Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie
large mirror on my wall
L. B. Mek said:
we have rivers before mirrors
and Narcissus\'s myth
before, selfies..
we, think
our generation\'s, aspirations
are unique
but that feeling of removed - connections
with that sense of self, is a theme
that\'s been prevalent
since the beginning of time..
so i think
it\'s ok, if sometimes
we look for more
and hope, for something magical
to grace our lives..
(sorry for waffling on
but I connected with your words
and couldn\'t help myself)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
July 18th, 2022 02:47
L. B. Mek said:
we have rivers before mirrors
and Narcissus\'s myth
before, selfies..
we, think
our generation\'s, aspirations
are unique
but that feeling of removed - connections
with that sense of self, is a theme
that\'s been prevalent
since the beginning of time..
so i think
it\'s ok, if sometimes
we look for more
and hope, for something magical
to grace our lives..
(sorry for waffling on
but I connected with your words
and couldn\'t help myself)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
July 18th, 2022 02:47
Philadelphia, or Philly
Raven333 said:
I have never been to Philly but it was nice to hear about it and your younger years. Was another great write and your rhyme was very tight.
July 15th, 2022 11:54
Raven333 said:
I have never been to Philly but it was nice to hear about it and your younger years. Was another great write and your rhyme was very tight.
July 15th, 2022 11:54
Philadelphia, or Philly
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
a true ode, with effortless flow
such a great read
thanks for introducing me
to your beloved Philly
July 15th, 2022 03:39
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
a true ode, with effortless flow
such a great read
thanks for introducing me
to your beloved Philly
July 15th, 2022 03:39
Philadelphia, or Philly
evenwheniLie said:
I will always remember growing up in philly as a child, racing popsicle sticks down the street by the curb in the fire hydrant water, my grandmother magically making my pro kid sneakers look brand new with white shoe polish when I only thought it came in black or brown. Slap boxing, racing up and down the street, playing with our matchbox cars, reading the latest comic books, etc., if I could do it all again I would a thousand times. I hope it’s a reality that awaits me after I die, it is surely my heaven every time I close my eyes and meditate on it.
July 15th, 2022 02:21
evenwheniLie said:
I will always remember growing up in philly as a child, racing popsicle sticks down the street by the curb in the fire hydrant water, my grandmother magically making my pro kid sneakers look brand new with white shoe polish when I only thought it came in black or brown. Slap boxing, racing up and down the street, playing with our matchbox cars, reading the latest comic books, etc., if I could do it all again I would a thousand times. I hope it’s a reality that awaits me after I die, it is surely my heaven every time I close my eyes and meditate on it.
July 15th, 2022 02:21
They dumbing us down
Raven333 said:
Dam they dumbing us down, I loved it. I really enjoy reading your stuff.
July 14th, 2022 13:52
Raven333 said:
Dam they dumbing us down, I loved it. I really enjoy reading your stuff.
July 14th, 2022 13:52
These meats is killing me
Raven333 said:
I loved that.. I do agree with you though to much dam chemicals. By the way, I loved your Rhyme.
July 14th, 2022 13:37
Raven333 said:
I loved that.. I do agree with you though to much dam chemicals. By the way, I loved your Rhyme.
July 14th, 2022 13:37
They dumbing us down
Doggerel Dave said:
They dumb down only willing subjects.
I do like your stuff, even if it\'s not me, and will call in when I can.
July 13th, 2022 20:11
Doggerel Dave said:
They dumb down only willing subjects.
I do like your stuff, even if it\'s not me, and will call in when I can.
July 13th, 2022 20:11
Hyper-Hypocrisy
Doggerel Dave said:
Got you......I think..... You are a hard case - so just keep on berating - some of it will penetrate, even to a cynic like ....me!
July 11th, 2022 04:53
Doggerel Dave said:
Got you......I think..... You are a hard case - so just keep on berating - some of it will penetrate, even to a cynic like ....me!
July 11th, 2022 04:53
LGBTQ friend or foe
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks wordsillneversay, I think it’s a nice conversation piece the black and the LGBTQ communities should have.
July 9th, 2022 12:29
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks wordsillneversay, I think it’s a nice conversation piece the black and the LGBTQ communities should have.
July 9th, 2022 12:29
Damnation
Raven333 said:
This poem definitely gets you thinking, it has a really good flow to it. Keep Writing!!!
July 3rd, 2022 13:25
Raven333 said:
This poem definitely gets you thinking, it has a really good flow to it. Keep Writing!!!
July 3rd, 2022 13:25
What is the self
Paul Bell said:
As the policeman said to me. You only have yourself to blame, and that\'s why you\'re attending this self-awareness class today.
July 1st, 2022 14:03
Paul Bell said:
As the policeman said to me. You only have yourself to blame, and that\'s why you\'re attending this self-awareness class today.
July 1st, 2022 14:03
Earth to Wade Watts, calling Wade Watts!
L. B. Mek said:
are these ready player one, references?
forgive me, i don\'t know that story/character..
but still:
\'…..Way in the meta-verse\'
\'way more beautiful
then raw reality, is it not; or is
this just a technicality
of our inner realities, or
are we too blind to see our inabilities
to accept that fate we wish to escape. Deep
down we hate being mere
mortals, which
is just another portal
to wishing we were immortal, is
this immoral..\'
is easily one of the most profound stanza\'s
I have read this year!
thank you, dear Poet
July 1st, 2022 04:07
L. B. Mek said:
are these ready player one, references?
forgive me, i don\'t know that story/character..
but still:
\'…..Way in the meta-verse\'
\'way more beautiful
then raw reality, is it not; or is
this just a technicality
of our inner realities, or
are we too blind to see our inabilities
to accept that fate we wish to escape. Deep
down we hate being mere
mortals, which
is just another portal
to wishing we were immortal, is
this immoral..\'
is easily one of the most profound stanza\'s
I have read this year!
thank you, dear Poet
July 1st, 2022 04:07
What is the self
Raven333 said:
Great poem, and yes it is \'self\' I think in all ways it were we start and end.
June 30th, 2022 20:32
Raven333 said:
Great poem, and yes it is \'self\' I think in all ways it were we start and end.
June 30th, 2022 20:32
What is the self
L. B. Mek said:
indeed
first, we must find
\'ourselves\'
to excavate
from within: the meaning
of self..
(in my humble opinion)
thought provoking
thanks for sharing
dear poet
June 30th, 2022 06:12
L. B. Mek said:
indeed
first, we must find
\'ourselves\'
to excavate
from within: the meaning
of self..
(in my humble opinion)
thought provoking
thanks for sharing
dear poet
June 30th, 2022 06:12
Outdoor Jazz in Philly
evenwheniLie said:
It sure was al17, it was beautiful and unexpected, I was going to the store up this way and noticed they was setting up their equipment and people slowly gathering…. Which made it an actual lovely surprise
June 25th, 2022 10:21
evenwheniLie said:
It sure was al17, it was beautiful and unexpected, I was going to the store up this way and noticed they was setting up their equipment and people slowly gathering…. Which made it an actual lovely surprise
June 25th, 2022 10:21
Addiction
Raven333 said:
greatly penned, I to can identify with others and myself. addiction is a horrible thing to see and to go through.
June 25th, 2022 00:19
Raven333 said:
greatly penned, I to can identify with others and myself. addiction is a horrible thing to see and to go through.
June 25th, 2022 00:19
Addiction
Doggerel Dave said:
Please don\'t even try - you would be on a hiding to nothing.
The will to change has to come from him and him alone.
If subsequently he makes that decision then good - but the help should be professional as you cannot live your life and take on such a burden.
June 24th, 2022 08:26
Doggerel Dave said:
Please don\'t even try - you would be on a hiding to nothing.
The will to change has to come from him and him alone.
If subsequently he makes that decision then good - but the help should be professional as you cannot live your life and take on such a burden.
June 24th, 2022 08:26
Addiction
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks teddy.15; I do love him but when they’re their own worst enemy it’s hard to help..
June 24th, 2022 07:16
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks teddy.15; I do love him but when they’re their own worst enemy it’s hard to help..
June 24th, 2022 07:16
Freedom
evenwheniLie said:
s.zaynab.kamoonpuri Lb Mek didn’t say that evenwheniLie did. That would be me.
Cheers
June 23rd, 2022 12:55
evenwheniLie said:
s.zaynab.kamoonpuri Lb Mek didn’t say that evenwheniLie did. That would be me.
Cheers
June 23rd, 2022 12:55
Freedom
evenwheniLie said:
I know I came off like the hate is there, but the hate has been expired, I have white, Asian and Hispanic friends who come to my cookouts and we listen to one another, they help me to properly direct my words so I can put them right in the living room of my intended targets.. I know natives owned slaves, I also know Africans owned black slaves as well.. but at the moment it’s our one time slave holders of the European type that’s causing modern day issues for us. I often ask myself, what’s the natural process of a people, becoming another people? Leaving one’s homeland and the culture, their belief in a particular god may change overtime, language may change even etc; overtime…. But being conquered by another, enslavement has to be a possible source of being changed from what your forefathers were as well. I’ve come to accept this as fact with no hate… it’s more of the constant crap we get from these people in modern times that’s nerve racking. Mankind’s overall treatment of one another is senseless.. but in the past what’s happened to Africans, native Americans, India, Hawaii, China, all have one conqueror in common. The conqueror’s children are trying to change the narrative their forefathers left them.. they don’t get to do that, because it’s at our expense. History is the only thing that can explain our present state. Otherwise the worldwide conditions of people of color would be explained away as us simply being inferior small brain two steps up from monkeys. That’s why they continue to say Africans didn’t build the pyramids, they only admit mankind walking out of Africa if they can control the narrative, that narrative being we are evolutionarily beneath them and a much early stage in their development… which makes us appear to be lower in the evolutionary ladder then themselves.. it’s a slight of the hand scientific racism, like the insulting idea of it must have been aliens who built the pyramids if it wasn’t them.
June 23rd, 2022 11:24
evenwheniLie said:
I know I came off like the hate is there, but the hate has been expired, I have white, Asian and Hispanic friends who come to my cookouts and we listen to one another, they help me to properly direct my words so I can put them right in the living room of my intended targets.. I know natives owned slaves, I also know Africans owned black slaves as well.. but at the moment it’s our one time slave holders of the European type that’s causing modern day issues for us. I often ask myself, what’s the natural process of a people, becoming another people? Leaving one’s homeland and the culture, their belief in a particular god may change overtime, language may change even etc; overtime…. But being conquered by another, enslavement has to be a possible source of being changed from what your forefathers were as well. I’ve come to accept this as fact with no hate… it’s more of the constant crap we get from these people in modern times that’s nerve racking. Mankind’s overall treatment of one another is senseless.. but in the past what’s happened to Africans, native Americans, India, Hawaii, China, all have one conqueror in common. The conqueror’s children are trying to change the narrative their forefathers left them.. they don’t get to do that, because it’s at our expense. History is the only thing that can explain our present state. Otherwise the worldwide conditions of people of color would be explained away as us simply being inferior small brain two steps up from monkeys. That’s why they continue to say Africans didn’t build the pyramids, they only admit mankind walking out of Africa if they can control the narrative, that narrative being we are evolutionarily beneath them and a much early stage in their development… which makes us appear to be lower in the evolutionary ladder then themselves.. it’s a slight of the hand scientific racism, like the insulting idea of it must have been aliens who built the pyramids if it wasn’t them.
June 23rd, 2022 11:24
Freedom
L. B. Mek said:
\'that’s why I throw rocks at them, and get down and dirty cause I think its right, to kick them in their windpipes.\'
this had me laugh out loud
cos of just how much fervent vehemence you imbued in your wording
while, being self aware - enough
to make fun of your fury..
(see, brother
some of my best friends
have been a different colour to my
skin
but our heart\'s have been the same
tint
of crimson bruised and heartache
stained
pulsing, to that same stuttering beat..
see \'Those\' spewing, divisive
bul sht
want us, to think we\'re different
from each other
try to, break black america apart
from America
so minority\'s vote blue, without first asking
if blue
is a good fit..
make a day in june, some
\'slavery\' independence/emancipation day
because
\'some \'folks\' in the south, heard
they were free, later than most\'
when it took another year or more for the Native Americans
to free, their black slaves...
yeah, how about that for fckry
of distorted history, they ever mention that in books?
but wait, why glorify juneteenth
then
cos they try to make people believe
July 4th ain\'t for them...?
so they get the minority vote
put an impotent president in office
just so they can claim
they had the first black, one
next election
they went for the first woman, in charge
coincidence?
nah
so are the reds, the answer
cos they ended slavery
centuries ago
hell no!
the same president
that signed the freedom of black slaves
signed
the go-ahead to hand 38 Native american Sioux\'s
to make a statement
on Dec 26th
yeah, one day at church
cutting turkeys and saying grace
next day
ordering mass murder
as a statement..)
so what am i saying
which side am i choosing
what my point?
\'Think, think
and quest for truth\'
don\'t take the quick read
bullet point versions
they selling for cheap
only then
can you Vote! knwing
what the game is
make your Chess moves
in life
knowing
what the rules are...
till then
you, we
are just domino pieces
being pushed around..
\'don\'t allow, their Hate
to fuel you with, Hate..\'
free yourself
to Think, knowledgably
for yourself
then pass the Torch, keep
the fight alive
and Hopefully, we can end
the cyclical Fckry of society
someday
before the world, freezes over...
lol
June 23rd, 2022 05:50
L. B. Mek said:
\'that’s why I throw rocks at them, and get down and dirty cause I think its right, to kick them in their windpipes.\'
this had me laugh out loud
cos of just how much fervent vehemence you imbued in your wording
while, being self aware - enough
to make fun of your fury..
(see, brother
some of my best friends
have been a different colour to my
skin
but our heart\'s have been the same
tint
of crimson bruised and heartache
stained
pulsing, to that same stuttering beat..
see \'Those\' spewing, divisive
bul sht
want us, to think we\'re different
from each other
try to, break black america apart
from America
so minority\'s vote blue, without first asking
if blue
is a good fit..
make a day in june, some
\'slavery\' independence/emancipation day
because
\'some \'folks\' in the south, heard
they were free, later than most\'
when it took another year or more for the Native Americans
to free, their black slaves...
yeah, how about that for fckry
of distorted history, they ever mention that in books?
but wait, why glorify juneteenth
then
cos they try to make people believe
July 4th ain\'t for them...?
so they get the minority vote
put an impotent president in office
just so they can claim
they had the first black, one
next election
they went for the first woman, in charge
coincidence?
nah
so are the reds, the answer
cos they ended slavery
centuries ago
hell no!
the same president
that signed the freedom of black slaves
signed
the go-ahead to hand 38 Native american Sioux\'s
to make a statement
on Dec 26th
yeah, one day at church
cutting turkeys and saying grace
next day
ordering mass murder
as a statement..)
so what am i saying
which side am i choosing
what my point?
\'Think, think
and quest for truth\'
don\'t take the quick read
bullet point versions
they selling for cheap
only then
can you Vote! knwing
what the game is
make your Chess moves
in life
knowing
what the rules are...
till then
you, we
are just domino pieces
being pushed around..
\'don\'t allow, their Hate
to fuel you with, Hate..\'
free yourself
to Think, knowledgably
for yourself
then pass the Torch, keep
the fight alive
and Hopefully, we can end
the cyclical Fckry of society
someday
before the world, freezes over...
lol
June 23rd, 2022 05:50
Are we seeing
Paul Bell said:
I work on the rule, I don\'t care what colour or creed you are. If you\'re religious, good for you, I\'m not, so don\'t inflict your beliefs on me. Do people care what colour the surgeon is when he or she is saving your life, I bet they\'re not. In saying all that. I do hate the opposition supporters for 90 minutes every Saturday.
June 22nd, 2022 11:22
Paul Bell said:
I work on the rule, I don\'t care what colour or creed you are. If you\'re religious, good for you, I\'m not, so don\'t inflict your beliefs on me. Do people care what colour the surgeon is when he or she is saving your life, I bet they\'re not. In saying all that. I do hate the opposition supporters for 90 minutes every Saturday.
June 22nd, 2022 11:22
Are we seeing
evenwheniLie said:
I try to enlighten as I become enlightened myself, the American society constantly tries to possess you, I find it’s a constant self exorcism I have to periodically go through every so often. I meditate often. Thanks for noticing me and my poetry. ❤️
June 22nd, 2022 05:01
evenwheniLie said:
I try to enlighten as I become enlightened myself, the American society constantly tries to possess you, I find it’s a constant self exorcism I have to periodically go through every so often. I meditate often. Thanks for noticing me and my poetry. ❤️
June 22nd, 2022 05:01
Slave Bible
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks for reading and understanding, it’s the understanding that’s gold; even now most of us are our own worst enemy because we still have the mind of a slave.
June 21st, 2022 09:53
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks for reading and understanding, it’s the understanding that’s gold; even now most of us are our own worst enemy because we still have the mind of a slave.
June 21st, 2022 09:53
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