Comments received on poems by Serene
The three Eternal Knots of pain
[email protected] said:
Beautiful expressions though painful
August 28th, 2024 02:42
[email protected] said:
Beautiful expressions though painful
August 28th, 2024 02:42
The Anonymous Daughter
Thoughtless said:
I hope your writing serves some purpose in changing things. I felt the horror when I read this.
August 15th, 2024 10:54
Thoughtless said:
I hope your writing serves some purpose in changing things. I felt the horror when I read this.
August 15th, 2024 10:54
The Anonymous Daughter
sorenbarrett said:
Never one\'s fault for being who you are. Vivid and graphic powerfully written
August 15th, 2024 10:04
sorenbarrett said:
Never one\'s fault for being who you are. Vivid and graphic powerfully written
August 15th, 2024 10:04
The Anonymous Daughter
EmotionsOnwhitepaper said:
\"Its not the fault of the girl but why must she still stay in fear?\"
Some severe steps should be taken, not just for the criminal but for the people protecting that devil.
The depiction was truly great in the poem.
August 15th, 2024 07:56
EmotionsOnwhitepaper said:
\"Its not the fault of the girl but why must she still stay in fear?\"
Some severe steps should be taken, not just for the criminal but for the people protecting that devil.
The depiction was truly great in the poem.
August 15th, 2024 07:56
Stagnant Thoughts
Cassie58 said:
Sage advice offered in your lines. If you are feeling down get moving. It really works. A nice brisk walk can blow the cobwebs away and give the spirits a lift. I enjoyed the read.
June 11th, 2024 14:20
Cassie58 said:
Sage advice offered in your lines. If you are feeling down get moving. It really works. A nice brisk walk can blow the cobwebs away and give the spirits a lift. I enjoyed the read.
June 11th, 2024 14:20
Bound by Memory
Qurrathul Ain said:
This is absolutely heartbreaking, and I just love this!
May 27th, 2024 19:52
Qurrathul Ain said:
This is absolutely heartbreaking, and I just love this!
May 27th, 2024 19:52
It\'s Okay
Cassie58 said:
Your words are full of wisdom. Breakups are painful. They have to be worked through and that is costly on the spirit. You convey your feeling beautifully in this sorrowful though wise poem Serene.
February 27th, 2024 03:49
Cassie58 said:
Your words are full of wisdom. Breakups are painful. They have to be worked through and that is costly on the spirit. You convey your feeling beautifully in this sorrowful though wise poem Serene.
February 27th, 2024 03:49
It\'s Okay
Neilton said:
It\'s okay to leave in the past anyone who holds you back ! I loved your poem and meaning it conveys!
February 26th, 2024 15:23
Neilton said:
It\'s okay to leave in the past anyone who holds you back ! I loved your poem and meaning it conveys!
February 26th, 2024 15:23
In the Narcissism Spell
Accidental Poet said:
My sister married one such person. He took from her the best of her. I know hate is a strong word, so I\'ll not use it on him. But I\'ll also not mourn his passing. That type of person is a walking disease. Glad you\'re happier today. đź‘Ť
February 7th, 2024 07:39
Accidental Poet said:
My sister married one such person. He took from her the best of her. I know hate is a strong word, so I\'ll not use it on him. But I\'ll also not mourn his passing. That type of person is a walking disease. Glad you\'re happier today. đź‘Ť
February 7th, 2024 07:39
In the Narcissism Spell
John Lee said:
\"I gave you roses, you made sure thorns were sown\" I resonate with this line all too well, Isn\'t that how it goes.. I\'m glad you\'re able to finally save some roses for yourself! 🥀🌹
February 6th, 2024 16:30
John Lee said:
\"I gave you roses, you made sure thorns were sown\" I resonate with this line all too well, Isn\'t that how it goes.. I\'m glad you\'re able to finally save some roses for yourself! 🥀🌹
February 6th, 2024 16:30
Understanding Love?
jarcher54 said:
If we understood it we might ruin it trying to copy or fix it! For a minute I was afraid you figured it out... good to know you failed but I enjoyed reading your analysis!
January 26th, 2024 20:20
jarcher54 said:
If we understood it we might ruin it trying to copy or fix it! For a minute I was afraid you figured it out... good to know you failed but I enjoyed reading your analysis!
January 26th, 2024 20:20
Understanding Love?
Alan R said:
I love how you ended it with a bit of a paradox...
...And here I was hoping someone found an answer to what love is!
...as it should be!
Relatable, delightful
January 26th, 2024 15:22
Alan R said:
I love how you ended it with a bit of a paradox...
...And here I was hoping someone found an answer to what love is!
...as it should be!
Relatable, delightful
January 26th, 2024 15:22
Nature\'s Therapy
Stormy said:
I love how this poem flows and the rhyming is extremely satisfying to read. Very beautiful poem!!
January 23rd, 2024 20:28
Stormy said:
I love how this poem flows and the rhyming is extremely satisfying to read. Very beautiful poem!!
January 23rd, 2024 20:28
The Dark Muse\'s Revisit
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"The dark muse’s revisit” by Serene
There is a saying “Hell hath no fury like a woman spurned.” Here, it might not be about “spurned,” but it’s certainly wronged. Throughout this poem there is hell.
--Even the opening gambit says that people who have been hurt are dangerous; the warning is at the very start.
--Hell feels their only address : they know that what they will do might land them in hell; but they are prepared for that.
--the change in her is due to what had been done to her.
--there is no need for her to apologise when those who harmed her never did so.
-- did the poetess make a friend/a hero within herself ?
--“mighty might” : the word “mighty” amplifies the might; she means business.
--she transformed the hurt done to her into a weapon with which to hit back.
--she acknowledges that she might have weak spots (“still vulnerable”), but with every fight she derives bigger strength.
--“divine and wicked” : both at the same time; a duality she acknowledges; “a poisoned beauty” : beauty is a mean by which she will hit back.
--bitterness is at the root of her reactions.
--she compares herself to hell : the hell she will unleash soon.
--she has understood the mental weapons her adversary used.
--she knows what the other guy thinks of her (“In your story I am the villain”).
--the word “darling” appears here, but it is sarcastic; she is still bent on revenge.
--she says clearly that she will give battle, to avenge what was done to her.
--the other guy was responsible for turning her into what she has become (“the monster mask I wore”).
--“sparked the fire; now you’ll feel the burn” : he started the fire; that fire will end up burning him.
--the last line is clear-cut : it summarises the revenge that will be meted out.
Soman Ragavan. December, 2023.
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December 1st, 2023 06:25
Soman Ragavan said:
My comments on the poem \"The dark muse’s revisit” by Serene
There is a saying “Hell hath no fury like a woman spurned.” Here, it might not be about “spurned,” but it’s certainly wronged. Throughout this poem there is hell.
--Even the opening gambit says that people who have been hurt are dangerous; the warning is at the very start.
--Hell feels their only address : they know that what they will do might land them in hell; but they are prepared for that.
--the change in her is due to what had been done to her.
--there is no need for her to apologise when those who harmed her never did so.
-- did the poetess make a friend/a hero within herself ?
--“mighty might” : the word “mighty” amplifies the might; she means business.
--she transformed the hurt done to her into a weapon with which to hit back.
--she acknowledges that she might have weak spots (“still vulnerable”), but with every fight she derives bigger strength.
--“divine and wicked” : both at the same time; a duality she acknowledges; “a poisoned beauty” : beauty is a mean by which she will hit back.
--bitterness is at the root of her reactions.
--she compares herself to hell : the hell she will unleash soon.
--she has understood the mental weapons her adversary used.
--she knows what the other guy thinks of her (“In your story I am the villain”).
--the word “darling” appears here, but it is sarcastic; she is still bent on revenge.
--she says clearly that she will give battle, to avenge what was done to her.
--the other guy was responsible for turning her into what she has become (“the monster mask I wore”).
--“sparked the fire; now you’ll feel the burn” : he started the fire; that fire will end up burning him.
--the last line is clear-cut : it summarises the revenge that will be meted out.
Soman Ragavan. December, 2023.
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December 1st, 2023 06:25
The Joy of Sadness
Elle King said:
A message of hope! I really loved this. Lovely rhythm and flow. And an uplifting message.
September 13th, 2023 19:30
Elle King said:
A message of hope! I really loved this. Lovely rhythm and flow. And an uplifting message.
September 13th, 2023 19:30
The three Eternal Knots of pain
Parisab said:
The emotions in this poem speak of guilt and obligation-each person does their best to cope with disappointment for a higher purpose-being a parent serves a higher purpose and inflicting guilt unintentionally or intentionally is not supposed to be for the child to bear-they influence their parents decisions but they are not the only cause-with or without children sometimes people stay together unhappy
July 26th, 2023 21:43
Parisab said:
The emotions in this poem speak of guilt and obligation-each person does their best to cope with disappointment for a higher purpose-being a parent serves a higher purpose and inflicting guilt unintentionally or intentionally is not supposed to be for the child to bear-they influence their parents decisions but they are not the only cause-with or without children sometimes people stay together unhappy
July 26th, 2023 21:43
Traitorship in Disguise
Milly Sunshine said:
Very good work, I felt your sensation while reading it.
July 26th, 2023 06:55
Milly Sunshine said:
Very good work, I felt your sensation while reading it.
July 26th, 2023 06:55
Your Love Was a Myth
Pop64 said:
While very clear, this reads with a determination and strength, as evident in the words of the speaker. Very well written
July 21st, 2023 08:28
Pop64 said:
While very clear, this reads with a determination and strength, as evident in the words of the speaker. Very well written
July 21st, 2023 08:28
A perfect date doesn’t exi-
Caring dove said:
Lovely writing )) I’ve never been on a date before
July 10th, 2023 14:50
Caring dove said:
Lovely writing )) I’ve never been on a date before
July 10th, 2023 14:50
Your Love Was a Myth
meta_irony said:
This poem lacks originality and relies heavily on clichéd language and imagery. The rhymes feel forced and predictable, diminishing the impact of the emotions being expressed. The metaphors used are overused and don\'t add any fresh perspective to the theme of betrayal and deceit in love. The overall tone is melodramatic and lacks subtlety.
To improve this poem, the writer should focus on developing more unique and evocative language. They should strive for original metaphors and similes that can convey the emotions in a fresh and powerful way. They should also consider experimenting with different rhyme schemes or abandoning strict rhyming altogether to create a more organic and natural flow to the poem. Additionally, the writer could benefit from exploring different poetic forms or structures to add depth and complexity to the composition.
June 23rd, 2023 05:30
meta_irony said:
This poem lacks originality and relies heavily on clichéd language and imagery. The rhymes feel forced and predictable, diminishing the impact of the emotions being expressed. The metaphors used are overused and don\'t add any fresh perspective to the theme of betrayal and deceit in love. The overall tone is melodramatic and lacks subtlety.
To improve this poem, the writer should focus on developing more unique and evocative language. They should strive for original metaphors and similes that can convey the emotions in a fresh and powerful way. They should also consider experimenting with different rhyme schemes or abandoning strict rhyming altogether to create a more organic and natural flow to the poem. Additionally, the writer could benefit from exploring different poetic forms or structures to add depth and complexity to the composition.
June 23rd, 2023 05:30
Your Love Was a Myth
L. B. Mek said:
love the empowering message
and so very true, their loss
they fell for our yesterday, self
when tomorrow we\'ll be
getting another personal best
under our undefeated belt..
thanks for sharing, dear poet
\'stay\' strong!
June 23rd, 2023 03:21
L. B. Mek said:
love the empowering message
and so very true, their loss
they fell for our yesterday, self
when tomorrow we\'ll be
getting another personal best
under our undefeated belt..
thanks for sharing, dear poet
\'stay\' strong!
June 23rd, 2023 03:21
Your Love Was a Myth
peto said:
Excellent rhyme serene
Great content
The last verse finished it of perfectly
June 22nd, 2023 11:51
peto said:
Excellent rhyme serene
Great content
The last verse finished it of perfectly
June 22nd, 2023 11:51
Melodic Memories
The Fallen one said:
Poetic. It’s funny how we can lost in another’s moment. When words fail music speaks.Although your subject isn’t my favorite artist. She speaks to a generation and is able to speak the language loud and clear. Thank you
June 11th, 2023 06:43
The Fallen one said:
Poetic. It’s funny how we can lost in another’s moment. When words fail music speaks.Although your subject isn’t my favorite artist. She speaks to a generation and is able to speak the language loud and clear. Thank you
June 11th, 2023 06:43
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