Comments received on poems by Maplespal
poor puppy
Bella Shepard said:
Love the rhyming scheme of this poem, it flows so well to tell this unfortunate story. I came across a fox that had been hit by a car in our subdivision on an early morning walk, and I can understand the feeling of disbelief when you find somethig such as this, dead in your path. It was good that it was put to rest. And a very good write my friend.
July 23rd, 2024 13:11
Bella Shepard said:
Love the rhyming scheme of this poem, it flows so well to tell this unfortunate story. I came across a fox that had been hit by a car in our subdivision on an early morning walk, and I can understand the feeling of disbelief when you find somethig such as this, dead in your path. It was good that it was put to rest. And a very good write my friend.
July 23rd, 2024 13:11
poor puppy
sorenbarrett said:
A sad story told in verse that all comes back to the same place death and burial. Continual rhyme gives it an urgent feel. Good work
July 23rd, 2024 05:40
sorenbarrett said:
A sad story told in verse that all comes back to the same place death and burial. Continual rhyme gives it an urgent feel. Good work
July 23rd, 2024 05:40
A Question need or want?
Bella Shepard said:
A very frank and noble write my friend. A good narrative with a compelling message. I see the conflicts and hope that you find the resolution you want.
July 22nd, 2024 13:41
Bella Shepard said:
A very frank and noble write my friend. A good narrative with a compelling message. I see the conflicts and hope that you find the resolution you want.
July 22nd, 2024 13:41
444 in total
Bella Shepard said:
It sounds like you made it to the heights of love, those 222 steps always to be remembered. Such a lovely write!
July 21st, 2024 15:25
Bella Shepard said:
It sounds like you made it to the heights of love, those 222 steps always to be remembered. Such a lovely write!
July 21st, 2024 15:25
How? Without You?
Thad Wilk said:
A very romantic ❤️ and
poignant write. 😢
Great rhyme and flow,
way to go!
Thanks for sharing
to read A delight!
Best regards ✌️. Thad
July 20th, 2024 12:29
Thad Wilk said:
A very romantic ❤️ and
poignant write. 😢
Great rhyme and flow,
way to go!
Thanks for sharing
to read A delight!
Best regards ✌️. Thad
July 20th, 2024 12:29
How? Without You?
sorenbarrett said:
There is a deep sense of loss in this poem with a strong desire for reunification. All this set in rhyme
July 20th, 2024 10:54
sorenbarrett said:
There is a deep sense of loss in this poem with a strong desire for reunification. All this set in rhyme
July 20th, 2024 10:54
We Sit in Jail
Bella Shepard said:
A tale well told, with imagery that captures the sad scene so well. A good write!
July 19th, 2024 12:50
Bella Shepard said:
A tale well told, with imagery that captures the sad scene so well. A good write!
July 19th, 2024 12:50
We Sit in Jail
sorenbarrett said:
Wow! A type of ballad in verse. The story was good as was the rhyme. The pacing also was excellent as was the length. Nicely done
July 18th, 2024 05:22
sorenbarrett said:
Wow! A type of ballad in verse. The story was good as was the rhyme. The pacing also was excellent as was the length. Nicely done
July 18th, 2024 05:22
A Storm Passed
sorenbarrett said:
A story that could be a metaphor as well. Great imagery in this write.
July 17th, 2024 10:30
sorenbarrett said:
A story that could be a metaphor as well. Great imagery in this write.
July 17th, 2024 10:30
In My Will
2781 said:
Come now,let us reason together, Says the Lord, \"Though your sins be as scarlet, They shall be as white as snow...
July 16th, 2024 04:47
2781 said:
Come now,let us reason together, Says the Lord, \"Though your sins be as scarlet, They shall be as white as snow...
July 16th, 2024 04:47
a moment
orchidee said:
I spent a moment - or three - or 100 moments - reading this good write.
July 14th, 2024 09:20
orchidee said:
I spent a moment - or three - or 100 moments - reading this good write.
July 14th, 2024 09:20
a moment
sorenbarrett said:
In determinism events are set just as with rhyme the choices are limited to complete the phrase. The illusion of choice is broken in rhyme if you want free will try free verse. Nicely done
July 14th, 2024 06:59
sorenbarrett said:
In determinism events are set just as with rhyme the choices are limited to complete the phrase. The illusion of choice is broken in rhyme if you want free will try free verse. Nicely done
July 14th, 2024 06:59
Why?
Maplespal said:
Thanks for all your comments.
i have asked to be put in an Institute for my suicidal thoughts.
I will be heading there this Friday. Going to be on pen and paper. Going to be gone for a while, my head is really messed up, almost 50 and never dealt with any of my issues.
it was very hard but my subordinates are showing too much concern for me, so i can\'t end it and hurt them, so i asked for help.
thank you for all your comments.
June 29th, 2024 10:16
Maplespal said:
Thanks for all your comments.
i have asked to be put in an Institute for my suicidal thoughts.
I will be heading there this Friday. Going to be on pen and paper. Going to be gone for a while, my head is really messed up, almost 50 and never dealt with any of my issues.
it was very hard but my subordinates are showing too much concern for me, so i can\'t end it and hurt them, so i asked for help.
thank you for all your comments.
June 29th, 2024 10:16
Anxiety
Maplespal said:
It is hard to put such problems into words that make sense.
thank you for liking it.
June 26th, 2024 07:36
Maplespal said:
It is hard to put such problems into words that make sense.
thank you for liking it.
June 26th, 2024 07:36
Anxiety
Neilton said:
Wow that was intense as I have had many anxiety attacks this past year for various reasons! To be honest I have no idea how to stop feeling stressed but I\'m surely working on it ! Great poem!!!
June 26th, 2024 07:32
Neilton said:
Wow that was intense as I have had many anxiety attacks this past year for various reasons! To be honest I have no idea how to stop feeling stressed but I\'m surely working on it ! Great poem!!!
June 26th, 2024 07:32
Just a Mistake
froya said:
People will come and people will go
The sun will shine bright
Humans will feed from spite
And flowers will always grow
The circle of life will never change
There is always an end and a start
And tho it might feel strange
Don’t shatter your own fragile heart
Perhaps you were not a mistake
But a lesson they needed to learn
how souls and bridges can burn
and how easily promises break
And that love is always hard to earn
So keep creating art and give yourself a chance for a fresh start
June 23rd, 2024 08:05
froya said:
People will come and people will go
The sun will shine bright
Humans will feed from spite
And flowers will always grow
The circle of life will never change
There is always an end and a start
And tho it might feel strange
Don’t shatter your own fragile heart
Perhaps you were not a mistake
But a lesson they needed to learn
how souls and bridges can burn
and how easily promises break
And that love is always hard to earn
So keep creating art and give yourself a chance for a fresh start
June 23rd, 2024 08:05
Sight
Maplespal said:
Yes! our sight is both internal into our thoughts and external from what we can see outside our heads with our eyes.
mine is scrambled as well, hard time focusing.
June 20th, 2024 09:45
Maplespal said:
Yes! our sight is both internal into our thoughts and external from what we can see outside our heads with our eyes.
mine is scrambled as well, hard time focusing.
June 20th, 2024 09:45
Sight
2781 said:
I wondered if you were referring to the brain. But mine is scrambled.
June 20th, 2024 09:35
2781 said:
I wondered if you were referring to the brain. But mine is scrambled.
June 20th, 2024 09:35
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