Comments received on poems by David Wakeling
The Lady with the fire bird in her eyes.
Poetic Licence said:
This is a wonderful write and read, you just float along as you read, it flows so well, enjoyed the read
April 12th, 2025 04:49
Poetic Licence said:
This is a wonderful write and read, you just float along as you read, it flows so well, enjoyed the read
April 12th, 2025 04:49
The Lady with the fire bird in her eyes.
sorenbarrett said:
I love this unique rhyme scheme that goes so well with this poem. The meter too is most helpful and carries the reader along on a drifting journey. Its mystical theme also sets the mood. Very nicely done David
April 12th, 2025 04:30
sorenbarrett said:
I love this unique rhyme scheme that goes so well with this poem. The meter too is most helpful and carries the reader along on a drifting journey. Its mystical theme also sets the mood. Very nicely done David
April 12th, 2025 04:30
AWE.
arqios said:
That rope scene was quite effective there. A very gripping read 🙏🏻🕊
April 11th, 2025 05:26
arqios said:
That rope scene was quite effective there. A very gripping read 🙏🏻🕊
April 11th, 2025 05:26
AWE.
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write write with many meanings and wonderful lines, merits more than one read to absorb it all, enjoyed the read
April 11th, 2025 05:04
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write write with many meanings and wonderful lines, merits more than one read to absorb it all, enjoyed the read
April 11th, 2025 05:04
AWE.
sorenbarrett said:
A haunting poem David I loved several lines in this poem but my favorite was (Turn the log, it\'s warmth lies hidden,) such a wonderful metaphor. I think that the warmth of this poem lies hidden as well and I had to reread it to feel that wonderful fire. A fave
April 11th, 2025 04:15
sorenbarrett said:
A haunting poem David I loved several lines in this poem but my favorite was (Turn the log, it\'s warmth lies hidden,) such a wonderful metaphor. I think that the warmth of this poem lies hidden as well and I had to reread it to feel that wonderful fire. A fave
April 11th, 2025 04:15
AWE.
Mourgana of the Fey said:
From quietude everything can awaken. I like this poem that tells a strong but also frail tale. This piece gives food for thought. In stead of analysing it I will just let the words wash over me.
April 11th, 2025 03:58
Mourgana of the Fey said:
From quietude everything can awaken. I like this poem that tells a strong but also frail tale. This piece gives food for thought. In stead of analysing it I will just let the words wash over me.
April 11th, 2025 03:58
Faith
dimpy said:
i think this poem is about keeping the faith... nicely penned
April 10th, 2025 11:33
dimpy said:
i think this poem is about keeping the faith... nicely penned
April 10th, 2025 11:33
Faith
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of each of us in own beliefs interpret and believe in what we see and hear the way we choose to, which is not always the truth.enjoyed the read
April 10th, 2025 04:21
Poetic Licence said:
A sense of each of us in own beliefs interpret and believe in what we see and hear the way we choose to, which is not always the truth.enjoyed the read
April 10th, 2025 04:21
Faith
sorenbarrett said:
This poem reminded me of an episode of The Twilight Zone. There is a wonderful line in this write (Some lit bright candles so the blind could see,) In this poem I see a metaphor of loss of natural truth, knowledge or what ever you wish to label it. The candles symbolizing man made truth is given for the blind to see. In our religious beliefs we associate our own power or prayer with natural occurrences the rising of the sun. Although this may not be the original intent of the poem it comes through to me this way.
April 10th, 2025 04:11
sorenbarrett said:
This poem reminded me of an episode of The Twilight Zone. There is a wonderful line in this write (Some lit bright candles so the blind could see,) In this poem I see a metaphor of loss of natural truth, knowledge or what ever you wish to label it. The candles symbolizing man made truth is given for the blind to see. In our religious beliefs we associate our own power or prayer with natural occurrences the rising of the sun. Although this may not be the original intent of the poem it comes through to me this way.
April 10th, 2025 04:11
SECLUSION
Poetic Licence said:
A interesting write I feel on the slightly darker side of life, enjoyed the read
April 9th, 2025 02:35
Poetic Licence said:
A interesting write I feel on the slightly darker side of life, enjoyed the read
April 9th, 2025 02:35
August is accused of murdering a child.
Mourgana of the Fey said:
Hello,
While just clicking on one of your poems not knowing what I was up or in for strangely enough just today I made a similar poem. Not that the two poems are the same but they could connect. My poem is written from a very different personal perspective. YES I know this veiled figure or veiled lady. I have had encounters with this lady myself. Hence the topics I will not start to make any assumptions on this poem just letting the voices within the voids wash over like waves or winds. You have expressed much here in and between these lines. Thanks for sharing!
R
April 9th, 2025 01:28
Mourgana of the Fey said:
Hello,
While just clicking on one of your poems not knowing what I was up or in for strangely enough just today I made a similar poem. Not that the two poems are the same but they could connect. My poem is written from a very different personal perspective. YES I know this veiled figure or veiled lady. I have had encounters with this lady myself. Hence the topics I will not start to make any assumptions on this poem just letting the voices within the voids wash over like waves or winds. You have expressed much here in and between these lines. Thanks for sharing!
R
April 9th, 2025 01:28
SECLUSION
Mourgana of the Fey said:
Hello,
From start to finish I was glued to my screen. Each stanza giving new ways into interweaving natural images together with human images. All varieties of tone season life lines family lines etc. And then again how interwoven is all of this as per today. How much nature do we have left within us as humans. A world of tranquil weather suits the summary well. You have a gifted pen! Much enjoyed the read. Greetings and blessings
R
April 9th, 2025 01:23
Mourgana of the Fey said:
Hello,
From start to finish I was glued to my screen. Each stanza giving new ways into interweaving natural images together with human images. All varieties of tone season life lines family lines etc. And then again how interwoven is all of this as per today. How much nature do we have left within us as humans. A world of tranquil weather suits the summary well. You have a gifted pen! Much enjoyed the read. Greetings and blessings
R
April 9th, 2025 01:23
SECLUSION
arqios said:
For a period in life I’ve lived through those summers. Sometimes glad it’s now outgrown 🙏🏻🕊
April 8th, 2025 20:59
arqios said:
For a period in life I’ve lived through those summers. Sometimes glad it’s now outgrown 🙏🏻🕊
April 8th, 2025 20:59
SECLUSION
sorenbarrett said:
One large metaphor broken into several component pieces this poem is quite deep in its meaning that upon first reading is obscure and rather cryptic. Sad and hopeless in its initial tone it speaks of alienation. This poem seems to end in darkness. Very well written
April 8th, 2025 19:35
sorenbarrett said:
One large metaphor broken into several component pieces this poem is quite deep in its meaning that upon first reading is obscure and rather cryptic. Sad and hopeless in its initial tone it speaks of alienation. This poem seems to end in darkness. Very well written
April 8th, 2025 19:35
August is accused of murdering a child.
Tristan Robert Lange said:
\"Is this just an illusion of a dance? / Just two shadows flickering together.\" Powerful poem with quite a grabbing title. Brilliant, my friend. Well done! 🌹👏
March 28th, 2025 07:31
Tristan Robert Lange said:
\"Is this just an illusion of a dance? / Just two shadows flickering together.\" Powerful poem with quite a grabbing title. Brilliant, my friend. Well done! 🌹👏
March 28th, 2025 07:31
August is accused of murdering a child.
Poetic Licence said:
I have known people who until their dying breath will depend their kin no matter what heinous crime they have done, it is not something I understand and it is loyal,but I am not sure it is love and to the benifit of the person commiting the crime or the denier, enjoyable and very interesting read
March 28th, 2025 05:34
Poetic Licence said:
I have known people who until their dying breath will depend their kin no matter what heinous crime they have done, it is not something I understand and it is loyal,but I am not sure it is love and to the benifit of the person commiting the crime or the denier, enjoyable and very interesting read
March 28th, 2025 05:34
August is accused of murdering a child.
sorenbarrett said:
How much does love override? In fact, what is love? Is it faith, loyalty, passion, kindness? All questions that seem up for grab in this poem. Lovely
March 28th, 2025 04:26
sorenbarrett said:
How much does love override? In fact, what is love? Is it faith, loyalty, passion, kindness? All questions that seem up for grab in this poem. Lovely
March 28th, 2025 04:26
August is accused of murdering a child.
arqios said:
A book of human feeling and journeys is quite on its way to completion🙏🏻🕊️
March 28th, 2025 02:28
arqios said:
A book of human feeling and journeys is quite on its way to completion🙏🏻🕊️
March 28th, 2025 02:28
The Days of Milk and Marmalade.
Goldfinch60 said:
Those days will be forever with you David and you can live them within your mind.
Andy
March 28th, 2025 02:18
Goldfinch60 said:
Those days will be forever with you David and you can live them within your mind.
Andy
March 28th, 2025 02:18
The Days of Milk and Marmalade.
Poetic Licence said:
A lovely of not appreciating things at the time, with a great last line
March 27th, 2025 04:54
Poetic Licence said:
A lovely of not appreciating things at the time, with a great last line
March 27th, 2025 04:54
The Days of Milk and Marmalade.
sorenbarrett said:
A lovely write David such a nice set of images that most can relate to and their clear representation of conflict and lack of appreciation at the time. The last line puts the stake through the heart, shamefully reminding us all that we should appreciate each day as it comes. Brilliant!
March 27th, 2025 04:17
sorenbarrett said:
A lovely write David such a nice set of images that most can relate to and their clear representation of conflict and lack of appreciation at the time. The last line puts the stake through the heart, shamefully reminding us all that we should appreciate each day as it comes. Brilliant!
March 27th, 2025 04:17
The Days of Milk and Marmalade.
arqios said:
Brings me back to those days of mine 🙏🏻🕊️
March 27th, 2025 03:14
arqios said:
Brings me back to those days of mine 🙏🏻🕊️
March 27th, 2025 03:14
Rachel tries to burn the past.
Poetic Licence said:
The thing most people want to hear and for some one of the hardest things to say, a wonderful write
March 26th, 2025 07:05
Poetic Licence said:
The thing most people want to hear and for some one of the hardest things to say, a wonderful write
March 26th, 2025 07:05
Rachel tries to burn the past.
Friendship said:
Well written, your poem aims to convey the complexity of love and loss, highlighting the unexpressed emotions that can linger even after a partner\'s passing. It captures the struggle of reconciling memories with feelings of anger and regret, ultimately leading to a deeper understanding of love.
March 26th, 2025 06:48
Friendship said:
Well written, your poem aims to convey the complexity of love and loss, highlighting the unexpressed emotions that can linger even after a partner\'s passing. It captures the struggle of reconciling memories with feelings of anger and regret, ultimately leading to a deeper understanding of love.
March 26th, 2025 06:48
Rachel tries to burn the past.
sorenbarrett said:
This is a wonderful poem that can be taken in more than one way. I love that. Too often we rely on words when actions should speak louder, on the other hand the act of telling someone what we feel is most important and the moment can escape as a missed opportunity. Should she have opened her eyes and seen love without words or should he have opened his mouth and spoken what his heart told him or should she have placed so much value on words all questions evoked by the poem. Very nicely said David
March 26th, 2025 04:03
sorenbarrett said:
This is a wonderful poem that can be taken in more than one way. I love that. Too often we rely on words when actions should speak louder, on the other hand the act of telling someone what we feel is most important and the moment can escape as a missed opportunity. Should she have opened her eyes and seen love without words or should he have opened his mouth and spoken what his heart told him or should she have placed so much value on words all questions evoked by the poem. Very nicely said David
March 26th, 2025 04:03
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