Comments received on poems by gray0328
Glow in the Throat of Chaos
sorenbarrett said:
You did well to build the tension in this poetic story. Air disaster most peoples terror. Ground bound unable to fly on our own most of us terrified of falling. You painted the picture well with great vivid images the timing was also good with the poem sensing the rush of time. Very nicely done with the sense of relief as the tension passed at the end.
June 7th, 2026 04:52
sorenbarrett said:
You did well to build the tension in this poetic story. Air disaster most peoples terror. Ground bound unable to fly on our own most of us terrified of falling. You painted the picture well with great vivid images the timing was also good with the poem sensing the rush of time. Very nicely done with the sense of relief as the tension passed at the end.
June 7th, 2026 04:52
Glow in the Throat of Chaos
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
much enjoyed write
June 7th, 2026 04:10
nephilim56 ( Norman Dickson) said:
much enjoyed write
June 7th, 2026 04:10
Snake Head
sorenbarrett said:
A great poetic story Gray. Well told and reminded me of the past when I killed snakes it was the body I kept and the heads discarded. Took the skins at times. Once had beheaded two snakes and skinned them then buried the bodies so the dogs would not get them the next day they lay at my door step with crawl marks left in the dirt from where I had buried them.
June 6th, 2026 11:01
sorenbarrett said:
A great poetic story Gray. Well told and reminded me of the past when I killed snakes it was the body I kept and the heads discarded. Took the skins at times. Once had beheaded two snakes and skinned them then buried the bodies so the dogs would not get them the next day they lay at my door step with crawl marks left in the dirt from where I had buried them.
June 6th, 2026 11:01
Winnie the Pooh
sorenbarrett said:
A familiar character as a metaphor for teaching others what to enjoy in life. Nicely done Gray
June 5th, 2026 10:10
sorenbarrett said:
A familiar character as a metaphor for teaching others what to enjoy in life. Nicely done Gray
June 5th, 2026 10:10
Snake Oil
Paul Bell said:
Yes, there\'s a pill for every occasion.
One to get you up, one to take you down, one to turn you around.
I like the pill that you have to combine with another pill and another.
I\'ve never seen the placebo pill promoted mind you.
June 3rd, 2026 14:16
Paul Bell said:
Yes, there\'s a pill for every occasion.
One to get you up, one to take you down, one to turn you around.
I like the pill that you have to combine with another pill and another.
I\'ve never seen the placebo pill promoted mind you.
June 3rd, 2026 14:16
Snake Oil
sorenbarrett said:
A great poem of commercialism and pharmaceuticals of the bottom line and stock holder pressure, of doctors seduced and patients overmedicated believing that a pill can cure all. Snake oil now modernized. And in other forms too even media information called news. Then there is advertising of all merchandise. Well written Gray
June 3rd, 2026 11:13
sorenbarrett said:
A great poem of commercialism and pharmaceuticals of the bottom line and stock holder pressure, of doctors seduced and patients overmedicated believing that a pill can cure all. Snake oil now modernized. And in other forms too even media information called news. Then there is advertising of all merchandise. Well written Gray
June 3rd, 2026 11:13
Ode to the Bush
sorenbarrett said:
Wonderful wild and with a message. Well done Gray
June 2nd, 2026 13:16
sorenbarrett said:
Wonderful wild and with a message. Well done Gray
June 2nd, 2026 13:16
Gentleman Death
sorenbarrett said:
Gray I have always seen death as a kind friend that in its mercy takes away pain and strife. This poem fits well that view and I love it
June 1st, 2026 11:12
sorenbarrett said:
Gray I have always seen death as a kind friend that in its mercy takes away pain and strife. This poem fits well that view and I love it
June 1st, 2026 11:12
The Duel (Andrew Jackson)
sorenbarrett said:
A drama well painted in beautiful language most poetic it reenacts a supposed historical event with artistic flare. Well done my friend and a fave
May 31st, 2026 04:29
sorenbarrett said:
A drama well painted in beautiful language most poetic it reenacts a supposed historical event with artistic flare. Well done my friend and a fave
May 31st, 2026 04:29
He Always Corners Me
sorenbarrett said:
Metaphorical but so bordering on the real its passion felt in every line. We all have been there where someone enflamed speaks of the inane and unable to escape gracefully we are caught unwilling spectator to an argument we do not have. This poem masterfully evokes that feeling in lines understood and maybe halfway agreed with but distant in one\'s mind or level of priorities. A lovely write that could be taken a level deeper. A fave my friend
May 30th, 2026 04:03
sorenbarrett said:
Metaphorical but so bordering on the real its passion felt in every line. We all have been there where someone enflamed speaks of the inane and unable to escape gracefully we are caught unwilling spectator to an argument we do not have. This poem masterfully evokes that feeling in lines understood and maybe halfway agreed with but distant in one\'s mind or level of priorities. A lovely write that could be taken a level deeper. A fave my friend
May 30th, 2026 04:03
Ghosting
sorenbarrett said:
Poignant and haunting itself. The poem speaks of the power of silence and its effect. So true yet I ask myself when the other wants the last blow and word can it not be a proper defense? Well written Gray
May 29th, 2026 09:29
sorenbarrett said:
Poignant and haunting itself. The poem speaks of the power of silence and its effect. So true yet I ask myself when the other wants the last blow and word can it not be a proper defense? Well written Gray
May 29th, 2026 09:29
Small Miracles
sorenbarrett said:
A melding of the physical and the metaphysical the chemical and the spiritual. Well written Gray
May 28th, 2026 16:01
sorenbarrett said:
A melding of the physical and the metaphysical the chemical and the spiritual. Well written Gray
May 28th, 2026 16:01
The Fear Lies Sharper Than the Blade
sorenbarrett said:
In so many ways we are but shadows that come and go. A most interesting poem that seems a bit surreal while speaking in metaphor. Well done
May 27th, 2026 12:16
sorenbarrett said:
In so many ways we are but shadows that come and go. A most interesting poem that seems a bit surreal while speaking in metaphor. Well done
May 27th, 2026 12:16
Flannel Dreams
sorenbarrett said:
To be authentic one must know who one is and that is rare now days. Well written my friend
May 26th, 2026 13:13
sorenbarrett said:
To be authentic one must know who one is and that is rare now days. Well written my friend
May 26th, 2026 13:13
The Feather That Called a Life
sorenbarrett said:
This poem is highly symbolic and most poetic nicely done Gray
May 25th, 2026 04:33
sorenbarrett said:
This poem is highly symbolic and most poetic nicely done Gray
May 25th, 2026 04:33
Gods in Our Pockets
sorenbarrett said:
Wow! this one is right out of a dystopia that we have created where machines have become our gods. Where worship of the cell phone is an addiction and our self created god AI is just around the corner. A wonderful write and a fave
May 24th, 2026 04:26
sorenbarrett said:
Wow! this one is right out of a dystopia that we have created where machines have become our gods. Where worship of the cell phone is an addiction and our self created god AI is just around the corner. A wonderful write and a fave
May 24th, 2026 04:26
Dewclaw
sorenbarrett said:
A great metaphor here Gray I always let nature be with my pets believing it knew best and never had any problems. But so it is with us all the unnecessary should we eliminate it, I took out my gallbladder, some remove their tonsils or appendix, one might even loose a kidney or lung. Well written and thought provoking. What of removing anger, or hatred,
May 23rd, 2026 10:59
sorenbarrett said:
A great metaphor here Gray I always let nature be with my pets believing it knew best and never had any problems. But so it is with us all the unnecessary should we eliminate it, I took out my gallbladder, some remove their tonsils or appendix, one might even loose a kidney or lung. Well written and thought provoking. What of removing anger, or hatred,
May 23rd, 2026 10:59
Morning Steam
Doggerel Dave said:
Recovery in an environment I can relate to.
A little envious of your start to the day. With your coffee shop too far away, mine starts with very strong black tea.
May 22nd, 2026 16:52
Doggerel Dave said:
Recovery in an environment I can relate to.
A little envious of your start to the day. With your coffee shop too far away, mine starts with very strong black tea.
May 22nd, 2026 16:52
Morning Steam
sorenbarrett said:
Beautiful Gray there are certain things that tie us together and coffee is one I drink it as a social offering never alone. A great mix of images of the coffee house and its social clatter. Very well done my friend
May 22nd, 2026 10:11
sorenbarrett said:
Beautiful Gray there are certain things that tie us together and coffee is one I drink it as a social offering never alone. A great mix of images of the coffee house and its social clatter. Very well done my friend
May 22nd, 2026 10:11
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