Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie
Parallel universe; really
Parisab said:
Great metaphors to the all inclusive layers of the sometimes unfortunate universal truths-pulling heavy concept with humor is surely a task this poem did right-
September 17th, 2023 10:25
Parisab said:
Great metaphors to the all inclusive layers of the sometimes unfortunate universal truths-pulling heavy concept with humor is surely a task this poem did right-
September 17th, 2023 10:25
My People
L. B. Mek said:
flow, flow and more flow
simply Brilliant! dear Poet
Haitian depths
History\'s unfold
Sea salt in our veins
Rain drops in our path
Sipping on water
Oceans as our divide
Time, stagnating in our scars
Crimson tainting our floodgates
\'intentions
can remain see threw, our history
is regal, was here roaming
while others was still in the fetal\'
\'Primordially oozed together,
that’s why we drink booze together,
snooze together, wind-up
on the news together,
got systematically used together\'
September 15th, 2023 06:45
L. B. Mek said:
flow, flow and more flow
simply Brilliant! dear Poet
Haitian depths
History\'s unfold
Sea salt in our veins
Rain drops in our path
Sipping on water
Oceans as our divide
Time, stagnating in our scars
Crimson tainting our floodgates
\'intentions
can remain see threw, our history
is regal, was here roaming
while others was still in the fetal\'
\'Primordially oozed together,
that’s why we drink booze together,
snooze together, wind-up
on the news together,
got systematically used together\'
September 15th, 2023 06:45
My People
Doggerel Dave said:
Keep at it. Although I sometimes only partially get where you are coming from, I generally get a goodly amount.
September 15th, 2023 02:20
Doggerel Dave said:
Keep at it. Although I sometimes only partially get where you are coming from, I generally get a goodly amount.
September 15th, 2023 02:20
Abundant Carelessness
Doggerel Dave said:
Bloody glad I don\'t live where you are, Mate
September 12th, 2023 05:47
Doggerel Dave said:
Bloody glad I don\'t live where you are, Mate
September 12th, 2023 05:47
Heavenly trial
Doggerel Dave said:
I really find it hard to understand what gives in folks with religious beliefs.....
September 11th, 2023 06:35
Doggerel Dave said:
I really find it hard to understand what gives in folks with religious beliefs.....
September 11th, 2023 06:35
Heavenly trial
L. B. Mek said:
\'even the Bible has more of our fingerprints than God’s\'
the saddest part
is that it was \'many differing\' fingerprints
so in chapter
you have an all compassionate empathy God
then in Psalms, its a God of weaponry
demolish my enemies, kill my hater
..
excuse me, what logic is this
the same God that counts all
as His children
is now going to wipe a whole tribe out
because the other side prayed more?
same in other religions
Jews have humanity\'s fist superhero
a Golem, a Titan, a Defender
that only protects Jews...
hmmm
and Muslims, scream \'by God\'s will\'
as they press that anti aircraft missile..
ermmm, well what about the poor pilot
where\'s God\'s will, then?
so you see
what ever avenue to faith, we had
was corrupted from its very foundation
and yet
ask a 3 year old, they will tell you of Love
as a God, of a truth as good
but in ten years, they\'ll have forgotten
their answers...
such is the curse of fallibility we inherit in every generation..
(I so relate, dear Poet)
September 11th, 2023 05:48
L. B. Mek said:
\'even the Bible has more of our fingerprints than God’s\'
the saddest part
is that it was \'many differing\' fingerprints
so in chapter
you have an all compassionate empathy God
then in Psalms, its a God of weaponry
demolish my enemies, kill my hater
..
excuse me, what logic is this
the same God that counts all
as His children
is now going to wipe a whole tribe out
because the other side prayed more?
same in other religions
Jews have humanity\'s fist superhero
a Golem, a Titan, a Defender
that only protects Jews...
hmmm
and Muslims, scream \'by God\'s will\'
as they press that anti aircraft missile..
ermmm, well what about the poor pilot
where\'s God\'s will, then?
so you see
what ever avenue to faith, we had
was corrupted from its very foundation
and yet
ask a 3 year old, they will tell you of Love
as a God, of a truth as good
but in ten years, they\'ll have forgotten
their answers...
such is the curse of fallibility we inherit in every generation..
(I so relate, dear Poet)
September 11th, 2023 05:48
Victims of Sun Tzu’s book
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve nailed it, and as I give this a second reading, I\'m left with the feeling that it is right over their heads, that shit....
September 7th, 2023 15:48
Doggerel Dave said:
You\'ve nailed it, and as I give this a second reading, I\'m left with the feeling that it is right over their heads, that shit....
September 7th, 2023 15:48
intern, patient confrontation
Parisab said:
You told ‘his’ story vividly-I see this in those personally and professionally who f@$& with the people to shock ‘even if they have lost or given up on the conventional reality’ and are our all time truth tellers-I can’t say enough about this or your poem-thank you poet friend!
September 4th, 2023 12:22
Parisab said:
You told ‘his’ story vividly-I see this in those personally and professionally who f@$& with the people to shock ‘even if they have lost or given up on the conventional reality’ and are our all time truth tellers-I can’t say enough about this or your poem-thank you poet friend!
September 4th, 2023 12:22
Crippling effects of power
L. B. Mek said:
so true wise Poet
the cruellest word in humanity\'s annals
must be \'more\'
what forgotten atrocities, are remembered
by the sands of Time
all because to most, power
represent their right, to \'more\'
...
Nietzsche was mistaken the \'Overman\'
can never represent humanity\'s peak idyll
as that same title, comes with a curse
and a very short, shelf life..
August 25th, 2023 01:49
L. B. Mek said:
so true wise Poet
the cruellest word in humanity\'s annals
must be \'more\'
what forgotten atrocities, are remembered
by the sands of Time
all because to most, power
represent their right, to \'more\'
...
Nietzsche was mistaken the \'Overman\'
can never represent humanity\'s peak idyll
as that same title, comes with a curse
and a very short, shelf life..
August 25th, 2023 01:49
Butterflies in my attic
Doggerel Dave said:
Not like you - nature done with a new flavour. Great.
August 24th, 2023 18:40
Doggerel Dave said:
Not like you - nature done with a new flavour. Great.
August 24th, 2023 18:40
Butterflies in my attic
Pop64 said:
This is a wonderful read! Love the descriptive quality and tones, as they detail not only the beauty and color, but the actions as well. Terrific read!
August 24th, 2023 12:21
Pop64 said:
This is a wonderful read! Love the descriptive quality and tones, as they detail not only the beauty and color, but the actions as well. Terrific read!
August 24th, 2023 12:21
Astral projection
2781 said:
The flesh profits nothing, the words I speak (not me), they are Spirit and they are life.
August 21st, 2023 08:19
2781 said:
The flesh profits nothing, the words I speak (not me), they are Spirit and they are life.
August 21st, 2023 08:19
Astral projection
Bobby O said:
That is a cool way to repair and complete a self image that needed to be tweaked just a bit.
Nice write good read
August 21st, 2023 02:05
Bobby O said:
That is a cool way to repair and complete a self image that needed to be tweaked just a bit.
Nice write good read
August 21st, 2023 02:05
Misguided loyalists
Doggerel Dave said:
And why? because economics, the lack of alternative safe accommodation does not allow escape. As for the rest - that\'s your territory, man.
August 19th, 2023 20:19
Doggerel Dave said:
And why? because economics, the lack of alternative safe accommodation does not allow escape. As for the rest - that\'s your territory, man.
August 19th, 2023 20:19
My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
Bobby O said:
Incisive commentary is tricky to present without judgement or personal bias. Lo, this you have achieved and I salute.
August 19th, 2023 00:24
Bobby O said:
Incisive commentary is tricky to present without judgement or personal bias. Lo, this you have achieved and I salute.
August 19th, 2023 00:24
My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
evenwheniLie said:
People have to agree on one god or no god at all…
August 18th, 2023 11:48
evenwheniLie said:
People have to agree on one god or no god at all…
August 18th, 2023 11:48
My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
2781 said:
Spirits becoming the nuisance.
August 18th, 2023 09:08
2781 said:
Spirits becoming the nuisance.
August 18th, 2023 09:08
My God, your god, their god; check the spelling
Doggerel Dave said:
Nah - just become an atheist and agnostic, then continue with your life while you have it.....
August 18th, 2023 05:25
Doggerel Dave said:
Nah - just become an atheist and agnostic, then continue with your life while you have it.....
August 18th, 2023 05:25
It’s just another superhero movie
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'m definitely letting Cremation Mary go first - clean up the joint before I get there. There\'s been moments in my life that, if I\'d known her, she would have been quite handy. Situations perhaps not quite as extreme as, but human pollutants come in various strengths.....
August 10th, 2023 19:25
Doggerel Dave said:
I\'m definitely letting Cremation Mary go first - clean up the joint before I get there. There\'s been moments in my life that, if I\'d known her, she would have been quite handy. Situations perhaps not quite as extreme as, but human pollutants come in various strengths.....
August 10th, 2023 19:25
It’s just another superhero movie
Parisab said:
I’m already a fan of Cremation Mary and I will order a ‘Gucci plus Covid mask’! Love the Coltrane reference! Entertaining read and thanks evenwheniLie!
August 10th, 2023 17:37
Parisab said:
I’m already a fan of Cremation Mary and I will order a ‘Gucci plus Covid mask’! Love the Coltrane reference! Entertaining read and thanks evenwheniLie!
August 10th, 2023 17:37
Escaping the devil’s system
vividvoid14 said:
i like the way u use your words. its amazing
August 9th, 2023 14:22
vividvoid14 said:
i like the way u use your words. its amazing
August 9th, 2023 14:22
These damn flies
Doggerel Dave said:
🤣I live in Australia. Is it you who keeps on sending them over to us?
Dispose of them over there - don\'t keep on exporting them.
August 7th, 2023 06:34
Doggerel Dave said:
🤣I live in Australia. Is it you who keeps on sending them over to us?
Dispose of them over there - don\'t keep on exporting them.
August 7th, 2023 06:34
How deep is the corruption
Bobby O said:
Underneath it all is the string pull of bravery
Nice write good read
August 6th, 2023 00:31
Bobby O said:
Underneath it all is the string pull of bravery
Nice write good read
August 6th, 2023 00:31
God machine
L. B. Mek said:
two thousand different gods
so having a deity, seems to have been
a graduation of societal evolution
once,
now,
we\'re on the other side of the cliff
where we reject the very notion
of a deity, in the west
while we\'re all happy to talk about our demons and satanic influences
...
no sci-fi or fantasy book
can ever write the absurdities
our species, live...
(a questing write
pondering the limits of our intangibles)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 4th, 2023 06:16
L. B. Mek said:
two thousand different gods
so having a deity, seems to have been
a graduation of societal evolution
once,
now,
we\'re on the other side of the cliff
where we reject the very notion
of a deity, in the west
while we\'re all happy to talk about our demons and satanic influences
...
no sci-fi or fantasy book
can ever write the absurdities
our species, live...
(a questing write
pondering the limits of our intangibles)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 4th, 2023 06:16
Tripping over the past
Beth K said:
Love, love LOVE your poem!! I felt like I was part of your family reading it. Awesome imagery, and what a gift you have for bringing words to life (or is it life to words?!). Thank you ❤️
July 29th, 2023 20:01
Beth K said:
Love, love LOVE your poem!! I felt like I was part of your family reading it. Awesome imagery, and what a gift you have for bringing words to life (or is it life to words?!). Thank you ❤️
July 29th, 2023 20:01
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