Comments received on poems by gray0328
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sorenbarrett said:
Love returned may be grand but anger returned is another thing. Well written Gray
April 1st, 2026 08:40
sorenbarrett said:
Love returned may be grand but anger returned is another thing. Well written Gray
April 1st, 2026 08:40
The Quiet Tangle Inside Us
Vipassana said:
This might be the essence of the poem
In all these ways, we disappear—
a slow unraveling beneath love’s name.
The poem seems to ask--is it worth it, what one loses as one serves others? Is it out of love that one serves or just \"loves\' name\"? The poem seems to evoke a gentle bitterness--if that makes sense.
April 1st, 2026 00:38
Vipassana said:
This might be the essence of the poem
In all these ways, we disappear—
a slow unraveling beneath love’s name.
The poem seems to ask--is it worth it, what one loses as one serves others? Is it out of love that one serves or just \"loves\' name\"? The poem seems to evoke a gentle bitterness--if that makes sense.
April 1st, 2026 00:38
The Quiet Tangle Inside Us
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful poem Gray on as I see it political correctness, timidness to be who we are, fear of offence and the desire to be liked at any cost. We call it love or rather many call it love I call it dishonesty. What a wonderful write a fave
March 31st, 2026 09:38
sorenbarrett said:
A wonderful poem Gray on as I see it political correctness, timidness to be who we are, fear of offence and the desire to be liked at any cost. We call it love or rather many call it love I call it dishonesty. What a wonderful write a fave
March 31st, 2026 09:38
Piggy\'s Quiet Revelation
Thomas W Case said:
This is deliciously dark—grim humor stitched with quiet menace.
Piggy’s rise reads like a fable soaked in blood, every line a slow twist tightening around the farmer’s fate.
March 31st, 2026 07:29
Thomas W Case said:
This is deliciously dark—grim humor stitched with quiet menace.
Piggy’s rise reads like a fable soaked in blood, every line a slow twist tightening around the farmer’s fate.
March 31st, 2026 07:29
Piggy\'s Quiet Revelation
Doggerel Dave said:
Saved his own bacon. As a vegetarian, I enjoyed this.
March 30th, 2026 07:16
Doggerel Dave said:
Saved his own bacon. As a vegetarian, I enjoyed this.
March 30th, 2026 07:16
Piggy\'s Quiet Revelation
sorenbarrett said:
A great story as fable possibly. Pigs intelligent animals a food source this poem has elements of George Orwell\'s Animal Farm. A powerful write Gray
March 30th, 2026 04:01
sorenbarrett said:
A great story as fable possibly. Pigs intelligent animals a food source this poem has elements of George Orwell\'s Animal Farm. A powerful write Gray
March 30th, 2026 04:01
Trembling Hands
sorenbarrett said:
The travails of a long journey portrayed in this poem. Most lovely Gray
March 29th, 2026 12:07
sorenbarrett said:
The travails of a long journey portrayed in this poem. Most lovely Gray
March 29th, 2026 12:07
Can\'t Kill the Flame
Vipassana said:
very nice. really like
Perseverance tastes like stale bread.
and
Gifted, they say, like a wounded dog.
and
Belief wraps its fist around our throat.
March 29th, 2026 04:01
Vipassana said:
very nice. really like
Perseverance tastes like stale bread.
and
Gifted, they say, like a wounded dog.
and
Belief wraps its fist around our throat.
March 29th, 2026 04:01
The Price of Bravery
James Michael said:
The last stanza wraps this one up honestly and intensely, very well done!
March 28th, 2026 21:16
James Michael said:
The last stanza wraps this one up honestly and intensely, very well done!
March 28th, 2026 21:16
The Price of Bravery
Katie B. said:
Like \"wearing wounds like jewelry\". Kudos to you for the courage it takes to achieve sobriety.
March 28th, 2026 14:59
Katie B. said:
Like \"wearing wounds like jewelry\". Kudos to you for the courage it takes to achieve sobriety.
March 28th, 2026 14:59
The Price of Bravery
sorenbarrett said:
Here here Gray a lovely poem that tells it as it is. Fear must be conquered by facing it. It is not that the brave do not fear it is though their fear that they face that they are called brave.
March 28th, 2026 12:32
sorenbarrett said:
Here here Gray a lovely poem that tells it as it is. Fear must be conquered by facing it. It is not that the brave do not fear it is though their fear that they face that they are called brave.
March 28th, 2026 12:32
Long Gone Cursive
Vipassana said:
Once, we danced in circles,
but now, we type in straight lines,
hoping the loops don’t unravel entirely.
you gain something and you lose something. as much as I mourn the loss of handwriting, I have to say the laptop computer has made writing (poems, etc) much much easier.
March 27th, 2026 23:42
Vipassana said:
Once, we danced in circles,
but now, we type in straight lines,
hoping the loops don’t unravel entirely.
you gain something and you lose something. as much as I mourn the loss of handwriting, I have to say the laptop computer has made writing (poems, etc) much much easier.
March 27th, 2026 23:42
The Stillness Between Footfalls
Vipassana said:
See there—His face in the stranger\'s stare,
the flicker of wings slicing autumn air.
Your meditation blooms where the hours falter,
carved into the marrow of passing time.
Love that.
March 27th, 2026 23:33
Vipassana said:
See there—His face in the stranger\'s stare,
the flicker of wings slicing autumn air.
Your meditation blooms where the hours falter,
carved into the marrow of passing time.
Love that.
March 27th, 2026 23:33
The Shape of My Mind
sorenbarrett said:
A lovely interpretation of the test itself. Well explored and worded it speak just as a poem is a reflection of the writer and reader.
March 27th, 2026 10:41
sorenbarrett said:
A lovely interpretation of the test itself. Well explored and worded it speak just as a poem is a reflection of the writer and reader.
March 27th, 2026 10:41
Long Gone Cursive
Doggerel Dave said:
The agony of steel tipped pens and inkwells; now mastery of the keyboard.
There are even now strong memories embedded there for me. Thanks.
March 26th, 2026 17:18
Doggerel Dave said:
The agony of steel tipped pens and inkwells; now mastery of the keyboard.
There are even now strong memories embedded there for me. Thanks.
March 26th, 2026 17:18
Long Gone Cursive
sorenbarrett said:
I like the subtle introduction of the mechanical and technological into what was once personal and individualized now all the same. The world has become such in order to fit a maximum number of crayons in a box they all have to be lined up the same way and be the same size and shape. Same with people uniformity with the masses. Well done Gray
March 26th, 2026 04:56
sorenbarrett said:
I like the subtle introduction of the mechanical and technological into what was once personal and individualized now all the same. The world has become such in order to fit a maximum number of crayons in a box they all have to be lined up the same way and be the same size and shape. Same with people uniformity with the masses. Well done Gray
March 26th, 2026 04:56
Dodgeball
sorenbarrett said:
Such a moral in this that gos counter to all political correctness of the day. We live in a world creating fragile individuals. I was told that when my uncle was small and chased home by several bullies my grandmother told him if it happened again she would give him a whipping much worse that theirs. He said but they are bigger and her response was a big dog might win in a fight but a small one can get in a few nips. Well written Gray
March 25th, 2026 10:33
sorenbarrett said:
Such a moral in this that gos counter to all political correctness of the day. We live in a world creating fragile individuals. I was told that when my uncle was small and chased home by several bullies my grandmother told him if it happened again she would give him a whipping much worse that theirs. He said but they are bigger and her response was a big dog might win in a fight but a small one can get in a few nips. Well written Gray
March 25th, 2026 10:33
Designated Smoking Area
sorenbarrett said:
The smoke of nostalgia lingers Gray and and to relive it we must still smoke. Nicely penned my friend
March 24th, 2026 09:58
sorenbarrett said:
The smoke of nostalgia lingers Gray and and to relive it we must still smoke. Nicely penned my friend
March 24th, 2026 09:58
Lazarus\'s Tomb
sorenbarrett said:
This poem seems a questioning the strength of God and self and it ends in a sense of doubt. Well sone
March 23rd, 2026 13:30
sorenbarrett said:
This poem seems a questioning the strength of God and self and it ends in a sense of doubt. Well sone
March 23rd, 2026 13:30
Gravity, and Other Small Disasters
sorenbarrett said:
A strong work Gray mind provoking nicely done
March 22nd, 2026 11:04
sorenbarrett said:
A strong work Gray mind provoking nicely done
March 22nd, 2026 11:04
Pull the Ripcord
Doggerel Dave said:
I like to believe that my parachute is open at all times - unless I encounter a closed one .... possibly vain hopes I can control a minor adjustment and safe descent...
March 21st, 2026 05:04
Doggerel Dave said:
I like to believe that my parachute is open at all times - unless I encounter a closed one .... possibly vain hopes I can control a minor adjustment and safe descent...
March 21st, 2026 05:04
Pull the Ripcord
sorenbarrett said:
Now this is a metaphor that had never occurred to me Gray. Well developed and worked out if floats. Nicely done
March 21st, 2026 04:15
sorenbarrett said:
Now this is a metaphor that had never occurred to me Gray. Well developed and worked out if floats. Nicely done
March 21st, 2026 04:15
Epistemology in the Hollow Dawn
sorenbarrett said:
It is the last two lines and the first ones that caught me most. A lovely write my friend a fave
March 20th, 2026 09:58
sorenbarrett said:
It is the last two lines and the first ones that caught me most. A lovely write my friend a fave
March 20th, 2026 09:58
Anxious Streets and Scared Whispers
sorenbarrett said:
This poem seems a call to arms and a speech of encouragement. Nicely written
March 19th, 2026 05:08
sorenbarrett said:
This poem seems a call to arms and a speech of encouragement. Nicely written
March 19th, 2026 05:08
When I Discard My Body
Vipassana said:
bravo. beautifully written and conceived. and I wish your father well.
March 19th, 2026 00:50
Vipassana said:
bravo. beautifully written and conceived. and I wish your father well.
March 19th, 2026 00:50
When I Discard My Body
sorenbarrett said:
Reflections in this poem Gray well written my friend
March 18th, 2026 12:05
sorenbarrett said:
Reflections in this poem Gray well written my friend
March 18th, 2026 12:05
The Stillness Between Footfalls
sorenbarrett said:
Wonderful spiritual lines here Gray. Nicely written it speaks to those that believe. Well done
March 17th, 2026 12:49
sorenbarrett said:
Wonderful spiritual lines here Gray. Nicely written it speaks to those that believe. Well done
March 17th, 2026 12:49
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