Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie
Young Buck
L. B. Mek said:
(such an important write
thank you! dear Poet)
I hate the term
\'black on black crime\'
it\'s such bul\'sht
call it what it is
\'criminal on criminals, crime\'
with an obstinate support system
determined
to watch the demise of their youth
than admit defeat, ask for help
and save
their youth from their inherited, causality
of cyclic, ill--fate...!
May 15th, 2023 05:24
L. B. Mek said:
(such an important write
thank you! dear Poet)
I hate the term
\'black on black crime\'
it\'s such bul\'sht
call it what it is
\'criminal on criminals, crime\'
with an obstinate support system
determined
to watch the demise of their youth
than admit defeat, ask for help
and save
their youth from their inherited, causality
of cyclic, ill--fate...!
May 15th, 2023 05:24
Religious text
2781 said:
Beware of the leaven of the Pharisees which is hypocrisy.
May 6th, 2023 18:48
2781 said:
Beware of the leaven of the Pharisees which is hypocrisy.
May 6th, 2023 18:48
A generation Z fairytale
L. B. Mek said:
your wordplay and flow
as-ever
on point, a great poem
thank you! dear Poet
(betwixt fantastic and our dreams
exists a bridge to that never
we accumulate as our incandescent
ideal, as tomorrow\'s worth..
yet when that finale scene, flicks
to obsolete
we\'re left in our seats, waiting
for that next
avenue of inexhaustible, escape..)
May 5th, 2023 04:13
L. B. Mek said:
your wordplay and flow
as-ever
on point, a great poem
thank you! dear Poet
(betwixt fantastic and our dreams
exists a bridge to that never
we accumulate as our incandescent
ideal, as tomorrow\'s worth..
yet when that finale scene, flicks
to obsolete
we\'re left in our seats, waiting
for that next
avenue of inexhaustible, escape..)
May 5th, 2023 04:13
A generation Z fairytale
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks again; I thought I’d make this one fun.
May 4th, 2023 22:37
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks again; I thought I’d make this one fun.
May 4th, 2023 22:37
Foolish Child
Parisab said:
The bloodsucker reference “being too busy being stylish” is right on point-great imagery Like the picture above-thanks for sharing this fantastical truth
May 4th, 2023 22:13
Parisab said:
The bloodsucker reference “being too busy being stylish” is right on point-great imagery Like the picture above-thanks for sharing this fantastical truth
May 4th, 2023 22:13
A generation Z fairytale
Parisab said:
Nice flow to this poem-enjoyable and dynamic-thanks for introducing a historical figure of the cinema, Stepin Fetchit.
May 4th, 2023 22:06
Parisab said:
Nice flow to this poem-enjoyable and dynamic-thanks for introducing a historical figure of the cinema, Stepin Fetchit.
May 4th, 2023 22:06
Pick your poison
evenwheniLie said:
Do we have to mindfully choose to do right in every instance, the faithful would be terrified if they were to find out controlling one’s desires wasn’t good enough, but it is the lack of desire and being a being who needs no control that gets them through the gates. Is evil a mindful act of the sane or insane, surely god protects the sick, maybe Jesus’s words on the cross was fitting, “father forgive them, for they know not what they do.”
April 28th, 2023 05:31
evenwheniLie said:
Do we have to mindfully choose to do right in every instance, the faithful would be terrified if they were to find out controlling one’s desires wasn’t good enough, but it is the lack of desire and being a being who needs no control that gets them through the gates. Is evil a mindful act of the sane or insane, surely god protects the sick, maybe Jesus’s words on the cross was fitting, “father forgive them, for they know not what they do.”
April 28th, 2023 05:31
Pick your poison
L. B. Mek said:
perspective to concept
conceptualisations, to repurpose
our propaganda concepts...
deep down
deep
deep
down
we innately know, right from wrong
because
we know, pain from happiness
that\'s why
we need to realise, everything
we do to muddy
our outlooks and camouflage
that ease
of living life, simple and humble
is a ploy or scheme
as we never needed a deity
to accept, goodness and love
in our lives
to do unto others, as
we\'d like
others to do for us...
(all else, is that perverse
of humanity\'s cesspool, toxicity
where collectively, we choose
to make life
that much harder for all of us
knowingly
so we have that ready made excuse
for the failures we anticipate
due to those mistaken choices
we so readily, make...!)
April 28th, 2023 05:14
L. B. Mek said:
perspective to concept
conceptualisations, to repurpose
our propaganda concepts...
deep down
deep
deep
down
we innately know, right from wrong
because
we know, pain from happiness
that\'s why
we need to realise, everything
we do to muddy
our outlooks and camouflage
that ease
of living life, simple and humble
is a ploy or scheme
as we never needed a deity
to accept, goodness and love
in our lives
to do unto others, as
we\'d like
others to do for us...
(all else, is that perverse
of humanity\'s cesspool, toxicity
where collectively, we choose
to make life
that much harder for all of us
knowingly
so we have that ready made excuse
for the failures we anticipate
due to those mistaken choices
we so readily, make...!)
April 28th, 2023 05:14
Foolish Child
L. B. Mek said:
it\'s crazy, dear Poet
I\'m reading your insightful words
and becoming more, despondent
wondering:
(if
we exist in a cyclic, regressive epoch
of \'parentless children\'
birthing
\'parentless children\'
divorce, as financial action plans
and those 18 years, of payments
as a reductive, valuation
of a child\'s, worth...
who to judge, where to point
a finger
how to end
this societal cycle of degradation?
how do we teach
what no one, deigned
to teach, us?!)
April 24th, 2023 05:58
L. B. Mek said:
it\'s crazy, dear Poet
I\'m reading your insightful words
and becoming more, despondent
wondering:
(if
we exist in a cyclic, regressive epoch
of \'parentless children\'
birthing
\'parentless children\'
divorce, as financial action plans
and those 18 years, of payments
as a reductive, valuation
of a child\'s, worth...
who to judge, where to point
a finger
how to end
this societal cycle of degradation?
how do we teach
what no one, deigned
to teach, us?!)
April 24th, 2023 05:58
Coonology
evenwheniLie said:
My inspiration is built brick by brick of appreciations.
April 21st, 2023 20:36
evenwheniLie said:
My inspiration is built brick by brick of appreciations.
April 21st, 2023 20:36
Coonology
sasherington said:
Wow! I love the imagery and the style. Do you have any inspiration?
April 21st, 2023 19:37
sasherington said:
Wow! I love the imagery and the style. Do you have any inspiration?
April 21st, 2023 19:37
Cheaters
L. B. Mek said:
(really related with your words
but i felt you were referring
to cheating, outside of the ohysical realms
sorry if I interpreted this wrong
thanks for sharing, another poignant read
dear Poet)
equality of merit in our relationships
is that dream, we dare not remember
best
to slide with those mirages of life
like drake, feigning that hip hop lore
\'started from the bottom\'
(of middle class Canadian comfort)
our love, too
if we\'re being truthful, not a warzone
like most
we just, take each other for granted
at time\'s
we forget, just how fallible we are:
\' Our feelings is king, our egos are gold
and our facts are untold,
so there’s no sense in asking for justifications
or explanations,\'
April 10th, 2023 05:29
L. B. Mek said:
(really related with your words
but i felt you were referring
to cheating, outside of the ohysical realms
sorry if I interpreted this wrong
thanks for sharing, another poignant read
dear Poet)
equality of merit in our relationships
is that dream, we dare not remember
best
to slide with those mirages of life
like drake, feigning that hip hop lore
\'started from the bottom\'
(of middle class Canadian comfort)
our love, too
if we\'re being truthful, not a warzone
like most
we just, take each other for granted
at time\'s
we forget, just how fallible we are:
\' Our feelings is king, our egos are gold
and our facts are untold,
so there’s no sense in asking for justifications
or explanations,\'
April 10th, 2023 05:29
Miss Graham
L. B. Mek said:
so true, dear Poet
(yet Rosa\'s story, a little more
politically polished by posterity)
than Miss Graham
and her legacy, of teaching children
that freedom, began
in the classroom!
it\'s heroes like her
that insured the miracle
of a people
enslaved for centuries
and belittled for being illiterate
manged to scale
societies, steep hills
to become a majority, literate people
in less than a century
a feat of human collective ambition, surpassing
all expectations
\'freed black\', were more literate
than their previous slave owners in the south
while still being oppressed and marginalised..
and all because visionaries like Miss Graham
established kindergartens and schools
so early...
now look at us
a million, millionaire sports stars
and Hollywood sell-out\'s
yet barely a thousand schools or grants established between them all
so sad to contemplate
(that you\'re related to her
makes me proud to have met your
empowering words)
April 3rd, 2023 06:00
L. B. Mek said:
so true, dear Poet
(yet Rosa\'s story, a little more
politically polished by posterity)
than Miss Graham
and her legacy, of teaching children
that freedom, began
in the classroom!
it\'s heroes like her
that insured the miracle
of a people
enslaved for centuries
and belittled for being illiterate
manged to scale
societies, steep hills
to become a majority, literate people
in less than a century
a feat of human collective ambition, surpassing
all expectations
\'freed black\', were more literate
than their previous slave owners in the south
while still being oppressed and marginalised..
and all because visionaries like Miss Graham
established kindergartens and schools
so early...
now look at us
a million, millionaire sports stars
and Hollywood sell-out\'s
yet barely a thousand schools or grants established between them all
so sad to contemplate
(that you\'re related to her
makes me proud to have met your
empowering words)
April 3rd, 2023 06:00
Prequel
2781 said:
That was quite a journey. Must have learnt a thing or two along the way?
March 31st, 2023 05:50
2781 said:
That was quite a journey. Must have learnt a thing or two along the way?
March 31st, 2023 05:50
Prequel
L. B. Mek said:
laud the creativity
and your first few lines were written to a tight beat
i read n learn, dear poet
(this be that groundhog day, screenplay
they could never allow to be screened,
since sleeping sheep, need not be disturbed
best to keep them herded
within reality\'s cushioned
mirages...
reliving mirrored existences
where \'déjà vu\'
is merely an exotic French word
to strut their cultured personas)
March 31st, 2023 04:48
L. B. Mek said:
laud the creativity
and your first few lines were written to a tight beat
i read n learn, dear poet
(this be that groundhog day, screenplay
they could never allow to be screened,
since sleeping sheep, need not be disturbed
best to keep them herded
within reality\'s cushioned
mirages...
reliving mirrored existences
where \'déjà vu\'
is merely an exotic French word
to strut their cultured personas)
March 31st, 2023 04:48
To rhyme, or not to is the question
Doggerel Dave said:
Very amusing,
That piece of abusing...
March 30th, 2023 05:35
Doggerel Dave said:
Very amusing,
That piece of abusing...
March 30th, 2023 05:35
To rhyme, or not to is the question
David Wakeling said:
Great poetry rhymes.That\'s what helps to make it great.Anyway you are not listening so it doesn\'t matter
March 30th, 2023 02:56
David Wakeling said:
Great poetry rhymes.That\'s what helps to make it great.Anyway you are not listening so it doesn\'t matter
March 30th, 2023 02:56
Entropy
David Wakeling said:
It is not \"got\" to die.It should be \"have\" to die.Learn English before you try to write poetry.There are too many errors to bother reading
March 25th, 2023 15:46
David Wakeling said:
It is not \"got\" to die.It should be \"have\" to die.Learn English before you try to write poetry.There are too many errors to bother reading
March 25th, 2023 15:46
Entropy
scarletttt said:
woah the thought that went into this! captures so much in a few mere lines
March 25th, 2023 13:44
scarletttt said:
woah the thought that went into this! captures so much in a few mere lines
March 25th, 2023 13:44
Mark of the beast
evenwheniLie said:
Glad u enjoyed it, but it’s true; we are the barbarians
March 24th, 2023 13:32
evenwheniLie said:
Glad u enjoyed it, but it’s true; we are the barbarians
March 24th, 2023 13:32
Mark of the beast
L. B. Mek said:
\'Is it a single man or woman;
maybe the beast is legions of
swastika bearing nazis; or does it
lurk in the hearts of every man,
hiding and biding it’s time\'
\'but it’s just another crime
that gets you used to more crimes.
Maybe the beast
is a trait that’s too built-in to escape,\'
(from C. V. Cavafy\'s Poem
\'the Barbarians are coming\':
\'Why this sudden bewilderment, this confusion?
(How serious people’s faces have become.)
Why are the streets and squares emptying so rapidly,
everyone going home lost in thought?
Because night has fallen and the barbarians haven\'t come.
And some of our men just in from the border say
there are no barbarians any longer
Now what’s going to happen to us without barbarians?
Those people were a kind of solution.\')
how insightfully, Brilliant!
dear Wise poet, thank you!
(I read and learn)
March 24th, 2023 06:37
L. B. Mek said:
\'Is it a single man or woman;
maybe the beast is legions of
swastika bearing nazis; or does it
lurk in the hearts of every man,
hiding and biding it’s time\'
\'but it’s just another crime
that gets you used to more crimes.
Maybe the beast
is a trait that’s too built-in to escape,\'
(from C. V. Cavafy\'s Poem
\'the Barbarians are coming\':
\'Why this sudden bewilderment, this confusion?
(How serious people’s faces have become.)
Why are the streets and squares emptying so rapidly,
everyone going home lost in thought?
Because night has fallen and the barbarians haven\'t come.
And some of our men just in from the border say
there are no barbarians any longer
Now what’s going to happen to us without barbarians?
Those people were a kind of solution.\')
how insightfully, Brilliant!
dear Wise poet, thank you!
(I read and learn)
March 24th, 2023 06:37
In God’s court
evenwheniLie said:
I see them to be, we are the author of our successes as well as our failures
March 14th, 2023 03:48
evenwheniLie said:
I see them to be, we are the author of our successes as well as our failures
March 14th, 2023 03:48
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