Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie



Bitter old man
Doggerel Dave said:

Not... quite... sure... about... this...one ...at... all................

September 27th, 2023 02:05

Origins of a terrorist
Bobby O said:

This might be a proper METHOD poem. ?

September 24th, 2023 03:23

Origins of a terrorist
evenwheniLie said:

I think many terrorists are disturbed, but hide behind religious views for validation

September 23rd, 2023 21:54

Origins of a terrorist
Doggerel Dave said:

Nihilism personified and versified in your usual get to the root of it all manner.

September 23rd, 2023 20:29

American superstar
Doggerel Dave said:

Captured: the hideous superficiality of it all....
You really chewed on that one and spat it out.
Good for you.

September 19th, 2023 04:22

American superstar
Bobby O said:

Nice. I was at the old Stadium the day of that funk when he looked at Dr. J who signaled to MJ that the close contest with Dominique called for him to pull out all the stops and recreate the famous fly from the FT line just as the doctor did. A classic recreation and a victory for MJ resulted. It was thrilling and IMO wasn’t even the best dunk of the night , rather , I believe the best was MJ down the baseline using the ball as a prop pillow before the vicious jam last second as he reached the rim. Other than that I don’t remember much about that day!
And BTW I GOT NOTHING BUT praise for MJ on the 94’ and his many contributions far exceed what can be penciled to the other column. G O. A T. BY FAR!!

September 19th, 2023 02:39

Parallel universe; really
Parisab said:

Great metaphors to the all inclusive layers of the sometimes unfortunate universal truths-pulling heavy concept with humor is surely a task this poem did right-

September 17th, 2023 10:25

My People
L. B. Mek said:

flow, flow and more flow
simply Brilliant! dear Poet
Haitian depths
History\'s unfold
Sea salt in our veins
Rain drops in our path
Sipping on water
Oceans as our divide
Time, stagnating in our scars
Crimson tainting our floodgates
\'intentions
can remain see threw, our history
is regal, was here roaming
while others was still in the fetal\'

\'Primordially oozed together,
that’s why we drink booze together,
snooze together, wind-up
on the news together,
got systematically used together\'

September 15th, 2023 06:45

My People
Doggerel Dave said:

Keep at it. Although I sometimes only partially get where you are coming from, I generally get a goodly amount.

September 15th, 2023 02:20

Abundant Carelessness
Doggerel Dave said:

Bloody glad I don\'t live where you are, Mate

September 12th, 2023 05:47

Heavenly trial
Doggerel Dave said:

I really find it hard to understand what gives in folks with religious beliefs.....

September 11th, 2023 06:35

Heavenly trial
L. B. Mek said:

\'even the Bible has more of our fingerprints than God’s\'
the saddest part
is that it was \'many differing\' fingerprints
so in chapter
you have an all compassionate empathy God
then in Psalms, its a God of weaponry
demolish my enemies, kill my hater
..
excuse me, what logic is this
the same God that counts all
as His children
is now going to wipe a whole tribe out
because the other side prayed more?
same in other religions
Jews have humanity\'s fist superhero
a Golem, a Titan, a Defender
that only protects Jews...
hmmm
and Muslims, scream \'by God\'s will\'
as they press that anti aircraft missile..
ermmm, well what about the poor pilot
where\'s God\'s will, then?
so you see
what ever avenue to faith, we had
was corrupted from its very foundation
and yet
ask a 3 year old, they will tell you of Love
as a God, of a truth as good
but in ten years, they\'ll have forgotten
their answers...
such is the curse of fallibility we inherit in every generation..
(I so relate, dear Poet)

September 11th, 2023 05:48

Victims of Sun Tzu’s book
Doggerel Dave said:

You\'ve nailed it, and as I give this a second reading, I\'m left with the feeling that it is right over their heads, that shit....

September 7th, 2023 15:48

intern, patient confrontation
Parisab said:

You told ‘his’ story vividly-I see this in those personally and professionally who f@$& with the people to shock ‘even if they have lost or given up on the conventional reality’ and are our all time truth tellers-I can’t say enough about this or your poem-thank you poet friend!

September 4th, 2023 12:22

Crippling effects of power
L. B. Mek said:

so true wise Poet
the cruellest word in humanity\'s annals
must be \'more\'
what forgotten atrocities, are remembered
by the sands of Time
all because to most, power
represent their right, to \'more\'
...
Nietzsche was mistaken the \'Overman\'
can never represent humanity\'s peak idyll
as that same title, comes with a curse
and a very short, shelf life..


August 25th, 2023 01:49

Butterflies in my attic
Doggerel Dave said:

Not like you - nature done with a new flavour. Great.

August 24th, 2023 18:40

Butterflies in my attic
Pop64 said:

This is a wonderful read! Love the descriptive quality and tones, as they detail not only the beauty and color, but the actions as well. Terrific read!

August 24th, 2023 12:21

Astral projection
2781 said:

The flesh profits nothing, the words I speak (not me), they are Spirit and they are life.

August 21st, 2023 08:19

Astral projection
evenwheniLie said:

Glad you enjoyed it

August 21st, 2023 04:02

Astral projection
Bobby O said:

That is a cool way to repair and complete a self image that needed to be tweaked just a bit.
Nice write good read

August 21st, 2023 02:05

Astral projection
orchidee said:

I\'m gonna fly...........!

August 21st, 2023 02:05

Misguided loyalists
Doggerel Dave said:

And why? because economics, the lack of alternative safe accommodation does not allow escape. As for the rest - that\'s your territory, man.

August 19th, 2023 20:19

Misguided loyalists
2781 said:

Like a dog.

August 19th, 2023 08:04

My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
Bobby O said:

Incisive commentary is tricky to present without judgement or personal bias. Lo, this you have achieved and I salute.

August 19th, 2023 00:24

My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
evenwheniLie said:

People have to agree on one god or no god at all…

August 18th, 2023 11:48

My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
2781 said:

Spirits becoming the nuisance.

August 18th, 2023 09:08

My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
Doggerel Dave said:

Nah - just become an atheist and agnostic, then continue with your life while you have it.....

August 18th, 2023 05:25

It’s just another superhero movie
Doggerel Dave said:

I\'m definitely letting Cremation Mary go first - clean up the joint before I get there. There\'s been moments in my life that, if I\'d known her, she would have been quite handy. Situations perhaps not quite as extreme as, but human pollutants come in various strengths.....

August 10th, 2023 19:25

It’s just another superhero movie
Parisab said:

I’m already a fan of Cremation Mary and I will order a ‘Gucci plus Covid mask’! Love the Coltrane reference! Entertaining read and thanks evenwheniLie!

August 10th, 2023 17:37

Escaping the devil’s system
vividvoid14 said:

i like the way u use your words. its amazing

August 9th, 2023 14:22

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