Comments received on poems by evenwheniLie
These damn flies
Doggerel Dave said:
🤣I live in Australia. Is it you who keeps on sending them over to us?
Dispose of them over there - don\'t keep on exporting them.
August 7th, 2023 06:34
Doggerel Dave said:
🤣I live in Australia. Is it you who keeps on sending them over to us?
Dispose of them over there - don\'t keep on exporting them.
August 7th, 2023 06:34
How deep is the corruption
Bobby O said:
Underneath it all is the string pull of bravery
Nice write good read
August 6th, 2023 00:31
Bobby O said:
Underneath it all is the string pull of bravery
Nice write good read
August 6th, 2023 00:31
God machine
L. B. Mek said:
two thousand different gods
so having a deity, seems to have been
a graduation of societal evolution
once,
now,
we\'re on the other side of the cliff
where we reject the very notion
of a deity, in the west
while we\'re all happy to talk about our demons and satanic influences
...
no sci-fi or fantasy book
can ever write the absurdities
our species, live...
(a questing write
pondering the limits of our intangibles)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 4th, 2023 06:16
L. B. Mek said:
two thousand different gods
so having a deity, seems to have been
a graduation of societal evolution
once,
now,
we\'re on the other side of the cliff
where we reject the very notion
of a deity, in the west
while we\'re all happy to talk about our demons and satanic influences
...
no sci-fi or fantasy book
can ever write the absurdities
our species, live...
(a questing write
pondering the limits of our intangibles)
thanks for sharing, dear Poet
August 4th, 2023 06:16
Tripping over the past
Beth K said:
Love, love LOVE your poem!! I felt like I was part of your family reading it. Awesome imagery, and what a gift you have for bringing words to life (or is it life to words?!). Thank you ❤️
July 29th, 2023 20:01
Beth K said:
Love, love LOVE your poem!! I felt like I was part of your family reading it. Awesome imagery, and what a gift you have for bringing words to life (or is it life to words?!). Thank you ❤️
July 29th, 2023 20:01
Admirable Admiral
L. B. Mek said:
\'but none that will jam though.\'
now that\'s flow!
so much fun as well, thank you!
July 24th, 2023 04:44
L. B. Mek said:
\'but none that will jam though.\'
now that\'s flow!
so much fun as well, thank you!
July 24th, 2023 04:44
The News!
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(personally, its gotten to the point
I truly believe
if something\'s in the news
best believe, someone
rich
somewhere, is profiting from it
the more vile, the subject matter
the more accurately this applies..)
just check out
the week of that 2nd titanic \'spontaneous\' implosion
then check all the news that was covered up
by people being distracted by that news
6 billion to ukraine
a sitting president\'s cocaine crimes quashed
and so much more, we will be lucky
to find out in our lifetime
now
for a real treat, trace back the original
titanic sinking
and the timely last minute absence of Rockefeller
then match it
to all the people who opposed his and Rothchild\'s fed reserve push
dying on board of that \'accidental\' collision..
news, utilised
to distract and confuse
(
https://kreately.in/why-do-people-think-that-the-federal-reserve-was-created-by-the-rothschilds-and-the-rockefellers/
)
July 21st, 2023 05:48
L. B. Mek said:
Brilliant!
(personally, its gotten to the point
I truly believe
if something\'s in the news
best believe, someone
rich
somewhere, is profiting from it
the more vile, the subject matter
the more accurately this applies..)
just check out
the week of that 2nd titanic \'spontaneous\' implosion
then check all the news that was covered up
by people being distracted by that news
6 billion to ukraine
a sitting president\'s cocaine crimes quashed
and so much more, we will be lucky
to find out in our lifetime
now
for a real treat, trace back the original
titanic sinking
and the timely last minute absence of Rockefeller
then match it
to all the people who opposed his and Rothchild\'s fed reserve push
dying on board of that \'accidental\' collision..
news, utilised
to distract and confuse
(
https://kreately.in/why-do-people-think-that-the-federal-reserve-was-created-by-the-rothschilds-and-the-rockefellers/
)
July 21st, 2023 05:48
The News!
2781 said:
There\'s an Aussie comedian named Steve Hughes who covers the topic...
My wife says, \"there they go again, spreading the good news!\"
July 21st, 2023 02:17
2781 said:
There\'s an Aussie comedian named Steve Hughes who covers the topic...
My wife says, \"there they go again, spreading the good news!\"
July 21st, 2023 02:17
What’s my niche?
Parisab said:
And now that’s a rap and grabbed my attention-on a different note I attempted at writing a lyrical rap “midlife rap” if you care to read it
July 6th, 2023 20:40
Parisab said:
And now that’s a rap and grabbed my attention-on a different note I attempted at writing a lyrical rap “midlife rap” if you care to read it
July 6th, 2023 20:40
Crazy bastard with a Gun
Parisab said:
It must have been hard practice to write this while imagining the psychopathy of a mass shooter-thanks for the write and I send my condolences to your beautiful city and the people of Philadelphia.
July 6th, 2023 00:47
Parisab said:
It must have been hard practice to write this while imagining the psychopathy of a mass shooter-thanks for the write and I send my condolences to your beautiful city and the people of Philadelphia.
July 6th, 2023 00:47
The features of Cain
evenwheniLie said:
It’s very hard not to point out the hypocrisy of mankind, it lies at the bottom of all our problems; self centered and delusional should be our name.
June 30th, 2023 09:36
evenwheniLie said:
It’s very hard not to point out the hypocrisy of mankind, it lies at the bottom of all our problems; self centered and delusional should be our name.
June 30th, 2023 09:36
The features of Cain
L. B. Mek said:
so true, dear Poet
brotherly love, as our conduit to demise
those by our sides, we kill for
those on the other \'side\', we deem
as beneath our need to respect
and love;
sister\'s, crying that we stop
all this masculine chest drumming
malevolence
while we men stubbornly devolve
to assault rifles
from machetes and throwing dirt
..
cyclicality of inherited, cultural
influences
our proximity to hate, blossoming
the flowers of our generation\'s, hate
we aspire for greatness
with each bullet we choose, to destroy
than fire and murder a brethren
that we know, just killed our
sister..
wait, who can accept such a fate
nah, bring out the nuclears
lets all be blinded and die
b\'cos
I don\'t have it in me to let my
families killer, simply slide
...
and on, with each death toll
total
we distance ourselves from
the humane, in our species
name...
June 30th, 2023 06:40
L. B. Mek said:
so true, dear Poet
brotherly love, as our conduit to demise
those by our sides, we kill for
those on the other \'side\', we deem
as beneath our need to respect
and love;
sister\'s, crying that we stop
all this masculine chest drumming
malevolence
while we men stubbornly devolve
to assault rifles
from machetes and throwing dirt
..
cyclicality of inherited, cultural
influences
our proximity to hate, blossoming
the flowers of our generation\'s, hate
we aspire for greatness
with each bullet we choose, to destroy
than fire and murder a brethren
that we know, just killed our
sister..
wait, who can accept such a fate
nah, bring out the nuclears
lets all be blinded and die
b\'cos
I don\'t have it in me to let my
families killer, simply slide
...
and on, with each death toll
total
we distance ourselves from
the humane, in our species
name...
June 30th, 2023 06:40
Afrikaner
Garth Rakumakoe said:
My maternal ancestry is that of the Nama people of Namibia, closely related to the tribes of the Hereros, Griequas, and the Khoi and the San. The oldest tribes people in Subsaharan Africa, so suffice to say, this piece hits home for me in more ways than I can express. Ode. Hommage. Peace. Love. Rain. Blessings. Well expressed sir.
June 22nd, 2023 04:40
Garth Rakumakoe said:
My maternal ancestry is that of the Nama people of Namibia, closely related to the tribes of the Hereros, Griequas, and the Khoi and the San. The oldest tribes people in Subsaharan Africa, so suffice to say, this piece hits home for me in more ways than I can express. Ode. Hommage. Peace. Love. Rain. Blessings. Well expressed sir.
June 22nd, 2023 04:40
Afrikaner
jarcher54 said:
Powerful and thoughtful... sometimes what others need to do is just listen. Planet Africa is a phrase I will remember... inspired words.
June 22nd, 2023 02:35
jarcher54 said:
Powerful and thoughtful... sometimes what others need to do is just listen. Planet Africa is a phrase I will remember... inspired words.
June 22nd, 2023 02:35
From then till now and back again
L. B. Mek said:
it never ends, does it?
we\'ve need a revolution, to make amends
for our last revolution, since
archaic days of might, made right
soon, we\'ll get it right
instead of slingshot stones
those Hiroshima devastations
will really, get the job done...
but even, then
there will be a chieftain, tripping on stage
or stirring hiss skull pot
and telling, TALL tales
of a past glory, distorted by dystopian
fog
.. all while, a poet
sends smoke signals to posterity
to record it all, dreaming
of a more poetic experience
of existence
June 5th, 2023 02:56
L. B. Mek said:
it never ends, does it?
we\'ve need a revolution, to make amends
for our last revolution, since
archaic days of might, made right
soon, we\'ll get it right
instead of slingshot stones
those Hiroshima devastations
will really, get the job done...
but even, then
there will be a chieftain, tripping on stage
or stirring hiss skull pot
and telling, TALL tales
of a past glory, distorted by dystopian
fog
.. all while, a poet
sends smoke signals to posterity
to record it all, dreaming
of a more poetic experience
of existence
June 5th, 2023 02:56
End Game
L. B. Mek said:
\'evil is explained not changed,
kept in range to be used for blame,
or to externalize shame,\'
deep!
a questing write, dear Poet
May 22nd, 2023 04:14
L. B. Mek said:
\'evil is explained not changed,
kept in range to be used for blame,
or to externalize shame,\'
deep!
a questing write, dear Poet
May 22nd, 2023 04:14
What’s beauty
2781 said:
What\'s that saying? \"Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.\"
Mouldering the beholdering maybe.
May 18th, 2023 23:40
2781 said:
What\'s that saying? \"Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.\"
Mouldering the beholdering maybe.
May 18th, 2023 23:40
Young Buck
L. B. Mek said:
(such an important write
thank you! dear Poet)
I hate the term
\'black on black crime\'
it\'s such bul\'sht
call it what it is
\'criminal on criminals, crime\'
with an obstinate support system
determined
to watch the demise of their youth
than admit defeat, ask for help
and save
their youth from their inherited, causality
of cyclic, ill--fate...!
May 15th, 2023 05:24
L. B. Mek said:
(such an important write
thank you! dear Poet)
I hate the term
\'black on black crime\'
it\'s such bul\'sht
call it what it is
\'criminal on criminals, crime\'
with an obstinate support system
determined
to watch the demise of their youth
than admit defeat, ask for help
and save
their youth from their inherited, causality
of cyclic, ill--fate...!
May 15th, 2023 05:24
Religious text
2781 said:
Beware of the leaven of the Pharisees which is hypocrisy.
May 6th, 2023 18:48
2781 said:
Beware of the leaven of the Pharisees which is hypocrisy.
May 6th, 2023 18:48
A generation Z fairytale
L. B. Mek said:
your wordplay and flow
as-ever
on point, a great poem
thank you! dear Poet
(betwixt fantastic and our dreams
exists a bridge to that never
we accumulate as our incandescent
ideal, as tomorrow\'s worth..
yet when that finale scene, flicks
to obsolete
we\'re left in our seats, waiting
for that next
avenue of inexhaustible, escape..)
May 5th, 2023 04:13
L. B. Mek said:
your wordplay and flow
as-ever
on point, a great poem
thank you! dear Poet
(betwixt fantastic and our dreams
exists a bridge to that never
we accumulate as our incandescent
ideal, as tomorrow\'s worth..
yet when that finale scene, flicks
to obsolete
we\'re left in our seats, waiting
for that next
avenue of inexhaustible, escape..)
May 5th, 2023 04:13
A generation Z fairytale
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks again; I thought I’d make this one fun.
May 4th, 2023 22:37
evenwheniLie said:
Thanks again; I thought I’d make this one fun.
May 4th, 2023 22:37
Foolish Child
Parisab said:
The bloodsucker reference “being too busy being stylish” is right on point-great imagery Like the picture above-thanks for sharing this fantastical truth
May 4th, 2023 22:13
Parisab said:
The bloodsucker reference “being too busy being stylish” is right on point-great imagery Like the picture above-thanks for sharing this fantastical truth
May 4th, 2023 22:13
A generation Z fairytale
Parisab said:
Nice flow to this poem-enjoyable and dynamic-thanks for introducing a historical figure of the cinema, Stepin Fetchit.
May 4th, 2023 22:06
Parisab said:
Nice flow to this poem-enjoyable and dynamic-thanks for introducing a historical figure of the cinema, Stepin Fetchit.
May 4th, 2023 22:06
Pick your poison
evenwheniLie said:
Do we have to mindfully choose to do right in every instance, the faithful would be terrified if they were to find out controlling one’s desires wasn’t good enough, but it is the lack of desire and being a being who needs no control that gets them through the gates. Is evil a mindful act of the sane or insane, surely god protects the sick, maybe Jesus’s words on the cross was fitting, “father forgive them, for they know not what they do.”
April 28th, 2023 05:31
evenwheniLie said:
Do we have to mindfully choose to do right in every instance, the faithful would be terrified if they were to find out controlling one’s desires wasn’t good enough, but it is the lack of desire and being a being who needs no control that gets them through the gates. Is evil a mindful act of the sane or insane, surely god protects the sick, maybe Jesus’s words on the cross was fitting, “father forgive them, for they know not what they do.”
April 28th, 2023 05:31
Pick your poison
L. B. Mek said:
perspective to concept
conceptualisations, to repurpose
our propaganda concepts...
deep down
deep
deep
down
we innately know, right from wrong
because
we know, pain from happiness
that\'s why
we need to realise, everything
we do to muddy
our outlooks and camouflage
that ease
of living life, simple and humble
is a ploy or scheme
as we never needed a deity
to accept, goodness and love
in our lives
to do unto others, as
we\'d like
others to do for us...
(all else, is that perverse
of humanity\'s cesspool, toxicity
where collectively, we choose
to make life
that much harder for all of us
knowingly
so we have that ready made excuse
for the failures we anticipate
due to those mistaken choices
we so readily, make...!)
April 28th, 2023 05:14
L. B. Mek said:
perspective to concept
conceptualisations, to repurpose
our propaganda concepts...
deep down
deep
deep
down
we innately know, right from wrong
because
we know, pain from happiness
that\'s why
we need to realise, everything
we do to muddy
our outlooks and camouflage
that ease
of living life, simple and humble
is a ploy or scheme
as we never needed a deity
to accept, goodness and love
in our lives
to do unto others, as
we\'d like
others to do for us...
(all else, is that perverse
of humanity\'s cesspool, toxicity
where collectively, we choose
to make life
that much harder for all of us
knowingly
so we have that ready made excuse
for the failures we anticipate
due to those mistaken choices
we so readily, make...!)
April 28th, 2023 05:14
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