Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie
Glimpse into the eye of a needle
Doggerel Dave said:
Existential wasting away....
March 18th, 2026 06:13
Doggerel Dave said:
Existential wasting away....
March 18th, 2026 06:13
Glimpse into the eye of a needle
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of feeling overwhelmed with too many demands comes through in this poem of the everyday rush. Well said
March 18th, 2026 04:48
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of feeling overwhelmed with too many demands comes through in this poem of the everyday rush. Well said
March 18th, 2026 04:48
How old is creations
sorenbarrett said:
Creative and clever wording and the use of metaphor fill this poem punctuated with rhyme as well it has a rap beat that works well for the more modern style. Nicely done
March 17th, 2026 03:27
sorenbarrett said:
Creative and clever wording and the use of metaphor fill this poem punctuated with rhyme as well it has a rap beat that works well for the more modern style. Nicely done
March 17th, 2026 03:27
Effectively impacted
Doggerel Dave said:
I bounce around all over the place on this one.....There are times when I view the young as witless wonders controlled by that thingy they hold in the palm of their hand (and I\'m not talking young fellas and their habits here...lol) plus a political system down the gurgler, and think this is just a function of my old age, and then, again via that same old age and experience, I\'ve known times which were better...
March 16th, 2026 18:38
Doggerel Dave said:
I bounce around all over the place on this one.....There are times when I view the young as witless wonders controlled by that thingy they hold in the palm of their hand (and I\'m not talking young fellas and their habits here...lol) plus a political system down the gurgler, and think this is just a function of my old age, and then, again via that same old age and experience, I\'ve known times which were better...
March 16th, 2026 18:38
Effectively impacted
sorenbarrett said:
Here we have a wonderfully internal rhymed piece that reflects the views of each generation. I remember having to fight my parents for long hair, for loud music and what they considered sexually provocative images on album covers and books. I busted heads over religion and politics as well as drugs. As a species we haven\'t come far each generation finding ways to piss off the last. A good write.
March 16th, 2026 08:43
sorenbarrett said:
Here we have a wonderfully internal rhymed piece that reflects the views of each generation. I remember having to fight my parents for long hair, for loud music and what they considered sexually provocative images on album covers and books. I busted heads over religion and politics as well as drugs. As a species we haven\'t come far each generation finding ways to piss off the last. A good write.
March 16th, 2026 08:43
Universal silhouettes
sorenbarrett said:
The you, the brain, the soul or spirt is spoken of in this poem as an integral whole not to be scattered. Well done
March 14th, 2026 09:42
sorenbarrett said:
The you, the brain, the soul or spirt is spoken of in this poem as an integral whole not to be scattered. Well done
March 14th, 2026 09:42
A generational gap
sorenbarrett said:
A good poem in a rap form that talks of generational differences. These seem to have been evolving for several generation due to societal changes and changes in parenting and family structure. Well written
March 11th, 2026 03:19
sorenbarrett said:
A good poem in a rap form that talks of generational differences. These seem to have been evolving for several generation due to societal changes and changes in parenting and family structure. Well written
March 11th, 2026 03:19
My last supper
Doggerel Dave said:
Frosted Flakes weren\'t your last meal, were it? Reassure.
Don\'t know who this guy is, but his skin tone would be provocative touch for some......
March 9th, 2026 04:46
Doggerel Dave said:
Frosted Flakes weren\'t your last meal, were it? Reassure.
Don\'t know who this guy is, but his skin tone would be provocative touch for some......
March 9th, 2026 04:46
My last supper
sorenbarrett said:
Somewhat surreal and using near rhyme internally as well as ending this poem drives a wild story right into the bowl. Well done
March 9th, 2026 03:41
sorenbarrett said:
Somewhat surreal and using near rhyme internally as well as ending this poem drives a wild story right into the bowl. Well done
March 9th, 2026 03:41
Supervillain
sorenbarrett said:
Now is this a supervillain we know? Some how sounds familiar. Nicely done
February 24th, 2026 17:48
sorenbarrett said:
Now is this a supervillain we know? Some how sounds familiar. Nicely done
February 24th, 2026 17:48
Too small to see
Mutley Ravishes said:
What a great question. As for why civilizations are routinely ravaged, there`s a historical researcher/chronologist on a Youtube channel called \"Archaix\" that has gleaned some ideas!
February 23rd, 2026 18:47
Mutley Ravishes said:
What a great question. As for why civilizations are routinely ravaged, there`s a historical researcher/chronologist on a Youtube channel called \"Archaix\" that has gleaned some ideas!
February 23rd, 2026 18:47
Too small to see
sorenbarrett said:
Life spontaneous, a flash in the pan, an existential dilema. Well written.
February 22nd, 2026 10:32
sorenbarrett said:
Life spontaneous, a flash in the pan, an existential dilema. Well written.
February 22nd, 2026 10:32
From flesh to words and back again
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting commentary on religious and philosophical aspects. Nicely written
February 6th, 2026 20:42
sorenbarrett said:
A most interesting commentary on religious and philosophical aspects. Nicely written
February 6th, 2026 20:42
The inspector of specters
sorenbarrett said:
I wonder how much suggestion has to do with perception. A social media hysteria that spreads like COVID. Nicely written
January 31st, 2026 12:22
sorenbarrett said:
I wonder how much suggestion has to do with perception. A social media hysteria that spreads like COVID. Nicely written
January 31st, 2026 12:22
By my tomb’s view
Doggerel Dave said:
Missed this one. Normally read your stuff, even if at times it takes effort (thanks for that - the effort).
This is rich in its painting of....... the whole damn thing!
January 30th, 2026 01:45
Doggerel Dave said:
Missed this one. Normally read your stuff, even if at times it takes effort (thanks for that - the effort).
This is rich in its painting of....... the whole damn thing!
January 30th, 2026 01:45
By my tomb’s view
sorenbarrett said:
There is a definite beat to this write and it proceeds as a rap with rhyme. Nicely done
January 26th, 2026 04:08
sorenbarrett said:
There is a definite beat to this write and it proceeds as a rap with rhyme. Nicely done
January 26th, 2026 04:08
Quantum computing
sorenbarrett said:
I loved this one that has deep meaning of physics attached to a bit of humor and some sarcasm. Lovely
January 23rd, 2026 16:08
sorenbarrett said:
I loved this one that has deep meaning of physics attached to a bit of humor and some sarcasm. Lovely
January 23rd, 2026 16:08
Who or what did us in
Doggerel Dave said:
Tell it like it is, why don\'t you?
\'told so many lies regardless of mouthwash our breath is always tart\' - should really highlight the whole piece - so many truths there. Thanks.
January 18th, 2026 16:28
Doggerel Dave said:
Tell it like it is, why don\'t you?
\'told so many lies regardless of mouthwash our breath is always tart\' - should really highlight the whole piece - so many truths there. Thanks.
January 18th, 2026 16:28
Who or what did us in
sorenbarrett said:
A strong read of how we are our own worst enemy. With greed as our primary driving force we lie, backstab, murder and steal. A bad combination
January 18th, 2026 14:38
sorenbarrett said:
A strong read of how we are our own worst enemy. With greed as our primary driving force we lie, backstab, murder and steal. A bad combination
January 18th, 2026 14:38
At my master’s feet
sorenbarrett said:
Emulation through proximity and copying of methods and behaviors evidence of being a disciple. Well written
January 14th, 2026 04:58
sorenbarrett said:
Emulation through proximity and copying of methods and behaviors evidence of being a disciple. Well written
January 14th, 2026 04:58
A fruitful Commandment
sorenbarrett said:
Ah the variables involved in childrearing. Hard to determine what causes what and why in some and not in others. A fun read.
January 5th, 2026 15:13
sorenbarrett said:
Ah the variables involved in childrearing. Hard to determine what causes what and why in some and not in others. A fun read.
January 5th, 2026 15:13
Love is a Lily pad
Mutley Ravishes said:
Bill Burr has some great routines.
That was a fun and not fun read at the same time!
January 2nd, 2026 04:49
Mutley Ravishes said:
Bill Burr has some great routines.
That was a fun and not fun read at the same time!
January 2nd, 2026 04:49
Love is a Lily pad
sorenbarrett said:
The case of conflict still to be adjudicated and a bit of extracurricular violence on the side. A fun read
January 2nd, 2026 03:37
sorenbarrett said:
The case of conflict still to be adjudicated and a bit of extracurricular violence on the side. A fun read
January 2nd, 2026 03:37
Off track
sorenbarrett said:
This poem has a definite rap beat to it. it throbs with life and a sense of cynicism and sarcasm. Well done
December 30th, 2025 04:24
sorenbarrett said:
This poem has a definite rap beat to it. it throbs with life and a sense of cynicism and sarcasm. Well done
December 30th, 2025 04:24
The one I has eyes
sorenbarrett said:
A poem that to me is of meditation and reflection of one\'s inner self that is the whole universe and become clear with contemplation. Nicely worded it sings out to me.
December 11th, 2025 03:52
sorenbarrett said:
A poem that to me is of meditation and reflection of one\'s inner self that is the whole universe and become clear with contemplation. Nicely worded it sings out to me.
December 11th, 2025 03:52
Seductions of war
sorenbarrett said:
What a great satire in poetic form with such great metaphor. Lovely a fave
December 8th, 2025 12:41
sorenbarrett said:
What a great satire in poetic form with such great metaphor. Lovely a fave
December 8th, 2025 12:41
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