directions, exploring every option, encapsulating whole philosophies in a hint or a nod or a question. Intelligent beasts we are... we climbed and climbed and... wait, here we are back on the ground.
February 13th, 2023 00:31
jarcher54 said:
I enjoy your free flow of thought, heading in different directions, exploring every option, encapsulating whole philosophies in a hint or a nod or a question. Intelligent beasts we are... we climbed and climbed and... wait, here we are back on the ground.
February 13th, 2023 00:31
Death by freedoms
jarcher54 said:
Ironically, I just read another poem on this site about captivity. Freedom is pretty damn hard to figure out. You nailed that!
February 13th, 2023 00:27
jarcher54 said:
Ironically, I just read another poem on this site about captivity. Freedom is pretty damn hard to figure out. You nailed that!
February 13th, 2023 00:27
Death by freedoms
2781 said:
Freedom is the ability to do whatever you want, without hurting anyone or anything. A far cry.
February 12th, 2023 01:56
2781 said:
Freedom is the ability to do whatever you want, without hurting anyone or anything. A far cry.
February 12th, 2023 01:56
Dark or night
Parisab said:
Great sounding piece! Love the distinction between the dark and the night. I thank you for writing and sharing.
February 11th, 2023 20:25
Parisab said:
Great sounding piece! Love the distinction between the dark and the night. I thank you for writing and sharing.
February 11th, 2023 20:25
Crabs and stabs
L. B. Mek said:
(another poignant write, dear Poet
forgive me for posting some quotes
from James Baldwin below
just, to give a sense of how long
such statistic realities have been curating/decimating
the lives of our young brothers
used as scaffolding, stepping stones
to paint that mirage castle
they name, \'the American dream\'...)
\'Other people cannot see what I see whenever I look into your father\'s face, for behind your father\'s face as it is today are all those other faces which were his.\'
\'I know what the world has done to my brother and how narrowly he has survived it\'
taken from a later by James Baldwin to his nephew
( https://progressive.org/magazine/letter-nephew/
)
January 16th, 2023 05:59
L. B. Mek said:
(another poignant write, dear Poet
forgive me for posting some quotes
from James Baldwin below
just, to give a sense of how long
such statistic realities have been curating/decimating
the lives of our young brothers
used as scaffolding, stepping stones
to paint that mirage castle
they name, \'the American dream\'...)
\'Other people cannot see what I see whenever I look into your father\'s face, for behind your father\'s face as it is today are all those other faces which were his.\'
\'I know what the world has done to my brother and how narrowly he has survived it\'
taken from a later by James Baldwin to his nephew
( https://progressive.org/magazine/letter-nephew/
)
January 16th, 2023 05:59
Are the proud boys proud
L. B. Mek said:
Happy New Year brother
(Fear is such a corrosive, ancestral trait
imagine
being 6ft 6, and being scared
of someone down the street
whose a foot shorter
because their skin\'s tint, differs
slightly from your tanned arms
fearing
deep - where it counts
the struggles that inherited deep melanin, overcome
as a people, as a community
makes them six feet larger, in scale
to your worthless, warped sense
of belligerently ignorant, self
quick to wage wars
slow to heed words
like their forefathers, they\'ll die
on that white hooded cross
simply, because its scary to think
that whitewashed, lore
they were indoctrinated in, as a child
is as fake as their father christmas
spineless, lies...)
still, in MLK and Mandela\'s vision
we entrust our dreams
aside our fair skinned, yet empathetically aligned brethren
\'oneness\', is humanity\'s only choice
January 6th, 2023 06:38
L. B. Mek said:
Happy New Year brother
(Fear is such a corrosive, ancestral trait
imagine
being 6ft 6, and being scared
of someone down the street
whose a foot shorter
because their skin\'s tint, differs
slightly from your tanned arms
fearing
deep - where it counts
the struggles that inherited deep melanin, overcome
as a people, as a community
makes them six feet larger, in scale
to your worthless, warped sense
of belligerently ignorant, self
quick to wage wars
slow to heed words
like their forefathers, they\'ll die
on that white hooded cross
simply, because its scary to think
that whitewashed, lore
they were indoctrinated in, as a child
is as fake as their father christmas
spineless, lies...)
still, in MLK and Mandela\'s vision
we entrust our dreams
aside our fair skinned, yet empathetically aligned brethren
\'oneness\', is humanity\'s only choice
January 6th, 2023 06:38
A human explosion
L. B. Mek said:
\'where there was once a collective now stands a people made feeble, others stand ready to bleed you, not feed you, they stay close in an attempt to read you,\'
astute commentary, dear Poet
a great read!
(but more like \'implosion\'
since all we do is hurt ourselves
by taking down those in reach;
see,
it would make sense of all we did
was retaliate, \'an eye for an eye\'
if you like
but often, all we\'re doing
is exporting our suffering
and poisoning others to suffer
in place of those that hurt us
then, feel sorry for ourselves
and claim that\'s it\'s not our fault
we\'re so volatile, choosing
to only see
all that\'s done to us and ignoring
all we do to those by our side
but we\'re just fallible humans, right
slaves to a callous fate
originating from those inherited circumstances
right?
best not mention, all those other\'s
that got out, evolved
done it right and chose the very same path
we refused to even entertain, once...)
December 5th, 2022 05:13
L. B. Mek said:
\'where there was once a collective now stands a people made feeble, others stand ready to bleed you, not feed you, they stay close in an attempt to read you,\'
astute commentary, dear Poet
a great read!
(but more like \'implosion\'
since all we do is hurt ourselves
by taking down those in reach;
see,
it would make sense of all we did
was retaliate, \'an eye for an eye\'
if you like
but often, all we\'re doing
is exporting our suffering
and poisoning others to suffer
in place of those that hurt us
then, feel sorry for ourselves
and claim that\'s it\'s not our fault
we\'re so volatile, choosing
to only see
all that\'s done to us and ignoring
all we do to those by our side
but we\'re just fallible humans, right
slaves to a callous fate
originating from those inherited circumstances
right?
best not mention, all those other\'s
that got out, evolved
done it right and chose the very same path
we refused to even entertain, once...)
December 5th, 2022 05:13
Slave mind
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Important questions within these verses and a reminder of the conditions which inform the crux of our human dignity.
November 5th, 2022 16:02
Gary Edward Geraci said:
Important questions within these verses and a reminder of the conditions which inform the crux of our human dignity.
November 5th, 2022 16:02
Is that me out there
Doggerel Dave said:
I get the feeling in there very well - I\'m just not quite sure where you are in all that.
But then I\'m not you, and live in different circumstances, obviously.
Intriguing write.
October 22nd, 2022 01:56
Doggerel Dave said:
I get the feeling in there very well - I\'m just not quite sure where you are in all that.
But then I\'m not you, and live in different circumstances, obviously.
Intriguing write.
October 22nd, 2022 01:56
Where is god
Paul Bell said:
I\'m sure the clergy would give you an argument. Personally, I can\'t see any faults in your argument.
October 17th, 2022 04:45
Paul Bell said:
I\'m sure the clergy would give you an argument. Personally, I can\'t see any faults in your argument.
October 17th, 2022 04:45
Sprinkle some crack on ‘em
evenwheniLie said:
You look like a bubba, so I guess you and your family is meth heads and u live in a trailer-home
October 11th, 2022 13:14
evenwheniLie said:
You look like a bubba, so I guess you and your family is meth heads and u live in a trailer-home
October 11th, 2022 13:14
Sprinkle some crack on ‘em
sirlocowicked AKA Bubba said:
I knew you and your daughter were crack heads
October 11th, 2022 12:40
sirlocowicked AKA Bubba said:
I knew you and your daughter were crack heads
October 11th, 2022 12:40
Kanye West
Doggerel Dave said:
Yes - I\'ll let Paul have that one, think - anything more would be a waste of space and energy. And indeed your piece is shorter than usual.
But by far the biggest waste of space is...... yeh, you guessed it....
October 9th, 2022 17:57
Doggerel Dave said:
Yes - I\'ll let Paul have that one, think - anything more would be a waste of space and energy. And indeed your piece is shorter than usual.
But by far the biggest waste of space is...... yeh, you guessed it....
October 9th, 2022 17:57
Kanye West
Paul Bell said:
Guy\'s a legend. Oops, meant leg-end.
In their world, they\'re cool. In ours, he\'s just a fool, and in many others, he\'s just a tool.
October 9th, 2022 07:56
Paul Bell said:
Guy\'s a legend. Oops, meant leg-end.
In their world, they\'re cool. In ours, he\'s just a fool, and in many others, he\'s just a tool.
October 9th, 2022 07:56
When it’s time
Doggerel Dave said:
You are a rhymer extraordinaire. Do you consider your style rap? I\'m not good at this - too ancient, I think...
October 8th, 2022 05:19
Doggerel Dave said:
You are a rhymer extraordinaire. Do you consider your style rap? I\'m not good at this - too ancient, I think...
October 8th, 2022 05:19
Well hello
sirlocowicked AKA Bubba said:
I didn\'t realize that this is a porn site very sorry ass poem
October 7th, 2022 15:04
sirlocowicked AKA Bubba said:
I didn\'t realize that this is a porn site very sorry ass poem
October 7th, 2022 15:04
Critical race theory
evenwheniLie said:
That’s a good analysis Doggerel Dave, exactly
October 6th, 2022 02:13
evenwheniLie said:
That’s a good analysis Doggerel Dave, exactly
October 6th, 2022 02:13
Critical race theory
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'m not qualified to analyze all your issues stated there, but I\'ll vote for one line for sure: \"How are you teaching history without teaching the past\"
Take care
October 6th, 2022 00:55
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'m not qualified to analyze all your issues stated there, but I\'ll vote for one line for sure: \"How are you teaching history without teaching the past\"
Take care
October 6th, 2022 00:55
Sprinkle some crack on ‘em
orchidee said:
I don\'t fancy \'em on me cornflakes at brekkie! lol.
September 27th, 2022 09:29
orchidee said:
I don\'t fancy \'em on me cornflakes at brekkie! lol.
September 27th, 2022 09:29
Sprinkle some crack on ‘em
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'m out of breath and run through after that....!!!
September 26th, 2022 20:15
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'m out of breath and run through after that....!!!
September 26th, 2022 20:15
Escape from heaven
jk said:
\"We walk towards a dream, cause in life we’re getting reamed\" - wow.. I really like that. Thank you for sharing!
September 2nd, 2022 18:15
jk said:
\"We walk towards a dream, cause in life we’re getting reamed\" - wow.. I really like that. Thank you for sharing!
September 2nd, 2022 18:15
We about to lose our job
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks for reading my truth L. B. Mek; we seem to be destined for destruction, it seems to be in our DNA. Fear and ego has always been our worst enemy as a species, they are the shadow we cast when ever one human being is in the room.
August 16th, 2022 06:04
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks for reading my truth L. B. Mek; we seem to be destined for destruction, it seems to be in our DNA. Fear and ego has always been our worst enemy as a species, they are the shadow we cast when ever one human being is in the room.
August 16th, 2022 06:04
We about to lose our job
L. B. Mek said:
\'We have a problem, so your answer is to destroy everything that’s around, you clowns get down, gone-get, quit, run out into the street and get hit, then do a back flip, I hope you break your hip. All this because you wanted to police the world;\'
these words, are truth - itself!! dear Poet
what a great write!
(they ask why Rome fail?
I ask, how it managed
to bully the world for so, long...)
in the words of Robert Frost
from \'stopping by woods on a snowy Evening\':
\'My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound’s the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep,
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.\'
(you see, dear Poet
to me, the worst part
is that there is so much worse
left for us, to experience
in this chaotic turmoil and strife
we call life..
and so, we must learn
to appreciate
what little glimpses of calm
we\'re gifted
within our Tornado\'s of reality)
but still, we have yet
\'many miles to go before we sleep\'
so we brace ourselves
for the worst and choose
to step, in hope
that we - individually, may
be saved
somehow, from the Very, worst...
or
we can get angry, react
indignantly
try and sort the world out
rave and shout, wildly
let it all out
gather in our thousands
burn the homes of those \'in power\'
and become
the next France or Sri Lanka...
August 16th, 2022 04:12
L. B. Mek said:
\'We have a problem, so your answer is to destroy everything that’s around, you clowns get down, gone-get, quit, run out into the street and get hit, then do a back flip, I hope you break your hip. All this because you wanted to police the world;\'
these words, are truth - itself!! dear Poet
what a great write!
(they ask why Rome fail?
I ask, how it managed
to bully the world for so, long...)
in the words of Robert Frost
from \'stopping by woods on a snowy Evening\':
\'My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.
He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound’s the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.
The woods are lovely, dark and deep,
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.\'
(you see, dear Poet
to me, the worst part
is that there is so much worse
left for us, to experience
in this chaotic turmoil and strife
we call life..
and so, we must learn
to appreciate
what little glimpses of calm
we\'re gifted
within our Tornado\'s of reality)
but still, we have yet
\'many miles to go before we sleep\'
so we brace ourselves
for the worst and choose
to step, in hope
that we - individually, may
be saved
somehow, from the Very, worst...
or
we can get angry, react
indignantly
try and sort the world out
rave and shout, wildly
let it all out
gather in our thousands
burn the homes of those \'in power\'
and become
the next France or Sri Lanka...
August 16th, 2022 04:12
Old Fart
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks again, I try to make them make sense plus make it a nice to read.
August 13th, 2022 16:24
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks again, I try to make them make sense plus make it a nice to read.
August 13th, 2022 16:24
Before the Wanderings
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant! what a write
so happy for you, dear Poet
this must have felt so rewarding
to shed
although we will never, forget..
\'before the same story was told and told and told, before we became a remnant of the original globe. Before we started to stay put, and keep things that we took.\'
(did you know, wise Poet
the first mythological deity, worshipped
\'en masse\'
was, Chaos...
and one of the first all powerful God\'s, to be imagined
by human\'s, was adorned with eyes
all over its head
meaning, even back then
before we could draw, read or speak
we knew
of humanity\'s fallible traits
the one closes to divinity, was our capacity
for awareness!
when we, all
can exist, bravely witnessing
ourselves and our surroundings
with unvarnished, \'un\'squinting
clarity
then, maybe
we can hope for a future
with promise of a kinder fate...!)
August 11th, 2022 02:44
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant! what a write
so happy for you, dear Poet
this must have felt so rewarding
to shed
although we will never, forget..
\'before the same story was told and told and told, before we became a remnant of the original globe. Before we started to stay put, and keep things that we took.\'
(did you know, wise Poet
the first mythological deity, worshipped
\'en masse\'
was, Chaos...
and one of the first all powerful God\'s, to be imagined
by human\'s, was adorned with eyes
all over its head
meaning, even back then
before we could draw, read or speak
we knew
of humanity\'s fallible traits
the one closes to divinity, was our capacity
for awareness!
when we, all
can exist, bravely witnessing
ourselves and our surroundings
with unvarnished, \'un\'squinting
clarity
then, maybe
we can hope for a future
with promise of a kinder fate...!)
August 11th, 2022 02:44
Holy moly
L. B. Mek said:
sheer profound , poetic Brilliance!
\'they stay up until the morning dew figuring how to screw you, lock us into a prism of athleticism while they build wealth from capitalism,\'
how wise, your eyes
dear Poet
(I read and learn)
thank you!
August 9th, 2022 01:55
L. B. Mek said:
sheer profound , poetic Brilliance!
\'they stay up until the morning dew figuring how to screw you, lock us into a prism of athleticism while they build wealth from capitalism,\'
how wise, your eyes
dear Poet
(I read and learn)
thank you!
August 9th, 2022 01:55
The pulpit
Raven333 said:
Another great poem evenwhenilie, Great flow to it also!!
August 2nd, 2022 15:07
Raven333 said:
Another great poem evenwhenilie, Great flow to it also!!
August 2nd, 2022 15:07
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