Comments received on poems by David Wakeling
The talking song.
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a powerful poem David, communication is so important in marriage, I amd so lucky in my relationship, we communicate all the time.
Andy
April 22nd, 2025 01:18
Goldfinch60 said:
Such a powerful poem David, communication is so important in marriage, I amd so lucky in my relationship, we communicate all the time.
Andy
April 22nd, 2025 01:18
The Long Walk to the Bath.
arqios said:
Toxic tonics and mind altering elixirs, they do their thing quite tremendously 🕊🙏🏻
April 22nd, 2025 01:02
arqios said:
Toxic tonics and mind altering elixirs, they do their thing quite tremendously 🕊🙏🏻
April 22nd, 2025 01:02
The talking song.
Tony Grannell said:
What is not talked about is what gives this excellent poem its power. I found the last stanza, unsettling in its mastery: \'Oh dear she\'s gone\', and probably has been for a long time. As disturbing as it is in its excellence. Well done indeed.
Kind regards,
Tony.
April 21st, 2025 05:31
Tony Grannell said:
What is not talked about is what gives this excellent poem its power. I found the last stanza, unsettling in its mastery: \'Oh dear she\'s gone\', and probably has been for a long time. As disturbing as it is in its excellence. Well done indeed.
Kind regards,
Tony.
April 21st, 2025 05:31
The talking song.
sorenbarrett said:
A poignant and strong message. Well written it lays its message one step at a time and before the reader realizes it they are at the top. A message that everyone can identify with in one way or another. Some fail to communicate out of fear, others deceit, some for anger, others ignorance or simply not caring. It doesn\'t matter it always leads to divisions and deterioration. A powerful message. Well done in poetic story.
April 21st, 2025 04:20
sorenbarrett said:
A poignant and strong message. Well written it lays its message one step at a time and before the reader realizes it they are at the top. A message that everyone can identify with in one way or another. Some fail to communicate out of fear, others deceit, some for anger, others ignorance or simply not caring. It doesn\'t matter it always leads to divisions and deterioration. A powerful message. Well done in poetic story.
April 21st, 2025 04:20
The talking song.
arqios said:
Not the easiest and also not the hardest but always essential. What a quandary 🙏🏻🕊️
April 21st, 2025 02:49
arqios said:
Not the easiest and also not the hardest but always essential. What a quandary 🙏🏻🕊️
April 21st, 2025 02:49
Little Esther aged 3 brushes Nanna’s hair.
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good emotive words David.
Andy
April 21st, 2025 01:51
Goldfinch60 said:
Very good emotive words David.
Andy
April 21st, 2025 01:51
Little Esther aged 3 brushes Nanna’s hair.
sorenbarrett said:
David you have a true talent for writing these shorts they not only are well worded and packed with just the right amount of imagery but are short enough to keep interest, long enough to send a message and with great metaphor that sends the message softly enough to be accepted. I have enjoyed the last several that you have done and this is another. Each time you have a knack for taking on the voice of the character speaking and making it convincing. That is a gift.
April 20th, 2025 04:36
sorenbarrett said:
David you have a true talent for writing these shorts they not only are well worded and packed with just the right amount of imagery but are short enough to keep interest, long enough to send a message and with great metaphor that sends the message softly enough to be accepted. I have enjoyed the last several that you have done and this is another. Each time you have a knack for taking on the voice of the character speaking and making it convincing. That is a gift.
April 20th, 2025 04:36
Little Esther aged 3 brushes Nanna’s hair.
arqios said:
A parting and a new beginning, sad and inspiring in the same breathe🙏🏻🕊️
April 20th, 2025 03:33
arqios said:
A parting and a new beginning, sad and inspiring in the same breathe🙏🏻🕊️
April 20th, 2025 03:33
Little Esther aged 3 brushes Nanna’s hair.
nephilim56 said:
great write, thoroughly enjoyed
April 20th, 2025 03:01
nephilim56 said:
great write, thoroughly enjoyed
April 20th, 2025 03:01
Oh Silent Spirit.
teardrop said:
I often wonder that myself. Beautiful and truthful write.
April 19th, 2025 06:34
teardrop said:
I often wonder that myself. Beautiful and truthful write.
April 19th, 2025 06:34
Miss Emma
sorenbarrett said:
I loved this short. Full of the sensual, bordering on erotic and even sexual it evokes feelings of passion. Much of its intrigue is in the hidden and the unsaid. it is what one doesn\'t see but wishes to the fires the coals and here there is much slightly revealed but unseen. Very nicely written a fave
April 19th, 2025 03:51
sorenbarrett said:
I loved this short. Full of the sensual, bordering on erotic and even sexual it evokes feelings of passion. Much of its intrigue is in the hidden and the unsaid. it is what one doesn\'t see but wishes to the fires the coals and here there is much slightly revealed but unseen. Very nicely written a fave
April 19th, 2025 03:51
Oh Silent Spirit.
Goldfinch60 said:
Indeed if you are there silent spirit inform those whom can help to help those who are in trouble.
Andy
April 19th, 2025 01:43
Goldfinch60 said:
Indeed if you are there silent spirit inform those whom can help to help those who are in trouble.
Andy
April 19th, 2025 01:43
Oh Silent Spirit.
Poetic Licence said:
A tender write asking where is the care and love in this unfair, unequal, brutal world we currently live in, enjoyed the read
April 18th, 2025 05:02
Poetic Licence said:
A tender write asking where is the care and love in this unfair, unequal, brutal world we currently live in, enjoyed the read
April 18th, 2025 05:02
Oh Silent Spirit.
sorenbarrett said:
An poetic prayer to what is out there. From a human understanding that does not understand the purpose of a universe that created it. How often as a child did I wish for what was not good for me and cry at my wish not being granted. A lovely poem with a caring heart asking for understanding in what appears to be an unfair world. Most lovely David
April 18th, 2025 03:41
sorenbarrett said:
An poetic prayer to what is out there. From a human understanding that does not understand the purpose of a universe that created it. How often as a child did I wish for what was not good for me and cry at my wish not being granted. A lovely poem with a caring heart asking for understanding in what appears to be an unfair world. Most lovely David
April 18th, 2025 03:41
Oh Silent Spirit.
arqios said:
An earnest plea that groans together with nature itself🕊🙏🏻
April 18th, 2025 03:34
arqios said:
An earnest plea that groans together with nature itself🕊🙏🏻
April 18th, 2025 03:34
The Heart.
Goldfinch60 said:
The heart can be our saviour on all occasions David.
Andy
April 18th, 2025 01:53
Goldfinch60 said:
The heart can be our saviour on all occasions David.
Andy
April 18th, 2025 01:53
The Heart.
Poetic Licence said:
A strong sense of real loneliness and the effects it has on one, and the longing of love, nicely written and expressed
April 17th, 2025 06:15
Poetic Licence said:
A strong sense of real loneliness and the effects it has on one, and the longing of love, nicely written and expressed
April 17th, 2025 06:15
The Heart.
sorenbarrett said:
What a poem of loneliness and need for another. Some great lines. I particularly loved ( When alone, even the warm taste of divine food goes cold,
There is no song or glow without the other hand to hold.) The strong need for affiliation, unity and love come through. Very nice David
April 17th, 2025 04:23
sorenbarrett said:
What a poem of loneliness and need for another. Some great lines. I particularly loved ( When alone, even the warm taste of divine food goes cold,
There is no song or glow without the other hand to hold.) The strong need for affiliation, unity and love come through. Very nice David
April 17th, 2025 04:23
The Gazelle and the Leopard. Mrs Forlorn talks with her Psychiatrist.
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write that speaks of many things, wonderfully combined with images and meanings, needs to read more than once, each time you see something different, loved the read
April 16th, 2025 04:56
Poetic Licence said:
A wonderful write that speaks of many things, wonderfully combined with images and meanings, needs to read more than once, each time you see something different, loved the read
April 16th, 2025 04:56
The Gazelle and the Leopard. Mrs Forlorn talks with her Psychiatrist.
sorenbarrett said:
A deep metaphoric meaning stares one in the face with this poem. There may be a typo at the beginning of the third stanza stork for stalk or maybe it has deeper meaning than my small mind can catch on the first two reads. This poem speaks of many relationships and how fidelity is often governed by needs for friendship not provided and ability to take care of family needs, either through sustenance or sexual. This is a poem with many metaphoric symbols from the Gazelle\'s horns to the age of the Gazelle as prey. Fidelity on either side seems most casual. Well written and to the point
April 16th, 2025 04:52
sorenbarrett said:
A deep metaphoric meaning stares one in the face with this poem. There may be a typo at the beginning of the third stanza stork for stalk or maybe it has deeper meaning than my small mind can catch on the first two reads. This poem speaks of many relationships and how fidelity is often governed by needs for friendship not provided and ability to take care of family needs, either through sustenance or sexual. This is a poem with many metaphoric symbols from the Gazelle\'s horns to the age of the Gazelle as prey. Fidelity on either side seems most casual. Well written and to the point
April 16th, 2025 04:52
Dead men don’t wear dresses.
Poetic Licence said:
Even though it was not exceptable to her she fulfilled his dying wish out of love, which says an awful lot about her being able to put aside her own thoughts and feelings to appease others, enjoyed the read
April 15th, 2025 04:48
Poetic Licence said:
Even though it was not exceptable to her she fulfilled his dying wish out of love, which says an awful lot about her being able to put aside her own thoughts and feelings to appease others, enjoyed the read
April 15th, 2025 04:48
Dead men don’t wear dresses.
sorenbarrett said:
Where do we draw the line? The line of what is acceptable to us, what we accept in others? Is this line a personal thing or is it based on what we think others will think? How much of this becomes our prejudice and how much is now our value system? You provoke many questions in this poem. Acceptance can be a difficult thing. Very thought provoking
April 15th, 2025 03:57
sorenbarrett said:
Where do we draw the line? The line of what is acceptable to us, what we accept in others? Is this line a personal thing or is it based on what we think others will think? How much of this becomes our prejudice and how much is now our value system? You provoke many questions in this poem. Acceptance can be a difficult thing. Very thought provoking
April 15th, 2025 03:57
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